上海高考英语二轮讲义-英语写作之夹叙夹议文（教师版）

这是一份上海高考英语二轮讲义-英语写作之夹叙夹议文（教师版），共16页。学案主要包含了高分句型1，高分句型2，参考答案01，参考答案02，物品的选择，物品的描述，选择的原因等内容，欢迎下载使用。
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夹叙夹议文是一种比较常见的写作文体,。无论记人还是叙事都要通过叙述、描写来加以表达, 把人物的经历或行为、发生的事情/事件用一定的顺序和语言技巧叙述出来。在叙述过程中“人以事显, 事由人生”, 人和事是密不可分的。高考作文一般都不会单纯的记叙某事，而是夹叙夹议。围绕主题开展叙述、讨论—结论段（结尾部分Cncluding paragraph）对全文的总结和概括。值得注意的是近年试题中经常出现记叙与结论相结合的叙议形式。

考生在备考过程中，需要关注作文评分的三个维度——内容、语言、结构。
1. 内容方面要求学生能够涵盖所有要点，表达有条理。
2. 语言方面要求学生能够避免单词拼写和语法错误，避免中式思维的干扰性表达。同时要注意长短句的交错使用，准确运用高级词汇，适当升级句型，从而使文章的语言多元化、高级化。
3. 结构方面要求考生在写作的时候脉络清晰，重点突出。能够运用恰当得运用连接词这一显性手段或者代词、原词重现等隐形手段使得段内和段间的衔接自然，结构紧凑。
（2025年崇明一模）
Directins: Write an English cmpsitin in 120-150 wrds accrding t the instructins given belw in Chinese.
假设你是明启中学高三学生徐晶，近期你居住的社区打算在社区微信平台上开展一个“和谐社区”的短视频展评活动，并要求配上介绍。你对该活动很感兴趣，写一篇短文作为你参展短视频的介绍，内容须包括：
你参展短视频的名称和内容；
你选择这些内容的理由。
注：邮件中不得透露你的真实信息。
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My Shrt Vide fr the "Harmnius Cmmunity" Event
The name f my shrt vide is "A Day in Our Harmnius Cmmunity". The vide shws different aspects f ur cmmunity, including peple chatting and laughing in the garden, vlunteers helping the elderly carry grceries, and children playing happily n the playgrund.
I chse these cntents because they truly represent the harmny and warmth f ur cmmunity. The scenes f peple interacting and helping each ther reflect the strng sense f cmmunity spirit. It shws that we live in a place where everyne cares fr ne anther and wrks tgether t create a better living envirnment. This is exactly what a harmnius cmmunity shuld be like. I hpe my vide can inspire mre peple t cherish and cntribute t ur cmmunity.
文章写作框架：
引言：介绍短视频的名称为 “A Day in Our Harmnius Cmmunity”。
描述短视频内容：阐述视频展示了社区里人们在花园聊天欢笑、志愿者帮助老人提东西、孩子在操场快乐玩耍等场景。
说明选择理由：解释选择这些内容是因为它们体现了社区的和谐与温暖，反映了强烈的社区精神，以及希望能激励更多人珍惜和为社区做贡献。
总结：再次强调视频的主题和意义。
写作思路：
确定视频名称和内容：根据 “和谐社区” 的主题，确定有代表性的视频内容。
阐述理由：从体现和谐、温暖、社区精神等方面说明选择这些内容的原因。
突出意义：强调视频对激发人们珍惜和建设社区的作用。
语言表达生动：使用形象的描述让读者更好地理解视频内容。
检查语法拼写：确保文章没有错误，提高质量。
重难点词汇、句型和句式归纳：
和谐社区 harmnius cmmunity
短视频 shrt vide
代表 represent
社区精神 cmmunity spirit
珍惜 cherish
为…… 做贡献 cntribute t
句型 / 句式 中文解释 英文
引出主题 Intrducing the tpic The name f my shrt vide is...
描述内容 Describing the cntent The vide shws different aspects f ur cmmunity, including...
说明理由 Stating reasns I chse these cntents because...
强调意义 Emphasizing significance I hpe my vide can inspire mre peple t...
