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这是一份专题01 2021年06月浙江卷（“我”的工资）-近年新高考英语真题读后续写解析+讲评课件，共41页。PPT课件主要包含了试题再现，试题分析，写作思路，润色句式，范文赏析等内容，欢迎下载使用。
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities. Frm age 14, he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses. I didn’t really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck (牲畜) trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass (超过) anything he had accmplished by the time I walked acrss the stage at high schl graduatin. Summers in the mid-’70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback (四分卫) n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne (长号). The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys that a neighbring farmer hired t wrk in his field. He explained ur basic task, the tractr (拖拉机) fired up and we were ff, riding dwn the field lking fr weeds t spray (喷洒) with chemicals. After a shrt way, the farmer stpped and pinted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, but we sn learned t identify different grasses like cckleburs, lamb’s-quarters, fxtails, and the king f weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn’t sure hw much it wuld amunt t.
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
At hme, my dad said, “A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld.” My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished. My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。The pay day arrived at last. _____________________________________________________________________I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. __________________________________________
材料分析：这篇读后续写以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者高中毕业后，参加农场工作，辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后，理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。故事容易读懂，开放性却很强，可以发挥的余地很大。
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities. Frm age 14, he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses. I didn’t really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass (超过) anything he had accmplished by the time I walked acrss the stage at high schl graduatin. Summers in the mid-70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne (长号).
Wh: My dad, I, a neighbring farmer What: wrk in the farm field hw t use mney I earned
The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys that a neighbring farmer hired t wrk in his field. He explained ur basic task, the tractr fired up and we were ff, riding dwn the field lking fr weeds t spray with chemicals. After a shrt way, the farmer stpped and pinted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, but we sn learned t identify different grasses like cckleburs, lamb’s-quarters, fxtails, and the king f weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn't sure hw much it wuld amunt t.At hme, my dad said, “A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld.” My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished.My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.
When: the summer befre my eighth gradeWhere: a neighbring farmer's field at hme
Read fr the plt clue
my dad with little educatin didn't understand each ther my dream t be a quarterback wrk n the farm in summer mney I earned d smething fr the husehld unfair nt t use my wn mney
Read fr the emtin clue:
cnfident
delighted
uninterested
Tw clues in the stry
The plt line
The emtin line
The surface level
The deep level
He ______ _________ my wrld f schl activities.
My dad is a _____ man and he nly had an _____ grade educatin.
He started t wrk frm age ____ and his mney was spent t pay ______ _________.
He thught that a jb’s a big step t _______ ___.
He was glad that I culd earn mney and _________ t the husehld.
阅读完材料，试着完成下面的故事山吧！
The pay day arrived at last. Hw wuld I cpe with my depressin caused by my dad’s wrds?
My dad and I didn’t understand each ther.
I spent my summer vacatin befre the eighth grade wrking in my neighbr's field and lked frward t the pay.
My father praised me since I culd wrk fr the family. Hearing that, I felt unfair nt being able t use my wn mney and lst the interest in mre wrk.
I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. Wuld I understand my dad finally?
2. Build-up
4. Reslutin
研读两段的给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？
Para 1: The pay day arrived at last.
“I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney” mentined in the text suggests “I was upset”. Wuld this feeling cntinue as the pay day arrived? What happened in Para. 1 t make me “understand immediately what my parents were wrried abut” in Para. 2?
Para 2: I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut.
What was my reactin after learning abut my parents’ wrries? “I understd my dad, cntributed my mney willingly, learned abut shuldering respnsibilities” all seem gd mrals I gt at last. Hw can the ending be designed t achieve sme r all f them?
由第一段首句内容The pay day arrived at last.（工资终于到了。）及时间线索词The pay day可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲，因此此时应该表达开心→失落→不想把钱交给父亲的场景。设问如下：①Which wrds r phrases shuld be fcused n in the given sentence?(pay，arrived )②Hw did I feel when I gt payment frm my wrk?③ Hw did I plan the mney at first?④What did his father say?
