2026年中考英语考前冲刺复习：介绍某次旅游经历 话题作文预测突破讲义

这是一份2026年中考英语考前冲刺复习：介绍某次旅游经历 话题作文预测突破讲义，共16页。
? 使用建议：基础薄弱→重点看模块一二三；中等水平→重点看模块四五六；冲刺高分→重点看模块七八九。
? 本讲义所有例句均来自人教版九年级教材原句或中考真题范文改写，确保内容贴合考纲。
模块一 教材考点速查
本模块梳理人教版九年级与中考"介绍旅游经历"话题直接相关的单元，帮你从已有课本知识中提取写作素材。
━ 1.1 课本单元对应关系 ━
★ 中考高频提示：近5年安徽/全国卷中考书面表达中，"旅游经历"话题出现频率排名第3（仅次于"学校生活"和"人物介绍"），务必重视！
━ 1.2 话题词汇·课本定向检索 ━
以下词汇直接来自教材单元词汇表，标注了在旅游话题写作中的应用场景：
★ 使用技巧：复习单词时，把每个词放到"If I were t write abut a trip, hw wuld I use this wrd?"的语境中。
━ 1.3 课文原句 → 写作改写对照表 ━
以下每条"课文原句"都是你背过的，右边是它在旅游作文中的直接改法——学会"搬运"课本语言。
★ 写作的本质不是"创造"语言，而是"迁移"语言。课本里80%的好句子都可以改造成旅行作文素材！
━ 1.4 中考真题链接 ━
以下为近年中考真题中与"旅游"话题直接相关的书面表达题目，标注了与本模块单元知识的对应关系：
? 建议：试着用本模块学到的"课文原句改写"方法，为以上每道真题写2-3个句子，检测自己的迁移能力。
模块二 高分词汇分级突破
旅游话题写作中，词汇水平直接影响评分。本模块将核心词汇分为三级，供不同分数目标的学生选择性掌握。
★★★ = 13-15分目标 ★★ = 10-12分目标 ★ = 保底基础
━ 2.1 动词篇（60词） ━
? 并非词越难分越高！关键在于"用得准"和"搭配自然"。宁可准确使用★★级词汇，也不要乱用★★★级词汇导致搭配错误。
━ 2.2 形容词/副词篇（45词） ━
━ 2.3 连接词与过渡语（18组）☆必背☆ ━
⚠ 连接词是评分老师扫描的第一眼！没有连接词→逻辑混乱→直接扣2-3分。请确保每段至少使用2种不同类型的连接词。
模块三 高频短语搭配库
短语搭配是中考写作的核心得分点。本模块精选课标要求的核心短语，并按"普通表达→高分替换"给出升级方案。
━ 3.1 核心短语63组（按功能分类） ━
━ 3.2 高分替换速查表（28组） ━
★ 记住：一篇文章中使用3-5个高分替换就足够。用得太多反而有"炫技"之嫌，显得不自然。
模块四 万能句型模板库
本模块提供可直接套用的三段式万能模板——开头、主体、结尾各取所需，填空即用。
★ 核心策略：三段式 = 1句开头 + 4-6句主体 + 1句结尾。中考作文80-100词，正好对应8-10句话。
━ 4.1 开头段 · 4句式（任选其一） ━
建议在第一句中点明时间/地点/人物，让评分老师立刻知道你在写什么。
━ 4.2 主体段 · 6句式（组合使用） ━
主体段是文章的核心，建议按"到达→活动→感受"顺序，从以下句式中选4-6句组合。
━ 4.3 结尾段 · 3句式（任选其一） ━
★ 高分秘诀：结尾句务必使用一个高级句型（nt als... / 现在完成时 / 定语从句），这是评分老师看得最仔细的地方！
━ 4.4 模板组合示范 ━
以下用三段式模板快速组合一篇80词完整范文，展示如何"填空即用"：
? 以上5句共78词，正好符合中考80词要求。这就是"模板的力量"——不需要临场发挥，只需填空+适当调整。
模块五 语法要点专项突破
旅游话题写作涉及6大核心语法点。本模块逐一拆解用法规则、典型错误和写作应用。
━ 5.1 时态选择策略 ★★★ ━
80%的学生在旅游作文中扣分是因为时态混乱。请严格按以下规则选择时态：
⚠ ⛔ 致命错误：通篇用一般现在时写游记！如"I g t Beijing and see the Great Wall."——这句话在记叙文中直接扣3分！
━ 5.2 被动语态在旅游写作中的应用 ━
被动语态让文章更正式、更客观。Unit 7重点学习的 shuld be dne 在旅游话题中非常实用。
━ 5.3 定语从句——写作加分利器 ★★★ ━
定语从句是中考评分老师最看重的加分点。Unit 9 专门学习 that/wh/which 引导的定语从句。
★ 每篇作文至少使用1个定语从句。评分标准中"能使用较复杂结构"明确包含定语从句——不用=少拿2-3分。
━ 5.4 感叹句——表达情感的利器 ━
? 感叹句建议放在文章结尾前一句，起到"画龙点睛"的效果，让评分老师眼前一亮。
━ 5.5 nt als... —— 万能加分句型 ━
这是中考最万能的加分句型，可以在任何段落使用：
模块六 范文精讲与拆解
同一个题目，为什么有的作文10分，有的15分？本模块通过逐句对比拆解，让你看清"差在哪里"。
━ 6.1 题目呈现 ━
【真题风格作文题】
假设你是李华，上周末你和同学一起去了黄山旅游。请你用英语写一篇短文，记录这次旅行经历。
要求：1. 描述旅行过程（包括交通方式、主要活动等）；2. 表达你的感受和收获；3. 80词左右。
━ 6.2 普通版范文（10-12分水平）——逐句分析问题 ━
⚠ 评语：全篇81词，核心问题——词汇单调（very×3, beautiful/nice/gd各1次），缺少连接词，没有高级句型。预估：10-11分。
━ 6.3 高分版范文（13-15分水平）——逐句解析提分技巧 ━
★ 评语：全篇118词（超80词要求，但中考允许±20%），使用了现在分词、定语从句、主语从句、让步状语从句、nt als、as sn as等至少6个高级语法点。预估：14-15分。
━ 6.4 普通版→高分版 提分一览表 ━
模块七 易错点排雷
以下10大错误是中考阅卷中"旅游话题"作文最高频的扣分点。每个错误都配有诊断、纠正和加固练习。
━ 7.1 十大高频错误一览表 ━
━ 7.2 易错点专项练习（10题） ━
完成以下改错练习，检测你是否真的掌握了上面的10大易错点：
模块八 仿真模拟训练
本模块提供4道中考真题风格的写作题，涵盖记叙文、推荐信、图表作文、日记四种体裁。建议先独立完成，再对照参考范文。
