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【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Change is defined as t give a different psitin, curse, r directin t. Change is essential in life because yu learn frm change and it gives yu a new rute t take in life. Many peple in life tend t nt understand change but it’s the nes that d wh are the successful nes.
Fr years nw I have n idea what I have been ding with my life. I wake up every mrning ashamed f the persn I am tday, and fall asleep with the same mind set. I play everything in life by the bk and never d anything ut f the rdinary.
I am a 30-year-ld lawyer in New Yrk. I spent mst f my life in schl perusing a jb in Law. But being a lawyer was never my dream r gal in life.
I hnestly wanted t be a Writer. I have a great imaginatin and wuld write amazing stries in my head. I wuld write abut slaying dragns and life far beynd what we can imagine tday. I always knew that being a writer was never pssible fr me because it was a better financial decisin t stay a lawyer.
Recently, the days were abnrmal fr me. Usually I wuld fall asleep at ten and wake up at seven and drive t my ffice s I can get t wrk n time. But fr sme reasn I culdn’t g t sleep, and when I did fall asleep I had the same dream ver and ver again. It wasn’t a dream I had ever had in the past. The dream starts with me in the cean trying t g fr a swim searching fr smething, but fr sme reasn I start t drwn and I can’t even gasp fr air. I have n cntrl ver my bdy. Then a light shines thrugh the bright waters and when I lk up, all I can see is myself in a bright white rm writing a nvel. The I heard a vice say repeatedly “nw is the time t try smething new”.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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That afternn I quit my jb at the law firm and I culdn’t have been any happier. _____________________________________________________________
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My life started at 30, and every day since that pint I haven’t stpped enjying life._________________________________________________________________
【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一位30岁的女律师曾经为了在律师行业取得好的职位，花了大量的时间去学习法律；但是当她在律师行业干了数年之后，她发现虽然收入很高，但她并不喜欢这种严谨的、循规蹈矩的生活。于是，在她30岁的时候，她辞去这个工作，去追寻自己想当作家的梦想；后来的生活经历证明，她当年的抉择是正确的。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事主题(theme)。本文作者开篇就告诉我们“改变”(change)在生活中的重要性，如“Change is essential in life because yu learn frm change and it gives yu a new rute t take in life”这句话告诉我们“改变”能给我们的生活带来新的可能性。然后，作者通过自己的亲身经历进一步说明这一主题。
(2)理清主人公的矛盾所在(cnflicts)。从文章中的“I am a 30-year-ld lawyer in New Yrk. I spent mst f my life in schl perusing a jb in Law. But being a lawyer was never my dream r gal in life.”可知，作者本来是在追求大多数人梦寐以求的律师职业，但后来发现自己并不是真正喜欢这一职业，而自己真正喜欢的是当作家。之后，根据文中的“The dream starts with me in the cean trying t g fr a swim searching fr smething, but fr sme reasn I start t drwn and I can’t even gasp fr air. I have n cntrl ver my bdy”可知，作者内心中的这个矛盾愈发激烈。
(3)根据已知事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(develpment)。根据第二段的首句“Fr years nw I have n idea what I have been ding with my life.”可知，作者对自己的当前的工作毫无真正意义上的好感。从第四段的首句“I hnestly wanted t be a Writer”可知作者的真正梦想是想成为作家。根据第五段的开头部分“Recently, the days were abnrmal fr me. Usually I wuld fall asleep at ten and wake up at seven and drive t my ffice s I can get t wrk n time.”可知作者内心的矛盾越来越强烈。最后根据续写的第一段的开头“That afternn I quit my jb at the law firm and I culdn’t have been any happier”可知，作者最终选择了追求自己内心真正的梦想。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(pints)。根据文中所给的划线词，如change, my life, my dream, being a writer, cntrl等可知，作者在文章的后半部分可能会说明：(1)自己是否敢于做出“改变”；(2)如果“改变”了，那改变之后的结果怎样；(3)作者通过自己的经历，最后对“改变”究竟持怎样一种态度。
(5)结合文章的手段决定文章的结束部分(endings)。根据续写的第一段的开头“That afternn I quit my jb at the law firm and I culdn’t have been any happier”可以罗列一些作者在“改变”自后自己的生活与心情的变化。根据续写的第二段的开头“My life started at 30, and every day since that pint I haven’t stpped enjying life”可以在文章的结尾处说明作者对自己这些经历的看法与感受。
[参考范文]
That afternn I quit my jb at the law firm and I culdn’t have been any happier. Relieved frm that jb, I walked taller that day. When I gt hme I threw away my suits and nicely irned pants and went ut and gt a pair f ripped jeans and a baggy shirt. I culd nt have been any mre wrng. Hwever, it wasn’t just a dream. My pprtunity t make smething gd ut f my life began. It was tugh at first, but I just made myself under cntrl.
