高中英语外研版 (2019)必修 第一册Unit 6 At one with nature一课一练

同步练习

Part IV  Writing

妙笔生花

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

  I always wondered how people would react if I tried to approach a total stranger for help in a busy place like a street corner or in a bustling mall. I personally have always hurried past a stranger who tried to catch my attention in a busy place or when I was rushing around.

  Yesterday I had a taste of being stuck in such a desperate situation where my only hope of help would have to come from a total stranger.

  I was in a busy shopping mall buying a large piece of luggage. After the purchase in one of the large，fancy，expensive shops，I picked up my phone from my pocket to call my driver waiting in the parking lot and my phone was dead.

  I then requested the shop assistant who had just sold

me the luggage，which was not cheap at all，if she could ring the number of my driver for me. She replied，still all smiles，“I’m sorry，Sir，but it is the shop policy that we cannot use mobile phones while working in the shop.”

  As I was wondering what kind of policy that was，I saw a nice-looking boy coming towards me. Remembering my wife’s interesting theory that beautiful people are more likely to give you a hand when you’re in trouble，I thought I might have a chance. But before I could say a word，he walked past me. It turned out he simply didn’t see me.

  I waited a bit longer in the mall but it seemed nobody bothered to look at me. Disappointed and tired，I got out of the shop onto the busy street in front. I stood there with people rushing by，looking at their faces to see if there was a sign of kindness. I began wondering how many times I had reacted to strangers like the shop girl and the boy.

  At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids.                                     

  Finally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans seemed to notice me.                      

步骤一：品读语篇——抓住要点很关键

　　前文概要

  第一段：作者想知道在繁忙之地向陌生人求助，他们会有何反应？而作者自己以前对于这种求助的反应是熟视无睹、漠不关心。

  第二段：身临其境，将唯一希望寄托于陌生人。

  第三段：在商店购买一件很大的行李，当与等候在外的司机联系时，手机关机了。

  第四段：向刚刚卖给作者行李的商店售货员寻求帮助，遭拒。

  第五段：向经过的男孩求助，遭无视。

  第六段：走出商店到繁华路段，看到匆忙过往的行人，作者反思自己遇到这种情况时的漠不关心。

步骤二：戴着镣铐跳舞——研读首句，高度融合原文，合理想象情节

  由第一段所给首句可知，本段紧密衔接原文内容，因为作者从商店出去还是为了解决与司机联系的事情，期盼得到陌生人的帮助，但结合第二段给出的提示，显然第一段作者遇到的a young mother with her two kids并没有给作者提供帮助。

  根据第二段所给首句中的关键词Finally，正常思维应该是作者得到了这个人的帮助，此处的a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans与原文中的nice-looking形成对比。

步骤三：斟酌打磨——丰富续写词汇，生动描述情节

  话题激活词汇

  情感：angry，anxious，kind，kindness，happy，sad

  动作：smile，request，wait，walk，help

  人生态度：ignore，warm，cold，serious，friendly，honest，credible

  环境：mall，shop，road，street

  句式翻译

  1. 一个有着迷人蓝眼睛的漂亮女人一定愿意帮助我。（定语从句）

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  2. 我迅速朝她走去，面带得体的微笑。（with复合结构）

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  3. 我礼貌地请求。（主谓状）

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  4. 她很善良，可以帮我打个电话。（kind enough to）

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  5. 我看到的是一张因皱眉而变丑的女人的脸。（过去分词短语作定语）

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  6. 我听到的是她低声发出的惊恐和怀疑的声音。（主语从句）

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  7. 她把孩子们从我身边拉开，好像被一个杀人犯吓着了。（as if）

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  8. 我仍然站在那里，面无表情，心往下沉。（介词短语作状语）

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  9. 我挤出一丝微笑并向他提出了同样的要求。（squeeze，request）

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  10. 微笑无法掩饰我的疲倦。（fail to do）

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步骤四：创造性表达——润色注重细节，句式再造升级

  1. 用介词短语作定语升级第1句

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  2. 用if/whether连接第3、4句

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  3. 把第5、6句变为并列句

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  4. 用省略句简化第7句

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  5. 用让步状语从句连接第9、10句

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步骤五：高分在即——连句成篇

  At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids.                                     

  Finally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans seemed to notice me.                      

Part IV  Writing

参考答案

步骤三

1. A beautiful woman who has charming blue eyes must be willing to help me.

2. I walked quickly towards her with an appropriate smile on my face.      3. I requested politely.

4. She could be kind enough to make a phone call for me.

5. What I saw was a woman’s face disfigured by a frown.

6. What I heard was a sound of panic and suspicion under her breath.

7. She pulled her kids to escape from me，as if she was scared by a murderer.

8. I still stood there with a blank face and a sinking heart.

9. I squeezed a smile and requested the same thing from him.

10. The smile failed to mask my weariness.

步骤四

1. A beautiful woman with charming blue eyes must be willing to help me.

2. I requested politely if/whether she could be kind enough to make a phone call for me.

3. What I saw was a woman’s face disfigured by a frown and what I heard was a sound of panic and suspicion under her breath.

4. She pulled her kids to escape from me，as if scared by a murderer.

5. I squeezed a smile though it failed to mask my weariness，and requested the same thing from him.

步骤五

One possible version：

  At that point I saw a young mother with her two kids. I thought that a beautiful woman with charming blue eyes must be willing to help me. So，with great expectation，I walked quickly towards her with an appropriate smile on my face，and requested politely if/whether she could be kind enough to make a phone call for me. However，what I saw was a woman’s face disfigured by a frown and what I heard was a sound of panic and suspicion under her breath. Without a word，she pulled her kids to escape from me，as if scared by a murderer. I still stood there with a blank face and a sinking heart.

  Finally a man wearing a cheap T-shirt and dirty jeans seemed to notice me. I squeezed a smile though it failed to mask my weariness，and requested the same thing from him. Unexpectedly，he took out his mobile phone for me without hesitation or any further questions. Dancing in his eyes was the real kindness that I had been struggling to seek for so long. From that day on，I began helping other strangers in a worry，just like the poor-looking but kind man，with the aim of passing kindness and melting the ice in many people’s hearts.