高考英语书面表达读后续写——如何画龙点睛 课件

这是一份高考英语书面表达读后续写——如何画龙点睛 课件，共26页。PPT课件主要包含了“痛点”我知道，Example 1，Example 2，What，How，得分有锦囊，自然型，首尾呼应型，点题型，留白型等内容，欢迎下载使用。
2020年1月浙江卷真题
1 “I’m ging t miss yu s much, Pppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent dwn t hug his ld friend gdbye. He std up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying nt t let his emtins get the better f him.2 His parents were nt quite able t keep theirs under cntrl. They had driven their sn several hurs ut f twn t the university where he wuld sn be living and studying. It was time t say gdbye fr nw at least. The family hugged and smiled thrugh misty eyes and then laughed.3 The by lifted the last bag nt his shulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see yu back hme in a mnth, kay?” His parents ndded, and they watched as he walked ut f sight int the crwds f hundreds f students and parents. The by’s mther turned t the dg, “Okay, Pppy, time t g back hme.”
4 The huse seemed quiet as a tmb withut the by living there. All that week, Pppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favrite ty, r even in her daily walk. Her wners were sad t, but they knew their sn wuld be back t visit. Pppy didn’t.5 They ffered the dg sme f her favrite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit n the sfa, but the ld girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her wners started t get wrried. “What shuld we d t cheer Pppy up?” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”6 “I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy.” smiled Mm. “Withut anybdy left in the huse but us, this place culd use a bit f fun. Let’s get a little dg fr Pppy.”7 It didn’t take lng befre they walked thrugh the frnt dr carrying a big bx. Pppy welcmed them hme as usual, but when she saw the bx, she stpped. She put her nse n it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever s slwly, then faster as she caught the smell.
Paragraph 1: Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared. Paragraph 2: A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm the university.
Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared. The little dg leaped ut f the bx with a jyful little bark t meet Pppy, licking her all ver. Given such a warming greeting, Pppy gt a surprise at first, but sn she became cheerful again, chasing the little dg's tail fr fun and letting ut cheerful barks that hadn't been heard fr the past whle week. Seeing this, the parents laughed in relief. Fr the next few weeks, with the tw dg's cmpany, the nce tmb-like huse was filled with jy again. A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm the university. He was ttally astnished when he was greeted by the tw dgs running ut f the huse, his parents fllwing them, but he sn understd and gave his family a warm hug. The huse was then lit up with mre happiness, with the vice f the by sharing his new life and the parents describing the scene when the by was nt hme. When the parents went t the kitchen, the by strked his new family member and said, “Thank yu, thank yu fr accmpanying my family when I was nt hme.”
Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared. Seeing the unfamiliar rm, the little dg barked cnstantly with nerves. But Pppy was s verjyed t have a new cmpanin that she kept giving ut welcming purr. With the aid f her respnsibility, anxiety and cnfusin inside the new cmer seemed t melt ut. He bunded ut f the bx and began t play with Pppy. Bth dgs chased each ther and rlled n the flr, making funny sunds. Watching this scene, their wners grinned frm ear t ear. Frm then n, Pppy gradually gt cheerful and the new dg gt used t life here. A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm the university. Hearing the vice f her ld friend, Pppy rushed ut like lightning and put her frnt paws n his knees as if they had been separated fr centuries. The by hugged his parents, and then bent dwn t pat her. He gt a surprise when seeing the little puppy even thugh he had already knwn him frm his parents. With excitement he walked t him and rubbed his back. Nt afraid f him at all, he gave ut a purr f pleasant and licked the by’s fingers. The by culdn’t help laughing and playing with them. Standing beside were his parents, satisfied with the lvely scene. Withut being nticed, the huse was flded with jy and warmth.
Ending 1: When the parents went t the kitchen, the by strked his new family member and said, “Thank yu, thank yu fr accmpanying my family when I was nt hme.”Ending 2: Withut being nticed, the huse was flded with jy and warmth.
按照故事的发展逻辑自然而然地结尾
环境描写结尾，以景抒情
Hw t make a gd ending
* 来自《新高考读后续写指南》
自然型结尾是指顺着原文故事的发展思路，按照事件的走向完成结尾。这样的结尾较为自然，顺理成章。
Jane wke up at the daybreak. After eating sme berries, she walked alng the stream, hping t find her husband sn. T her great jy, a helicpter flew verhead just at that mment. Jane flagged her yellw bluse wildly. This did catch the rescuers' attentin! Jane was rescued. Seeing Tm, she excitedly tld him hw much she missed him. Never wuld they be away frm each ther. Tm gave her the warmest and lngest hug she had ever received. Peple arund smiled with satisfactin.
