【同步练习】译林版初三英语上册 Unit8 单元话题满分范文必背

Unit 8 Detective stories

单元话题满分范文必背

1．请根据下面的中文要点提示，以“A Young Businessman Was Murdered”为题写一篇不少于90词左右的英语短文。

要点如下：

1.昨晚十点到凌晨一点之间，发生了一起谋杀案；

2被害人是一名年轻商人，年仅35岁。案发时，有人听到了呼救的声音；

3.据警方描述，被害人是因为刀伤，流血过多而死；

4.目前凶手在逃，警方悬赏10,000元人民币寻求重要线索，……(请发挥1-2句)

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【答案】A murder took place between 10 p. m. last night and 1 a. m. this morning. The victim was a young businessman. He was only 35 years old. Someone heard shouting for help at the time of the crime. The police said that the victim was wounded with a knife and bled to death as a result. The murderer hasn’t been caught so far. The police have offered a reward of 10, 000 yuan for the important clues. Anyone who can provide useful information should contact the police.

【解析】

这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如take place，between…and，shout for help，at the time of，as a result，so far等。而The police said that the victim was wounded with a knife and bled to death as a result./ Anyone who can provide useful information should contact the police.等多种从句的运用更是为文章增色不少。

点睛：这是一篇材料作文。根据提示内容可知用一般现在时，可以把所提示的汉语翻译成英文，然后在写作中进行适当性的发挥。

2．假设你叫李华，昨天晚上你看完电影在回家途中目击了一起抢劫案．请就以下信息，以李华的名义写一份给警方的书面材料，要求词数100左右．材料的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．

Dear Sir/Madam

I'm writing to report a robbery to you．

I hope the information will help you catch the robbers．

 Yours faithfully

 Li Hua．

【答案】Dear Sir/Madam

I'm writing to report a robbery to you． At about nine last night，I was on the way back home from the cinema when suddenly I heard someone crying for help from behind．I turned around and found a tall man with a pair of dark glasses and a short man robbing a young woman at the street corner near the cinema．The woman wore a gold necklace and a gold watch．She put up a good fight with them．I ran towards them but when I arrived，the two robbers had ridden their bikes away．They robbed the woman of her gold watch，but luckily，the woman wasn't hurt．

I hope the information will help you catch the robbers．

Yours faithfully

Li Hua．

【解析】

本文属于材料作文，为警察提供一份目击证明。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别适用一些亮点词句，如on the way，suddenly，cry for help，turned around，put up，ran towards以及luckily等。增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

3．以“How to Keep Safe in the School？”为题，写一篇100词左右的短文。

内容包括：

1. 描述一件发生在你身上或你看到的发生在校园的意外事件（经过与结果）；

2. 提出解决这种校园意外事件的建议（至少两条）；

3. 呼吁每个学生都要注意校园安全。

How to Keep Safe in the School?

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【答案】How to Keep Safe in the School

Do you know that our school life could be dangerous if we are not careful enough? For example one day, two students ran after each other in the hallway. Suddenly, one of them fell down and hurt his leg because of the wet floor. Therefore, he had to stay in hospital for two weeks. So I think students should always walk but not run in the hallways. And the teachers had better keep an eye on the students after class and stop them from running. At last, I hope all the students should pay attention to their safety in school.

【解析】

1.题干解读：该题目主要讲述校园安全问题。热门话题，与生活息息相关选。

2.例文点评：例文根据内容要求先描述事件，时态采用一般过去时为主；其次提出关于校园安全的建议，用一般现在时；最后呼吁每个学生都要注意校园安全。内容完整，连贯。。

3.高分亮点：

短语： For example、ran after、fell down、keep an eye on、stop…from…、pay attention。

句型： if引导的条件状语从句、宾语从句、had better do sth。

4．根据下面提示，写一篇90词左右的短文，描述一起谋杀案件。

1.昨晚11点到12点之间，人民路上发生了一起谋杀案，被害者是一名司机，四十多岁

2.案发时，有人听到被害者求救。受害人受了刀伤，流血过多而死。

3.警方已经悬赏五万元，以获取重要线索。

4.如果你有任何信息，请拨打110和警方联系。

【答案】Last night, a murder took place between eleven and twelve on Renmin Road. A driver was murdered. He was in his forties. At the time of the crime, someone heard him shouting for help.

The victim was attacked with a knife and bled to death as a result. So far, the police have offered a reward of 50,000 yuan for important clues. If you have any information, please call/ contact the police on 110.

