初中英语中考复习 作文09 山东卷-三年（2017—2019）中考英语满分作文解析

这是一份初中英语中考复习 作文09 山东卷-三年（2017—2019）中考英语满分作文解析，共6页。

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Write a review（评论） f the fllwing stry in abut 120 wrds． The review has t include the fllwing pints．（阅读下面的故事，请根据下面的提示，写出一篇约120词的评论）．
（1）The title f yur review．（你撰写的评论的标题．）
（2）Yur idea（s）， examples and the reasn（s） fr unhappiness and happiness in the stry．（你归纳的关于故事中幸福和不幸福的观点，举例子并说明原因．）
（3）Yur idea（s） f happiness， examples fr happiness in yur daily life．（归纳你在日常生活中关于幸福的观点，并举例说明．）
（4）Yur cnclusin abut happiness．（关于幸福的结论．）
（5）The wrds yu may use．（你可能用到的词） be satisfied with（对……满意） desire n．欲望 cntentment 知足 the key（关键） t happiness．
A lng time ag， in a rich and beautiful cuntry， there lived an unhappy king． He slept badly and didn't feel like eating． He ften cried fr n reasn． This made the queen and his peple wrried． S they called a dctr t examine him．But he fund nthing wrng with his bdy．He said what the king needed was the shirt f a happy persn t wear．That wuld make him happy．
The prime minister was called t the palace． But when they explained the king's situatin t him， he said，"Althugh I have a lt f pwer， it desn't make me happy． I'm always wrried abut lsing my pwer．"
Then the king's banker came t say， I'm afraid I'm nt happy either． I have a lt f wealth， but I'm always wrried abut lsing mney． Smene tries t steal my mney． Next， the palace singer was called t say， "I'm famus but I'm nt happy because I'm wrried abut being fllwed by thers． I can't be free．"
Finally， the tp general was tld t g ut t find a happy man． He searched and searched but culdn't find anyne． Everyne seemed t have their wn prblems， and n ne was truly happy． Just as he wanted t give up． he saw a pr man n the street． He was eating with his hands and singing happily t himself． The general went t him and said，"What makes yu s happy？ Yu have n pwer， mney， r fame．" The man said，"I have everything I want． and I dn't want what I can't have． S I'm happy， and my sng cmes frm the happiness in my heart． ""Can yu give yur shirt t me， I need it， "said the general．"What shirt？ I dn' t have any shirts．"answered the man．
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2019年山东枣庄中考英语作文要求根据题目中的小故事写一篇评论，话题涉及现代人们对幸福的理解，体现了关注学生的成长，教育学生树立正确的价值观，符合社会主义价值观的要求，属于当今社会的热点话题之一。本文要求根据小故事写出评论，要求学生能够发表自己的观点，难度要求较高。学生在写作时要阅读所给材料。
My Thughts abut Happiness
Pwer, wealth, and fame can't always make peple happy. Fr example, the rich peple were unhappy, because they are afraid f lsing mney, while the pr peple was truly happy because he was satisfied with what he culd have.
What can always make me happy？Happiness is always in my heart and is easy t find if I pay mre attentin t what I have. Fr instance, enjying the beautiful sunshine after a cludy day, getting a glass f water frm mther when I am studying, getting help frm my friends when I am in truble and s n. These are the mments when I am happy.
All in all, dn't think abut what yu can't have. Cntentment is the key t happiness.
【名师点评】
这是一篇要求写评论的文章，根据下面的故事中的相关信息写出一篇约120词的评论。所提供的材料中列举了撰写的评论的标题。主要从：（1）归纳的关于故事中幸福和不幸福的观点，举例子并说明原因。（2）归纳你在日常生活中关于幸福的观点，并举例说明；（3）关于幸福的结论。这几个方面去介绍。时态为一般过去时，人称为第一人称。注意评论中必须包含材料上的故事情节，并适当发挥。写作时，避免使用汉语式的英语，尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法要正确，表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性。
【写作亮点】
这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求，紧扣主题，根据事实写出自己感受．灵活运用平时学习的句子和句型，写出了自己对幸福的理解。短文有以下几个优点：首先文章内容完整，结构清晰，符合题目要求。其次本文运用了一些亮点句型，为文章提分不少。（1）高分句型一 Fr example，the rich peple were unhappy, because they are afraid f lsing mney, while the pr peple was truly happy because he was satisfied with what he culd have.例如，富人不快乐，因为他们害怕失去钱，而穷人真正快乐是因为他对自己所拥有的感到满足。句子because they are afraid f lsing mney是由because引导的原因状语从句。
（2）高分句型二 All in all, dn’t think abut what yu can't have. 总之，不要想你不能拥有的东西。句子what yu can't have.作think abut的宾语。
2018年
Use the fllwing infrmatin t write a paragraph abut bees.
●Be as busy learning all their subjects as bees are busy gathering hney
●They have sharp stings(刺) t harm them and prtect themselves.
●Wise and busy
●N gains
●Des its wn wrk
●Driven frm the hive t be stpped frm eating the hney befre winter cmes
●Jin tgether t build cells f wax（蜡质房子） fr their hney
●Hw busy they are always
●Dn't wrk
●That have six sides and are all f ne shape and size
●A huse called a hive
●One queen
Bees live in… They are… There is… in each hive. They all… Each bee… They build cells… It’s pleasant t see… But drnes… They are… Children shuldn’t tuch bees… N pains… Shuldn’t children…
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2018年山东枣庄中考英语作文要求学生介绍蜜蜂。文体为说明文。今年作文的主题从以往的关注人文转至关注自然，属于一个全新的视角，但本文已给出大量材料，学生只需认真阅读所给材料，有条理地去组织自己的语言。本文难度较低。介绍蜜蜂时应注意语言表达清楚。

