山西高考英语写作分类训练：建议信

建议信

1．假定你是李华，你校将组织百人唐诗英译比赛,请给外教Alice写封邮件，邀请她做评委，内容包括：

1.发出邀请；

2.比赛介绍；

3.请她提供建议。

注意：

1.词数100左右。

2.开头结尾已给出。

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2．为了反对浪费食物现象，最近你们学校发起了“爱惜粮食，从我做起”的活动。请你用英语写 一篇倡议书，在校英语报上刊登。内容包括：

1. 活动背景；

2. 具体做法；

3. 发出倡议。

注意：

1. 词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3. 题目已给出，不计入总词数。

Please Save Your Food

Dear schoolmates,

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3．假如你是李华，你接受了外教 Henry的邀请，去参加4月23日为庆祝世界读书日而举行的英语演讲比赛，现你因故无法参加。请你给 Henry写一封信，表达歉意并推荐你的好友王平参加。

内容包括：1.表示道歉；2.说明理由；3推荐王平。

注意：1.词数不少于100；

2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：World Book Day世界读书日

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4．假如你是李华，你在学校食堂就餐的过程中，发现学生浪费饭菜的行为十分严重，你深感痛心和羞愧。请你给校长用英文写一封信。

1.说明写信的目的；

2.节约粮食的重要性；

3.提出切实可行的建议。

参考词语：cafeteria餐厅；inappropriate不合适的

注意：

1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯；

3.开头和结束语已为你写好。

Dear Mr. Headmaster,

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Yours

Li Hua

5．假定你是李华，你的留学生好友Tina发邮件说想要参加学校举行的中文歌曲大赛，特询问你的意见。请你回复邮件，内容包括：

1. 表示支持；

2. 给出准备建议；

3. 表达希望。

注意：1. 词数80左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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6．假定你是李华，刚进入高一的你遇到了很多困难。请你给你的英国朋友Jack写封邮件求助，内容包括：

1.告知你所遇到的困难(比如感到孤单、不敢与别人交流、英语学习跟不上等)；

2.恳请他给出建议。

注意：

1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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7．假如你是学生会主席李华，请你给校长写一封信，针对学校食堂存在的菜价昂贵、味道不佳、排队时间长等问题提出合理建议。

要求：1，字数100词左右。

2，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

3，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

8．假如你是学生李华，你的美国网友David想在假期来中国游玩，他尤其喜欢爬山，希望你给他提供一些旅游的建议。现根据下列的内容给他回信。

1.对他来中国表示欢迎；2.给出他在中国旅游的建议(参观地及原因)；3.欢迎他到你家来并一起爬山。

要求：

1.文中应包含所有要点；2.词数100左右，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear David,

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Yours,

Li Hua

9．假定你是高中生李华。在一个英文网络论坛上，你看到一个名叫Grown-up的中学生发帖寻求帮助，请根据帖子内容回贴。

内容包括：

1.表示理解；

2.提出具体建议。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Hi, Grown-up,

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

10．假如你是李华，你澳大利亚的网友Jack最近想学汉语，但是经过一段时间的学习后，觉得没有进步, 特地给你发邮件向你征求建议。请你依据以下要点，给Jack写封回信：

要点：1.你的建议；2.乐意帮助。

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可适当增加细节，以使内容充实、行文连贯。

1．Dear Ms. Alice,

How is everything going? I am Li Hua, a student of yours. I am writing to invite you to be the judge of a translation competition of Tang poetry.

More than 100 students have signed up and they are supposed to email a translated poem to the organizing committee. After the mass-selection, the top ten candidates shall make it to the final, which is to be held in school lecture hall at 3 pm next Tuesday. They will translate an appointed poem on the spot and recite the translation afterwards. Their performance shall be assessed by both Chinese and foreign judges.

