突破05 顺叙方式理清叙述中心(解析版)-备战2022年新高考英语写作三合一突破

备战2022年新高考英语写作三合一突破突破05 顺叙方式理清叙述中心（以报道、日记和周记的写作为例）【技法演练】【典例分析】(2020·新高考Ⅰ卷)假定你是李华， 上周日你校举办了5公里越野赛跑活动。请你为校英文报写一篇报道， 内容包括：1.参加人员；2.跑步路线：从校门口到南山脚下；3.活动反响。注意：写作词数应为80左右。【写作示例】第一步　审五要素， 三段谋篇 审主题审体裁审语言审格式审内容5公里越野赛跑活动活动类报道人称： 第三人称报道类可分三段第1段(简要介绍)说明活动和参与人员的情况时态：一般过去时第2段(说明活动细节)说明赛跑的具体路线和赛跑过程尾段(巧妙收尾)介绍这次活动的反响 第二步　雕词酌句，设计亮点1．上周日，我校举行了一场5公里越野跑比赛，我校师生参加了比赛。【技法强化】①高级词汇和句式(并列句)：Last Sunday                          , and both students and teachers of our school                        .②高级句式(利用定语从句升级)：Last Sunday witnessed a 5km cross­country running race,                                      .2．我们非常重视这项活动，因为它不仅为我们提供了锻炼的机会，而且对我们的身体和心理健康也有很大的好处。①高级词汇和句式(并列句)：We thought highly of the activity, because it not only provided an opportunity for us to exercise,                                                    .②高级句式(利用被动句＋倒装句升级)：                                                                                                                        
第三步　巧妙过渡，完美成篇【语篇整合】1．活动报道报道常用于学校或单位的报纸，将最新发生的事情告诉读者。报道常由标题、导语、主体和结束语组成满分句式记忆开头句(简要叙述活动的时间、地点、人物和事件)①To avoid food waste and promote food­saving actions, a “half­dish” plan has been launched.为避免食物浪费和宣传节约食物的行为，“半份计划”被推出了。②To raise our awareness of labor, the social practice was held at the Gardening Base near our school last Friday.为提高我们的劳动意识，社会实践活动于上周五在我们学校附近的园艺基地举行。篇中句(活动发生的主要细节)①On arriving at the farm, we began with the area of fruit trees and then moved on to the vegetable field.一到农场，我们就从果树区开始，然后转到菜地。②While picking melons, I realized how hard it was to work in the fields.在摘西瓜时，我意识到在地里劳作太辛苦了。③The activity began with a video showing the history of painting facial masks in Peking Opera.活动从一段展示京剧脸谱画历史的视频开始。结尾句(对活动进行简要的总结和评论)①It is through the fruit­picking activity that we are aware of the value of working hard.正是通过采摘活动，我们意识到辛勤劳动的价值。②All students think highly of the volunteer activity, from which they benefit a lot.所有学生高度评价这个志愿者活动，他们从中受益匪浅。2．日记/周记日记常以第一人称记下当天生活中的所见、所闻、所做或所想的事情；周记没有标准的格式，只需把自己的所见、所闻、所做或所想的东西记下来，形成一篇文章即可。日记的正文是主要部分，写在日期和天气下方。满分句式记忆开头句(事情的背景)①Last week I took part in a farm program with my classmates, which has impressed itself on my memory.上周我和我的同学参加了一个农场实践活动，这在我的记忆中留下了深刻的印象。②The other day, my parents and I went to visit Mount Huang for the first time, which lies in the south of Anhui Province.前几天，我和父母第一次去安徽省南部的黄山游玩。 篇中句(说明事情的经过)①On my way home this afternoon, I saw a backpack lying on a bench with nobody else there.今天下午在我回家的路上，我看到长椅上有个背包，周围没人。②Hardly had we reached the foot of the mountain when we were attracted by the breathtaking natural scenery of Huangshan.刚到山脚下，我们就被黄山令人叹为观止的自然景色迷住了。结尾句(说明感受)①I was very tired, but I was delighted that I did a good deed.我很疲惫，但我很高兴自己做了一件好事。②What an unforgettable experience it is!这真是一次难忘的经历！【技法强化】Writing 1假设你校上周开展了一次以“阅读名著，再现经典”为主题的活动。请给校刊“英语园地”写一篇英文周记，记述你和同学参加此次活动的全过程。内容包括：1．被选为编剧和导演，确定名著；2．写剧本、排练、成功表演；3．活动反响。注意：写作词数应为80左右。                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                Writing 2你校上周组织了以“劳动最光荣”为主题的社会实践活动。请你为校英文报写一篇报道， 内容包括：1．活动内容；2．你参加的活动及收获 (参加社区服务，公益活动等)；3．你的感想。注意：写作词数应为80左右。                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                               参考答案 【技法演练】1．上周日，我校举行了一场5公里越野跑比赛，我校师生参加了比赛。①高级词汇和句式(并列句)：Last Sunday witnessed a 5km cross­country running race, and both students and teachers of our school participated in the race.②高级句式(利用定语从句升级)：Last Sunday witnessed a 5km cross­country running race, in which both students and teachers of our school participated.2．我们非常重视这项活动，因为它不仅为我们提供了锻炼的机会，而且对我们的身体和心理健康也有很大的好处。①高级词汇和句式(并列句)：We thought highly of the activity, because it not only provided an opportunity for us to exercise, but it was also of great benefit to our health, physically and mentally.