Example 1: 2016年11月浙江省高考读后续写
首尾呼应型结尾是指续写的结尾和原文的开头相互照应。这种结尾方式不仅使行文连贯，忠于主题，而且首尾有始有终，好似一个“圆”，提升读者的阅读兴趣。
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. And we als had a nice time living with my grandparents during that vacatin. But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm. Thugh she did lve ging camping, she presented that pr by with this tent ut f sympathy. It was Mm that made my childhd clrful. And it was als she that shwed me the true meaning f giving.
Example 2: 2017年11月浙江省高考读后续写
“I had an interesting childhd: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because f my mther-lving, sweet, and yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.”
点题型结尾中，作者通常在续写文章结尾时总结全文的主旨，以点明主题，深化中心。
A few minutes later, the tw ther cyclists arrived. As sn as they met, his friends’ wrried lk faded away. “Where have yu been? We saw yur bicycle n the rad. ”His friend asked and these wrds like a ray f sunshine warmed his heart. After Mac explained t them, they said farewell t Paul and Becky in sincere indebtedness. On the way hme, night breeze made him at ease and he culdn’t wait t share his experience with his wife and daughters and shw the kindness f the wrld.
Example 3: 2017年6月浙江省高考读后续写
留白型续写结尾是指以一个动作、一个变化或事情发展的后续结束故事，不用直截了当地方式表达，以给读者留下想象的空间，从而达到言有尽而意无穷的效果。
We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. The bne-chilling wind hwled fiercely like a wlf, making the darkness even mre suffcating. “Dad, what can we d?” I threw my arms arund him tightly, quivering and seized by stark hrrr. “All is ging well!” Dad answered in a gentle vice, calm and mllified. We wandered in the scary frest and didn’t knw what hrrible thing wuld happen t us, hping t find the way back. Suddenly, we heard the sund f water rlling dwn the river. We were ver the mn and decided t fllw the river. After a while, we heard the familiar sund f sheep and then caught sight f the farm huse.
Example 4: 2018年6月浙江省高考读后续写
反思型结尾中，作者往往通过一个心理活动的描写，凸显篇章的主题，对全文起到画龙点睛的作用。
Later at his new schl, Harris nticed a by sbbing all alne in the hallway. “That's the by I saw at the airprt yesterday!” Harris culd barely cntain his amazement. He apprached the by and asked him what was wrng in his awkward English. “I've lst my bag cntain bjects frm India. I culdn't give the class presentatin as expected.” When Harris tld the by abut the mistaken bag, a brad smile n his face. Using their brken English, the tw bys managed t have quite a cnversatin. “Dad is right. Life in Paris is nt that bad,” Harris thught.
哲理型结尾一般以议论的方式收尾，在前文叙事的基础上适度发表评论，或以哲理型的名人名言结尾，为全文画上点睛之笔。
Thrugh tear-blurred eyes, I recgnized the handwriting n the card. It was a friend f mine and I later discvered that the man was her father. She was ne f the audience f my sad stry. The card read: Srry, I’m late. Merry Christmas. I wiped away tears, held the bx tightly and felt a surge f warmth. Christmas memries f this year wuldn’t be a bitter jke. Instead, it was a miracle which witnessed a healed heart. S nw I believe Santa is real. This Santa desn’t cme dwn ur chimneys, but lives inside gd and thughtful peple wh really listen t friends, and then plan deliberate acts f kindness.
借景抒情型结尾是指以写景作为结束，使读者在品读景物描写中体会景物的意境，寓情于景，达到情境合一的艺术效果。
We helped the man get n his truck and said gdbye t him. “Srry, my dear, and thanks fr cming t my rescue.” When I was alne with my girlfriend, I tenderly tk her hand and hugged her tightly, expressing my aplgy and appreciatin. She, hwever, cast a caring and frgiving smile at me, explaining, “It’s a gd deed t help thse in need t cmplete their gals, but I was just cncerned abut yur safety then.” As she spke, a sense f warmth, caring and deep lve flded ver me. Nt far away, rising slwly frm the hrizn, the sun gave ff its endless light and warmth.
1. 有了朋友，人生更美好了。 Life is better with friends.2. 朋友就像星星。你不能一直看见他，但是你知道他一直在那儿！ Friends are like stars. Yu dn't always see them, but yu knw they are always there! 3. 真正的朋友永远不会分离，可能会身处异地，但心灵相通。 True friends are never apart, maybe in distance, but never in heart.4. 美好的友谊激活灵魂。 A sweet friendship refreshes the sul.5. 朋友是哄你开心，支持你，鼓励你的人。 Friends are thse wh make yu laugh, supprt yu and encurage yu.