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
根据第二段首句 I understand immediately what my parents were wrried abut.（我立刻明白了父母的担心。）及时间线索词immediately可知，本段一定是描写我发现父亲的辛劳→突然明白了父母的焦虑→把钱给父母→自豪的场景。设问如下：⑤Which wrds r phrases shuld be fcused n in the given sentence?(understand，wrried abut)⑥What did I see and understand?⑦What did I realize and decide t d?⑧What’s the end f the stry?
[cherent] para 1 and para 2 {逻辑要连贯}Plt and emtin with apprpriate language
①由第一段首句内容“拿到工资”。可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲。②由第二段首句内容“父亲让我自己支配工资。”可知，作者惊讶之余，续写内容本着正能量的方向发展，应该为家庭有所付出。
续写线索：高兴 ——不情愿 ——理解 —— 为家庭付出
词汇激活 ①计划： prgramme/plan ②.奉献：give/devte ③发现： see/find
情绪类 ①.不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant ②.自豪地： prudly/with pride ③.高兴的: be delighted t d...
段首：On ding..., His face lit up I suddenly realized that...
结尾升华：不情愿为家庭付出 明白父母的难处 愿意付出I tk ut my wn mney with pride and was delighted t hand it t my dad. He gave me a tight hug with tears streaming dwn his cheeks.
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities.… I didn’t really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass（超过）anything he had accmplished …
伏笔指将上文看似无关紧要的人物或事件作为在续写下文时可能出现的人物或事件的预先提示或暗示，目的达到“前有伏笔，后有照应”的效果。
读懂开头这两句可知父子两人彼此不理解，这是读后续写的伏笔，表达故事发展从负面情感到积极情感的变化过程（最后两人彼此理解了）
… Frm age 14. he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses. …
铺垫指故事高潮的前奏，如环境描写、对话描述等，推动主要人物主要内容的展示，帮助制造悬念和矛盾冲突。
这也是读后续写的铺垫，表达作者父亲很小开始工作，而且爷爷拿走作者爸爸所以赚的钱，铺垫了续写的两方面内容：一是作者一家生活很辛苦，二是作者家庭传统，赚钱上交帮助家庭开支
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne（长号）.
这也是读后续写的伏笔，本段通过恰当使用一连串的节奏动词，生动具体地描述了主人公对体育的酷爱，展示了极强的画面感，我们据此可以设想作者赚钱后一定会得意洋洋地去计划如何去花钱的故事
The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys …. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, … It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn’t sure hw much it wuld amunt t.
通过began again及happened ver and ver，加上情绪的形容词tiring来体现作者不肯出苦耐劳，但为了达成愿望的不得不辛苦的矛盾心理
At hme, my dad said, “A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld.” My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished.
为后文作者最终把赚的钱资助家用，最终“长大” 埋下了伏笔
My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.
这里使用精准化动词decided，cntribute渲染作者因为要把赚钱交给爸爸，感觉工作起来没有动力，衬托了作者极不情愿交钱给爸爸的心理活动描写，也为后续解决冲突埋下了伏笔
The pay day arrived at last. _________________________________________ (虽然我口袋里一共有100美元，我还是带着沉重的心情回家了。让步状语从句和with结构). ______________________________________________ (我多希望用这些钱买一双自己想要很久的新运动鞋。感叹句和省略that的定语从句). Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, _______________________ (然而，晚上睡觉前，我无意中听到从父母房间传来的谈话。时间状语从句和非谓语动词作后置定语). “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad. I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. _________________ (一直误会爸爸的人是我。强调句), nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分，并关注哪些语言回答了“首句精研”的问题。
阅读以下参考范文，核对一下你是否补出范文缺失的部分。
The pay day arrived at last. Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, I verheard a cnversatin cming frm my parents’ bedrm. “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad. I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. It was me wh had misunderstd my dad all the time, nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——逻辑连贯 (cherent)
Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, I verheard a cnversatin cming frm my parents’ bedrm. “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad.
