湖北高考英语写作分类训练：建议信

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建议信
1．假定你是李华，你的朋友Richard刚去美国留学，他写信说他和新同学们相处得不太好，感觉很难融入他们，为此他很苦恼。请你写一封回信，给他一些建议，要点如下：
1. 安慰他新环境需要一些时间来适应；
2. 给出你的建议（至少三条）。
注意：1. 词数120左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3.开头和结尾已为你写好。
Dear Richard,
I’m so sorry to hear that you have some trouble in fitting in with your new classmates. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
All the best!
Yours,
Li Hua
2．假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack发来邮件说他被哈佛大学(Harvard University)录取了。请你用英语给他写一封电子邮件，要点包括:
1.表达祝贺;
2.介绍你的学习情况;
3.寻求建议。
注意:1.词数100左右
2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
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3．假设你是李华，你的英国朋友Mark对即将在武汉举行的第七届世界军人运动会（7th CISM Military World Games）很感兴趣，很想来现场观看。现请你给他写封邮件，邀请Mark军运会期间来，并给他的住宿和出行一些建议。
注意：1. 词数80左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear Mark,
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Looking forward to your coming.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
4．假如你是一名高二的学生,名叫李华。请你就本校食堂存在的问题,向校长写一封投诉信。内容包括:
1.投诉的原因；
2.投诉的具体问题(2-3点)；
3.提出合理的建议。
注意：1.词数100左右；开头和结尾已经给出,不计入字数；
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Dear Headmaster,
I'm Li Hua,a Senior 2 student.
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Sincerely Yours
Li Hua
5．假如你是李华。最近，美国笔友Peter 发来电子邮件，说他在汉语学习中遇到了困难，感到非常着急。请根据下面的写作提纲给他回复一封电子邮件。
内容包括:
1) 同情他的处境   2)  给他提出几点建议    3) 希望他情况好转。
注意:
1.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯
2.词数100左右。
3.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数
Dear Peter,
Learning that you are having a hard time learning Chinese, I’m writing...
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Sincerely yours,
Li Hua
6．假定你是李华，你的美国朋友 Peter在中国留学。他给你发来邮件，说国庆期间准备参加中央电视台组织的建国70周年系列庆祝活动之一“外国人唱中文歌 （Foreigners Singing Chinese Songs）”的比赛，希望你给些参考意见。请你回复邮件，内容包括：
1.推荐你认为合适的歌曲；
2.就演唱成功的关键提两条看法。
注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当添加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Peter,
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Yours
Li Hua
7．假设你是李华，你的朋友Mike写信告诉你他在中国北京做交换生，不适应中国的高中生活，学习压力(pressure)很大。请你给他回信并提供一些减压的建议。
内容要点:
1)了解导致压力的原因；
2)设定一个适合自己的目标；
3)学会放松。
注意:1)词数:100词左右
2)信的开头已写好，不计入总词数。
Dear Mike,
I have received your letter saying that…
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Yours,
Li Hua
8．假设你是李华, 写信邀请英国朋友Sara来观摩你校举行的“文明礼貌月活动”。请根据以下提示，用英语给她写一封电子邮件。
包括:1. 活动时间和地点
2. 活动的形式和目的
3. 欢迎给出建议
注意:1. 词数100左右；
2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇:文明礼貌月活动 National Courtesy Month
提高学生文明礼貌意识  raise students’ awareness of civilization and courtesy
Dear Sara,
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Yours,
Li Hua
9．假定你是李华，你的好友Jim在暑假期间痴迷于微信朋友圈，经常发照片分享生活中的所有细节，请根据以下要点提示，给Jim写一封信：
（1）对分享行为表示理解；  （2）阐述过度分享的危害；   （3）提出建议．
注意：1． 词数100左右．2． 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
（参考词汇：微信朋友圈 WeChat circle； 过度分享 overshare）
Dear Jim，
I'm worried that you've been addicted to sharing all sorts of photos in WeChat circle recently．
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Yours，
Li Hua
10．假设你是李华，正和朋友们组建一支乐队。请写信向学校的音乐老师介绍你们的乐队，并请他给你们一些建议。内容包括：乐队成员、歌曲风格、乐队的排练和演出计划等。
注意：1. 词数100左右；
2. 可适当加入细节，使行文连贯；
3. 不可使用真实姓名和班级等
Dear Mr. Huang,
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Yours,
Li Hua









1．I’m so sorry to hear that you have some trouble fitting in with your new classmates. Actually, the issue you are faced with is just what I went through when I entered the high school. So I do understand your feelings. But you see, I’m getting along well with my classmates now, and I’m fully convinced that you’ll soon be accustomed to your life there. After all, the majority of us need a period of time to adapt to a new environment.