1. 幸福就是享受生活中的小事。 Happiness is enjying the little things in life.2. 幸福快乐的秘诀是对你已经拥有的心存感激！ The secret t happiness is t have appreciatin fr what yu have. 3. 快乐并不是现成的，而是来自你的行动。 Happiness is nt smething readymade. It cmes frm yur wn actin.4. 我们无法控制一些事情的发生，但是我们可以改变对它们的反应。 We have n cntrl ver sme happenings, but we can change ur reactins twards them.5. 没有通往幸福的钥匙，大门一直敞开。 There is n key t happiness; the dr is always pen.
Happiness & Optimism
6. 乐观的人看到的是玫瑰，悲观的是看到的是它的刺。 An ptimist sees the rse; a pessimist the thrn.7. 生命是一次长途旅行，充满了大起大落。它并不说要等着暴风雨过去，而是指学会雨中曼舞。 Life is a lng jurney, full f ups and dwns. It isn't abut waiting fr the strm t pass, but abut learning t dance in the rain. 8. 正是坚信那些梦想，勇敢地面对恐惧，才使我们超越极限。 It’s believing in thse dreams and facing ur fears head-n that allws us t live ur lives beynd ur limits.9. 界线是现实终止的地方，却是新篇章新故事开始的地方。 Brders are where the actual ends, but als where the new chapter and stry begins.
2020年5月杭高模拟卷
1 Old Man Dnvan was a mean man wh hated children. He threw rcks at them and even sht at them with a shtgun. At least that’s what we had heard. 2 His small farm brdered ur neighbrhd where my yunger sister, Leigh Ann, and I lived when we were grwing up. His farm was lng, narrw, and quaint. It held tw treasures. One was his beautiful fruit. 3 There were many varieties f fruit: pears, apples, and lts mre I just can't think f. The fruit naturally drew the children t his land. It made them int thieves. But my sister and I didn't dare t take his fruit because f the hrrible rumrs we had heard abut Old Man Dnvan. 4 One summer day, we were playing in a nearby field. It was time t head back hme. My sister and I were feeling very daring that day. There was a shrt cut t ur huse that went thrugh the Dnvan farm. We thught he wuldn't be able t see us run acrss his prperty arund the luscius fruit trees. We were almst thrugh the farm when we heard, "Hey, girl!" in a gruff, lw vice. We stpped dead in ur tracks! There we were, face t face with Old Man Dnvan. Our knees were shaking. We had visins f rcks punding ur bdies and bullets piercing ur hearts. 5 "Cme here," he said, reaching up t ne f his apple trees. Still shaking, we went ver t him. He held ut several ripe, juicy, red apples. "Take these hme,” he cmmanded. We tk the apples with surprised hearts and ran all the way hme. Of curse, Leigh Ann and I ate the apples. 6 As time went n, we ften went thrugh Old Man Dnvan's farm, and he kept n giving us mre luscius fruit. One day, we stpped by t see him when he was n his frnt prch. We talked t him fr hurs. While he was talking, we realized that we had fund the ther hidden treasure: the sweet, kind heart hidden behind his gruff vice. Sn, he was ne f ur favrite peple t talk t. Unfrtunately, his family never seemed t enjy ur cmpany. They never smiled r welcmed us in.
Paragraph 1: Every summer, we wuld visit Mr. Dnvan and talk t him.Paragraph 2: The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died.
One pssible versin
Paragraph 1: Every summer, we wuld visit Mr. Dnvan and talk t him. We shared with him ur clrful experience at schl while he kept giving ut his luscius fruits t us as usual. As time went by, we seemed t be mre a family than gd friends and his family gradually came t greet us with a warm smile. But ne summer, we were infrmed that he was seriusly ill and we were anxius and restless, feeling like sitting n pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight t the hspital t see his health cnditin. Weak as he was, he cmfrted us that it wasn’t a big deal. It was frm his family that we knew the truth. Old Man Dnvan had fell frm a tree while lking after the fruits and his head was seriusly hurt and need an peratin. The peratin might nt succeed and it was a gamble whether he wuld live r die.
Paragraph 2： The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I just culdn’t believe it until we went back hme and saw his smiling face n the wall. I felt a lump in my thrat, tears welling up in my eyes. The family apprached and welcmed us. “ I’m srry fr yur lss.” I gave them a big hug. On my way back hme, the wind whistled thrugh the trees, as if murning fr the death f Dnvan. I realized gne were the days when we sat tgether chatting with each ther. I realized gne were the days when we were lucky enugh t have a taste f the luscius fruit grwn by him. Hwever, he left us a hidden treasure—his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage f time.
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结尾点明了主题“hidden treasure—kind heart”，也与原文的开头相互呼应，起到了画龙点睛的作用