结束语 Clsing remarks 再次强调视频的主题和意义。再次强调视频的主题和意义。
2023年上海秋考英语作文

A
(上海市华东师范大学松江实验高级中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期中考试英语试题)
假设你是明启中学高三学生吴磊，你所在的学校即将举行主题为“亲情”的摄影展， 邀请同学们提交一张自己拍摄的照片参展。请你写一封投稿信件给组委会，内容须包括：
（1）描述该照片背后的亲情故事； （2）你选择该照片参展的理由。
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【答案】Dear Sir r Madam,
I am Wu Lei, a phtgraphy enthusiast. When I heard the theme f this exhibitin, this pht instantly crssed my mind, which was taken in June 2023 at Pudng Internatinal Airprt when my lder brther was back frm the US fr his last summer vacatin.
This summer was special fr us, as the pandemic had separated ur family fr three years. I still remember the mment I saw my brther cming ut frm the arrival gate. I waved bth f my arms at him, screaming ut f pleasure. He hpped ecstatically and gallped like a pny tward us and tried his best t bring my parents and grandparents int his arms. My camera captured the bear hug that everyne had lnged fr fervently fr three years.
I’ve taken many phts f my family, but this ne is the best in my heart, nt fr its artistic quality but fr the verwhelming emtins and the lve between family members. I appreciate yur time reading my stry and cnsidering my picture.
Sincerely,
Wu Lei
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生给所在的学校即将举行主题为“亲情”的摄影展提交一张照片并写一封投稿信件给组委会，介绍照片背后的故事和参展的理由。
【详解】1.词汇积累
回来：be back → cme back
尽某人最大的努力：try ne’s best → d ne’s best
渴望：lng fr → yearn fr
立刻：instantly → immediately
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：I am Wu Lei, a phtgraphy enthusiast.
拓展句：I am Wu Lei, wh is a phtgraphy enthusiast.
【点睛】【高分句型1】When I heard the theme f this exhibitin, this pht instantly crssed my mind, which was taken in June 2023 at Pudng Internatinal Airprt when my lder brther was back frm the US fr his last summer vacatin.（运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句，when连接的时间状语从句）
【高分句型2】This summer was special fr us, as the pandemic had separated ur family fr three years.（运用了as连接的原因状语从句）
B
(上海市育才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期期末英语试卷)
假设你是明启中学的高三学生李明，你校学生会就成人仪式(Cming-f-age Ceremny)的活动内容向全校学生征求意见。你决定写一封邮件给学生会，表达你的意见，内容包括：
1.你建议成人仪式包含哪些活动；
2.你提出这些建议的理由。
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【答案】Dear chairpersn,
I’m Li Ming, a senir student in ur schl. Hearing that the Student Unin is cllecting students’ pinins fr this year’s cming-f-age ceremny, I am writing t share my ideas.
Firstly, I suggest that the ceremny shuld include a speech cntest where students wuld deliver a speech n the respnsibilities f adulthd. This wuld help participants understand the significance f assuming greater respnsibilities. Secndly, I prpse that we rganize a cmmunity service activity where students wuld participate in vlunteer wrk. This wuld help participants understand the imprtance f cntributing t sciety and wuld als prvide an pprtunity fr them t give back t the cmmunity.
I hpe my suggestins wuld cntribute t making the Cming-f-Age Ceremny a memrable and meaningful experience fr all participants. Thank yu fr cnsidering my ideas.
Yurs sincerely,
Li Ming
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给学生会写一封邮件，表达自己对成人仪式的意见，内容包括：建议成人仪式包含哪些活动，提出这些建议的理由。
【详解】1. 词汇积累
意见：pinin→view
比赛：cntest→cmpetitin
发表演讲：deliver a speech→give a lecture
参加：participate in→take part in
2. 句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：I’m Li Ming, a senir student in ur schl.
拓展句：I’m Li Ming, wh is a senir student in ur schl.
【点睛】【高分句型1】Hearing that the Student Unin is cllecting students’ pinins fr this year’s cming-f-age ceremny, I am writing t share my ideas.(使用了现在分词作状语、that引导宾语从句、不定式作目的状语)
【高分句型2】Firstly, I suggest that the ceremny shuld include a speech cntest where students wuld deliver a speech n the respnsibilities f adulthd.(使用了that引导宾语从句、where引导定语从句)
C
【上海市进才中学2023-2024学年高三上学期9月阶段性测试】
城市博物馆即将举行“数字时间胶囊”(digital time capsule) 的拍摄活动，该活动旨在让100年后的人们了解当代人的生活，现在向全市征集物品或者生活场景作为拍摄内容。你会提供什么物品或生活场景?写一篇物品或场景的介绍，内容需包括：
1.对物品或生活场景的简要描述；
2.你选择该物品或生活场景的原因。
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【参考答案01】
The city museum is rganizing a special event called "Digital Time Capsule" t capture the essence f ur present-day lives. The purpse f this event is t prvide insights int the lives f peple living in the present fr thse wh will cme acrss it a hundred years later. The city is nw calling fr submissins f items r scenes that represent ur current way f life. In this cmpsitin, I will intrduce the item r scene that I wuld like t cntribute t the time capsule.