重复、指代、同义替换等 (chesive)
What did I feel when I gt the pay? What made me understand my parents’ wrries?
The pay day arrived at last.
It was me wh had misunderstd my dad all the time, nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
What did I react after knwing my parents’ wrries?
I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut.
The pay day arrived at last. Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, I verheard a cnversatin cming frm my parents’ bedrm. “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad.
2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——精彩语言
省略that的定语从句
I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. It was me wh had misunderstd my dad all the time, nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
检测一下你对范文的亮点语块掌握了吗？
总计心情沉重没有……也行取得巨大进步一直，始终目前
最后 想要某物很久了 倒过来 辛苦挣得的钱 家庭支出 径直走向
a heavy heart
make great prgress
all the time
want sth. fr ages
the ther way arund
hard-earned cash
family expenses
g straight t
Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. (Para. 1) 本部分从作者的心理活动和外部情景两方面描写了作者的愤懑情绪。这种直接描写和间接描写穿插使用的方式值得借鉴。
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities. Frm age 14, he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses. I didn’t really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck (牲畜) trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass (超过) anything he had accmplished by the time I walked acrss the stage at high schl graduatin. Summers in the mid-’70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback (四分卫) n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne (长号). The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys that a neighbring farmer hired t wrk in his field. He explained ur basic task, the tractr (拖拉机) fired up and we were ff, riding dwn the field lking fr weeds t spray (喷洒) with chemicals. After a shrt way, the farmer stpped and pinted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, but we sn learned t identify different grasses like cckleburs, lamb’s-quarters, fxtails, and the king f weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn’t sure hw much it wuld amunt t.
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
At hme, my dad said, “A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld.” My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished. My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右； 2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。The pay day arrived at last. _____________________________________________________________________I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. __________________________________________
材料分析：这篇读后续写以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者高中毕业后，参加农场工作，辛辛苦苦挣到的钱，不情愿贡献给家庭，后来在看到父亲的辛劳之后，理解了父母担心的是自己太过自私而不知奉献，终于想通，并自豪地将自己劳动所得交给父亲的故事。故事容易读懂，开放性却很强，可以发挥的余地很大。
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities. Frm age 14, he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses. I didn’t really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass (超过) anything he had accmplished by the time I walked acrss the stage at high schl graduatin. Summers in the mid-70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne (长号).
Wh: My dad, I, a neighbring farmer What: wrk in the farm field hw t use mney I earned
The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys that a neighbring farmer hired t wrk in his field. He explained ur basic task, the tractr fired up and we were ff, riding dwn the field lking fr weeds t spray with chemicals. After a shrt way, the farmer stpped and pinted at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, but we sn learned t identify different grasses like cckleburs, lamb’s-quarters, fxtails, and the king f weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn't sure hw much it wuld amunt t.At hme, my dad said, “A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld.” My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished.My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.
When: the summer befre my eighth gradeWhere: a neighbring farmer's field at hme
Read fr the plt clue
my dad with little educatin didn't understand each ther my dream t be a quarterback wrk n the farm in summer mney I earned d smething fr the husehld unfair nt t use my wn mney
Read fr the emtin clue:
cnfident
delighted
uninterested
Tw clues in the stry
The plt line
The emtin line
The surface level
The deep level
He ______ _________ my wrld f schl activities.
My dad is a _____ man and he nly had an _____ grade educatin.
He started t wrk frm age ____ and his mney was spent t pay ______ _________.
He thught that a jb’s a big step t _______ ___.
He was glad that I culd earn mney and _________ t the husehld.
阅读完材料，试着完成下面的故事山吧！
The pay day arrived at last. Hw wuld I cpe with my depressin caused by my dad’s wrds?
My dad and I didn’t understand each ther.
I spent my summer vacatin befre the eighth grade wrking in my neighbr's field and lked frward t the pay.
