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第三讲　丰富细节内容——做到续写意蕴丰满
创造性地撰写出新颖、丰富、合理的内容是读后续写最高档水平的评分细则之一，“内容的丰富性”要求续写部分详实、生动地描述情景、态度和感情等，要求情节有扣人心弦之感。怎样做到丰富续写内容，增强续写部分的详实感、画面感、空间感和触动人心感呢？我们一起来体会以下技巧：
一、丰富细节内容的5大技法1．遵循叙述与描写共进原则叙述的存在是必须的，能很好地推动故事情节的发展，但细节描写也是不可或缺的，能使写作更有画面感。遵守此原则，同时必须要有定位意识：就是在写作过程中，抓住文章的主旨，分别根据两个段首句，找到两个切入点(如一个人物，一件物品，一个地点)，从这个切入点出发，各自选取一个场景，有针对性地直指文章主旨并对主要人、事、物展开描写。两个续写段落的两个场景应该是确定的，在续写的过程中不能随意添加与原文无关的场景。这就如电影中的“慢镜头”，给人以足够的镜头感，以期达到一种视觉和精神上的共鸣。
2．设计有效对话有些续写前文中出现对话语言，在续写过程中为了与原文语言风格保持一致，也需要适当写入对话，但一定注意对话的有效性。对话应与人物的身份、职业、地位、经历相符，与之不相符的对话即为偏离人物的对话，对故事情节与发展不起作用，这种对话为无效对话。还有一些对话看似自然，既符合人物身份，也能推动故事情节发展，但会导致情节的发展方向偏离主线，这也是无效对话。
3．花样结尾，适合最美我们常用的续写结尾一般为：哲理式结尾，以景结尾，自然结尾。哲理式结尾往往总结出文章的中心思想，并用客观语言表述，起到升华主题的作用；以景结尾，就是寓情于景，达到不言情而情无限，言有尽而意无穷的效果；自然结尾是顺着文中所叙述之事的自然发展，以它的必然结果做结尾，没有套话，没有空话，简单自然，可使文章的结构显得十分完整。自然结尾法是续写故事中最常见的结尾方式。
4．T Shw, Nt t Tell本句话的意思是“展示而非陈述”。我们都知道，写作语言最大的魅力就是给读者展现一个真实、生动、形象的场景或画面，让读者身临其境，在这个自由的空间中去体味、去感受、去想象……，如果写作时一味去传递一些罗列的信息，语言就会失去它本身的灵性与情感，让人感觉索然无味。
5．局部造势，营造高潮故事中的高潮(climax)是指故事达到最紧张或扣人心弦的那一部分。高潮有时候是剧情中的“危机”点，有时候是故事发展的转折点。平铺直叙的故事叙述往往让人打不起精神，心生倦意；而频扔“包袱”、悬念跌出的故事安排，则让人紧追不舍、欲罢不能。我们可由下图来看一下“一波三折”式故事情节安排的重要性。
二、让文章起伏有悬念的3大途径途径1　增加外部冲突增加外部冲突是一种明显有效的可以达到故事高潮的方式。冲突带来紧迫感，将故事推向顶点。(1)角色之间的冲突[示例] (2017·浙江11月高考) On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea：Why didn't we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus.
[分析]开车找旅馆——徒劳无功——母亲建议搭帐篷——David和我倍感紧张，心有不悦(母子的观点不一)
(2)角色与环境之间的冲突[示例] (2017·浙江6月高考) Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him... he saw instantly that it wasn't a dg at all, but a wlf, quickly catching up with him.Mac's heart jumped..., he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later， it..., tearing pen his tent bag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back...