【解析】

本文属于材料作文，描述一起谋杀案件。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

【亮点说明】这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别适用一些亮点词句，如take place, at the time of, victim, as a result, so far, clue以及contact。增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

点睛：写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：

认真审题。审好题是写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。

构思提纲。有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。

初写短文。一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。

修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。

5．请根据以下要点写一则语意连贯的小故事。词数90左右。

1我妈妈一直和我们的一个新邻居相处得不好。妈妈说他看起来很不友好。

2一天，妈妈回到家，发现她昨天刚买的项链不见了。

3我们决定立刻报警。

4突然有人敲门，原来是我们的新邻居。

5他手里拿着项链，说是昨天在门口发现的。

6妈妈很感激他，并愿意和他成为朋友。

提示：1请尽量使用间接引语和定语从句等复合句。

2可在现有线索上发挥想象。

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【答案】My mother got along well with all our new neighbours except the man who lived next door. My mother said he didn't look like a nice man.

One day, when my mother came home from work, she realized that she had lost her new necklace, which she had bought the day before. She was very worried. She thought that perhaps the man who lived next door had stolen her necklace. We planned to call the police at once. Just then, someone was knocking at the door. It was the young man, our new neighbour I was shocked that my mother's necklace was in his hand. He told us that he found it at the doorway. And he thought it must be my mother's. So he came to return it.

Yes, it was the necklace my mother lost. My mother was so thankful that she would like to make friends with him.

【解析】

这是一篇材料作文。根据要点提示写一则语意连贯的小故事。因此时态为一般过去时。所给材料较为详细，故动笔前先要认真阅读材料，考虑如何组织正确的语言，将句意完整地表达出来。写作中注意表达的条理性，用好连接词；为丰富文章的文采，尽量使用间接引语和定语从句等复合句。要特别注意间接引语的人称和时态以及定语从句的引导词。最后，注意不要犯语法、句法以及搭配性错误，写好后反复读几遍，适当修改。

6．今天早上， 有人在一家工厂里发现了一具尸体。被害者是一名工程师， 男性， 40岁， 被刀所刺， 因流血过多而死亡。根据警方的推断， 此案发生于凌晨三点至四点之间， 而且工厂不是案发现场。目前， 警方悬赏十万元人民币寻找破案线索。请根据以上提示， 用英语写一篇80词左右的短文描述这起案件。

写这篇短文时， 你可以从以下四个方面构思：

1.案发时间和地点；

2.被害人性别、 年龄、 职业等信息；

3.案件分析；

4.警方动态。

【答案】Someone found a dead body in a factory this morning. The victim was a man who was an engineer and he was 40 years old. The victim was wounded with a knife and bled to death. The police supposed that the murder happened between 3 a.m. and 4 a.m. Besides, the fact proved that he was killed somewhere else and then brought to the factory. The police are offering a reward of 100,000 yuan for any clue that leads to the arrest of the murderer.

【解析】

这是一篇给材料作文，要求用英语写一篇短文描述所发生的案件。根据所给材料内容可知本文主要用一般过去时态，人称主要是第三人称。在写作的时候，要根据提示内容把所发生的案件用英语正确的表达出来。可以从以下四个方面构思：

1.案发时间和地点；

2.被害人性别、 年龄、 职业等信息；

3.案件分析；

4.警方动态。

在表述时语言应该符合英语语法的结构，造句应该符合英语的表达习惯，同时注意理顺要点，防止漏写；做到上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。另外，可以用上一些句型、短语，较高级的语言，这样会使文章更出色。

7．昨天下午在回家的路上, 你恰好碰上了一起银行抢劫案, 你目睹了整个过程。作为现场目击者, 请你向警察描述你所看见的一切, 包含以下要点：

1．抢劫案大约发生在下午3点50分；

2．有三个人参与了抢劫, 其中一个人很高, 黄头发, 小眼睛, 大嘴巴, 大鼻子, 穿一件深蓝色的外套；

3．他们从银行出来后, 开着一辆黑色轿车逃走了。

【答案】Yesterday afternoon I went home after I said goodbye to my teacher. I was singing my favourite song while I was passing the bank as usual.

Suddenly I saw something unusual. Three men rushed into the bank with guns in their hands. I was too frightened to move. After a while I began to know what was happening. They were robbers, and they were robbing the bank. I noticed that one of them was very tall with yellow hair, small eyes, a big mouth and a big nose and he wore a dark blue coat. They drove away quickly in a black car before I could call the police.

【解析】

解析：这是一篇给材料作文。此题考查学生语言的综合运用能力和书面表达能力。着力开发学生对英语写作的兴趣。本篇书面表达注意时态用一般过去时，另外在写作时应该注意重点词汇和句子的翻译。

写作思路：考生首先需要看清题意，然后再展开作文；其次考生可从以下几个方面展开作文，即本文的写作要点：

1．抢劫案大约发生在下午3点50分；

2．有三个人参与了抢劫, 其中一个人很高, 黄头发, 小眼睛, 大嘴巴, 大鼻子, 穿一件深蓝色的外套；

3．他们从银行出来后, 开着一辆黑色轿车逃走了。

8．根据所给提示，以A Theft为题，写一篇90词左右的短文。内容必须包括以下要点：

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【答案】A Theft

On the evening of May 2 a theft happened in Mr Brown's shop. Two thieves broke into Mr

Brown's shop and a lot of valuable things were stolen. The thieves were seen to run away from the

shop.