Here are some suggestions for you. To begin with, it would be especially great if you are friendly and helpful to everyone. They are sure to be moved by your kindness. In addition, participate in various activities as much as possible. You can make friends during the process. Furthermore, why don’t you chat with them first? You don’t have to worry about your English because they will assist you with it.
I really hope you’ll get used to your life and I believe that they will accept you sooner or later.
【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文---建议信，要求考生写一封邮件，表达对朋友的慰问以及提出建议。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构：三段式结构。
要求：
1. 1）表达安慰
2）提出新环境需要一些时间来适应。
2. 提出建议
      1）对人态度友好（be friendly to others）
      2）参加活动（participate in activities）
      3)主动搭讪（chat to others firstly）
3. 寒暄结束
第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）
Have trouble(in) doing; be faced with; go through; get along well with; be convinced that+从句; be accustomed to; adapt to; participate in; assist sb. with  
第三步：连词成句
1. You have some trouble fitting in with your new classmates.
2. Actually, the issue you are faced with is just what I went through when I entered the high school.
3. I’m getting along well with my classmates now.
4. I’m fully convinced that you’ll soon be accustomed to your life there
5. The majority of us need a period of time to adapt to a new environment.
6. Participate in various activities as much as possible.
7. You don’t have to worry about your English because they will assist you with it.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）
1.表文章结构顺序：To begin with; First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：
Actually, the issue you are faced with is just what I went through when I entered the high school.这句话运用了省略关系代词的定语从句you are faced with 修饰先行词the issue。同时使用了when 引导的时间状语从句。
It would be especially great if you are friendly and helpful to everyone. 这句话是了if 引导的条件状语从句。
使用了一些固定词组，如have trouble(in) doing; be faced with; go through; get along well with; be accustomed to; adapt to; participate in; assist sb. with等。
全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。
2．Dear Jack，
I am delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University. You have been working hard for this over the past years and your efforts have finally paid off. Congratulations!
To be honest, I plan to study at one of China’s top universities when I graduate from high school. I have prepared for a long time. However, with the college entrance exams drawing near, I suddenly find myself losing confidence and feeling afraid that I might fail.
Have you ever doubted yourself too? I would appreciate it if you would give me some advice on how to deal with my present situation. I am looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】这是一篇应用文写作。
【详解】第1步：根据提示可知, 本篇为一封电子邮件；假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack发来邮件说他被哈佛大学(Harvard University)录取了。请你用英语给他写一封电子邮件，要点包括:1.表达祝贺;2.介绍你的学习情况;3.寻求建议。
第2步：根据写作要求, 确定关键词（组）, 如：be delighted to（高兴）；be admitted into（被录取）；pay off（回报）；prepare for（为……准备）；the college entrance exams（高考）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句, 注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文, 注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡, 书写一定要规范清晰, 保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】范文内容完整, 语言规范, 语篇连贯, 词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式, 如I am delighted to know that you've been admitted into Harvard University.运用了宾语从句；To be honest, I plan to study at one of China’s top universities when I graduate from high school.运用了时间状语从句。全文中没有中国式英语的句式, 显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外, 文章思路清晰、层次分明, 上下句转换自然, 为文章增色添彩。
3．Dear Mark,
Hearing that you’re interested in the 7th CISM Military World Games to be held this October in Wuhan and eager to watch them live, now I’m writing to invite you to my city during that time.
While in Wuhan, you needn’t worry about where to live and how to get around. As for your accommodation, why not stay with my family? And the public transport here is readily available. Therefore, it’s convenient to get to different competition sites.