②高级句式(利用被动句＋倒装句升级)：The activity was highly thought of, because not only did it provide an opportunity for us to exercise, but it was also of great benefit to our health, physically and mentally.  【语篇整合】Writing 1Last week, an activity themed “Reading and Acting out Classics” was held in our school. Luckily, I was elected the screenwriter and director of our group.After careful consideration，I finally chose the famous novel A Dream of Red Mansions. I read it attentively and devoted myself to writing the play. Then our group practiced hard.Then came the big day when we performed with brilliant acting skills and vivid lines, which was highly praised by students and teachers.Through this activity, we were aware that reading classic novel can not only improve our literary competence but enrich our spirit.  Writing 2Labor is the most Glorious ThingTo form the students' correct view of labor, last week our school held a social program whose theme was “Labor is the most Glorious Thing”．There were various activities, including helping farmers plant or harvest vegetables or feed chickens on the nearby farm, and doing community service or voluntary work. My classmates and I actively participated in community service, collecting garbage and helping the elderly with their housework.What a meaningful program! It does offer an alternative to our tight campus life. Not only do we get relaxed but we have cultivated the spirit of working hard.【拓展运用】1近日，你校组织观看了“中国航天成就展”。请你写一篇短文，给学校英文报投稿，内容包括：1.时间和地点；2.主要内容：听报告、看视频等。3.个人感受。注意：1.写作词数应为80左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Achievement Expo of China Aerospace________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】  Achievement Expo of China AerospaceYesterday’trip to City Museum was really a memorable experience and it will be kept in my mind forever.All senior 1 students visited an exhibition themed on “Achievements of China Aerospace”. First, we attended informative lectures and watched extremely exciting videos about launching rockets, which allowed us to get deeper insights into China Aerospace . Then came the highlight, experiencing thrilling and funny space walks in almost zero gravity.           Inspired by the outstanding achievements and moved by the spirit of China Aerospace experts, I will apply myself to learning knowledge so that I can make great contributions to our country like them one day .【写作分析】1.词汇积累永远铭记：remember it forever →be kept in one's mind forever.非常兴奋：very exciting →extremely thrilling让某人做某事:let sb. do →allow sb. to do 努力学习：study hard→ apply myself to learning knowledge2.句式拓展简单句变复合句原句：Yesterday’trip to City Museum was really a memorable experience and it will be kept in my mind forever.拓展句：Yesterday’trip to City Museum was really a memorable experience, which will be kept in my mind forever.【写作亮点】 [高分句型1] First，we attended informative lectures and watched extremely exciting videos about launching rockets, which allowed us to get deeper insights into China Aerospace .(运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句)[高分句型2] Inspired by the outstanding achievements and moved by the spirit of China Aerospace experts, I will apply myself to study so that I can make great contributions to our country like them one day. (运用了过去分词作状语以及 so that引导目的状语从句)2假定你是李华，在英语课上，外教Smith要求每位同学写一篇周记，谈一谈自己进入高中这一阶段内的感受。请你根据以下要点，用英语完成你的周记。1. 新旧学校对比；2. 给你留下印象最深刻的事。注意：1. 词数80左右；2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。【参考范文】Friday September 6thI believe the first week of our senior high left a deep impression on us all.The moment I stepped into the school, I was attracted by the large campus which is about three times larger than my former one. What impressed me most was the first English lesson by Mr. Smith, our foreign language teacher. I was asked to introduce myself in English, but I was too nervous to speak, which made me quite embarrassed. However, Mr. Smith encouraged me and finally I finished my self-introduction.I believe I can surely spend the three years happily and gain much in this school.