人教版九年级英语全册单元作文精讲4-谈论变化 Unit4 I used to be afraid of dark

主题：谈论变化

导读

本单元的主题是用英语谈论变化.通过教材提供的语言材料,同学们将学会用 used to be/used to do 这类短语展开描述,继而表达自己的成长变化,包括外貌、性格、心理上的变化以及在生活和学习中所取得的进步等方面.

与本单元相关联的话题很多,如 The greatest change I have ever made, I have made progress in my English learning 等.

题目回放

我们的每一次变化都见证了我们的成长.请以 The greatest change I have ever made 为题,根据要点和要求用英语写一篇短文.

写作要点：

1.变化是什么；

2.变化是如何发生的；

3.变化后有何感受.

写作要求：

1.文中不要出现你的真实姓名和校名；

2.词数90左右.

审题指引

1 审体裁：叙述成长变化,属于记叙文.

2 审内容：讲述自己最大的变化和由此带来的改变.

3审时态：主体时态为一般过去时.

4 审人称：以第一人称为主.

框架设计

开头：直接点题,引出话题.

中间：描述自己经历的事情和由此给自己带来的改变.

结尾：说明变化后的感受.

段落素描

1.First paragraph: Everybody is sure to change, and so am I. However, my greatest change is...

(...)

2.The body: I remember when ... Luckily ... Gradually... Surprisingly ...Thanks to...

(...)

3.Last paragraph: Thanks to ...

(Just as the saying goes...)

(...)

范本淬炼

A

The greatest change I have ever made

Everybody is sure to change, and ① so am I. However, the greatest change I have ever made is my gradual love of reading books.

When I was a little child, I did not use to read books, for I thought it was boring. ② Afterwards, my mother noticed this, and she started to read books with me. ③ Gradually, I began to love reading. When I was reading, I felt as if I was talking with a wise man.

Thanks to my mother, I have become interested in reading. Indeed, reading has changed me a lot. I have ④ acquired more knowledge, and my life is more colorful.

亮点点评

1.本文围绕主题描述自己的某一改变,用三个段落呈现,段落布局清晰.

2.文中句式多变,定语从句、状语从句、动名词充当宾语和主语等运用恰当.

3.句子之间衔接自然,恰当运用了afterwards, gradually, thanks to等,使文章读起来较为顺畅.

B

The greatest change I have ever made

No doubt, everyone is sure to change, and ①so am I. However, the greatest change ② I have ever made is my gradual love of reading.

I remember when I was a little child, I used to show no interest in reading simply because it was boring. Noticing this, my mother ③ the significance of told me about and started to read books with me. Gradually, I was attracted by books, ④ which led me into a new world. While reading, I felt ⑤ as if talking with a wise man. In fact, reading brought me much knowledge, and made my life colorful and joyful.

Thanks to my mother's help, I ⑥ am used to reading, and I benefit a lot from it.

亮点点评

1.本文用三段描述自己的改变,段落清晰,层次分明.

2.本文以 No doubt 开头引出话题,句式多样,富于变化,如运用了定语从句、宾语从句、伴随状语等.

3.用词丰富,灵活运用了丰富多样的词汇和短语,如 gradual, used to, show no interest in, significance, lead sb. into, colorful, joyful, benefit a lot from等,给文章增加亮点.

4.各种衔接语运用恰当,如 no doubt, however, gradually, in fact, thanks to等,使句子和句子之间的连接自然流畅,上下文联系更紧密.

与上一篇文章相比,这篇文章语言表现力更强,句式更丰富,内容更充实.

佳作赏析

A

I have made progress in my English learning

I used to be poor at English,① especially English reading and writing. The biggest problem was ② that after reading an English passage, I could not fully understand it, which made me feel depressed. ③ With the help of my English teacher, I kept reading English stories instead of just giving up. Besides, I practiced English writing by keeping an English journal every day. Gradually, I made progress in English reading and writing, and gained confidence in myself.

Now I realize ④ that as long as I face up to my weaknesses and endeavor to overcome them, I will be successful.

亮点点评

1.本文围绕主题,描述了自己改变的过程.段落明晰,富有逻辑.

2.文中恰当运用衔接语,如 especially, besides, gradually 等,使文章衔接自然.