I hope you’ll have a fantastic time during your stay here.
Looking forward to your coming.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达是应用文，要求写一封书信。
【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一封电子邮件：假设你是李华，你的英国朋友Mark对即将在武汉举行的第七届世界军人运动会很感兴趣，很想来现场观看。现请你给他写封邮件，邀请Mark军运会期间来，并给他的住宿和出行一些建议。时态应为一般现在时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；7th CISM Military World Games（第七届世界军人运动会），invite（邀请），accommodation（住宿），public transport（公共交通）， available（可得到的），convenient（方便的）及competition sites（比赛地点）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有be interested in（对……感兴趣），get around（四处逛逛），worry about (担心)，as for（至于），be eager to do (渴望……)以及look forward to（期待），而且还使用了宾语从句“While in Wuhan, you needn’t worry about where to live and how to get around.”及“I hope you’ll have a fantastic time during your stay here.”，形式主语“Therefore, it’s convenient to get to different competition sites.”，非谓语动词“Hearing that you’re interested in the 7th CISM Military World Games to be held this October in Wuhan and eager to watch them live, now I’m writing to invite you to my city during that time.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
4．Dear Headmaster,
I’m Li Hua, a Senior 2 student. I venture to write you a letter to complain about the poor service of our canteen.
What makes students complain about most is the poor quality of the food. The steam bread is often cold and the vegetables are overcooked. With the declining quality of the restaurant of our school, it is intolerable for us students to meal at school. In addition, Compared with takeout food, the price of the food in our canteen is so high that many poor students are burdened heavily. Worst still, tableware that isn’t sanitized is used from time to time, and some students get ill as a result of it.
I strongly recommend that these problems should be solved as soon as possible. I would appreciate it if you could take my complaint seriously.
Sincerely Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】本文是一封投诉信。
【详解】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封投诉信。第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封投诉信：假如你是一名高二的学生,名叫李华。请你就本校食堂存在的问题,向校长写一封投诉信。内容包括:1.投诉的原因；2.投诉的具体问题(2-3点)；3.提出合理的建议。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：complain about the poor service of our canteen（抱怨我们食堂的服务差）；the vegetables are overcooked（蔬菜煮的过久）；Compared with takeout food,（与其他外卖相比）；等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。What makes students complain about most is the poor quality of the food.主语从句用在句中；Compared with takeout food, the price of the food in our canteen is so high that many poor students are burdened heavily.句中使用so---that引导的结果状语从句；tableware that isn’t sanitized is used from time to time,句中使用定语从句。
5．Dear Peter,
Learning that you are having a hard time learning Chinese, I’m writing to offer some suggestions.
To begin with, don’t worry too much about it and trust yourself. As we know, Chinese is one of the most complex languages in the world, so it’s normal for learners to find it difficult in the beginning. What’s more, you are supposed to take every opportunity to practise speaking Chinese. A proverb goes that practice makes perfect. Besides, read books and watch TV programs in Chinese and make friends with Chinese native speakers, which provide you more chances to use Chinese.
If you follow my advice, I am sure you will find pleasure in learning Chinese.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达是应用文，要求写一封书信。
【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一封电子邮件：假如你是李华。最近，美国笔友Peter 发来电子邮件，说他在汉语学习中遇到了困难，感到非常着急。请根据下面的写作提纲给他回复一封电子邮件。内容包括:1) 同情他的处境   2)  给他提出几点建议  3) 希望他情况好转。时态应为一般现在时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如； suggestion （建议），offer（提供），worry（担心），trust（信任）， complex（复杂的），normal（正常的），native（本国的），practise（练习），opportunity（机会）及pleasure（快乐）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有in the beginning（起初），make friends with（与……交朋友），be supposed to (应该)，take every opportunity to do（抓住每个机会做……）以及be sure that（确信），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“As we know, Chinese is one of the most complex languages in the world, so it’s normal for learners to find it difficult in the beginning.”及“Besides, read books and watch TV programs in Chinese and make friends with Chinese native speakers, which provide you more chances to use Chinese.”，同位语从句“A proverb goes that practice makes perfect.”，宾语从句“I am sure you will find pleasure in learning Chinese.”，非谓语动词“I’m writing to offer some suggestions.”及What’s more, you are supposed to take every opportunity to practise speaking Chinese. ”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
6．Dear Peter,
I’m glad to have received your email, saying that you’re going to take part in the competition “Foreigners Singing Chinese Songs” organized by CCTV to celebrate the 70th anniversary of China.