【写作分析】第一步：审题体裁：应用文时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时要求：1. 新旧学校对比；2. 给你留下印象最深刻的事。第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）leave a deep impression; attract; nervous; embarrassed; encourage; self-introduction第三步：连词成句1. I believe the first week of our senior high left a deep impression on us all.2. I was attracted by the large campus which is about three times larger than my former one.3. I was asked to introduce myself in English, but I was too nervous to speak, which made me quite embarrassed.4. Mr. Smith encouraged me and finally I finished my self-introduction.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(从句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that… 4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result 连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，第五步：润色修改【写作亮点】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句，如：I was attracted by the large campus which is about three times larger than my former one.这句话运用了定语从句，I was asked to introduce myself in English, but I was too nervous to speak, which made me quite embarrassed.运用了非限制性定语从句，固定搭配运用了如leave a deep impression; attract; nervous; embarrassed; encourage; self-introduction等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。3假设昨天是9月27日（周日），是世界旅游日 (World Tourism Day)，天气晴朗，你和几位同学去了趵突泉公园（the Spouting Spring Park）游玩。请根据以下内容，以日记的形式记叙你昨天的出游情况。  1. 上午乘车1小时到达目的地，游玩、唱歌、做游戏；  2. 中午发现有些游客乱扔垃圾等不文明行为,吃完午餐后决定组织一个小活动，向游客宣传文明出游、保护环境等；  3. 下午三点返回，很有意义的一天。不文明immoral /uncivilized注意：1. 词数：120-150; 2. 可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。September 28, Monday                               Fine________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】September 28, Monday                               Fine   Yesterday was September 27th, the World Tourism Day. I paid a visit to the Spouting Spring Park with several classmates. After an hour’s ride, we arrived there. As soon as we got there, we began to  enjoy the beautiful scenery. Besides, we sang happily and played some interesting games. All of us enjoyed ourselves very much.    After we had our picnic at noon, we found some immoral behaviors in public that some visitors throw rubbish everywhere and even damage the branches and flowers. we decided to organize an activity on this special day, talking to the visitors about the importance of protecting the environment and try to be civilized visitors. At about 3 in the afternoon we returned.   We not only had a good time but also did a good deed today. Though I am tired now, I felt quite happy.【写作分析】日记是记叙当天自己亲身经历的一些重要的、有意义的事情。因此，在写作时应注意日记必须用第一人称"I"进行叙述。另外，由于日记中所记叙的事情已经发生，所以整篇日记的时态常用过去时态。当然，在直接引语中或在表示客观真理或事实时仍然要用一般现在时。英文日记要求以日记的形式进行表达，其题目的形式有时是看图作文，有时是表格作文，有时是提示作文。无论是哪种形式的，写作前都要注意仔细审题，抓住要点，理清叙述的顺序。写作时正文的开头一般不用写表示日期的句子，因为日记中已有日期，再写就重复了。另外，写作时如果没有把握，应尽量少用复合句，以免弄巧成拙。另外，书写时应注意卷面整洁，字迹清楚。分析点评：考生不能遗漏要点要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，尽可能的使用较复杂的句子结构，尽量使用高级词汇以便得到较高的分数。考生注意使用过渡词或者过渡句来使文章读起来比较流畅。动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作练习以外，还可以适当背诵一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。 4阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Wrapping paper flew everywhere as Cali opened her gift. Then, a pair of shining skates caught her eyes! Cali thanked her uncle and aunt but looked embarrassed. She didn't know how to skate.Aunt Lisa, who seemed to have read Cali's mind, told her not to worry and that learning skating was fun, while Uncle George promised to take her to the ice rink（溜冰场）and teach her to skate.Cali wasn't sure. Sometimes she had a hard time learning new things. She looked again at the skates and imagined herself skating on the ice cheerfully. It should be fun! Then she nodded, "Let's do it!"The next day all of them went to the skating rink. Cali's eyes twinkled in excitement when watching the other skaters around her. She sat down on the bench and put on the skates. Uncle George then placed her helmet on and fastened it."Time for us all to hit the ice!" her uncle said, "we will hold your hands and you stand between us." Cali did so and made her first step onto the smooth ice."Whoa! This is slippery!" Cali nearly fell over, but her aunt and uncle pulled up on her arms and she found her balance again. She grinned and tried taking a few steps. Her legs wanted to slide out in front of her, so she made her steps smaller. That seemed to help."Good, Cali. Now try to glide on one foot for just a second longer on each foot as you walk," suggested Aunt Lisa. Then Uncle George skated in front of her while Lisa guided her from behind."Skate to your uncle now," she said, pushing her on the back a little to get more speed. Cali glided unsteadily towards her uncle, taking small steps and holding her arms wide for balance. Her uncle caught her and gave her a hug."Well done, Cali!" he said. "Now try it on your own." Cali wasn't too sure. Everyone else was rushing past her. Skating seemed easy for them. She started to get nervous. She lost her balance.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph 1:Struggling to rise to her feet, she determined to skate on her own._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2:Seeing Cali made amazing progress, Aunt Lisa skated up to her and praised her efforts._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Struggling to rise to her feet, she determined to skate on her own. She closed her eyes, trying not to cry. In a moment, she was picked up and put back on her feet. Her uncle smiled into her eyes. "Everyone falls down the first few times. You just have to get back up again. Cali took a deep breath, trying to resist the pain. “Okay, I can do this.” She skated away from her uncle toward the crowd as she glided unsteadily, and she encouraged herself to be brave and keep going. Soon she skated almost all the way around the rink by herself! Seeing Cali made amazing progress, Aunt Lisa skated up to her and praised her efforts. She took her hand, saying, “Look at you! You are working so hard and doing so well. We're proud of you.” Cali grinned. Learning skating was really great fun. Cali was very grateful to her aunt and uncle, not only for the skates they gave her, but also for their great patience and support to teach her how to skate.【文章大意】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了女孩Cali收到了阿姨和叔叔送给她的溜冰鞋，但是她并不会溜冰，最后在阿姨和叔叔的鼓励和帮助下学会了溜冰的故事。【写作分析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“她挣扎着站起来，决定自己滑冰。”可知，第一段可描写Cali在阿姨和叔叔的鼓励下，自己独立溜冰的经过。②由第二段首句内容“看到Cali取得了惊人的进步，Lisa阿姨走到她跟前，称赞她的努力。”可知，第二段可描写Cali受到赞扬，继续练习、最终学会了溜冰。2.续写线索：独自溜冰时的紧张——摔倒——被扶起来—一叔叔阿姨的鼓励一一独自溜冰一一坚持一一成功3.词汇激活行为类①摔倒: fall down/trip/ tumble②忍受: resist/stand/bear 鼓励：encourage/ embolden情绪类①紧张的: nervous/ strained/ intense ②自豪的: be proud of/take pride in【写作亮点】[高分句型1] Cali took a deep breath, trying to resist the pain. (运用了现在分词作状语) [高分句型2] As she glided unsteadily, she encouraged herself to be brave and keep going（运用了由连接词as引导的时间状语从句) 5阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。