My life started at 30, and every day since that pint I haven’t stpped enjying life. I can nw enjy the smaller things in life like watching the sunset r ging fr a walk in the park. I als have fund the wman f my dreams and just can’t get enugh f her. And by the way I started t write and have been n the best sellers list fr the last 2 mnths. Things have definitely turned arund. Yes, change is a gd thing nt just fr me but fr everyne, it gives us all an pprtunity t take a chance. (156 wrds)
[范文解析]
范文围绕故事的情节和主要矛盾进行了合情合理的拓展。职业女律师的工作本身就非常艰辛，所以故事中的主人公想要摆脱这种过于正式的律师生活去追求自己的“作家梦”，是合情合理的。因此，范文的结尾部分特别强调“改变是一件好事”。
[提炼归纳]
1.熟读原文，把握主线。这是一篇夹叙夹议的文章。作者在文章的开头部分就在说明“改变”的重要性。由此我们可以推测出，作者接下来可能会通过一系列的经历与体验，展现这一主题。
2.把握情节，合理拓展。作者通过“Change is essential in life--- Fr years nw I have n idea what I have been ding with my life---But being a lawyer was never my dream r gal in life---I hnestly wanted t be a Writer--- Recently, the days were abnrmal fr me--- That afternn I quit my jb at the law firm and I culdn’t have been any happier ---My life started at 30, and every day since that pint I haven’t stpped enjying life---…”这一完整的情节叙述，告诉我们改变是生活中的必须，即与文章第一段中的“Change is essential in life because yu learn frm change and it gives yu a new rute t take in life.”相呼应，因此，在续写的时候，就需要把握这一情节变化，进行合理的拓展。
3. 关注衔接，确保连贯。通过对作者写作的情节的把握，我们可以保证续写不会偏离文章的发展的方向。但是，我们必须使用有效的衔接手段，这样才能确保续写意义的连贯性。例如，范文中的when, hwever, and, since, but, yes等都是很好的衔接手段。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
The mst delicius memries seem t happen during the hlidays. And like a squirrel preparing fr winter, I put them away t enjy slwly during the lng winter mnths. Smetimes, I enjy them fr years.
Amng them are sweetest recllectins: my little girls at the church play and the mment they gt their first angel wings; a pink dlly strller(手推车) wheeled int the bedrm with a tiny vice declaring, ''Lk what Santa Claus brught me! ''; r New Year's snwmen wearing bright scarves brrwed frm a grandma's fragrant drawer.
But there is ne memry that is a little bittersweet -- srt f like 80% dark chclate, but still gd fr yu.
This stry brings t mind a clrful candy dish and a very little by. The ccasin was smewhere between Christmas and New Year's when a few candies in a dish remained behind, a bright spt in dull winter gray.
Wrapped in December's chill, my then 3-year ld grandsn, Justin, and I had dashed frm the warmth f my parked car int the building where I planned t take care f a few wrk-related tasks.
A smiling secretary greeted us as we brushed the snwflakes and rubbed ur hands t chase the cld. Then with my grandchild clse t my side, I busied myself, finishing the items f business that had brught us there. But while his hand remained in mine, his eyes fell n the candy dish sitting nearby.