I wuld like t submit a smartphne as a representatin f cntemprary life. This sleek handheld device has becme an integral part f ur daily rutines. It embdies nt nly cmmunicatin with lved nes and friends but als serves as a gateway t the digital wrld. With its advanced features, the smartphne ffers access t scial media platfrms, nline shpping, news, entertainment, and limitless infrmatin at ur fingertips.
I have chsen the smartphne because it symblizes the technlgical advancements and rapid pace f change in ur sciety. It has revlutinized the way we cmmunicate, wrk, and entertain urselves. Mrever, the smartphne captures the essence f the digital age, where infrmatin and cnnectivity play a crucial rle. By including this item in the digital time capsule, future generatins will gain insight int hw technlgy has shaped ur lives and the prgressin f human civilizatin.
In cnclusin, the smartphne represents a significant aspect f cntemprary life and shwcases the impact f technlgy n ur sciety. Thrugh its inclusin in the city's digital time capsule, future generatins will have the pprtunity t understand ur way f life and appreciate the advancements made during this era.
写作思路：
仔细阅读题目，理解要求和写作目标；
确定自己选择的物品或生活场景；
对选择的物品或生活场景进行简要描述，包括其外观、功能等方面；
解释选择该物品或生活场景的原因，可以涉及其代表性、普遍性、象征意义等；
对整篇文章进行编辑和修改，确保语言流畅、信息准确。
写作框架：
引言：介绍城市博物馆的“数字时间胶囊”项目，并说明自己将提供的物品或生活场景；
描述：对所选择的物品或生活场景进行简要描述，包括外观、功能等；
原因1：解释选择该物品或生活场景的第一个原因；
原因2：解释选择该物品或生活场景的第二个原因；
总结：总结自己的选择，并强调其代表性和重要性。
【参考答案02】
In rder t take part in the “digital time capsule” shting campaign t be held in the City Museum, which aims t give peple a glimpse f cntemprary life 100 years, I wuld like t prvide mbile phnes and give yu a picture f hw peple’s use f different cmmunicatin methds and mbile phnes has changed ver the curse f tw decades.
Mbile phnes have becme such an imprtant part f ur lives and they shw hw much technlgy has advanced. Peple tday have access t any infrmatin at their fingertips and can stay cnstantly cnnected with friends arund the wrld. Over the past tw decades, peple’s cmmunicatin devices have undergne rapid changes frm landlines t pagers t mbile phnes t smartphnes. By phtgraphing the way peple talk with different cmmunicatin devices in different generatins, it can reflect the develpment f science and technlgy and the imprvement f peple’s living standards in the past 20 years, which can help peple understand the life f cntemprary peple in 100 years. S I think mbile phnes fit the theme f “digital time capsule” very well.
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达属于开放性作文。要求考生就城市博物馆即将举行的“数字时间胶囊”的拍摄活动，介绍自己拟提供的物品或生活场景，说明选择该物品或生活场景的原因，并作简要描述。
【详解】1. 词汇积累：
参加：take part in→participate in
旨在做：aim t d→be intended t d
拍摄：sht→phtgraph
手机：mbile phne→cell phne
提供：prvide→ffer
2. 同义句转换：
原句： Mbile phnes have becme such an imprtant part f ur lives and they shw hw much technlgy has advanced.
拓展句： Mbile phnes have becme such an imprtant part f ur lives, shwing hw much technlgy has advanced.