I’m not a good singer to offer expert advice, but personally, you should first choose a suitable song whose theme fits in with the occasion, such as “I love you, China” or “I and my country” and so on. To stand out in the singing, for one thing, you need to pronounce each word accurately and keep to the right tune and rhythm. For another, your singing must be full of emotion and passion.
I hope my tips can be of any help to you. And finally sincerely wish you successful in the competition!
Yours
LiHua
【详解】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封电子邮件。
第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封电子邮件：假定你是李华，你的美国朋友 Peter在中国留学。他给你发来邮件，说国庆期间准备参加中央电视台组织的建国70周年系列庆祝活动之一“外国人唱中文歌 （Foreigners Singing Chinese Songs）”的比赛，希望你给些参考意见。请你回复邮件，内容包括：1.推荐你认为合适的歌曲；2.就演唱成功的关键提两条看法。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：Foreigners Singing Chinese Songs（外国人唱中文歌）；offer expert advice（提供专家建议）；fits in with the occasion（适合场合）；be full of emotion and passion.（充满情感和热情）；等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。同时文中使用高级句子。I’m glad to have received your email, saying that you’re going to take part in the competition句中现在分词做伴随状语；“Foreigners Singing Chinese Songs” organized by CCTV to celebrate the 70th anniversary of China.此处是过去分词作后置定语；you should first choose a suitable song whose theme fits in with the occasion,句中whose引导定语从句；To stand out in the singing, for one thing, you need to pronounce each word accurately and keep to the right tune and rhythm.此处动词不定式作目的状语。
7．Dear Mike,
I have received your letter saying that you are faced with a lot of pressure these days. In fact, it's quite common among us students. The following suggestions may be helpful.
First of all, find out what leads to your pressure, which can help you take measures to deal with it. Secondly, why not set up a suitable goal? Don't put too much pressure on yourself. Thirdly, you'd better find a way to relax yourself. For example, you can listen to music, go swimming or just simply go walking. Making friends with others is also a good idea. When you are in trouble, they will come to your help.
I hope you will benefit from my suggestions.
Best wishes to you.
Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达是应用文，要求写一封书信。
【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一封回信：假设你是李华，你的朋友Mike写信告诉你他在中国北京做交换生，不适应中国的高中生活，学习压力很大。请你给他回信并提供一些减压的建议。内容要点：1)了解导致压力的原因；2)设定一个适合自己的目标；3)学会放松。时态应为一般现在时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；pressure（压力），common（平常的），suggestion（建议），helpful（有帮助的），suitable（适当的），relax（放松），simply（只是、仅仅），benefit（受益）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有be faced with（面对），benefit from（受益于），In fact (事实上)，find out（找出），lead to（导致），set up （建立、制定），take measures（采取措施）以及deal with（处理），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“First of all, find out what leads to your pressure, which can help you take measures to deal with it.”，宾语从句“I hope you will benefit from my suggestions.”，状语从句“When you are in trouble, they will come to your help.”，形式主语“In fact, it's quite common among us students.”，非谓语动词“I have received your letter saying that you are faced with a lot of pressure these days.”及“Making friends with others is also a good idea.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
8．Dear Sara,
How are you doing? I’m writing to invite you to take part in the “National Courtesy Month” activity, which will be very interesting and worth your time.
The activity, to be held on our school playground on April 25th, will be organized in the form of speeches, lectures, group discussions and so on. Above all, the purpose is to raise students’ awareness of civilization and courtesy. Knowing that you are into Chinese culture, I think this is a good chance for you to experience it in person.
Come to join us and you are more than welcome to give us some advice.  I’m looking forward to your early reply.