One witness said the two thieves were wearing masks. One was strong and tall, and the other was a man of medium height. Each of them was carrying a heavy bag on his back and was breathing heavily. Mr Brown reported the theft to the police as soon as he discovered it. Now the police are checking the scene for fingerprints and other clues. They say they will solve the case as soon as possible.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇材料作文，要求描述一起盗窃案件，表中内容就是本文的写作要点。这些要点构成写作的基本框架。我们要做的就是用正确的英语把要点表达出来，并适当发挥想象说出自己的观点。动笔前要认真阅读材料，不要遗漏要点，并适当发挥。根据材料内容可知本文主要是用一般过去时态和过去进行时态来写，要注意主谓一致等问题。写作中要适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系。

点睛：首先认真审题，看清题目中的要求和要点；然后根据表中内容，列出写作要点及每个要点中可能要用到的表达；然后紧扣要点，动笔写作，在写作过程中，要注意句与句、段与段之间的过渡，必要时可适当运用表示转折、因果、并列、比较等关系的连词，使文章过渡平稳，自然流畅；最后要细心复核检查，确保正确无误。

9．假设你是张通，去年寒假去美国探亲。2018年2月18日，你目击了一起交通事故。警察局让你写一份材料，说明当时的情况。请根据下列叙述写出报告。

1. 2018年2月18日早晨7：30左右发生了一起交通事故；

2. 我在公园路上散步；

3. 一位老人从公园里出来，穿过公园路；

4. 一辆黄颜色小汽车从第三街道开过来右转弯进入公园路；

5. 小汽车撞倒了老人并向西开走；

6. 我看见驾驶员是位年轻妇女，记住了车牌号（the plate number）是AC864，并送老人去了医院。

注意：

1. 词数：90左右；

2. 结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。

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About two minutes later, I stopped a passing car and took the old man to the nearest hospital.

Zhang Tong

【答案】It was about 7:30 on the morning of February 18, 2018. I was taking a walk along Park Road. I saw an old man coming out of the park. Just then a yellow car drove down Third Street and made a right turn into Park Road. The next moment the car hit the old man while he was crossing the road. He fell down with a cry. The car didn't stop but drove off at a great speed heading west.   I noticed the driver was a young woman and the plate number was AC864. About two minutes later，I stopped a passing car and took the old man to the nearest hospital.

Zhang Tong

【解析】

题干解读：该题目属于材料作文，主要应该以记叙文为主，文章结尾已给出。要求描述你目击的一场交通事故，事故细节已给出中文信息。

例文点评：例文用第一人称进行叙述，时态主要采用一般过去时。例文将背景、事件发生的时间、地点、现场细节等交代得非常清楚全面，材料给出的要求都已涉及；文章叙述逻辑清晰，条例分明。

高分亮点：

短语：take a walk；just then；drive down；fall down；drive off。

句型：see sb. doing sth.；while引导的时间状语从句。

10．请根据以下线索写一篇句意连贯的小故事。

1.我婶婶一直和她的一个新邻居相处得不好，婶婶说他看起来很不友好;

2.一天，我婶婶回到家，发现她昨天刚买的项链不见了;

3.她回想自己去过哪儿，觉得可能是那个邻居偷了她的项链，因此她决定立刻报警;

4.突然有人敲门，原来是她的新邻居;

5.他手里拿着项链，说昨天在门口发现的;

6.婶婶很感激他，并愿意和他交朋友。

【答案】My aunt got along well with all her neighbours except the man who lived next door.   My aunt said he didn't look friendly at all.

One day, when my aunt came home from work, she realized that she had lost her new necklace which she had bought the day before. She was very worried. She recalled where she had been just then. She thought that perhaps the man who lived next door had stolen her necklace. So she planned to call the police at once. Just then, someone knocked at the door. It was the young man, her new neighbour. She was shocked that her necklace was in his hand.   He told her that he found it at the doorway. And he thought it must be my aunt's, so he came to return it.

Yes, that's true. It was the necklace that my aunt lost. My aunt was very thankful. She told her new neighbour that they could be good friends later.

【解析】

【亮点说明】这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如get along well with，next door，at all，the day before，just then，at once，knock at，in his hand，at the doorway等。而My aunt said he didn't look friendly at all./ One day, when my aunt came home from work, she realized that she had lost her new necklace which she had bought the day before./ And he thought it must be my aunt's, so he came to return it.等多种复杂从句结构的运用，使本文内容丰富，表达流畅，是本文的最大亮点。

点睛：这是一篇材料作文，根据提示内容可知用一般过去时，可把提示的内容逐条翻译并拓展成不同的句子，最后把这些句子连在一起即可。