【点睛】【高分句型1】 In rder t take part in the “digital time capsule” shting campaign t be held in the City Museum, which aims t give peple a glimpse f cntemprary life 100 years, I wuld like t prvide mbile phnes and give yu a picture f hw peple’s use f different cmmunicatin methds and mbile phnes has changed ver the curse f tw decades.（运用了以关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句和以连接副词hw引导的宾语从句。）
【高分句型2】By phtgraphing the way peple talk with different cmmunicatin devices in different generatins, it can reflect the develpment f science and technlgy and the imprvement f peple’s living standards in the past 20 years, which can help peple understand the life f cntemprary peple in 100 years.（运用了以关系代词which引导的非限制性定语从句。）
D
(上海市向明中学2024-2025学年高三上学期期中测试英语试卷)
Directins: Write an English cmpsitin in 120-150 wrds accrding t the instructins given belw in Chinese.
假设你是明启中学高三学生李华。前几日你收到外国朋友Bill的邮件，告诉你他作为组长正在负责一个跨文化课程的小组展示活动，但是组内成员常以复习期中考为由推脱任务，现在离最后的展示时间只有一周，他十分苦恼。请给Bill回复一封邮件，内容须包括：
1. 分析他目前的困境；
2. 为他提供解决方案。
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【答案】Dear Bill,
I’m srry t hear abut the challenges yu’re facing with yur grup prject.
It sunds like yur team members are fcusing mre n their mid-term exam preparatin than the grup task, which is causing delays.This is a cmmn issue when academic respnsibilities verlap. Hwever, with the deadline getting clser, it’s crucial t address this. I suggest rganizing a virtual meeting t express the imprtance f the prject and t remind everyne that the activity als cntributes t their verall learning experience. Yu culd prpse a divisin f tasks amng the grup members based n their availability and strengths, which might make it mre manageable. Additinally, setting clear, shrt-term gals fr each member culd enhance accuntability.
If pssible, perhaps ffer t crdinate time where the mid-term study sessins can dvetail with the prject wrk. Best luck with yur prject!
Best regards,
Li Hua
【解析】
【导语】本篇书面表达要求考生写一封邮件，给朋友解决组员借考试为由拖延任务的问题。
【详解】1. 词汇激活
优先考虑：fcus mre n... than→ priritize ver
临近：get clser→ apprach
除此之外：additinally→ what’s mre
增强：enhance → strengthen
2. 句式拓展
简单句变为复合句
原句： Hwever, with the deadline getting clser, it’s crucial t address this.
同义句： Hwever, when the deadline is getting clser, it’s crucial t address this.
【点睛】【高分句型1】It sunds like yur team members are fcusing mre n their mid-term exam preparatin than the grup task, which is causing delays. （which引导的非限制性定语从句）
【高分句型2】Yu culd prpse a divisin f tasks amng the grup members based n their availability and strengths, which might make it mre manageable.（which引导的非限制性定语从句）
部分
内容
细节
引言
引入主题
引入话题，吸引读者的注意力，并清晰地阐明主题
记叙
事例叙述
具体事例或解释或描述，可以是一个亲身经历或观察到的事件
议论
论述观点
对事例进行分析，阐述其与主题的关联，并提出自己的观点
结尾
总结全文
总结升华，呼应开头，给读者留下深刻的印象
假如你是明启中学的高三学生吴磊，你校英语节即将举行主题为“快乐童年”的展览，邀请每位同学提供一件生活中的物品参展，并撰写展品介绍供参观者阅读。你会提供什么物品？写一篇介绍，内容须包括：
1）对该物品的简要描述；
2）你选择该物品参展的原因。
审题：（提供一种思路，仅供参考）
本次秋考作文为物品介绍，文体为记叙文&议论文结合，话题为学校生活。审题过程中，需关注“快乐童年”、“展览”、“一件生活中的物品”等关键词。
▶基础信息：情境——英语节展览；事件——提供展品；主题——快乐童年；任务——描述并说明原因。
▶深入分析：
1）整体结构包含“首段：阐明情境并做出选择”，“正文：物品描述+原因（2-3个）”，“结尾：表达期盼”。
2）【物品的选择】自然是来自于自己童年的，理论上可以是任何东西，不论是生日礼物还是自己制作的、或是攒钱买来的都是不错的角度，具体可以是玩具、文具、乐器、书籍、画作、工艺品、服饰等等。
3）【物品的描述】突出主要特点（外观、功能、感受、故事等等），这是个简写的段落。
4）【选择的原因】需要详写，主要是论述部分逻辑清晰完整，内容方面可以涉及“具体特点（好看/好玩/好用...）”（即为展示和分享的）、“意义价值（个人的/成长的/教育的...）”（即为共鸣和启发的）等等。
Structure:
▶Intrductin：
√Explain the event yu are ging t participate in & State yur chice f the item
(e.g. I am thrilled t participate in the ‘Happy Childhd’ exhibitin at ur schl’s English Festival. Fr this exhibitin, I have chsen t prvide an item that hlds a special place in my heart—a red ty car.)