As we turned t leave, the thughtful and very bservant wman behind the desk asked the questin all children wait t hear.
''Hney, '' the kindly wman said, peering ver her glasses at Justin. ''Wuld yu like a candy bar? '' she asked, her hand pushing the dish clse fr an easier reach.
The by lked up questiningly, his eyes meeting mine, permissin hanging in the air. A slight nd frm me and then a hurried beeline t the candy dish fllwed. One candy bar was already in his hand.
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''Justin! '' I said frm the drway.
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In the humr f the mment, I felt smething hard t swallw.
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It seemed I’d dne everything I’d ever wanted t d in my life, but I had ne regret. I was brn in 1898, the ldest f five kids. Papa culdn’t spare me t g t schl, s I wrked in the fields with him till I was 21 years ld.
Everywhere I went, I learned sme hard lessns abut what happens t a man wh even can’t read the alphabet. Peple cheat yu ut f wages. They sell yu a ticket t ne city, take yur mney and hand yu a ticket t smewhere else.
By 1928, I’d been wandering fr nine years. I met a wman named Elzenia. We fell in lve, married and mved t Dallas, where I gt wrk fixing rads fr the city. When Amelia, the ldest f ur seven children, first went t schl, I tk my wife aside. “Elzenia,” I said. “I dn’t want the kids t knw I can’t read r write.”
In 1938, ne day my bss called me in. “Gerge,” he said. “N ne knws thse machines like yu d. I’d like t prmte yu.” But my thrill and surprise were cut shrt when he said, “Fill ut this applicatin and we’ll get yu a raise.” I culdn’t admit the truth. I thanked him and walked ut f his ffice. I did stay right where I was, until I turned 65 and my bss made me retire. But I didn’t stp wrking. Fr the next 25 years, I lived a happy life, but it still seemed t me like smething was missing.
A yung fellw handed me a piece f paper. It’s infrmatin abut adult educatin classes. Peple can learn t read and write. Nw I’m 102. I thught f my friends and neighburs and what they might think if they fund ut I culdn’t read. After all these years, my secret wuld be ut. But all my life I’ve wanted t read. It was high time fr actin.
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The yung man drve me t a huge building and led me int a spacius classrm, which was crwded with elderly peple like me.
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I’m still ging t schl.
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The Bard Meeting had cme t an end. Bb started t stand up and kncked int the table, spilling his cffee ver his ntes. ''Hw embarrassing! I am getting s clumsy(笨拙的) in my ld age. ''
Everyne had a gd laugh, and sn we were all telling stries f ur mst embarrassing mments. It came arund t Frank, wh sat quietly listening t the thers. Smene said, ''Cme n, Frank. Tell us yur mst embarrassing mment. ''
Frank laughed and began t tell us f his childhd. ''I grew up in San Pedr. My Dad was a fisherman. He had his wn bat, but it was hard making a living n the sea. He wrked hard and wuld stay ut until he caught enugh t feed a big family. Nt just enugh fr ur family, but als fr his Mm and Dad and the ther kids that were still at hme. ''
He lked at us and said, ''I wish yu culd have met my Dad. He was strng frm pulling the nets and fighting the seas fr his catch. When yu gt clse t him, he smelled like the cean. N matter hw much my mther washed his clthes, they wuld still smell f the sea and f fish. ''
Frank's vice drpped a bit. ''When the weather was bad, he wuld drive me t schl. He had this ld truck that he used in his fishing business. That truck was lder than he was. Half the time, he wuld slam t a stp and the ld truck wuld belch(喷出) a clud f smke. He wuld pull right up in frnt, and it seemed like everybdy wuld be standing arund and watching. Then he wuld lean ver and give me a gdbye kiss n the cheek and tell me t be a gd by. It was s embarrassing fr me. Here, I was twelve years ld. I was a big by and my Dad wuld lean ver and kiss me gdbye! ''
He paused and then went n, ''I remember the day I decided I was t ld fr a gdbye kiss. When we gt t the schl and came t a stp, he had his usual big smile. He started t lean tward me, but I put my hand up and said, 'N, Dad. ' ''
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注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
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It was the first time I had ever talked t him that way, and he had this surprised lk n his face.