Enclosed is the procedure of the competition and your comments shall be highly valued. We are looking forward to your attendance.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给外教Alice写封邮件，邀请她做百人唐诗英译比赛的评委。

【详解】1.词汇积累

报名：sign up→apply

应该：be supposed to→should

海选：mass-election→auditions

评定：assess=evaluate

2.句式拓展

简单句变复合句

原句：They will translate an appointed poem on the spot and recite the translation afterwards. Their performance shall be assessed by both Chinese and foreign judges.

拓展句：They will translate an appointed poem on the spot and recite the translation afterwards, whose performance shall be assessed by both Chinese and foreign judges.

【点睛】[高分句型1] After the mass-selection, the top ten candidates shall make it to the final, which is to be held in school lecture hall at 3 pm next Tuesday. (运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句)

[高分句型2] I am Li Hua, a student of yours. (运用了同位语)

2．Please Save Your Food

Dear schoolmates,

As we can see, the phenomenon of wasting food is quite common in our school, making me disappointed. Even worse, a huge amount of food is wasted worldwide every year, which is unbelievable and unbearable.

Realizing the severe consequences of wasting food, we should do our bit to save food. At the school cafeteria, we’d better ask for half-size servings when we’re not hungry. When dining out in restaurants with family or friends, we propose ordering smaller portions and taking the leftovers home. At home, we advise checking the fridge before we do shopping to avoid buying more food.

Saving food benefits everyone and our environment. Let’s take practical measures!

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生以“爱惜粮食，从我做起”为主题写一篇倡议书。

【详解】1.词汇积累

全世界的：worldwide→all over the world/around the world

巨大的：huge→large

建议：advise→suggest

采取措施：take measures →take steps/take action

2.句式拓展

简单句变复合句

原句：Realizing the severe consequences of wasting food, we should do our bit to save food.

拓展句：Since we realize severe consequences of wasting food, we should do our bit to save food.

【点睛】[高分句型1] Even worse, a huge amount of food is wasted worldwide every year, which is unbelievable and unbearable. (运用了which引导的非限制性定语从句)

[高分句型2] When dining out in restaurants with family or friends, we propose ordering smaller portions and taking the leftovers home.  (运用了when时间状语从句中的省略。)

3．Dear Henry,

I’m Li Hua. I’m writing to make an apology for not being able to attend the speech contest held on April 23rd in celebration of World Book Day.

My whole family will go to the countryside to visit my grandmotheron that day, because it will be her 100th birthday. All my relatives will come back from distant places. A great party will be organized that day, which is such a grand event that I can’t miss. Would it be possible for me to recommend Wang Ping to take my place? Wang Ping is a brilliant student, who is good at English.

I sincerely hope you can understand my situation and accept my apology.Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给外教 Henry写一封道歉信。

【详解】1. 词汇积累（4个以上，含4个）

道歉：say sorry→make an apology

有才华的：talented→brilliant

盛大的：great→grand

推荐，建议：suggest→recommend

2.句式拓展

原句：My whole family will go to the countryside to visit my grandmother on that day, because it will be her 100th birthday.

拓展句：My whole family will go to the countryside to visit my grandmother on that day, when it will be her 100th birthday.

【点睛】[高分句型1]My whole family will go to the countryside to visit my grandmotheron that day, because it will be her 100th birthday. (because原因状语从句)

[高分句型2]A great party will be organized that day, which is such a grand event that I can’t miss.（which引导的非限制性定语从句）

4．Dear Mr. Headmaster,

I’m Li Hua, a student from Senior Three. I’m writing to draw your attention to some improper behavior among us students wasting food in the cafeteria. Some of them throw away some food while others waste most of them just because the food is not so delicious. As we all know, some people at home and abroad are going hungry seriously, I always feel painful and ashamed whenever I see this. It is obviously inappropriate for students to waste food.

In order to solve the problem, some measures should be taken by our school. First, all of the students are to raise awareness of the fact that a great number of people don’t have adequate food, which may help them realize how terrible it is for them to waste food. What’s more, I wonder if our school can set up specific regulations against such behavior. I believe the bad behavior will be got rid of soon with our joint efforts.