━ 8.1 训练一：记叙文——个人旅游经历 ★★★（最高频） ━
【题目】
假如你是李华，今年暑假你和父母一起去了云南旅游。请你根据以下提示，写一篇英文短文记录这次经历。
提示要点：1. 交通方式：飞机；2. 主要活动：游览大理古城、参观洱海、品尝过桥米线；3. 感受：虽然行程紧凑但非常愉快。
要求：80词左右，可适当发挥。
【写作思路导航】
【参考范文】
Last summer vacatin, I went t Yunnan with my parents by plane. As sn as we arrived, we were amazed by the clear sky and warm sunshine. First, we visited the ancient twn f Dali, where we saw many traditinal buildings and bught sme lcal handicrafts. Then we went t Erhai Lake, whse peaceful blue water made us feel relaxed. What impressed me mst was the famus Crssing-the-Bridge Ndles — it was the mst delicius fd I had ever tasted! Althugh the trip was a bit tiring, it brught us clser t nature and gave us unfrgettable memries. I hpe t visit Yunnan again smeday. (118 wrds)
? 范文亮点：As sn as + where定语从句 + whse定语从句 + What主语从句 + althugh让步 + 最高级。6个加分点 = 14-15分！
━ 8.2 训练二：推荐信——推荐旅游目的地 ★★ ━
【题目】
你的笔友Tm计划暑假来中国旅游，请你给他写一封邮件，向他推荐一个你熟悉的旅游城市。
提示要点：1. 推荐的城市及理由（至少2个）；2. 建议的游览活动；3. 注意事项或祝福。
要求：80词左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
【参考范文】
Dear Tm,
I'm glad t hear that yu're planning t visit China this summer. I strngly recmmend yu visit Xi'an, which is ne f the ldest cities in China with a histry f ver 3,000 years. First f all, yu shuld definitely visit the Terractta Warrirs — it's truly amazing t see thusands f life-sized statues that were built ver 2,000 years ag. Besides, dn't frget t try the lcal fd, such as Rujiam (Chinese hamburger) and Liangpi (cld ndles), which are extremely ppular amng visitrs. Yu're suppsed t bring cmfrtable shes because yu'll walk a lt. I'm sure yu'll have a wnderful time in Xi'an! (108 wrds)
Yurs,
Li Hua
? 推荐信模板要点：①I recmmend... ②which定语从句介绍城市 ③Yu shuld/Yu're suppsed t 给建议 ④nt als 加分！
━ 8.3 训练三：图表作文——根据图表写旅游报告 ★★ ━
【题目】
假设下表是你班同学对"最受欢迎的旅游目的地类型"的调查结果，请根据表格内容写一篇短文。
要求：1. 描述调查结果；2. 分析原因；3. 80词左右。
【参考范文】
Recently, ur class did a survey abut students' favrite types f travel destinatins. As the chart shws, natural scenery is the mst ppular chice, taking up 40 percent. Histrical and cultural sites cme secnd at 25%, fllwed by theme parks (18%) and fd turs (12%). In my pinin, mst students prefer natural scenery because they want t escape frm the busy city life and enjy the beauty f nature. Besides, places f interest can als braden ur hrizns and enrich ur knwledge. All in all, the survey reflects that students lve meaningful travel experiences. (99 wrds)
━ 8.4 训练四：日记格式——一日游记 ★ ━
【题目】
假设昨天（5月1日）你参加了学校组织的春游，请写一篇英文日记记录这一天的活动。
提示：目的地：合肥植物园；活动：赏花、野餐、做游戏、拍照；感受：开心且有意义。
要求：60-80词，注意日记格式。
【日记格式提醒】
May 1st, 2025 Sunny
(日期+星期+天气 → 右上角，一般不写星期也可)
正文第一人称，过去时
【参考范文】
May 1st, 2025 Sunny