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Frank gt a funny lk n his face, and the tears began t well up in his eyes.
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I was a mther f fur children, wrking at a lw-paid jb. Mney was always valuable, but we had a rf ver ur heads, fd n the table, and clthes in the wardrbe. I always tell myself t be brave and strng. I hpe all my effrts wuld be wrthwhile, as lng as my children can grw up healthily. It was Christmas time. We drve dwntwn t see the Christmas lights, and enjyed a special dinner, but the big excitement fr the kids was the fun f Christmas shpping at the mall. This was a traditin f my family, s they all lked frward t the cming f the seasn f gdwill. They talked and planned fr weeks ahead f time, asking each ther what they wanted fr Christmas.
The big day arrived and we started ut early. I gave each f the fur kids a twenty -dllar bill and asked them t search fr gifts. Then everyne scattered(分散开)with the bill. I sat at a table in a café waiting fr my children and enjying an instant f silence. It must be a happy day.
Back in the car driving hme, everyne was excited abut Christmas, laughing and asking each ther abut what they had bught. I nted Ginger, my yunger daughter had nly ne small and flat bag with her. I culd see enugh thrugh the plastic bag t tell that she had bught candy bars—fifty-cent candy bars! What did she d with that twenty-dllar bill I had given her? I was s angry. After getting hme, I called her int my bedrm and clsed the dr. I culdn't hld back my anger and shuted at her, "What abut the rest f the mney? N ne wuld be cnvinced all these candies are wrth 20 dllars. What d yu want t d with the rest f the mney?"
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She was shcked at my reactin and burst int tears. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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My anger disappeared.
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I peered ver my grandma’s shulder as she sewed pieces f clth tgether. The tw pieces became ne faster than I’d imagined. The clrs, hwever, lked ugly when put tgether and nne f the patterns matched. All the patches (补丁) n this blanket seemed t disagree.
“Grandma， that’s the ugliest quilt (棉被) I’ve ever seen.”
“Oh, sweetie, it’s warm and beautiful,” said Grandma, pinting t a pile f crazy patterned shirts and suits. “I can take these ld clthes that Grandpa and I will never wear again and turn them int smething useful and gd. It’s nt the quilts appearance but the lve that sews it tgether that makes it beautiful. This quilt will keep yu warm n a cld night like tnight. And I knw that fr a fact.” Grandma put her hand n my shulder, “Nt everyne is as lucky as we are. Here, put n yur cat. We’ll get a secnd pinin abut hw ugly my quilts are.”
Grandma flded a finished quilt and tucked it int a shpping bag. Afterwards, we gt in the car and drve dwntwn. The white snw turned grayer as we gt t the city. Eventually, Grandma pulled up at a dark alley (胡同) and we gt ut f the car. The terrible smell f rtting garbage made me feel sick and pinch my nse shut. Grandma tk my hand and led me t the street lamp. I culd see the snw shimmering (发出微光) in the light.
Grandma paused. “There’s usually smebdy dwn this alley. It’s quiet and ut f the wind--a gd place t stay n cld nights. A nice warm quilt might make it even better.”
The dark engulfed (吞没) Grandma and I as we stepped deep int the alley. The pavement was cracked and missing in spts. Chicken bnes and stained bxes littered their way. And Grandma’s shes made a lud sund with each step. Feeling frightened, I squeezed Grandma’s hand. Grandma squeezed my hand back. “Its OK.” she smiled.
“Wh’s there?” shuted a vice ut f the darkness.
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“I have a nice warm quilt, if yu want it,” said Grandma.
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Back hme, I fund a wrn-ut quilt by accident in a cupbard.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
''Justin!'' I said frm the drway. By this time his pudgy hands had grabbed ne -- and nly ne -- and he made his way back t me. My vice was smewhat serius as I realized manners had been frgtten. ''What d yu say? '' Hearing this, the little by turned n his heel, prmptly returning t the candy dish. ''Get Grandma ne, t! '' I laughed. The secretary laughed. And even little Justin inncently giggled at the fun we were having.