Many changes are taking place in food styles in the United States. The United States is traditionally famous for its very solid and unchanging diet, chiefly made up of meat and potatoes. Now people in America have many different choices: ethnic food, health food, and fast food, in addition to the traditional home-cooked meal.Ethnic restaurants and supermarkets are common in the United States. Being a country of immigrants, the United States enjoys a wide variety of ethnic food. Most American cities and towns are filled with restaurants serving international cooking. Many even have ethnic sections: Chinatown, Little Italy, or Germantown. Having vast ethnic choices, Americans can enjoy food from all over the world. Besides sections of cities, there are ethnic regions, which are well-known for certain food because of the people who have settled there. For example, in southern California, there are many Mexican restaurants.Health food became popular when people began to think more seriously about their physical well-being. Health food is fresh, natural, and unprocessed food, which does not contain preservatives to make it last longer or chemicals to make it taste or look better. People who are keen on health food are usually vegetarians. They don't eat meat, but live on beans, cheese, and eggs.Fast food restaurants are now expanding rapidly all over the country. In the United States, speed is a very important concept. People usually have a short lunchbreak because they just do not want to waste their time eating. Fast food restaurants are places that take care of hundreds of people in a short time. There is usually very tittle waiting, and the food is always cheap. Burger and pizza places are just two examples.Americans' attitude toward food is changing, too. The traditional big breakfast is no longer popular. However, coming to rediscover the social importance of food, Americans find that dinner with family and friends is a very special of enjoying time together. Like so many people in other cultures, many Americans are taking time to relax and enjoy a wider variety of tastes at dinner, even if they still rush through lunch at a hamburger stand.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】With changes in food styles taking place, American diet style has also changed. Traditional food, which chiefly made up of meat and potatoes has now been replaced by ethnic food, health food, and fast food, as well as the traditional home-cooked meal. Meanwhile, the change has also contributed to the attitude of the American people towards food. They as a result begin to attach importance to the time with family and friends.【文章大意】本文是一篇说明文。文章主要讲述了由于饮食风格的变化，美国人饮食风格也发生了变化。传统的以肉和蔬菜的饮食现在已变成由民族食品、健康食品、快餐和传统的家庭烹饪的饭菜。这种变化也促成了美国人们对食品的态度，他们开始重视和家人还有朋友在一起的时光。【写作分析】1.要点摘录①Many changes are taking place in food styles in the United States.②The United States is traditionally famous for its very solid and unchanging diet, chiefly made up of meat and potatoes. ③Now people in America have many different choices: ethnic food, health food, and fast food, in addition to the traditional home-cooked meal.④Americans' attitude toward food is changing, too.⑤Americans find that dinner with family and friends is a very special of enjoying time together.2.缜密构思将第1、2、两个要点进行整合；将第3个要点进行重组，将第4、5两个要点进行重组。3.遣词造句With changes in food styles taking place, American diet style has also changed.Traditional food, which chiefly made up of meat and potatoes has now been replaced by ethnic food, health food, and fast food, as well as the traditional home-cooked meal.Meanwhile, the change has also contributed to the attitude of the American people towards food.They as a result begin to attach importance to the time with family and friends.【写作亮点】[高分句型1]With changes in food styles taking place, American diet now style has also changed. （运用了with的复合结构作状语）[高分句型2]Traditional food, which chiefly made up of meat and potatoes has now been replaced by ethnic food, health food, and fast food, as well as the traditional home-cooked meal.（运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句）