Tday, ur schl rganized a spring uting t Hefei Btanical Garden. We set ff at 8 in the mrning and arrived there half an hur later. As sn as we entered the garden, we were attracted by the clrful flwers and fresh air. First, we walked arund and enjyed different kinds f flwers, such as rses and tulips. Then we had a picnic n the grass, sharing delicius fd with each ther. After that, we played sme games and tk many phts. Althugh I felt a bit tired at the end f the day, this experience was truly unfrgettable. (99 wrds)
模块九 评分标准与提分策略
知己知彼，百战不殆。了解评分标准才能精准提分。以下为安徽中考英语书面表达评分细则（满分15分）：
━ 9.1 评分分档表 ━
━ 9.2 分项提分策略（从10分→15分的进阶路径） ━
模块十 考前自测清单
考前30分钟快速过一遍本清单，确保不遗漏任何得分点。完成一个勾一个。
编号
模块名称
内容概要
页码
模块一
教材考点速查
人教版九年级 Unit 7-14 关联知识点全梳理
3
模块二
高分词汇分级突破
动词/形容词/副词/连接词 三级梯度递进
8
模块三
高频短语搭配库
课标核心短语 63 组 + 高分替换 28 组
12
模块四
万能句型模板库
开头4句式 / 主体6句式 / 结尾3句式 + 变体
15
模块五
语法要点专项突破
时态选择 / 被动语态 / 定语从句 / 感叹句
18
模块六
范文精讲与拆解
普通版 vs 高分版 逐句对比批注
22
模块七
易错点排雷
10 大高频错误 + 诊断 + 纠正 + 练习
27
模块八
仿真模拟训练
记叙文/推荐信/图表作文/日记 4类题型
30
模块九
评分标准与提分策略
评分细则 + 分项提分技巧
33
模块十
考前自测清单
9项终极检查 + 考前30分钟速览
34
教材单元
课文标题
核心语法点
写作可迁移用法
九年级
Unit 7
Teenagers shuld be
allwed t chse their
wn clthes.
被动语态 shuld be dne
情态动词表达建议/规则
The trip shuld be planned
carefully. / Rules must be
fllwed during travel.
九年级
Unit 8
It must belng
t Carla.
情态动词表推测
(must/might/culd/can't)
It must be a wnderful
experience. / The scenery
can't be mre beautiful.
九年级
Unit 9
I like music that
I can dance t.
定语从句(that/wh/which)
表达喜好与评价
I visited a place that was
full f histry. / The guide
wh led us was knwledgeable.
九年级
Unit 10
Yu're suppsed t
shake hands.
be suppsed t / be expected
t 表达习俗礼仪
We were suppsed t try the
lcal fd. / Visitrs are
expected t respect custms.
九年级
Unit 11
Sad mvies make
me cry.
make + sb. + adj.
表达感受与情绪
The trip made me excited.
/ The ancient temple made
us feel amazed.
九年级
Unit 12
Life is full f
the unexpected.
过去完成时(had dne)
表达意外事件
By the time we arrived, the
sun had already set. / I had
never seen such beauty befre.
九年级
Unit 14
I remember meeting
all f yu.
remember ding / t d
现在完成时回顾经历
I will always remember
visiting that place. / We
have learned s much frm
this trip.
单元
核心词汇（教材原词）
旅游话题应用场景
U7
license, safety, cmmunity, chice, chance
表述旅途中的规则与自主选择
U8
valuable, mystery, picnic, land, purpse
描述旅途中的珍贵经历与神秘氛围
U9
prefer, electrnic, smth, spare, sense, reflect
表达旅行偏好与感受反思
U10
custm, bw, greet, value, behave, exchange
描述目的地文化习俗与社交礼仪
U11
drive, friendship, examine, pwer, wealth, weight
描写旅行中的情感体验与感悟
U12
unexpected, backpack, blck, airprt, alive, stare
记叙旅途中的意外事件
U14
survey, standard, level, duble, instructin, graduate
回顾旅行经历，总结收获成长
课文原句（你背过的）
写作改写（直接用）
U7: I think sixteen-year-lds
shuld be allwed t drive.
I think teenagers shuld be allwed
t travel with friends during hlidays.