In the humr f the mment, I felt smething hard t swallw. There was a truth that lingered lng after the strawberry candy taste had disappeared. What example had I set fr this little ne while ften in my care? Was he learning mre abut ''getting'' and less abut gratitude -- that heartfelt ''thank yu''? In the years since, I've always lved t remember that mment. But ne gift I hpe we all leave with ur children is the imprtance f a grateful heart. Really, what culd be sweeter?
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章主要讲述了作者和孙子的一次经历带给她苦中带乐的回忆。
续写分为两段。第一段的开头是：“Justin！”我在走廊上说。这时他的手上抓着一颗糖，然后朝我走过来。我的声音有点严肃，我意识到自己当时失态了。“你说什么？”。听到这话，小男孩转过身去，立刻跑到糖果盘那里。“给奶奶也拿一颗。”我笑了。秘书也笑了。小Justin也咯咯的笑了。第二段的开头是：在这个幽默时刻，我觉得有些东西难以下咽。在草莓味糖果的味道消失之后，有一个想法始种萦绕在我心头。我给小家伙树立了什么榜样？他学到了更多关于得到，更少关于感激的东西吗(那种发自内心的感激)？从那以后，我一直记得那一刻。我总是希望让孩子学会真正的感恩。没有什么比这更好了。
续写时应注意故事情节要符合逻辑，基础时态为一般过去时。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些高级表达，例如：Hearing this, the little by turned n his heel, prmptly returning t the candy dish.中使用了现在分词作状语；There was a truth that lingered lng after the strawberry candy taste had disappeared.中that引导同位语从句；What example had I set fr this little ne while ften in my care?中what引导主语从句。这些表达的使用不仅给文章增色添彩，也展示了作者扎实的语言功底。
2.【参考范文】
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The yung man drve me t a huge building and led me int a spacius classrm, which was crwded with elderly peple like me. Thrugh chatting, I learned that they had all been lnging t read and write but never had the chance t g t schl.As the bell rang, in came the teacher, a wman well past frty. After a warm and brief greeting, we started ur lessn. First we learned t read the alphabet and thugh I made mistakes at times, n ne laughed at me. Everyne helped each ther with pen-hearted enjyment.
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I’m still ging t schl. Thugh faced with the mst challenging event f my life, I’m full f curage and cnfidence. With the generus help f my teacher, friends and my children, I have made huge prgress in study. Nw I’m never shy abut admitting the truth that nce I was nt able t read and write at all. Besides, I’m eager t encurage mre elderly peple t attend the adult educatin classes, because it’s never t late t learn.
【解析】
本篇书面表达属于读后续写。要求考生阅读所给内容后，根据所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者小时候作为长子，没能去上学读书。后来作者工作，结婚，生子，他不愿让孩子们和别人知道他不识字。工作中有一次老板想要提拔他，让他填申请表，但作者无法说出他不会写字的真相。65岁后，作者退休了，他很快乐，但他总觉得错过了什么。一天，一个年轻人递给他一张有关成人教育课程的宣传单，现在作者102岁了，想到朋友们、邻居们可能会发现他的秘密。但作者一生都想要读书识字，他认为是时候行动了。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：年轻人开车将我带到一个巨大的建筑前，领我进入一个宽敞的教室，里面有许多像我一样的老人。因此，接下来应该接着写：与他人交谈后，我了解到他们都是渴望读书写字但是没有机会上学。铃响之后，走进来一位老师，简单问好之后，开始了上课。首先我们学习读字母表，尽管我有时犯错，但没有人嘲笑我。每个人都坦诚地相互帮助。第二段开头是：我仍然在上学。因此，接下来应该接着写：尽管面临着我人生中最具有挑战性的事，我充满勇气与信心。在老师、朋友与孩子们的帮助下，我在学习上取得了巨大的进步。另外，我积极地鼓励老年人参加成人教育课，因为活到老，学到老。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，情节生动，内容完整，符合题目要求。范文中使用的一些词汇和句型值得我们学习。高级词汇/短语，如：spacius、be crwded with、have the chance t d sth.、at times、faced with、With the generus help f、make huge prgress等；高级句型：倒装句。As the bell rang, in came the teacher, a wman well past frty. 状语从句的省略。Thugh faced with the mst challenging event f my life, I’m full f curage and cnfidence.