Yours
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达是应用文，要求写一封书信。
【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一封电子邮件：假设你是李华, 写信邀请英国朋友Sara来观摩你校举行的“文明礼貌月活动”。请根据以下提示，用英语给她写一封电子邮件，包括:1. 活动时间和地点；2. 活动的形式和目的；3. 欢迎给出建议。时态应为一般现在时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；National Courtesy Month（文明礼貌月活动），raise students’ awareness of civilization and courtesy（提高学生文明礼貌意识），worth（值得），organize（组织），group discussion（小组讨论），purpose（目的），experience（体验），join（加入）及interesting（有趣的）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有take part in（参加），in the form of（以……的形式），above all (尤其是)，be into（对……感兴趣）， in person（亲自）以及more than+adj（非常、很），而且还使用了非限定性定语从句“I’m writing to invite you to take part in the “National Courtesy Month” activity, which will be very interesting and worth your time.”，宾语从句“I think this is a good chance for you to experience it in person.”，非谓语动词“The activity, to be held on our school playground on April 25th, will be organized in the form of speeches, lectures, group discussions and so on.”，“Above all, the purpose is to raise students’ awareness of civilization and courtesy.”及“Knowing that you are into Chinese culture, I think this is a good chance for you to experience it in person”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
9．Dear Jim，
I'm worried that you've been addicted to sharing all sorts of photos in WeChat circle recently. There is no doubt that WeChat makes communication convenient and our spare time colorful. However，there exist some potential risks if we overshare it. One severe problem is letting out privacy，which may cause economic losses．Besides，oversharing can make others uncomfortable，for they think you are showing off．
Therefore，we should never post our personal information in WeChat circle， and nor should we add strangers to the list of friends randomly. It's wiser to set aside some time to accompany parents or do something more meaningful．
I would appreciate it if you could take my advice into consideration． Best wishes!
Yours truly，
Li Hua
【分析】这是一篇应用文，要求写一封信。我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来． 动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较具体，故需要准确表达，本文可根据要点分三段写：第一段对分享行为表示理解；  第二段阐述过度分享的危害；第三段提出建议。写作时注意准确运用时态（一般现在时），上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【详解】高分句型一：One severe problem is letting out privacy， which may cause economic losses．
译文：一个严重的问题是泄露隐私，这可能造成经济损失．
分析：这句话使用主从复合句，which引导非限制性定语从句．
高分句型二：Therefore， we should never post our personal information in WeChat circle， and nor should we add strangers to the list of friends randomly．
译文：因此，我们绝不应该在WeChat圈内发布我们的个人信息，也不应该在朋友列表中随意添加陌生人．
分析：这句话使用并列句，and后面用倒装句。
10．Dear Mr. Huang,
I’m Li Hua, one of your students in Grade 1. Due to my intention to make a band with my friends, I am writing to ask you for advice concerning how to make a successful one.
Our band is made up of four students, one being the singer and the rest three playing guitar, keyboard and drums. As far as I am concerned, I have been practicing drums for almost ten years. Our music is loosely based on Jay Zhou, whose talent we admire most. In addition, what we are also fond of is rock music, some of which I’d like to make on my own. Our band is scheduled to practice our music in my room, which is the first step to success. Then we plan to give some performances in our school. We are wondering how we balance between study and band and what we can do to make it a successful band. We’d appreciate it if you could give us some better suggestions.
We’re looking forward to your reply.
Best wishes!
Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信，向学校的音乐老师介绍你们的乐队，并请他给你们一些建议。
【详解】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信。
第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封信：你是李华，正和朋友们组建一支乐队。请写信向学校的音乐老师介绍你们的乐队，并请他给你们一些建议。全文时态应为一般现在时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），例如the group is made up of(乐队由...组成)、be scheduled to（安排做…）plan to do（计划去做）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
【点睛】范文内容完整，语言规范。本文最大的亮点就是作者在范文中使用了较多定语从句，如Our music is loosely based on Jay Zhou, whose talent we admire most. In addition, what we are also fond of is rock music, some of which I’d like to make on my own.都使用了非限定性定语从句。此外，作者还用了很多好的词组和好的表达方式，如is scheduled to do“计划做”，be fond of“喜欢”，on ones own “独自”和the first step to success（不定式作定语）。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，是一篇精彩的范文。考生可以多积累该范文中的词汇和表达方式，并通过仿写里面的句子来提升自己的写作水平。