U8: It must be Mary's bk.
The experience must be ne f the
best in my life.
U9: I like music that I can
sing alng with.
I like places that have a lng histry
and rich culture.
U10: In Krea, peple are
suppsed t bw when they meet
fr the first time.
In that city, turists are suppsed
t try the famus lcal snacks.
U11: The lud music makes
me nervus.
The beautiful scenery made us feel
relaxed and happy.
U12: By the time I gt back
t schl, the bell had rung.
By the time we reached the muntain
tp, the sun had already risen.
U14: I remember meeting all
f yu in Grade 7.
I will always remember visiting the
ancient village last summer.
年份/地区
题目
要求
对应单元知识点
2023 安徽
An Unfrgettable Trip
记叙一次难忘的旅行
U11(感受表达)
U12(意外事件)
U14(回顾经历)
2022 北京
A Trip t ____
半命题：一次去某地的旅行
U9(定语从句)
U10(习俗礼仪)
U12(过去完成时)
2022 广东
A Travel Plan
制定一个旅行计划
U7(规则建议)
U10(应该做的事)
2021 江苏
My Favrite Place
介绍最喜欢的地方
U9(定语从句)
U8(情态推测)
2020 浙江
A Letter t a Friend
abut My Trip
给朋友写信介绍旅行
U9-14(综合运用)
级别
词汇（20词/级）
典型搭配
★ 基础
g, visit, see, take, have, make, get, cme, walk, eat,
buy, play, stay, arrive, leave, start, plan, find, enjy, spend
g n a trip, visit a museum, see the sights, take phts,
have a great time, make friends, get lst(迷路)
★★ 进阶
explre, discver, experience, imagine, describe, suggest,
recmmend, guide, admire, wnder, create, cllect, share,
remind, express, intrduce, prvide, ffer, inspire, benefit
explre the ancient city, discver hidden beauty,
experience lcal life, suggest a gd rute, admire the sunrise
★★★ 高分
capture, appreciate, encunter, immerse, braden, enrich,
fulfill, unfld, verlk, depart, wander, reflect, enhance,
cherish, verwhelm, transfrm, accmpany, embark, witness
capture unfrgettable mments, appreciate natural beauty,
immerse neself in lcal culture, braden ne's hrizns,
cherish the memry frever
级别
形容词/副词（15词/级）
典型搭配
★ 基础
beautiful, interesting, happy, exciting, tired, big, lng,
wnderful, delicius, friendly, ht, cld, cheap, expensive,
different, new, ld, famus
beautiful scenery, interesting museum, friendly lcals,
delicius lcal fd, a wnderful trip
★★ 进阶
impressive, amazing, traditinal, unfrgettable, cmfrtable,
peaceful, lively, mysterius, ancient, mdern, crwded,
cnvenient, natural, cultural, attractive, incredible
an impressive view, an unfrgettable experience,
a peaceful village, lively night markets, traditinal custms
★★★ 高分
breathtaking, spectacular, fascinating, magnificent, thrilling,
picturesque, enchanting, diverse, vibrant, tranquil, charming,
authentic, extrardinary
breathtaking scenery, a picturesque twn, vibrant street
culture, an authentic experience, tranquil atmsphere
功能分类
连接词
使用场景
时间顺序
first/first f all, then, next, after that, later,
finally, in the end, at last
表述旅行行程的先后顺序
并列递进
and, als, besides, what's mre, mrever, in
additin, nt als...
增加旅行体验的描述层次
转折对比
but, hwever, althugh/thugh, n the ne
the ther hand..., instead
表达旅行中的意外或对比感受
因果推理
s, because, since, as a result, therefre, thus
解释旅行选择/感受的原因
举例说明
fr example, fr instance, such as, like
举出具体的旅行活动/地点
总结归纳
in a wrd, in shrt, all in all, generally
speaking, t sum up
文章结尾总结整体感受
功能类别
核心短语（课标要求）
普通表达→高分替换示例
出行规划
(Planning)
set ff/set ut(出发), pack luggage(打包行李), make a plan
(制定计划), bk a ticket/htel(订票/酒店), check the weather
(查天气), d sme research(做攻略)
Befre setting ff, we did sme research nline.
→ Befre embarking n ur jurney, we cnducted
thrugh nline research.
路途体验
(On the Way)
n the way t...(去…的路上), by bus/plane/train(乘坐…),
enjy the view(欣赏风景), take pictures(拍照), arrive at/in
(到达), check in(入住)
We enjyed the beautiful view alng the way.
→ We were fascinated by the scenic landscape
alng the rute.
活动描述
(Activities)
g sightseeing(观光), try lcal fd(品尝当地美食), visit
places f interest(参观名胜), g shpping(购物), learn abut
histry(了解历史), take a tur(游览)
We tried lts f lcal fd.
→ We sampled a wide variety f authentic
lcal delicacies.