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It was the first time I had ever talked t him that way, and he had this surprised lk n his face. I said, ''Dad, I'm t ld fr a gdbye kiss n the cheek. I'm t ld fr any kind f kiss. '' My Dad lked at me fr the lngest time, and his eyes started t tear up. ''Yu're right, '' he said. ''Yu are a big by…a man. I wn't kiss yu anymre. ''
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Frank gt a funny lk n his face, and the tears began t well up in his eyes. And he spke. ''It wasn't lng after that when my Dad went t sea and never came back. It was a bad weather day when mst f the fishermen stayed in, but nt Dad. He had a big family t feed. The cean has swallwed him up.''
【解析】
这是一篇读后续写。文章讲述了一个故事。董事会结束时Bb不小心打翻了咖啡，他觉得很尴尬。后来，大家都开始讲述自己记忆中最尴尬的场景。
续写分为两部分。第一部分的开头是：那是我第一次用那样的方式和他讲话，他脸上出现了惊讶的表情……所以可以接着写：我说：“爸爸，我已经足够大，不要在我脸颊上吻别了！那已经不适合我了。”父亲看着我，眼睛里涌出了泪水。他说：“你是对的。你现在已经是个大男孩了，不，你已经是个男子汉了，我以后不会在亲吻你了。”
第二段的开头是：弗兰克脸上出现了一个滑稽的表情，然后泪水模糊了他的双眼……所以可以接着写：他接着说：“在那之后不久，我爸爸去出海就再也没有回来过了。那天的天气不好，所有的渔人都待在家，除了我的父亲，因为他有一大家要养。海洋吞没了他。”
续写是要注意所写内容要符合故事逻辑，基础时态是一般过去时，但直接引语要根据具体情况来判断。
【范文点评】
范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了一些主从复合句，例如：It was a bad weather day when mst f the fishermen stayed in, but nt Dad.中when引导定语从句。
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She was shcked at my reactin and burst int tears. She explained t me what had happened. “I was lking arund, wndering what t buy, when I fund the ‘Giving Trees’ with many lvely little cards n it. Out f curisity,I stpped and read ne f them. It was fr a fur-year-ld girl. All she wanted fr Christmas was a dll. Althugh I had nly 15 dllars left, I thught f the pr girl. I had bught sweets fr my Christmas. Mm, we had s much but she didn't have anything. S I tk the card ff the tree and bught the dll fr her. ”
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My anger disappeared. I smiled at them and felt a great relief. I never felt s rich as I did that day. My effrts paid ff . Yes, we were living a pr life. Hwever，my children had learned t care abut thers. They had knwn the significance f kindness and giving. That was what I had fr my Christmas.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者是四个孩子的母亲，生活拮据。但作者觉得只要孩子能健康成长，她的一切努力都是值得的。圣诞节到了，作者给了四个孩子每人一张20美元的钞票，让他们去买喜欢的礼物。回来时，作者发现小女儿Ginger用20美元只买了50美分的棒棒糖。作者很生气，质问她拿剩下的钱都做了什么。
续写部分分为两段：
第1段开头是：她被我的反应震惊了，哭了起来。接下来应该写Ginger向作者解释发生的事情。Ginger在买圣诞礼物时看到了“赠予树”，上面有很多小卡片。她阅读了其中的一张，是来自一个4岁的小女孩的。她想要一个洋娃娃作为圣诞礼物。于是Ginger从树上摘下卡片，给那个小女孩买了一个洋娃娃。
第2段开头是：我的怒气没有了。下面应该写作者的感受。作者感到非常欣慰，觉得自己从来没有像那天那样富有。虽然他们一家过着贫困的生活，但是孩子们学会了关爱别人，知道善良和给予的意义。
续写前需要仔细阅读文章，熟悉文章故事的发展，然后根据故事发展脉络，展开合理的想象，按要求完成任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，重点突出，同时表达时也使用了很多高级词汇，如explain… t sb.；lk arund；ut f curisity；think f；buy sth. fr sb.；smile at；feel a great relief；pay ff；live a pr life；care abut；the significance f；kindness
