备考2024届高考英语一轮复习第二部分读后续写专题二热考话题素材2个人成长

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[2021浙江改编]My dad， Gerge， nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man， he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities. Frm age 14， he wrked. And his dad， Albert， tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses.
I didn’t really understand his wrld either： He was a livestck trucker， and I thught that I wuld surpass （超过） anything he had accmplished by the time I walked acrss the stage at high schl graduatin.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at hme shting baskets， hitting a baseball， r thrwing a ftball， preparing fr my future as a quarterback n a ftball team. In pr weather， I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne （长号）.
The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys that a neighbring farmer hired t wrk in his field. He explained ur basic task， the tractr fired up and we were ff， riding dwn the field lking fr weeds t spray with chemicals. After a shrt way， the farmer stpped and pinted at a weed which we missed.Then we began again. This happened ver and ver， but we sn learned t identify different grasses like cckleburs， lamb’s-quarters， fxtails， and the king f weeds， the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring wrk， but I lked frward t the pay， even thugh I wasn’t sure hw much it wuld amunt t.
At hme， my dad said， "A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld." My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished.
My labrs lasted abut tw weeks， and the farmer said there might be mre wrk， but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.
When I brught my paycheck hme — it was$119 — my dad wanted t talk t me.

I was surprised that my dad allwed me t use the mney as I wished.
1.I wanted t argue with my dad.
①用具体的动作描写代替want，体现"我"想留着钱的决心。
I searched my mind fr wrds t argue with my dad.
②为句①增加条件状语从句，使文章逻辑更严谨，前后衔接更连贯。
I searched my mind fr wrds t argue with my dad，if he annunced the mney wasn’t mine.
③为句②增加具体神态描写，凸显"我"想留着钱的渴望。
With my eyes glued t the paycheck，I searched my mind fr wrds t argue with my dad， if he annunced the mney wasn’t mine.
2.I was unwilling t hand in the mney.
用具体手部动作和心理活动描写改写优化句子，体现"我"的不情愿。
I gripped the paycheck mre firmly， ready t argue.
3.I felt ashamed.
①用面部表情代替feel ashamed，使表达更生动。
I flushed with shame.
②为句①增加原因状语，并运用现在分词短语作状语，使感情转变更加顺畅自然。
Recalling my ambitin f surpassing him，I flushed with shame.
WhenIbrughtmypaycheckhme—itwas$119—mydadwantedttalktme. He tld me t wait in the living rm fr a while. I sat n the sfa，with my eyes glued t the paycheck（眼睛盯着薪水），searching my mind fr（脑海里搜索着） wrds t argue with my dad if he annunced the mney wasn’t mine. Just then， the dr pened and in came my dad. The mment he sat dwn beside me， I gripped the paycheck mre firmly（更加牢牢地握住薪水）， ready t argue. Hwever，he gently placed his right hand n my shulder（轻轻地把他的右手放在我的肩上） and said， "I knw yu have grwn up a lt thrugh yur wrk..." Then there was a lng pause. He withdrew his hand（收回他的手） and slwly cntinued， "Yu deserve the mney and the mney is yurs nw."
IwassurprisedthatmydadallwedmetusethemneyasIwished. In a mment， I didn’t knw what t say. With this mney， I culd buy a new ftball， r a new bike. I lked at my dad with gratitude， and he smiled awkwardly， "Use it wisely， sn." Recalling my ambitin f surpassing him， I flushed with shame（羞红了脸）. Althugh life hadn’t been fair t him， he had tried his best t make it fair t me. Meanwhile， I als realized there was a burden that I shuld shulder in my family.人物
主要人物Gerge（my dad）：从文中的描述"A quiet age 14， he wrked. And his dad， Albert， tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses"和"I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld"可以看出，父亲Gerge是一个沉默寡言、能吃苦、有家庭责任感的人，他认为"我"的打工所得也应该贴补家用。
主要人物"I"：从文中的描述"I wuld surpass（超过） anything he had accmplished"和"I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney"可以看出，"我"志存高远、不理解父亲，并不认可父亲将"我"的打工所得"征收"的想法，这也是文章的冲突所在。
根据文中的"he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities"和"I didn’t really understand his wrld either"可知，父子二人相互缺乏了解，这为下文的发展埋下了伏笔。
情节及
情感线
"我"与父亲相互不理解（"我"想超越他）→"我"到隔壁农场打工挣钱（期待能拥有这笔钱）→父亲想用这笔钱贴补家用（"我"感到不公，对继续在农场打工失去兴趣）→续写第二段提示语，父亲让"我"自己支配薪水（感到惊喜）。
主题
父亲本来要让"我"把打工的收入用来贴补家用，最后却改变了主意，这应该会给"我"带来触动，因此，文章最终的主题应该展现"我"的成长、对父亲的理解以及对家庭责任的认可。
续写
第一段
根据原文及续写第一段的提示语可知，本段主要描述父亲与"我"谈话的内容、过程以及"我"的反应，可以从动作、神态描写体现"我"不情愿和不甘的心理状态，以及父亲在与"我"谈话过程中对"我"的理解。尾句衔接第二段的提示语：父亲让"我"留钱自用。
续写
第二段
结合原文和本段的提示语可知，本段应该描写"我"听到父亲的决定后惊讶、兴奋的心理状态；与此同时，在续写本段时还应呼应原文中的描述并凸显主题，将"我"的反思和成长感悟展现出来。