I hope my suggestions will be of some help. Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本文是一篇应用文，给校长讲述食堂浪费的现象并且给出自己的建议。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和一般将来时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：

1. 说明写信的目的；

2. 节约粮食的重要性；

3. 提出切实可行的建议。

第二步：列提纲（重点词组）

draw one’s attention to; improper; cafeteria; throw away; delicious; at home and abroad; inappropriate; measure; raise awareness of; a great number of; adequate; set up; regulation; joint

第三步：连词成句

1. I’m writing to draw your attention to some improper behavior among us students wasting food in the cafeteria.

2. Some of them throw away some food while others waste most of them just because the food is not so delicious.

3. As we all know, some people at home and abroad are going hungry seriously, I always feel painful and ashamed whenever I see this.

4. It is obviously inappropriate for students to waste food.

5. In order to solve the problem, some measures should be taken by our school.

6. First, all of the students are to raise awareness of the fact that a great number of people don’t have adequate food, which may help them realize how terrible it is for them to waste food.

7. What’s more, I wonder if our school can set up specific regulations against such behavior.

8. I believe the bad behavior will be got rid of soon with our joint efforts.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：first

2.表并列补充关系：what’s more

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

【点睛】[高分句型1] First, all of the students are to raise awareness of the fact that a great number of people don’t have adequate food, which may help them realize how terrible it is for them to waste food. (运用了that引导的同位语从句、which引导的非限制性定语从句和how引导的宾语从句)

[高分句型2] What’s more, I wonder if our school can set up specific regulations against such behavior. (运用了if引导的宾语从句)

5．Dear Tina,

I’m glad to hear that you are interested in the Chinese Singing Contest to be held in our school. In my opinion, you should participate in it without any hesitation.

First of all, you are supposed to choose the songs you are familiar with. In this way ,you will be confident about yourself. Besides, it is a good idea to know your strengths and weaknesses so that you can make improvements on Chinese songs. Finally, you can turn to your music teacher for help. It is your teacher who can give you some advice about the competition.

I hope you find my advice useful and you can perform well in the competition.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达是一篇应用文。文章要求考生写一封回信，回复留学生好友Tina关于参加中文歌曲大赛的邮件。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时。

结构：总分法

      总分法是指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：

1. 表示支持；

2. 给出准备建议；

3. 表达希望。

第二步：列提纲（重点词组）

be interested in；in my opinion，participate in，without any hesitation，be supposed to，be familiar with，be confident about，turn to sb. for help.

第三步：连词成句

1.I’m glad to hear that you are interested in the Chinese Singing Contest to be held in our school.

2.In my opinion, you should participate in it without any hesitation.

3.First of all, you are supposed to choose the songs you are familiar with.

4.In this way ,you will be confident about yourself.

5.Besides, it is a good idea to know your strengths and weaknesses so that you can make improvements on Chinese songs.

6.Finally, you can turn to your music teacher for help.

7.It is your teacher who can give you some advice about the competition.

8.I hope you find my advice useful and you can perform well in the competition.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态的问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all，Finally

2.表并列补充关系：Besides

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改

【点睛】[高分句型1]I’m glad to hear that you are interested in the Chinese Singing Contest to be held in our school.（that引导宾语从句）

[高分句型2]Besides, it is a good idea to know your strengths and weaknesses so that you can make improvements on Chinese songs. （it作形式主语，so that引导目的状语从句）

6．Dear Jack,

How's everything going? I've been in this new school for a month, but I still find it difficult to get used to the life here.

To be honest, I've met some difficulties. First, I feel lonely here because I'm far away from my family and old friends. Besides, I'm too shy to communicate with my new classmates or teachers. What's worse, it's hard for me to catch up with the English courses, which really upsets me.

