高考英语书面表达读后续写——No Crown for Me 课件

这是一份高考英语书面表达读后续写——No Crown for Me 课件，共23页。PPT课件主要包含了A story，Susan，Rose，Grandma，home，cried out ，guilty等内容，欢迎下载使用。

Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读
Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读 (Wh)
1. Susan was invited t the wds full f flwers but culdn’t g, nt finish the wrk f grandmther.
大家邀请Susan到一个到处都是鲜花围绕的丛林中玩耍，但是她由于没有完成奶奶布置的任务，没法出去玩。
2. Susan mved the mark in the stcking, cheated her grandmther.
Susan抹去了奶奶在袜子里的做的标记，欺骗奶奶任务已经完成了。
3. Susan was allwed t g, with red cheeks, feeling guilty.
当奶奶同意Susan出去玩的时候，只见她羞愧的红了脸。
Interpretatin f the Text文本解读(Hw)
情感线： 1. 从一开始，Susan看到大家都可以出去玩，但是自己却要在家帮奶奶做袜子而产生委屈的心理。2. 由此，Susan生出了想要敷衍了事糊弄奶奶，从而脱身好让自己置身于美丽的大自然的喜悦心理。3. 可不曾想，奶奶却夸奖自己，还说一如既往地信任自己，最终允许自己出去玩，从而演变出来了愧疚心理。
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
1. Interpretatin f given infrmatin首句解读：Para. 1 The little party had reached an pen space in the wds
Given Infrmatin
“Will yu cme with us, Susan?” cried several girls t a schlmate. “We are ging t the wds; d cme, t.” (Para 1)
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Infrmatin
Wh are invlved in the little party?What did they d in the party? What are Susan’s and her friends’ feelings when they are enjying themselves in the party? What will Susan think f when playing with her friends ?
1. Interpretatin f given infrmatin首句解读：Para. 2 “Nw, Susan,” said Rse, “Put n the crwn f flwers, fr yu are t be ur queen.”
“Yes, I have cheated her,” said she t herself. “If she knew all, she wuld never trust me again.”（para.11)
① What are Susan’s and her friends’ feelings when they are enjying themselves in the party? ② Why did friends chse Susan t be put n the crwn?③ What was Susan’s reactin after knwing she was chsen t be their “queen” by her friends?④ Will Susan admit her fault? And hw?
2. Interpretatin f underlined wrds下划线词解读：
finish, hme, Rse, grandmther, tear, flwers, the mark, in the stcking, cmpany, cheated
Susan, grandmther,
flwers, the mark, in the stcking
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读
tear, finish, cmpany, cheated
Interpretatin f writing ideas 写作思路解读 1
reflecting n what she had cheated her grandmther
Put n the crwn f flwers, fr yu are t be ur queen.
Interpretatin f writing ideas 写作思路解读 2
trembled with fear
with tears rlling dwn her face.
The Micr-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之动作神态描写：内疚、自责的心理篇
读后续写的评分原则之一是“内容的丰富性”。我们可以通过对人物的动作、语言、心理活动、表情和环境等细节的描写以及修辞等多种方式来丰富内容，增强叙述的画面感，使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。这篇文章将会大量的运用一些字词句来描写一个人物的内疚、自责的心理。
词的积累：形容词：cnfused, insecure, anxius, bewildered, discuraged, frustrated, guilty, ashamed, depressed, lnely, remrseful, inferir, islated.词块和句的积累： 1. “I shuld like t g with yu very much,” replied Susan, with a sigh.2. “Hw tiresme it must be t stay at hme t wrk n a hliday!” said Rse, ne f the girls, shaking her head.3. Susan heard the remark, and, as she bent her head, she wiped away a tear, and thught f the pleasant afternn the girls wuld spend gathering wild flwers in the wds
II. 词块和句子的积累4. Her grandmther tk the wrk and lked at it very clsely.5. As she left the cttage, she walked slwly away, nt singing as usual.6. “There is nthing the matter.” As Susan repeated these wrds, she felt that she was trying t cheat herself.7. I felt incredibly ashamed f myself fr getting s angry. 8. I believed Julie was ttally remrseful ver what she did.9. I realized I was becming increasingly depressed and apathetic.