[分析]人(角色)——狼(环境)大战：Mac骑车独行，路遇饿狼，与之搏斗，险象环生。
(3)时间刻不容缓，决策变得紧急[示例] (2017·浙江6月高考) The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him.“Get int the car.”Paul shuted at Mac. Mac jumped ff the bike and slid int the car withut delay as the wlf was just tw steps away and was abut t tear Mac int pieces. What a narrw escape![分析]汽车突然停在面前——Mac紧急上车避险——饿狼近在咫尺(此情此景，刻不容缓)
(4)增加意外情节，营造困难境地[示例] (2018·浙江6月高考) But befre we jumped ff the hrses, we fund that we had been ff the beaten track and gt lst. We had n idea where we were and it gt dark. Exhausted and hungry，I wndered if we culd find ur way back.[分析]草原迷路(障碍1)——天色渐黑(障碍2)——又累又饿(障碍3)——心理恐慌(障碍4)
途径2　放大内心冲突放大内心冲突(文中角色的内心斗争)有助于抓住读者的心，让读者感同身受，一步步将读者带入其境、融入其中，有助于制造故事波澜和冲突。[示例](2016·浙江10月高考) Immediately，an abslute darkness ruled the frest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay dwn near a stne，missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memry crwded in and she culdn't help crying，“Hadn't I quarrelled with Tm，walked away and climbed t the high place，I wuldn't be trapped in this awful place, cnfrnted with the danger f dying.”She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
[分析]夜色渐黑——独处森林——阴森恐怖——后悔莫及(内心冲突的刻画)，内心独白(往昔对比＋虚拟语气使用＋旁白描写)
途径3　使用环境描写增加不确定性充分利用环境描写可以起到烘托故事高潮的作用。当故事角色在碰到困难的时候，我们往往要加大笔墨来描写故事环境，以此衬托故事发展。强化环境描写增强了高潮元素。[示例]Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. Even wrse, the temperature suddenly drpped dramatically.[分析]森林漆黑——气温下降——面临困境[特别提示]语言的积累是语言输出的基础。要提高写作水平，必须有大量的语言积累。
[应用体验]Ⅰ.完成句子并体会语段局部造势的方法1．A little girl has been searching fr her lst dg.__________________ ______________________________________ (突然，她听到从角落传来狗叫的声音), and she lks arund t ．Kevin has wrked very hard t try ut fr the sccer team at schl. ______________________________________________________________ (教练在办公室门口贴上了今年的球队成员的名单). Kevin walks frward t lk at the list...
All f a sudden, she
hears a bark cming frm arund the crner
The cach has psted a list f this year's team members n his ffice dr
3．Mary's parents have been discussing whether r nt t mve t anther state.____________________________________________________ ______________(他们把 Mary 和姐姐叫来讨论关于他们的决定)……4. Lis has perfrmed in the state gymnastics finals._____________________________________________ (她焦急地等待听到获胜者的名字)．The annuncer says，“_______________________ (第一名是Jhn)．”
They call Mary and her sister dwn t talk with them abut their decisin
She waits anxiusly t hear the names f the winners
And first place ges t Jhn
Ⅱ.阅读下面短文，结合考生的续写，升格作文A funny thing happened t Arthur when he was n the way t wrk ne day. As he walked alng Park Avenue near the First Natinal Bank, he heard the sund f smene trying t start a car. He tried again and again but culdn't get the car mving. Arthur turned and lked inside at the face f a yung man wh lked wrried. Arthur stpped，“It lks like yu’ve gt a prblem，”Arthur said.“I'm afraid s.I'm in a big hurry and I can't start my car.”
“Is there smething I can d t help？”Arthur asked. The yung man lked at the tw suitcases in the back seat and then said.“Thanks. If yu're sure it wuldn't be t much truble, yu culd help me get these suitcases int a taxi.”“N truble at all.I'd be glad t help.”The yung man gt ut and tk ne f the suitcases frm the back seat. After placing it n the grund, he turned t get the ther ne. Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the lng lud nise f an alarm.
It was frm the bank. There had been a rbbery!Park Avenue had been quiet a mment befre. Nw the air was filled with the sund f the alarm and the shuts f peple running frm all directins. Cars stpped and the passengers jined the crwd in frnt f the bank. Peple asked each ther，“What happened？”But everyne had a different answer.Arthur, still carrying the suirtcase, turned t lk at the bank and walked right int the yung wman in frnt f him.
She lked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised.“Why is she lking at me like that？”He thught.“The suitcase! She thinks I'm the bank thief！”Arthur lked arund at the crwd f peple. He became frightened, and withut anther thught, he started t run.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式作答。
[考生习作]Paragraph 1：As he was running, Arthur heard the yung man shuting behind，“Stp, stp！”Arthur turned a deaf ear t the shuts. He stpped a taxi. The taxi raced t the plice statin, leaving the yung man behind.Paragraph 2：The taxi stpped in frnt f the plice statin and Arthur gt ut f the taxi. In the statin he reprted what had happened and handed the suitcase ver. Then the yung man arrived t explain. They pened the case and fund n mney inside. Everyne laughed.
[升格作文]根据所给汉语提示完成续写内容Paragraph 1：As he was running, Arthur heard the yung man shuting behind，“Stp, stp！”①____________________________________________________ (意识到这个年轻人可能是银行劫匪), Arthur turned a deaf ear t the shuts ②____________________________(跑得更快了). He stpped a taxi，③
Realizing that the yung man might be the bank rbber
and ran even faster
______________________________ (拿着箱子跳上车)④______________ _____________________________________________________________________________ (对司机说：“请去警察局。加速，把那个年轻人甩在后面！”) Immediately the taxi raced away like the wind, leaving the yung man far behind.
jumped in with the suitcase
and said t the
driver，“G t the plice statin, please. Speed up and thrw the yung man behind！”