感受表达
(Feelings)
have a great time(玩得开心), be deeply impressed(印象深刻),
can't wait t...(迫不及待), made me feel...(让我感觉…),
It was wrth visiting(值得一游)
We had a really great time.
→ It was truly an unfrgettable and
rewarding experience.
收获感悟
(Reflectins)
braden my hrizns(开阔眼界), learn a lt frm
(从…学到很多), enrich my knwledge(丰富知识),
(更好理解…), a valuable experience
(宝贵经历)
I learned a lt frm the trip.
→ The jurney greatly bradened my hrizns
and deepened my understanding f lcal culture.
普通表达
高分替换
very gd
excellent / wnderful / fantastic
very beautiful
stunning / breathtaking / spectacular
very happy
delighted / thrilled / verjyed
very tired
exhausted / wrn ut
very big
enrmus / massive / huge
very interesting
fascinating / captivating / absrbing
very imprtant
significant / essential / vital
very surprised
amazed / astnished / shcked
g there
head t / travel t / set ff fr
see
bserve / witness / catch sight f
like
be fnd f / be keen n / be attracted t
think
believe / cnsider / in my pinin
want t
be eager t / lng t / can't wait t
make me feel
fill me with / aruse my / give me a sense f
many peple
a large number f visitrs / crwds f turists
learn abut
gain insight int / get a taste f / be expsed t
fr the first time
It was the first time I had ever...
never frget
be engraved in my memry frever
I think the trip was...
The trip prved t be...
Because f this trip, I...
This jurney enabled me t...
The fd was gd.
The cuisine was abslutely delightful.
The weather was nice.
We were blessed with pleasant weather.
The peple were friendly.
The lcals greeted us with warm hspitality.
The view was beautiful.
We were greeted by a breathtaking panrama.
句式
模板
示例与点评
① 时间引出式
Last summer/winter hliday, I went t [地点] with [人物].
去年暑/寒假，我和…一起去了…。
Last summer vacatin, I went t Beijing with my parents.
✔ 简洁明了，时间+地点+人物齐备
② 感受引出式
[地点] is ne f the mst [形容词] places I have ever been t.
…是我去过的最…的地方之一。
Huangshan is ne f the mst beautiful places I have
ever been t.
✔ 使用最高级+现在完成时，展示语法能力
③ 回忆引出式
I will never frget the trip t [地点] because...
我永远不会忘记去…的旅行，因为…
I will never frget the trip t Xiamen because it gave
me s many wnderful memries.
✔ 情感共鸣，适合记叙文
④ 对比引出式
I have been t many places, but [地点] impressed me the mst.
我去过很多地方，但…让我印象最深。
I have been t many cities, but Chengdu impressed
me the mst.
✔ 对比突出，展示现在完成时
句式
模板
例句
① 到达描述
After [时间] f [交通方式], we finally arrived at/in [地点].
经过…的…，我们终于到达了…。
After three hurs f train ride, we finally arrived
at the ft f the muntain.
② 第一印象
As sn as I gt there, I was amazed by the [景色特点].
一到那里，我就被…惊艳到了。
As sn as I gt there, I was amazed by the
breathtaking natural scenery.
③ 活动1
(参观/体验)
First f all, we visited [景点], where we [具体活动].
首先，我们参观了…，在那里我们…。
First f all, we visited the Palace Museum, where
we learned abut Chinese histry. ✓定语从句
④ 活动2
(美食/购物)
After that, we tried sme lcal fd, such as [食物A]
and [食物B], which tasted [形容词].
After that, we tried sme lcal snacks, such as
stinky tfu and sugar paintings, which tasted amazing.
⑤ 深度体验
What impressed me mst was [最难忘的事], because...
最让我印象深刻的是…，因为…
What impressed me mst was the sunrise we saw
n the tp, because it was truly breathtaking. ✓主语从句
⑥ 意外/感悟
Hwever, smething unexpected happened — [意外事件].
不过，发生了一件意外的事——…
Hwever, smething unexpected happened — it
suddenly rained heavily, and we had t take shelter
in a small teahuse.
句式
模板
例句与点评
① 总结感受式
All in all, this trip was nt nly [adj.] but als [adj.].
总之，这次旅行不仅…而且…。
All in all, this trip was nt nly enjyable but als
educatinal. ✓ nt als...加分句型
② 收获感悟式
Frm this trip, I have learned that [道理].
从这次旅行中，我学到了…。
Frm this trip, I have learned that traveling can
braden ur hrizns and enrich ur life experience.
③ 展望未来式
I hpe I can visit [地点] again smeday. / I am lking
frward t my next trip.
I hpe I can visit Guilin again smeday. / I am
lking frward t my next exciting trip.
段落
使用句式
范文语句
开头
句式①
Last Natinal Day hliday, I went t Nanjing with my family.
主体1
句式②
As sn as I gt there, I was attracted by the ancient city walls.
主体2
句式③
First f all, we visited the Sun Yat-sen Mausleum, where we learned
abut mdern Chinese histry.