2. 很快地，Susan和小伙伴们分开了，回到了家去向奶奶道歉。① Quickly Susan left the ther girls, went back hme __________________________________. (运用并列句句型) ② Quickly Susan left the ther girls, and went back hme, ______________________________. (运用非谓语动词结构)
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1. 她的伙伴们都在到处跑着，自我娱乐，可Susan却独自坐在草坪上陷入自我反思。① Her cmpanins were running abut enjying themselves, but Susan sat alne n the grass __________________________________________________. (运用连动句句型) ② Her cmpanins were running abut enjying themselves, but Susan sat alne n the grass, _______________________________________________.(运用非谓语动词结构)
and aplgized t her grandmther
and reflected n what she had cheated her grandmther
aplgizing t her grandmther
5. 她觉得她无法再往前走了，脚像灌了铅一样沉重和僵硬。He didn't think he culd g any further. His legs___________________________________. (比喻修辞)
felt like pieces f wd – heavy and stiff
3. 她说，“可是我已经欺骗了我奶奶”，脸颊上留下了泪水。① “But I have cheated my grandmther,” said she, ______________________________.(运用并列句句型) ② “But I have cheated my grandmther,” said she, ______________________________. (运用独立主格结构)
and tears flwed dwn her cheeks
4.  Rse嫣然一笑，并没有多说什么，将处于自责中的Susan抱入怀中。____________, Rse smiled radiantly, gathering her ___________ Susan int her arms. (用副词作状语，形容词作定语)
tears flwing dwn her cheeks.
Speechlessly
8. 一听到那个坏消息，她自责不已。① On hearing the bad news, ____________________________. ② On hearing the bad news, she ________________________, with great guilty, tears_____________________________ her cheeks. (句子拓展)
lwered dwn her head
6. Susan tk ff the crwn and her tears rlled dwn. Susan tk ff the crwn, _____________________. (用“with + n. + 非谓语动词”改写句子) Susan tk ff the crwn, _____________________. (用独立主格结构改写句子)
with her tears rlling dwn
女孩们看着她内疚地低下了头。The girls lked at her __________________________.
her tears rlling dwn
she felt extremely guilty
with their heads dwn guiltily
streaming/rlling/puring dwn
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Paragraph 1The little party had reached an pen space in the wds. When her cmpanins ran abut enjying themselves, Susan sat n the grass, reflecting n what she had cheated her grandmther and wishing she were at hme admitting her fault. After a while Rse cried ut, “Let us make a crwn f flwers, and put it n the head f the best girl here.” Sn the crwn was finished. All the girls agreed Susan was the best girl bth in schl and at hme and she deserved it, s they decided she was t wear it.
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Paragraph 2“Nw, Susan,” said Rse, “Put n the crwn f flwers, fr yu are t be ur queen.” As these wrds were spken, the crwn was placed n her head. In a mment she tk it ff, and threw it n the grund, saying, “N crwn fr me; I d nt deserve it.” The girls lked at with their muths pen in surprise. “I have cheated my grandmther,” said she, tears flwing dwn her cheeks. Quickly Susan left the ther girls, went back hme aplgizing t her grandmther. “Susan,” said her grandmther, “I am s happy yu have realized yur fault, and yu are still my wn little girl!”
点评：在第一段的续写中，对于Susan的动作和心理描写会是我们的主要侧重点。由于内心带着愧疚，所以哪怕在大家开心的玩耍的时候，Susan也是在reflecting n 并且wishing she were at hme admitting her fault。这样的描写可以和其他的小伙伴们形成鲜明的对比，从侧面凸显出Susan内心的不安。第二段中像tears flwing dwn her cheeks；I d nt deserve it；went back hme aplgizing t her grandmther等这些句子的描写就可以直接抒发出Susan的悔过之心。这样就可以从正反两面来突出Susan这一人物性格，也能更好地促进剧情的发展，从而揭示主题---知错要改以及要懂得这样一个道理，你若想获得更多就要承担的更多。
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Paragraph 2“Nw, Susan,” said Rse, “Put n the crwn f flwers, fr yu are t be ur queen.” Upn hearing the wrds, Susan trembled with fear. “ If nly I culd tell them the truth.” thught Susan, struggling hard in her heart. At the same time, the crwn was placed n her head. “ N crwn fr me; I d nt deserve it because I have cheated my grandmther.” cried she, with tears rlling dwn her face. Speechlessly, Rse smiled radiantly, gathering her guilty Susan int her arms. “N, Susan, yu deserve the crwn. The time yu speak ut the truth, yu win ur trust again and I believe yur grandmther will lve yu deeper and trust yu mre. Let’s g tgether and admit yur fault ” said Rse, putting the crwn n Susan and leading the way t grandmther’s hme. After Susan’s aplgizing, her grandmther said mildly, “ I am s happy yu have realized yur fault, and yu are still my wn little girl!”