备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材9遇险救援

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[2020浙江改编]One fall， my wife Elli and I had a single gal： t phtgraph plar bears. We were staying at a research camp utside "the plar bear capital f the wrld" — the twn f Churchill in Manitba， Canada.
Taking pictures f plar bears is amazing but als dangerus.Plar bears — like all wild animals — shuld be phtgraphed frm a safe distance.When I’m face t face with a plar bear， I like it t be thrugh a camera with a telepht lens.But smetimes， that is easier said than dne.This was ne f thse times.
As Elli and I cked dinner， a yung male plar bear wh was playing in a nearby lake sniffed， and smelled ur garlic bread.
The hungry bear fllwed his nse t ur camp， which was surrunded by a high wire fence.He pulled and bit the wire.He std n his back legs and pushed at the wden fence psts.
Terrified， Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew.We yelled at the bear， hit pts hard， and fired blank shtgun shells int the air.Smetimes lud nises like these will scare bears ff.Nt this plar bear thugh — he just kept trying t tear dwn the fence with his massive paws（爪子）.
I radied the camp manager fr help.He tld me a helicpter was n its way， but it wuld be 30 minutes befre it arrived. Making the best f this clse encunter（相遇）， I tk sme pictures f the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wuldn’t last thrugh 30 mre minutes f the bear’s punishment.The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray.The spray burns the bears’ eyes， but desn’t hurt them. S I apprached ur uninvited guest slwly and， thrugh the fence， sprayed him in the face.With an angry rar（吼叫），the bear ran t the lake t wash his eyes.
A few minutes later， the bear headed back t ur camp.
At that very mment， the helicpter arrived.
1.The bear lked at us angrily and ran frward.
①用glare at代替句中的lk at angrily，更加简练、形象地描述"熊怒视我们"的状态。
The bear glared at us and ran frward.
②为句①增加熊龇牙的面部表情，并用现在分词短语作状语，进一步凸显熊的愤怒和狂躁。
The bear glared at us expsing his sharp teeth， and ran frward.
③用时间状语从句改写句②，营造出一种熊边跑边龇牙和怒视的恐怖氛围。
The bear glared at us expsing his sharp teeth as he ran frward.
2.We were frightened.
①用具体的感受描写表现"我"的害怕，用肢体动作描写表现Elli的恐惧，体现用词的丰富性，也使人物形象更丰满。
I culd feel the cldness flding frm my back and Elli was rted t the spt with fear.
②为句①Elli增加面部表情描写，并用独立主格结构，更进一步体现Elli的恐惧。
I culd feel the cldness flding frm my back and Elli was rted t the spt with fear，her muth wide pen.
③为句②补充原因状语（see such a terrible sight），并用现在分词短语作状语，使上下文衔接更紧密、行文更流畅。
Seeing such a terrible sight，I culd feel the cldness flding frm my back and Elli was rted t the spt with fear，her muth wide pen.
3.We ran t the helicpter.
①增加"我们"逃离熊时的动作细节，使句子更有画面感。
We stepped away and ran t the helicpter.
②为句①的动作增加副词，体现"我们"逃脱困境时的急切和敏捷。
We instantly stepped away and ran t the helicpter fast.
③用 sb. can句式升级句②中跑向直升机的动作，将紧迫感进一步具象化，让表达更高级。
We instantly stepped away and ran t the helicpter as fast as we culd.
Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbackturcamp. He glared at us expsing his sharp teeth as he ran frward. And again the bear std n his back legs， wanting t bite the fence like a mnster. Seeing such a terrible sight， I culd feel the cldness flding frm my back（感到后背一阵冷意） and Elli was rted t the spt with fear（吓得呆住了）， her muth wide pen. I had t take actin. I gathered up my curage（鼓起勇气） and tried t frighten the bear away with the pepper spray again， but failed.
Atthatverymment，thehelicpterarrived. It landed near ur camp and its lud nises scared the bear. He backed up a few steps. We instantly stepped away and ran t the helicpter as fast as we culd. Thank gdness！ We succeeded in climbing nt the helicpter，sighing with relief（松了一口气）. Lking dwn at the bear， we fund that he was eating the bread we just made. Several hurs later， we arrived hme safe and sund（平安到家）人物
主要角色"I"和my wife Elli：从文中的描述"yelled at the bear， hit pts hard， and fired blank shtgun shells" "radied the camp manager fr help" "Making the best sme pictures f the bear"可知，"我"和妻子在面对熊时沉着冷静、勇敢，续写时可以通过动作描写凸显人物的这一特征。
主要角色a plar bear：从文中的描述"pulled and bit the wire" "trying t tear dwn the fence with his massive paws（爪子）" "angry rar（吼叫）" "lud scare bears ff"表明，熊凶猛但害怕大的响声，这也为续写第二段直升机到来时的巨大声音暂时吓退熊埋下了伏笔。
情节及
情感线
"我"和妻子到一个研究营地拍北极熊的照片（感到兴奋、刺激）→一只饥饿的北极熊被"我们"的食物吸引过来（感到害怕）→尝试各种驱赶方法无果后，"我"用无线电向营地经理寻求帮助（感到放松了一些）→听从建议，用胡椒喷剂驱赶熊（担心围栏支撑不到救援到来）
主题
根据原文中的"Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew" "I radied the camp manager fr help"以及"use pepper spray"可知，本文主要体现面对危险要沉着冷静，充分利用资源逃脱危险的主题。
续写
第一段
根据原文和本段的提示语可知，熊被胡椒喷剂刺痛眼睛，被激怒，洗眼睛后返回营地，紧接着就该讲述熊发动更猛烈的攻击以及"我们"的反应和反击。尾句衔接第二段提示语："我们"与熊的斗争到了千钧一发之际。本段侧重通过动作和感受描写体现人熊大战的激烈场面。
续写
第二段
本段首句提到直升机的到来，接着该讲述直升机到达后"我们"安全撤离，交代熊的去向，并讲述"我们"的感受等。