等；还运用了复杂的句式，如“be ding… when”句型的运用I was lking arund…when I fund the ‘Giving Trees’； althugh引导的让步状语从句的运用 Althugh I had nly 15 dllars left, I thught f the pr girl；what引导的表语从句的运用That was what I had fr my Christmas等。
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“I have a nice warm quilt, if yu want it,” said Grandma. After a while, a beam f light appeared and a lady walked ut f the darkness. Grandma pened the shpping bag and pulled ut the multiclred quilt. “That’s pretty and it lks warm,” the lady exclaimed and tk the quilt, her eyes filled with tears f gratitude. As we walked back dwn the alley, I lked ver my shulder and saw the lady hlding the quilt tightly t her face. “Yu’re right, Grandma. That is a beautiful quilt.” On ur ride back hme, the lady’s grateful wrds were still ringing in my ears.
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Back hme, I fund a wrn-ut quilt by accident in a cupbard. I asked Grandma curiusly, Grandma, why is there a quilt here? After a mment f silence, Grandma began t share her wn stry. On a freezing night decades ag, as a pr yung wman sleeping in the same alley, Grandma was ffered a quilt, which warmed her up. She was determined t pass the lve frward. That’s why Grandma sewed the ld clthes tgether and made quilts fr thse in need. After hearing the stry, I gave Grandma the biggest hug ever. I thught f all the clthes I didn’t want t wear anymre and knew what Grandma and I wuld d the next mrning.
【解析】
本篇书面表达属于读后续写，要求考生续写两段内容使之与已给出的材料构成一篇完整的短文。
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者看到奶奶缝制了一条带有各种补丁的被子，认为这条被子非常的丑陋。但是，奶奶却说被子的美不在于它的外表，而在于这条被子是用爱缝制的。之后，奶奶和作者一起来到城里破旧而又寒冷的街道。作者很害怕，这时，从胡同里传来了声音。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：奶奶说：我有一条暖和的被子，如果你想要的话。所以接下来应该写刚才说话的人从胡同里走出来，奶奶把被子送给这个人。这个人收下被子，并且非常感激，之后，作者和奶奶上车离开。此处，也可以描写一下作者在现场的感受。
第二段开头是：回到家里，我碰巧在壁橱里发现了一条破旧的被子……本段应该写作者向奶奶询问这条被子的来历。奶奶向作者讲述这条被子的故事，以及缝制被子送给他人的原因。作者从中学到了很多道理，并且决心向奶奶学习做些慈善的事情。
续写时我们要按照已给出的材料中的关键词来写两段内容。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。按要求完成写作任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：a beam f light， pull ut，ring in my ears，by accident，be determined t，等高级词汇；“That’s pretty and it lks warm,” the lady exclaimed and tk the quilt, her eyes filled with tears f gratitude.一句中的her eyes filled with tears f gratitude.为独立主格结构；As we walked back dwn the alley, I lked ver my shulder and saw the lady hlding the quilt tightly t her face.一句中使用了as引导的时间状语从句，以及感官动词的复合结构；as a pr yung wman sleeping in the same alley, Grandma was ffered a quilt, which warmed her up.一句使用了which引导的非限制性定语从句。That’s why Grandma sewed the ld clthes tgether and made quilts fr thse in need. 一句使用了why引导的表语从句；I thught f all the clthes I didn’t want t wear anymre and knew what Grandma and I wuld d the next mrning.一句使用了what引导的宾语从句。