My father praised me since I culd wrk fr the family. Hearing that, I felt unfair nt being able t use my wn mney and lst the interest in mre wrk.
I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. Wuld I understand my dad finally?
2. Build-up
4. Reslutin
研读两段的给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？
Para 1: The pay day arrived at last.
“I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney” mentined in the text suggests “I was upset”. Wuld this feeling cntinue as the pay day arrived? What happened in Para. 1 t make me “understand immediately what my parents were wrried abut” in Para. 2?
Para 2: I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut.
What was my reactin after learning abut my parents’ wrries? “I understd my dad, cntributed my mney willingly, learned abut shuldering respnsibilities” all seem gd mrals I gt at last. Hw can the ending be designed t achieve sme r all f them?
由第一段首句内容The pay day arrived at last.（工资终于到了。）及时间线索词The pay day可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲，因此此时应该表达开心→失落→不想把钱交给父亲的场景。设问如下：①Which wrds r phrases shuld be fcused n in the given sentence?(pay，arrived )②Hw did I feel when I gt payment frm my wrk?③ Hw did I plan the mney at first?④What did his father say?
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
根据第二段首句 I understand immediately what my parents were wrried abut.（我立刻明白了父母的担心。）及时间线索词immediately可知，本段一定是描写我发现父亲的辛劳→突然明白了父母的焦虑→把钱给父母→自豪的场景。设问如下：⑤Which wrds r phrases shuld be fcused n in the given sentence?(understand，wrried abut)⑥What did I see and understand?⑦What did I realize and decide t d?⑧What’s the end f the stry?
[cherent] para 1 and para 2 {逻辑要连贯}Plt and emtin with apprpriate language
①由第一段首句内容“拿到工资”。可知，第一段可描写作者的工资到手后，高兴地计划自己用这笔钱，不愿意交给父亲。②由第二段首句内容“父亲让我自己支配工资。”可知，作者惊讶之余，续写内容本着正能量的方向发展，应该为家庭有所付出。
续写线索：高兴 ——不情愿 ——理解 —— 为家庭付出
词汇激活 ①计划： prgramme/plan ②.奉献：give/devte ③发现： see/find
情绪类 ①.不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant ②.自豪地： prudly/with pride ③.高兴的: be delighted t d...
段首：On ding..., His face lit up I suddenly realized that...
结尾升华：不情愿为家庭付出 明白父母的难处 愿意付出I tk ut my wn mney with pride and was delighted t hand it t my dad. He gave me a tight hug with tears streaming dwn his cheeks.
My dad, Gerge, nly had an eighth grade educatin. A quiet man, he didn’t understand my wrld f schl activities.… I didn’t really understand his wrld either: He was a livestck trucker, and I thught that I wuld surpass（超过）anything he had accmplished …
伏笔指将上文看似无关紧要的人物或事件作为在续写下文时可能出现的人物或事件的预先提示或暗示，目的达到“前有伏笔，后有照应”的效果。
读懂开头这两句可知父子两人彼此不理解，这是读后续写的伏笔，表达故事发展从负面情感到积极情感的变化过程（最后两人彼此理解了）
… Frm age 14. he wrked. And his dad, Albert, tk the mney my dad earned and used it t pay family expenses. …
铺垫指故事高潮的前奏，如环境描写、对话描述等，推动主要人物主要内容的展示，帮助制造悬念和矛盾冲突。
这也是读后续写的铺垫，表达作者父亲很小开始工作，而且爷爷拿走作者爸爸所以赚的钱，铺垫了续写的两方面内容：一是作者一家生活很辛苦，二是作者家庭传统，赚钱上交帮助家庭开支
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at hme shting baskets, hitting a baseball, r thrwing a ftball, preparing fr my future as a quarterback n a ftball team. In pr weather, I read abut sprts r practiced my trmbne（长号）.