Would you be kind enough to offer me some suggestions? I will be grateful if you do so. I'm looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给英国朋友Jack写封邮件，因为你刚进入高一就遇到了很多困难，写信向他求助。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和一般将来时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：

1.告知你所遇到的困难(比如感到孤单、不敢与别人交流、英语学习跟不上等)；

2.恳请他给出建议。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

get used to; to be honest; lonely; far away from; too…to…; communicate with; catch up with; upset; suggestion; be grateful; look forward to

第三步：连词成句

1. I've been in this new school for a month, but I still find it difficult to get used to the life here.

2. To be honest, I've met some difficulties.

3. First, I feel lonely here because I'm far away from my family and old friends.

4. Besides, I'm too shy to communicate with my new classmates or teachers.

5. What's worse, it's hard for me to catch up with the English courses, which really upsets me.

6. Would you be kind enough to offer me some suggestions?

7. I will be grateful if you do so.

8.I'm looking forward to your early reply.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides

3.表转折对比关系：but

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

【点睛】[高分句型1] First, I feel lonely here because I'm far away from my family and old friends. (运用了because引导原因状语从句)

[高分句型2] What's worse, it's hard for me to catch up with the English courses, which really upsets me. (运用了which引导非限制性定语从句)

7．Dear Principal,

I’m president of the Student Union. I’m writing to tell you something about our canteen, which a lot of students are complaining about.

Some students think the prices of the dishes are too high and the dishes taste awful. Another concern is that time spent in waiting is so long that we have less time to have a rest.

As far as I’m concerned, measures are supposed to be taken to improve the conditions of the canteen. First of all, it’s suggested that the prices be more reasonable so that students can afford them. Plus, the chefs should be given some chances to improve their skills so as to cook more delicious food. In addition, it’s better to have more people to serve students to reduce their waiting time.

I sincerely hope you can adopt my suggestions. Thank you!

Sincerely,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给校长写建议信，针对学校食堂存在的菜价昂贵、味道不佳、排队时间长等问题提出合理建议。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和现在完成时,少量现在完成进行时。

要求：

1. 说明学校食堂存在的菜价昂贵、味道不佳、排队时间长等问题

2. 提出建议

3.希望建议被采纳

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

awful; measure; be supposed to; condition; reasonable; so that; reduce; adopt；complain about；have a rest

第三步：连词成句

1. Some students think the prices of the dishes are too high and the dishes taste awful.

2. measures are supposed to be taken to improve the conditions of the canteen.

3. it’s suggested that the prices be more reasonable so that students can afford them.

4. it’s better to have more people to serve students to reduce their waiting time.

5. I sincerely hope you can adopt my suggestions.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all

2.表并列补充关系：In addition

3.4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result（供参考）

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，

【点睛】[高分句型1]Another concern is that time spent in waiting is so long that we have less time to have a rest.（运用that引导表语从句）

[高分句型2] it’s suggested that the prices be more reasonable so that students can afford them. （运用it’s suggested that句式）

8．Dear David,

More than glad to know you are coming to travel to China.I’m writing to express my warm welcome and give you some tips on your travel.

As we all know, China is a beautiful country with many places of interest.As a Chinese, I recommend you to pay a visit to Beijing, where you can visit the Summer Palace and climb the Great Wall.Besides, as the capital of China, Beijing can better show Chinese culture and tradition.What’s more, Beijing is close to my hometown.It’s a good idea that you can come to my home and we can climb the mountain nearby together, which will be an exciting experience.

I am looking forward to your arrival.

            Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给美国网友David写封回信，给他一些在假期来中国旅游的建议。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时和一般将来时,少量现在进行时。

结构：总分法

总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：

1. 表示欢迎；

2. 提供具体建议；

3. 期望。

第二步：列提纲 （重点词组）

more than; give tips on; places of interest; recommend sb. to do; pay a visit to; be close to; look forward to

第三步：连词成句

1. More than glad to know you are coming to travel to China.

2. I’m writing to express my warm welcome and give you some tips on your travel.

3. As we all know, China is a beautiful country with many places of interest.

4. As a Chinese, I recommend you to pay a visit to Beijing, where you can visit the Summer Palace and climb the Great Wall.