▶Main bdy: (Part 1)
√Describe briefly abut yur chsen item
(e.g. This ty car was a gift frm my grandfather n my sixth birthday. It is a shiny red sprts car,with intricate details that make it lk like a miniature versin f a real car. The bdy is smth and sleek, and the wheels can rtate, allwing it t glide effrtlessly acrss the flr.)
▶Main bdy: (Part 2)
√Give yur reasns why yu have chsen the item and link them with lgical cnnectrs (but make sure yu expand n yur reasns with supprting details)
(e.g. ① This ty train is nt just an rdinary ty. It carries many happy memries frm my childhd. I remember playing with it fr hurs n end, imagining myself as the train driver, traveling t different places.; ② This ty train helped me learn abut shapes, clrs, and numbers as well as different types f lcmtives and carriages, and sparked my interest in transprtatin and engineering. It was great fun.)
▶Cnclusin：
√Express yur expectatins
(e.g. I hpe that visitrs t the exhibitin will be able t feel the happiness f childhd thrugh this exhibit. Perhaps it will remind them f their wn cherished childhd memries and bring a smile t their faces.)
下水版：
I’m delighted t be invited t the English Festival at ur schl, which is rganizing an exhibitin entitled ‘Happy Childhd’.
Fr my cntributin t the exhibits, I have elected t prvide a phtgraph frm my childhd. The image depicts a scene in which I am playing with my family in a park. The sun is shining brightly, and we are all visibly enjying urselves.
I selected this phtgraph fr inclusin in the exhibitin because it represents a jyful mment frm my childhd. It serves as a reminder f the delightful times I spent with my family, engaging in playful activities and sharing laughter. On that particular sunny afternn, we partk in a picnic n the grass and played games, resulting in an enjyable weekend spent tgether.
Additinally, this phtgraph evkes feelings f warmth and happiness within me, and it is my hpe that by sharing it with visitrs t the exhibitin, they t may experience a glimpse int my happy childhd. It serves as a reminder f life’s simple pleasures and the significance f spending time with thse we hld dear.
In brief, my cntributin t the ‘Happy Childhd’ exhibitin is a phtgraph that captures a jyus mment frm my past. It represents the happiness and lve that characterized my childhd experiences, and it is my hpe that it will elicit similar feelings f jy in thse wh view it. By sharing this phtgraph, I aim t cnvey the message that childhd is a time f happiness and wnder, and that such memries are t be cherished. (257)
学霸版：
I'm Senir Three student Wu Lei, and what I bring t this “Happy Childhd”exhibitin is “Henry”, my giant fluffy teddy bear, wh has been accmpanying me fr ver a decade. He has brwn skin, dark eyes, a red nse, and sft pads that are mst cmfrtable t rub
I chse “Henry” simply because he serves as a cnstant reminder f hw I have cme int wh I am tday
I gt “Henry when I turned seven years ld. Being rather naughty back then, I wanted almst everything that came int my sight, and usually ditched them nce I gt tired. But Henry” was smehw different. During ur time tgether l gradually develped a deep affectin fr him, alngside which a sense f respnsibility came naturally. Instead f just leaving him arund my hme, I wuld place him prperly either n my bed r by the windw. Every time ur family went fr an uting I wuld take him alng, and n matter hw late we gt hme I always made sure Henry” was carefully cleaned. Thugh I dn't have as much time these days t keep him cmpany, yu can tell what excellent cnditin he is in even after all these years
Abve is the stry f me and my dear “Henry. I hpe yu have a gd time and enjy the festival! (224)
小结：
2023年秋考作文题并非以往的“问题—建议”或“多项活动方案选择”类型的模式，更为开放的同时对考生的表达要求也更高，尤其是“细节描述”。不过即便如此，这次仍旧考查考生是否能够将作文设定的情境与实际结合进行合理的论述，并且能在运用一定的衔接手段和意义的逻辑关联的前提下，准确地表达自己的观点和情感态度。