3.文中用词丰富,使用了 used to, depressed, confidence 等词语.

4.本文句式多样,运用了表语从句、定语从句、宾语从句等从句.

B

Shopping online

At present,① people have changed their ways of shopping, and shopping online has become an important part of their lives.

② Compared with the traditional way of shopping, shopping online is convenient, for it saves much time. Just using a phone or a computer, we can buy ③ whatever we want without going outdoors. Besides, shopping online can save our money because the goods online are usually ④ cheaper than those in offline stores.

Thanks to the Internet, people have more ways of shopping.

亮点点评

1.本文围绕网上购物这个主题,描述了现代购物方式,反映了我们日常生活的变化.

2.本文布局合理,逻辑清晰.第一段引出话题,第二段通过比较的方式描述网上购物的优点,最后一段总结和照应.

3.文中段落之间和句子之间的衔接较为恰当,使用了 at present, besides, thanks to等词语连接前后句和上下文.

4.文章句式比较丰富,如运用了过去分词和现在分词充当状语、动名词充当主语,以及原因状语从句和形容词比较级等,增强了文章的语言表现力.

C

Great changes in my city

Over the past few years, great changes ① have taken place in my city.

The roads in my city used to be narrow and crowded. The houses and buildings were old and small. Moreover, the air was dirty. The river beside my house ② was polluted, and there was much rubbish in it.

③ However, things have changed. Now wide and clean roads ④ can be seen everywhere, and we can choose different kinds of transportation to go anywhere. Besides, tall buildings ⑤ have sprung up in the city. Most of us have moved to beautiful big houses. Moreover, the air is fresher.

Thanks to the government, my city has changed a lot, and the people here are living a happy life.

亮点点评

1.本文通过对比描写了一座城市的变化,段落清晰,结构合理.

2.文中时态、语态运用准确,表达清晰.

3.用词丰富,如使用了 choose, different kinds of transportation, spring up等,使文章读起来生动、流畅.

素材宝库

1.好词妙语

be aware of the significance of reading 认识到阅读的重要性

spare no effort to do sth. 不遗余力地做某事

achieve a dream 实现梦想

used to have short hair 以前留短发

outgoing and active 外向和活泼

fall in love with sports 爱上运动

the most important change 最重要的变化

great changes have taken place 发生了巨大变化

in my free time 在我的空闲时间里

spend more time reading books instead of playing computer games把更多时间花在读书而不是玩电脑游戏上

especially 尤其

2.提分佳句

I spared no effort to achieve my dream.

我不遗余力地实现我的梦想.

She used to have short hair, but now she has long hair.

以前她留短头发,但现在她留长头发了.

I have greatly changed, and become outgoing and active.

我已经有了很大变化,同时也变得外向和活泼了.

The greatest change I have made is that I have fallen in love with sports.

我做出的最大改变就是爱上了运动.

This is the most important change because it makes my life better than it is used to be.

这是最重要的变化,因为它使得我的生活比以前好得多.

How time flies! Great changes have taken place in my hometown in the last few years.

时光飞逝！在过去的几年里,我的家乡发生了巨大的变化.

In my free time, I usually spend more time reading books instead of playing computer games.

在我的空闲时间里,我通常把更多的时间花在读书上而不是玩电脑游戏上.

There is always something unforgettable in my life, especially the story between my friends and me.

我的生活中总是有难以忘怀的东西,尤其是发生在我的朋友和我之间的故事.

实战练笔

随着时间的推移,你的居住环境发生了很大变化.请以Great changes around me为题,根据写作要点和要求用英语写一篇短文.

写作要点：

1.过去你居住在什么样的环境中；现在你居住在什么样的环境中；

2.你对居住环境变化的感受.

写作要求：

1.文中不要出现你的真实姓名和校名；

2.90词左右.

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范文：

Great change around me

Over the past few years, great changes have taken place around me.

The roads around my house used to be narrow and crowded, which made people's life inconvenient. Besides, the river nearby was polluted, and rubbish could be seen in it.

Now things have changed a lot. The roads are much wider, and people can choose different kinds of transportation. Moreover, there is less pollution, and people can often see the blue sky. The city where I live looks like a big garden with green trees and beautiful flowers.

I am sure that as time goes by, my city will become better and better.