5. What’s more, Beijing is close to my hometown.

6. I am looking forward to your arrival.

根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）（供参考）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although +clause(从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

【点睛】[高分句型1]：As we all know, China is a beautiful country with many places of interest.这句话运用了as引导的非限定性定语从句。

[高分句型2]：As a Chinese, I recommend you to pay a visit to Beijing, where you can visit the Summer Palace and climb the Great Wall. 这句话运用了where引导的非限定性定语从句。

[高分句型3]: It’s a good idea that you can come to my home and we can climb the mountain nearby together, which will be an exciting experience. 这句话运用了it作形式主语，真正的主语为that从句和which引导的非限定性定语从句。

9．Hi, Grown-up,

As a student of your age, I understand your situation. The problem you are facing is not unusual among us teenagers. However, it should be wise not to do anything that may hurt her feelings. Here are a few suggestions.

First, I recommend you should talk more with your mom. Heart-to-heart talks help you understand each other better. They are also opportunities to let her know your ideas of and attitudes toward many things. Second, it’s advisable to learn to do your own things well, proving to your mom that you are already a “Grown-up”. If I were you, I could share more of the housework, such as cleaning, washing and cooking Hope my ideas will work.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达是应用文，要求写一封书信。

【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，假定你是高中生李华。在一个英文网络论坛上，你看到一个名叫Grown-up的中学生发帖寻求帮助，请根据帖子内容回贴。内容包括：1.表示理解；2.提出具体建议。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组）：situation (情况)；unusual(不寻常的)；suggestion(建议)；recommend(建议)；heart-to-heart talks(谈心)；each other(互相，彼此)；opportunity(机会)；attitude toward(对……的态度)；advisable(明智的)；such as(比如)等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。此处文章主要应用一般现在时。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

【点睛】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如However, it should be wise not to do anything that may hurt her feelings.运用定语从句；If I were you, I could share more of the housework, such as cleaning, washing and cooking Hope my ideas will work.运用虚拟语气。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。

10．Dear Jack,

I’m Li Hua, your friend from China. Having learnt that you are now learning Chinese and having trouble with it, I’d like to share my suggestions about how to improve it with you.

To begin with, in my opinion, you’ better watch some Chinese TV programs, for example, the CCTV News, which will help you correct your pronunciation errors. Besides, you need to take advantage of every chance to practice speaking it. Moreover, you can communicate with some tourists from China face to face. In addition, I can help you with it every Sunday afternoon when I am available.

I hope my suggestions will help you.

Yours,

Li Hua

【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写一封信给学习汉语一段时间却没有进步的澳大利亚的网友Jack，向他提出一些学好汉语的建议。

【详解】第一步：审题

体裁：应用文

时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时

结构：总分法

     总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。

要求：1. 你的建议；

2. 乐意帮助。

第二步:列提纲 （重点词组）

have trouble with sth.；take advantage of sth.；practice doing sth.；communicate with sb.；face to face；help sb. with sth.

第三步：连词成句

1. Having learnt that you are now learning Chinese and having trouble with it, I’d like to share my suggestions about how to improve it with you.

2. you need to take advantage of every chance to practice speaking it.

3. you can communicate with some tourists from China face to face.

4. I can help you with it every Sunday afternoon when I am available.

(根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。）

第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）

1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last, Last but not least

2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition, As well as, not only…but (also), including, also

3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although + clause (从句), In spite of + n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

5表换一种方式表达：In other words, that is to say,

6.表进行举例说明：For example; For instance; such as + n/doing

7.表陈述事实：In fact, frankly speaking

8.表选择：either…or…，or

连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。

第五步：润色修改

【点睛】范文内容完整，结构严谨，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了主从复合句，如Having learnt that you are now learning Chinese and having trouble with it这句话中用了that引导的宾语从句，如To begin with, in my opinion, you’ better watch some Chinese TV programs, for example, the CCTV News, which will help you correct your pronunciation errors.这句话中用了which引导的非限制性定语从句；使用了非常好的短语，如have trouble with sth.，take advantage of sth.，communicate with sb.等，为文章增色不少；并注意了句子的衔接，如To begin with，Besides，Moreover，In addition。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。