高考英语书面表达读后续写——The Real Hero 课件

这是一份高考英语书面表达读后续写——The Real Hero 课件，共22页。PPT课件主要包含了A story，“I”，Mort Robin，Boss，store，car 325等内容，欢迎下载使用。

Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读
Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读 (Wh)
Near the end f the day he called me up t him.(para 4) Over the next few weeks I learned a lt abut Mrt. (para 5) One Saturday after wrk, I was abut t step in my huse when I saw a large bald man in my father's chair. (para 6)
Interpretatin f the Text文本解读(When)
Interpretatin f the Text文本解读
Feelings
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
1. Interpretatin f given infrmatin首句解读：Para. 1 The nly persn I culd think f was Mrt.
Given Infrmatin
Over the next few weeks I learned a lt abut Mrt. A few years lder than my dad, he was frm Chicag and had a daughter at my age.(Para 5)
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Infrmatin
What did I say t Mrt? Did Mrt lend me the mney? What did Mrt d? Hw did I feel?
1. Interpretatin f given infrmatin首句解读：Para. 2 I calmly handed the man the mney.
I slipped ut f the dr, thinking: Wh might have $325? Wh wuld even cnsider lending me s much mney?（para.7)
① What did I say t Mrt? ② Did Mrt lend me the mney?③ What did Mrt d?④ Hw did I feel?
2. Interpretatin f underlined wrds下划线词解读：
shaking; the eldest by; pay; Mrt Rbin; stre; man; my father; ffered; car; $325
the eldest by; Mrt Rbin; bald man; my father
shaking; pay; ffered
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读
headed fr the stre
Interpretatin f writing ideas 写作思路解读 1
pured ut what my family was facing
turned arund, returned with $325 in an envelpe and handed it t me directly
pluck up the curage
Interpretatin f writing ideas 写作思路解读 2
asked and tld him what happened t my family
lent me the mney
The Micr-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之丰富的直接引语表达篇
记叙文离不开人物语言的描写，尤其是直接引语的使用。我们在续写时常出现的问题是，大量的使用直接引语，并且通常的表述就只有某人说了什么，这会导致文章比较单调，人物形象不够丰满。因此，在使用直接引语时，我们可以添加人物情绪、动作等的描写使人物形象更加丰满。
I. 词的积累说：say; utter; tell; speak; argue;explain; quarrel; state; discuss; whisper; murmur; call; shut; yell; scream; add; admit; agree; cry; exclaim; mentin; plead; prmise; reply; respnd; sigh; urge; warn
II. 句型的积累1. 分词作状语“That’s mine!” said Harry, trying t snatch it back.“Wh’d be writing t yu?” sneered Uncle Vernn, shaking the letter pen with ne hand and glancing at it.“A letter?” repeated Prfessr McGnagall faintly, sitting back dwn n the wall.“Exactly,” said Dumbledre, lking very seriusly ver the tp f his half-mn glasses.2. 介词短语“Vernn,” Aunt Petunia was saying in a quivering vice, “lk at the address.”“Wh n earth wants t talk t yu this badly?” Dudley asked Harry in amazement.“Very sn, death is cming,” he cried, with tears streaming dwn his face.“Cme get it!” said the baby, with much anger.
II. 句型的积累3. 副词“N pst n Sundays,” he reminded them cheerfully.“Oh yes, everyne’s celebrating, all right,” she said impatiently.“Yu can't blame them,” said Dumbledre gently. "It's the best place fr him," said Dumbledre firmly. 4. 独立主格“Oh, yes,” said Mr. Dursley, his heart sinking hrribly.“I’m srry,” said Mary, tears streaming dwn her face.A smile n her face, she asked, “What can I d fr yu?”“I’m s hurry,” Tm said, eyes fixed n the cakes.
3. 环顾四周，他惊呼：“这里好美！”_________________, he exclaimed, “It’s s beautiful here!” (运用分词作状语)
2. “谢谢！”我声音颤抖地说，强忍眼泪。“Thank yu,” I said _____________________, trying t fight back my tears. (运用介词短语)
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换“你能借我父亲325美元吗？”话一说完，我就意识到这听起来有多么地荒谬。“S, culd yu pssibly lan my father $325?” I finished, _______________________________.(运用分词作状语)
in a trembling vice.
realizing hw absurd it sunded.
Lking arund
4. 他眼含泪水说：“我再也不会这样了。” “I’ll never d that again,” he said ____________________.(运用with结构)
with tears in his eyes
5. 他愤怒地大叫：“把信还给我。”_____________________, “Give the letter back t me.” (运用副词)
He shuted angrily
6. Jack激动的双手颤抖，大喊：“我们赢得比赛啦！”“We wn the game!” Jack yelled, ________________________________________. (运用独立主格)
his hands trembling with excitement.
Pssible versin 1
Paragraph 1The nly persn I culd think f was Mrt. Withut hesitatin, I headed fr the stre in a hurry, kncked at the dr and then waited anxiusly. After a while, the dr pened and there std Mrt, cnfused. Befre he culd ask me anything, I pured ut what my family was facing. “S, culd yu pssibly lan my father $325?” I finished, realizing hw absurd it sunded. I culd feel my face flushed deeply. Beynd my expectatin, he turned arund, returned with $325 in an envelpe and handed it t me directly, saying “I’ll take back half yur wages until it is repaid.” “Thank yu,” I said in a trembling vice, trying t fight back my tears. Then I hurried back hme.
Pssible versin 1
Paragraph 2I calmly handed the man the mney. “Cunt it, give my father a receipt and get ut f ur huse,” I said, a speech I’d rehearsed all the way hme. That night I was a her t my family. But the real her was Mrt Rbin, wh nt nly saved us frm pverty, but als quietly raised my salary every mnth. By summer, I was earning $2.50 an hur, duble the riginal wage. Finally, I paid ff the debt. It was Mr. Rbin wh made the wrld a better place fr me.
评点：原文对人物语言的描写较单调，体现不出人物当时的状态和情绪。分词状语、介词短语等的添加使得人物的情绪更加的饱满，生动地描绘了“我”在说话时的忐忑还有感激的心情。
Pssible versin 2
Paragraph 1The nly persn I culd think f was Mrt. Then I hurried t the stre immediately. Standing in frnt f the dr, I hesitated, thinking it was really absurd t ask fr such a large amunt f mney. But I had n chice but t pluck up the curage t knck at the dr. After what seemed ages f waiting, the dr pened. In frnt f me std Mrt with a questining lk. “Umm, wuld yu... wuld yu please lend me $325?” I asked and tld him what happened t my family. I culd feel my hands sweating. Withut saying anything, Mrt lent me the mney. Wrried abut my safety, he accmpanied me back hme. Tgether we went int the rm and std befre the man. With Mrt standing beside me, I became mre curageus.