主体3
句式⑤
What impressed me mst was the Qinhuai River night cruise, because
the clrful lights alng the river were fantastic.
结尾
句式①
All in all, this trip was nt nly relaxing but als meaningful.
时态
使用场景
标志词/结构
正确例句
典型错误
一般过去时
描述已经发生的旅行
（最常见的游记时态）
visited, went, saw,
enjyed, had, tk
Last summer, I visited
Beijing and saw the
Great Wall.
I visit Beijing
→错！游记应用过去时
过去进行时
描述旅途中某个时间点
正在发生的动作
was/were + ding
When we arrived, the
sun was setting ver
the muntain.
We were walking
when the rain started.
过去完成时
描述"过去的过去"——
在某个动作之前已发生的
事（Unit 12 重点）
had + dne
By the time we gt t
the statin, the train
had already left.
By 5 PM, we had
visited three places.
现在完成时
描述经历对现在的影响，
或人生的经历总述
have/has + dne
I have been t many
cities, but this trip
was the best.
I have never seen
such a beautiful
sunset befre.
一般现在时
仅在描述客观事实
或普遍真理时使用
is/are, has/have
The Great Wall is ne
f the wnders f
the wrld.
Spring is the best
seasn t visit there.
场景
基础句式
拓展句式
景点介绍
The temple was built in the Ming Dynasty.
这座寺庙建于明朝。
The museum is visited by thusands
f turists every year.
规则建议
Visitrs are nt allwed t take phts
in the museum.
Fd shuld nt be brught int
the exhibitin hall.
安排描述
The trip was rganized by ur schl.
这次旅行由学校组织。
A welcme party was held fr us
n the first night.
感受表达
We were deeply impressed by the
lcal culture.
I was mved by the kindness f
the lcal peple.
类型
核心句式
扩展例句（建议背诵2句）
修饰地点
(which/that)
I visited a place [that/which] has a lng histry.
我参观了一个历史悠久的地方。
We stayed in a htel [that/which] ffered a great
view f the sea. / We went t a restaurant [that/which]
served the mst delicius lcal fd.
修饰人物
(wh/that)
The guide [wh/that] shwed us arund was very
knwledgeable.
带我们参观的导游知识很渊博。
The lcal peple [wh/that] we met were very
friendly. / I made friends with a girl [wh/that]
came frm Shanghai.
修饰事物
(that/which)
I bught a suvenir [that/which] reminds me f
the trip.
我买了一件让我想起这次旅行的纪念品。
I tk many phts [that/which] will help me
remember this wnderful trip frever.
句型
例句1（记忆版）
例句2（扩展版）
What + 名词短语
What a wnderful trip (it was)!
多么美妙的一次旅行！
What beautiful scenery we saw!
我们看到了多么美的风景！
Hw + 形容词/副词
Hw excited I was when I saw the
sunrise!
看到日出时我多激动啊！
Hw time flies! The trip was ver
s sn.
时间过得真快！旅行这么快就结束了。
位置
nt als... 例句
开头
This trip nt nly gave me a chance t relax but als
allwed me t experience a different culture.
主体
We nt nly visited famus places f interest but als
tried many kinds f delicius lcal fd.
结尾
The trip was nt nly enjyable but als educatinal.
倒装(高分)
Nt nly did we enjy the beautiful scenery, but we
als made many new friends. ✓ 倒装句是15分标志
序号
范文原句
问题诊断
Sentence 1
Last weekend, I went t Huangshan
with my classmates.
✔ 时间地点人物清晰，但开头较平淡，
没有"抓眼球"的效果
Sentence 2
We tk a bus t get there.
⚠ 信息量太少，可以扩充为：描述路程
长短+到达后的感受
Sentence 3
The muntain was very beautiful.
✘ very beautiful太普通！浪费了展示
词汇量的机会
Sentence 4
We climbed the muntain and
saw many strange stnes.
⚠ 动词"see"太弱；缺乏细节描写
Sentence 5
We als tk many phts.
⚠ 缺乏与上下文的连接词，显得突兀
Sentence 6
The weather was nice.
✘ 又是"nice"——全篇3个太普通词汇！！
Sentence 7
We were very tired but very happy.
⚠ "very tired but very happy"是老生
常谈，毫无新意
Sentence 8
I think it was a gd trip.
✘ "gd"再次出现——词汇单调，结尾
缺乏亮点
序号
高分范文（★标注提分技巧）
提分技巧详解
Sentence 1
Last weekend, I went t Huangshan — ne
f the mst famus muntains in China —
with my classmates.
★ 破折号插入语 = 15分技巧
直接亮出"黄山=中国最著名的山之一"这个事实，
展示知识面+破折号插入语的高级表达方式
Sentence 2
After a three-hur bus ride, we finally
arrived at the ft f the muntain, feeling
excited and curius.