这也是读后续写的伏笔，本段通过恰当使用一连串的节奏动词，生动具体地描述了主人公对体育的酷爱，展示了极强的画面感，我们据此可以设想作者赚钱后一定会得意洋洋地去计划如何去花钱的故事
The summer befre my eighth grade I was ne f a grup f bys …. Then we began again. This happened ver and ver, … It was tiring wrk, but I lked frward t the pay, even thugh I wasn’t sure hw much it wuld amunt t.
通过began again及happened ver and ver，加上情绪的形容词tiring来体现作者不肯出苦耐劳，但为了达成愿望的不得不辛苦的矛盾心理
At hme, my dad said, “A jb’s a big step t grwing up. I’m glad yu will be cntributing t the husehld.” My dad’s wrds made me realize that my earnings might nt be mine t d with as I wished.
为后文作者最终把赚的钱资助家用，最终“长大” 埋下了伏笔
My labrs lasted abut tw weeks, and the farmer said there might be mre wrk, but I wasn’t interested. I decided it was nt fair that I had t cntribute my mney.
这里使用精准化动词decided，cntribute渲染作者因为要把赚钱交给爸爸，感觉工作起来没有动力，衬托了作者极不情愿交钱给爸爸的心理活动描写，也为后续解决冲突埋下了伏笔
The pay day arrived at last. _________________________________________ (虽然我口袋里一共有100美元，我还是带着沉重的心情回家了。让步状语从句和with结构). ______________________________________________ (我多希望用这些钱买一双自己想要很久的新运动鞋。感叹句和省略that的定语从句). Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, _______________________ (然而，晚上睡觉前，我无意中听到从父母房间传来的谈话。时间状语从句和非谓语动词作后置定语). “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad. I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. _________________ (一直误会爸爸的人是我。强调句), nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分，并关注哪些语言回答了“首句精研”的问题。
阅读以下参考范文，核对一下你是否补出范文缺失的部分。
The pay day arrived at last. Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, I verheard a cnversatin cming frm my parents’ bedrm. “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad. I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. It was me wh had misunderstd my dad all the time, nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——逻辑连贯 (cherent)
Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, I verheard a cnversatin cming frm my parents’ bedrm. “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad.
重复、指代、同义替换等 (chesive)
What did I feel when I gt the pay? What made me understand my parents’ wrries?
The pay day arrived at last.
It was me wh had misunderstd my dad all the time, nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
What did I react after knwing my parents’ wrries?
I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut.
The pay day arrived at last. Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. Hwever, befre I went t bed that night, I verheard a cnversatin cming frm my parents’ bedrm. “Sam can d withut a persnal ftball cach. Our budget is really tight this mnth,” said my mm. “Dn’t wrry. I just need t d sme extra driving. A prfessinal can help him make great prgress in ftball. Yu knw the by’s future dream,” said my dad.
2021年6月浙江卷读后续写——精彩语言
省略that的定语从句
I understd immediately what my parents were wrried abut. It was me wh had misunderstd my dad all the time, nt the ther way arund. The next mrning, I handed Dad my hard-earned cash. It nly seemed fair. But he just tk sme f it. “That’ll d fr nw and thanks fr helping with the family expenses, sn. Yu are really grwing up,” he said. After the talk, I went straight back t the farmer and tk the extra wrk.
检测一下你对范文的亮点语块掌握了吗？
总计心情沉重没有……也行取得巨大进步一直，始终目前
最后 想要某物很久了 倒过来 辛苦挣得的钱 家庭支出 径直走向
a heavy heart
make great prgress
all the time
want sth. fr ages
the ther way arund
hard-earned cash
family expenses
g straight t
Thugh I had a ttal f $100 in my pcket, I still went hme with a heavy heart. Hw I wished I culd use the mney t buy a pair f new sprts shes I’d wanted fr ages. Nt much was said ver dinner. (Para. 1) 本部分从作者的心理活动和外部情景两方面描写了作者的愤懑情绪。这种直接描写和间接描写穿插使用的方式值得借鉴。
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