2024届高三英语基础写作课件：大湾区作文讲评

这是一份2024届高三英语基础写作课件：大湾区作文讲评，共24页。PPT课件主要包含了发起一项活动，五一劳动节来临之际，培养学生的责任感，不同家务事，有教育意义的，值得的，宣扬劳动的意义，品尝劳作的甜与苦等内容，欢迎下载使用。
内容要点：1. 分享自己最近的一次家务劳动经历 (只能写一次家务劳动经历， 时态用过去时) 2. 描述劳动过程 (紧紧围绕本次家务劳动经历，按照时间顺序、 事情发展顺序等逻辑关系进行阐述，用动作描写推动) 3. 分享劳动感受 (一般现在时或一般过去时)
得分：13- 14 分评语：1) 文章覆盖了所有内容要点，言之有物，言之有理；2) 语法准确，使用了地道的表达，丰富的复合句（如主语从句， 时间状语从句）以及倒装句等高级句型；3) 结构清晰，意义连贯，衔接手段得体有效；4) 卷面整洁规范。这体现了学生较优秀的语言能力和人文素养，语言符合交际要求，完全达到了预期的写作目的。
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Dear Ryan, I hpe this letter finds yu well. I am writing t share with yu a recent experience which/that I had with husewrk. One mrning, I wke up t the realizatin that my rm was in a cmplete mess. Determined t tidy up, I immediately sprang int actin. I began by thrwing away garbage and unnecessary items, and then prceeded t neatly arrange the bks that were scattered acrss my sfa, flr, and desk back nt the bkshelf. It was quite a labrius prcess, but the end result was truly satisfying. Nt nly did my rm lk sptlessly clean / spanking clean (一尘不染), but I als felt a sense f accmplishment and pride in my hard wrk. What d yu think abut it? I hpe t hear frm yu sn. Best wishes!Yurs,Li Hua
加深我对父母每天的辛苦付出的感谢
读后续写： Alex sat quietly at the back f his Chinese class, his eyes fixed n the textbk befre him. As a shy and unnticed student, he felt like a lne wlf, struggling against the cmplexities f high schl life.Ms Lau, his Chinese teacher, was a light in his therwise dark wrld. Her warm smile and gentle behavir made her stand ut amng the sea f teachers. She was the nly ne wh seemed t understand his cnservative 内向的、保守的 nature, always encuraging him t step ut f his cmfrt zne. One day, after class, Ms Lau apprached Alex with excitement shining in her eyes. “Alex, I have an ffer fr yu,”she said, her vice filled with enthusiasm.“I am rganizing a cultural exchange prgram t China, and I believe it wuld be a great pprtunity fr yu t explre a new wrld.”
Alex’s heart skipped a beat 心跳加快, the prspect f traveling t a freign cuntry bth exciting and terrifying. He hesitated, unsure if he had the curage t start such an adventure. But Ms Lau’s firm belief in him gave him the push he needed t take a leap f faith (放胆一试,放手一搏). Under Ms Lau’s guidance, Alex began preparing fr the trip. He gt really interested in Chinese culture and learned abut its lng histry and traditins. Ms Lau became his mentr (导师), teaching him nt nly the language but als invaluable life lessns. She taught him the imprtance f being cnfident and nt giving up, reminding him that grwth nly happens utside ne's cmfrt zne.
The day f departure arrived, and Alex fund himself n a plane headed fr China. He culdn’t help but feel amazed as he stepped ff the plane and int a wrld s different frm his wn. The busy streets, bright clrs, and unfamiliar sunds flded his senses. Yet, Ms Lau’s cmfrting presence by his side prvided him with the strength t face the unknwn.
Paragraph 1: During their tine in China, Alex whlehearteally enjyed the experience. Paragraph 2: Back in the United States, Alex was a changed persn.
Hw t describe the experience apprpriately?
得分：23-24内容方面，与所给短文融洽度高，与所给开头句衔接自然，并且能挖掘所给文章中的矛盾， 并在续写第一段出现了改变他性格的关键事件； 结尾有升华，凸显个人成长的主题。语言方面，所使用的语法结构和词汇较为丰富且地道，擅于使用非谓语，介词短语、强调句，遣词造句优美且地道。字迹工整，卷面整洁。
Paragraph 1: During their time in China, Alex whleheartedly enjyed the experience. He tried new fd, explred ancient/ nted 著名的 landmarks, and even attempted t cnverse with lcals in Mandarin. Thrugh these explratins, Alex nt nly sav(u)red (享受,品味) the delicius flavrs and absrbed the cultural heritage but als gained valuable insights int Chinese traditins and ways f life. Each passing day unflded as a brand new adventure, and with every new encunter, Alex sensed a remarkable transfrmatin within himself. His cnfidence grew, and he fund himself increasingly pen t the clrful wrld that envelped him. Eventually, the time came fr him t return t the United States.