★ 现在分词作伴随状语 = 15分技巧
"three-hur"复合形容词+feeling现在分词——
一句话展示2个高级语法点
Sentence 3
As sn as we started climbing, we were
amazed by the breathtaking natural scenery
— strange-shaped pines, fantastic rcks,
and a sea f cluds.
★ as sn as + breathtaking = 加分表达
as sn as从句+be amazed by被动语态+
breathtaking高分形容词+破折号列举细节
Sentence 4
The guide wh led us tld many interesting
stries abut the muntain.
★ 定语从句 wh led us = 加分句型
简单的定语从句给评分老师传递信号——"这个
学生掌握了Unit 9的定语从句！"
Sentence 5
Besides enjying the views, we tk a lt
f phts t recrd these precius mments.
★ Besides ding = 高级过渡
Besides ding结构的自然使用，告别生硬的
"Then we..."句式
序号
高分范文（★标注提分技巧）
提分技巧详解
Sentence 6
What impressed me mst was the
sunrise we saw n the tp the next
mrning — it was truly breathtaking.
★ What主语从句 = 最高分杀手锏
What impressed me mst 是中考评分老师
最爱的句式之一，几乎等于"高分直通车"
Sentence 7
Althugh we were exhausted after
the lng climb, the sense f
achievement made it all wrthwhile.
★ Althugh让步状语从句 = 逻辑深度
althugh引出"虽然累但值得"，比but的简单
转折高级得多。achievement和wrthwhile
都是高分词汇
Sentence 8
All in all, this trip nt nly brught
us clser t nature but als deepened
ur friendship. I will treasure this
memry frever.
★ nt als + treasure = 豹尾
完美结尾：nt als展示句型能力，
treasure这个动词用得恰到好处，情感真挚
维度
普通版→高分版变化
词汇升级
very beautiful → breathtaking
very tired → exhausted
nice weather → pleasant weather
gd trip → rewarding/meaningful trip
句型升级
I think → What impressed me mst was...
We climbed... → As sn as we started
climbing, we were amazed by...
连接升级
→ Hwever / Besides / All in all
→ Althugh / As sn as / Nt als
整体印象
啰嗦平淡 → 精炼有力
中学生水平 → 准高中生水平
#
错误类型
误
正
避坑要诀
1
时态混用
I g t Beijing and see the
Great Wall yesterday.
I went t Beijing and saw
the Great Wall yesterday.
游记=过去经历 → 必须用过去时！检查整篇文章是否统一过去时。
2
there be + have
There have many visitrs
in the museum.
There are/were many visitrs
in the museum.
there be 和 have 不能同时出现！二选一：There are... 或 The museum has...
3
arrive 介词错误
We arrived the htel
at 6 PM.
We arrived at the htel
at 6 PM.
arrive at + 小地点(车站/酒店)
arrive in + 大地点(城市/国家)
get t + 任意地点
4
g t hme
/g t there
After dinner, we went
t hme.
After dinner, we went hme.
hme/there/here 是副词，前面不加 t！
get hme ✓ get t the htel ✓
5
人作主语的
被动语态错误
We were enjyed
the trip very much.
We enjyed the trip
very much.
enjy 的主语就是"享受的人"，不需要被动！
人+enjy+事 = 某人享受某事
6
interesting
与 interested
混淆
The trip was very
interested.
The trip was very
interesting.
物+interesting(有趣的)
人+interested in(对…感兴趣)
I am interested in the trip. ✓
7
althugh
与 but 连用
Althugh we were tired,
but we felt happy.
Althugh we were tired,
we felt happy.
althugh/thugh 与 but 不能同时出现！
二选一。同样的：because 与 s 也不能同用！
8
spend 搭配错误
I spent tw hurs t
climb the muntain.
I spent tw hurs
climbing the muntain.
spend time/mney (in) ding sth.
或 spend time/mney n sth.
never: spend time t d ✘
9
不可数名词
+s
The scenery f Guilin
are beautiful.
The scenery f Guilin
is beautiful.
scenery, infrmatin, advice, furniture,
news——都是不可数名词，没有复数！
用much/a lt f修饰，不用many
10
中式英语
(Chinglish)
My md is very happy
after the trip.
I felt very happy
after the trip.
"My md is happy"是纯中译英！
英语用 I feel happy / I am happy
来表达心情。
题号
题目（找出错误并改正）
1
Last Sunday, I g t the West Lake with my family.
→ 改正：________________________________________
2
The museum have many ancient paintings.
→ 改正：________________________________________
3
We arrived the airprt just in time.
→ 改正：________________________________________
4
After the lng trip, we went back t hme.
→ 改正：________________________________________
5
We were enjyed the lcal fd very much.
→ 改正：________________________________________
6
The trip was very excited and unfrgettable.
→ 改正：________________________________________
7
Because it rained heavily, s we had t cancel the
utdr activity.
→ 改正：________________________________________
8
We spent three days t travel arund the city.
→ 改正：________________________________________
9
The views alng the way are breathtaking.