Bees live in a huse called a hive. They are wise and busy. There is ne queen in each hive. They all jin tgether t build cells f wax(蜡质房子) fr their hney. Each bee des its wn wrk. They build cells that have six sides and are all f ne shape and size. It's pleasant t see hw busy they are always, But drnes dn't wrk. They are driven frm the hive t be stpped frm eating the hney befre winter cmes. Children shuldn't tuch bees because they have sharp stings(刺) t harm them and prtect themselves. N pains, n gains. Shuldn't children be as busy learning all their subjects as bees are busy gathering hney?
【名师点评】
2018年山东枣庄中考作文为材料作文，本文主要描述蜜蜂的相关情况，是一篇说明文。题目中已经给出了大量的信息，考生只需挑选其中的一些，然后有机地组合起来即可。在写作时要注意不要完全按照题目给出信息的顺序进行描写，要按照正常介绍事物的顺序来写作，比如先介绍属性，然后是外表，接着是生活习性等。本文描述客观事实，所以多使用一般现在时。注意叙述有条理，多用关联词，使行文连贯、通顺。这篇作文的词数为80-100，不得出现考生和相关人物的真实校名和姓名。
【写作亮点】
这是一篇优秀的作文。本文能根据题目中材料，语言简洁准确，行文连贯，不遗漏要点。本文体裁为说明文。分为三段式来介绍蜂巢。在文章的开头：引出介绍的事物，蜜蜂是益虫(a kind f beneficial insects)。第二段为文章的重点，具体描写了蜜蜂的情况。1.聪明、勤劳的动物(wise and busy)；2.做事井井有条(in gd rder and well arranged)；3.建造蜂巢(build cells f wax)；结尾：联系实际要向蜜蜂学习，一分耕耘一分收获(n pains, n gains)。文章语言表达要符合英语习惯，准确运用一般现在时。
2017年
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Write a review f the fllwing stry in abut 90 wrds. The review has t include the fllwing pints:
1. The name f yur review.
2. The idea(s) f yur review.
3. The reasn(s) fr yur idea(s).
4. Smething yu decide after yu cnsider all the infrmatin in the stry.
“ Cck-a-ddle-d!” cried the cck（公鸡）. He std in the farm-yard and cried alud, s that all peple might hear him. “Cck-a-diidke-d! Hw useful I am, fr I always get up first. And I cry abut as sn as the sun rises t make all peple in the huse wake.”
“Cluck! Cluck! Cluck!”cried the hen frm the yard. She was walking abut with three pretty little chickens, and trying t find sme fd fr them. “Cluck! Cluck! Cluck! I’m mre useful than yu. Almst every day I lay a nice fresh egg fr my master’s （男主人）breakfast. Then think hw useful I am t my mistress（女主人）. Hw many nice things des she make with my eggs fr the children? She culd nt get n well withut eggs.”
2017年山东枣庄英语中考作文，要求写一篇评论。材料已给出，这就要求学生能认真阅读所给材料，确定作文的题目、主旨以及原因，考察学生对语言的实际应用能力和思想深度难度较高。本文通过小故事要求学生能对生活中的一些现象进行正确的分析，树立正确的人生观、价值观。
The Use f the Cck and the hen
The cck is useful. He always gets up first and cries,“Cck-a-diidke-d!”t wake all peple in the huse up. The hen is useful t.On the ne hand,she tries t find fd fr pretty little chickens;n the ther hand,she lays a nice fresh egg fr her master’s breakfast.Her mistress makes many things with her eggs fr the children.She culd get n well with eggs.
In a wrd,bth the cck and the hen are useful.It is wrng f them t see their wn use nly instead f seeing each ther’s use.
【名师点评】
本文要求写一篇评论，也是一篇材料作文，给出了一个小故事。我们要根据提示用自己的语言对公鸡和母鸡的行为做出评价，并要写出自己这样评价的理由。要注意所写的句子符合英语表达习惯，不要遗漏要点，语言准确。注意本文的时态为一般现在时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性。
【写作亮点】
这篇是一篇优秀的作文，短文语句通顺，表达准确。本文能根据材料确定作文的题目，结构完整，短文中用了一些复杂句式及短语如：get up起床；wake sb. up把某人叫醒；try t d sth,努力做某事；find fd找到食物；it is+形容词+介词（f/fr)+t d sth. 做某事对某人来说是怎样的；此外还用了一些过渡句或短语，如：On the ne hand, n the ther hand, In a wrd等，使句子上下文过渡自然。