→ 改正：________________________________________
10
My heart felt very warm when the lcals helped us.
→ 改正：________________________________________
题号
参考答案
1
Last Sunday, I went t the West Lake with my family.
2
The museum has many ancient paintings. (或 There are many ancient paintings in the museum.)
3
We arrived at the airprt just in time.
4
After the lng trip, we went back hme.
5
We enjyed the lcal fd very much.
6
The trip was very exciting and unfrgettable.
7
Because it rained heavily, we had t cancel the utdr activity.
(或 It rained heavily, s we had t cancel the utdr activity.)
8
We spent three days traveling arund the city.
9
The scenery alng the way is breathtaking.
10
I felt very warm when the lcals helped us.
段落
内容
建议表达
开头
时间+地点+人物+交通方式
Last summer, I went t Yunnan with my parents by plane.
主体1
活动一：大理古城
First, we visited the ancient twn f Dali, where we saw many
traditinal buildings. ✓定语从句
主体2
活动二：洱海
Then we went t Erhai Lake, whse blue water made us feel
peaceful. ✓whse定语从句(进阶)
主体3
活动三：美食
We als tried the famus Crssing-the-Bridge Ndles, which
tasted delicius. ✓which非限制性定语从句
结尾
感受+收获
Althugh the trip was a bit tiring, I really enjyed it.
I hpe t g there again ne day.
自然风光
历史文化
主题公园
美食体验
其他
40%
25%
18%
12%
5%
分数档
评分描述
具体表现
13-15分
(一档)
完全符合题目要求；语言准确、丰富；
能恰当使用较复杂结构；逻辑清晰；
仅有个别小错误不影响理解。
词汇丰富(含3+个高分词汇)
句型多样(含3+个高级结构)
连接词自然(每段2+种)
无语法硬伤
10-12分
(二档)
基本符合题目要求；语言基本准确；
能尝试使用复杂结构但偶有错误；
内容较充实，逻辑较清晰。
词汇基本恰当(含1-2个高分词汇)
有1-2个高级句型尝试
连接词使用正确但不够丰富
少量语法错误但不影响理解
7-9分
(三档)
部分符合题目要求；语言错误较多
但不影响基本理解；结构较简单；
内容基本完整。
词汇以基础词为主
句型以简单句为主
连接词缺失或使用不当
较多语法错误
4-6分
(四档)
与题目要求有较大偏差；语言错误
严重影响理解；内容不完整或
逻辑混乱。
大量中式英语
时态严重混乱
字数不足或严重偏题
0-3分
(五档)
几乎无法表达有效信息；或全文
与题目无关；或仅抄写题目内容。
几乎无法成文
评分维度
10-12分要求
13-15分进阶要求
内容
(Cntent)
确保覆盖所有提示要点
适当添加细节使其充实
10-12分：检查是否遗漏要点
13-15分：每个要点扩充1-2句细节
词汇
(Vcabulary)
用准基础词→替换高级词
→注意搭配自然
10-12分：每段替换1个高级形容词
13-15分：全篇5+个高分词汇，搭配正确
语法
(Grammar)
时态统一→加入复合句
→使用高级结构
10-12分：全篇过去时统一，加1个定语从句
13-15分：定语从句+主语从句+倒装+分词，4选3
逻辑
(Lgic)
使用基本连接词→多类型
交替→逻辑链自然流畅
10-12分：每段2+种连接词
13-15分：自然过渡，不刻意堆砌连接词
书写
(Handwriting)
工整可辨→整洁美观
→无涂改痕迹
这是印象分！涂改超过3处直接扣1分
建议先打草稿再誊写
✓
序号
检查项
具体内容
重要性
□
1
时态检查
整篇文章描述的是过去的事 → 必须使用一般过去时！
检查：每一句话的动词是否用了过去式？不规则动词拼写是否正确？
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人称一致
第一人称"I/we"贯穿全文，不能突然变成"yu"或"he/she"。
检查：每句话的主语是否与上下文一致？
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要点覆盖
题目给了几个提示要点？我每个要点都写到了吗？
检查：对照题目，逐一打勾确认。
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字数达标
中考要求80词左右（±20%，即64-96词）。
检查：在答题卡上数一遍词数。（缩写如dn't算1个词）
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连接词
文章各句之间是否有连接词？至少使用3种不同功能类型的。
检查：时间/并列/转折/因果/总结——至少3种。
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高级句型
是否有至少1个定语从句？1个高级句式？
检查：定语从句/主语从句/分词状语/倒装句——至少2个。
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首尾呼应
开头是否点明主题？结尾是否有总结/感悟？
检查：最后一句是否与前文呼应，是否有"豹尾"。
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拼写与标点
检查：是否有拼写错误？句首大写？句末标点？
易错词：beautiful(不是beatiful), scenery(不是scenary)
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雷区排查
有没有犯模块七中"10大高频错误"中的任何一个？
特别检查：there be+have / althugh+but / 时态混用
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