(新高考)高考英语二轮提分秘籍专题五：写作（第三讲）第二节　从微观把握——读后续写微技能 (含详解)

这是一份(新高考)高考英语二轮提分秘籍专题五：写作（第三讲）第二节　从微观把握——读后续写微技能 (含详解)，共33页。
第二节　从微观把握——读后续写微技能
微技能一 如何精准解读文本

读后续写的选材主要是故事类记叙文，是以叙事为主要内容的一种文体。要续写好这类文章，理解文本是第一步。对于故事类记叙文阅读，要注意以下几个方面。
1.抓住记叙文的6要素
即人物、时间、地点、事件的起因、经过和结果，读后续写所提供的文本除了结果这一要素之外，把其余五个要素叙述得清清楚楚。因此阅读文本时要紧扣这五个要素。
2.掌握记叙文的3大线索
即时间线、情节线和感情线。阅读文本时要抓住这三条主线。必要时可以列出这些线索，以更好地理解文章，为续写做好准备。只有对原文的脉络线索和段落结构有正确和深刻的理解，续写的内容才能和原文骨肉相连，契合紧密。
3.把握文章主旨和故事的发展方向
这点至关重要。只有把握了文章的主旨意图，才能很好地完成续写。确保续写的内容和原文要有逻辑上的一致性，并能回应原文的信息。
4.分析文章的用词特点和行文风格
考生要仔细阅读给定的前文，在充分理解文章内容的基础上，认真体会前文的用词特点和行文风格，只有这样才能使续写的内容在语言色彩上和行文风格上与所给文章保持高度一致。
【典例】　（2021·新高考卷Ⅰ）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next， Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time， she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake.The next minute， the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully， Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But
Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning.Oh dear！ The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
As the twins looked around them in disappointment， their father appeared.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
1.本文的6要素
本文是记叙文，讲述了一对双胞胎在母亲节那天为妈妈做早餐的故事。
人物
The twins Jenna and Jeff， their father， their mother
时间
On the morning of Mother’s Day
地点
Kitchen， bedroom
起因、经过
和结果
The twins Jenna and Jeff prepared a surprise on Mother’s Day for their mother， but failed at the beginning...
2.本文的3大线索
（1）时间线：On the morning of Mother’s Day
（2）情节线：
The twins Jenna and Jeff wanted to prepare a surprise on Mother’s Day for their mother.（双胞胎计划在母亲节那天给妈妈一个惊喜）
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On the morning of Mother’s Day， the twins Jenna and Jeff boil the porridge first and then made the French toast.（母亲节这一天，双胞胎来到厨房，煮粥，做吐司）
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The porridge boiled over， Jeff’s hand was injured by the hot burner and the piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.（粥煮沸溢了出来，Jeff的手烫着了，面包片烤糊了。）
③感情线：
Harmonious relationship between their family members.
3.本文的主旨及故事的发展方向
（1）本文主旨：The twins were preparing a surprise on Mother’s Day for their mother to show their love.
（2）故事的发展方向： How to prepare the surprise breakfast successfully？
4.本文的用词特点和行文风格
本文语言平实、行文流畅、叙事娓娓道来。
（1）精准的心理描写：The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.
（2）细腻的动作和神态描写：The next minute， the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully， Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.
【范文必背】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment， their father appeared.Seeing the mess in the kitchen （现在分词短语）， he immediately understood what had happened （宾语从句）， but he wasn’t upset.Instead， he applied some medicine to Jeff’s hand， and then set out to help them clean up the mess， throwing away the burnt toast.Next， they began to make breakfast， and until then the twins looked cheerful.Before long， the porridge was ready.Their father instructed them to fry the rest of the bread.Soon， the breakfast was ready， too.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.Opening her eyes， she couldn’t believe what she had seen.Before she could ask any question， their father turned up and told his wife about how the twins had made preparations to give her the surprise breakfast （about的第一个宾语从句）， and what trouble they had gone through when making the porridge and toast （about的第二个宾语从句，其中when making相当于when they were making）.Disbelief gave way to excitement and pride.Hugging them in her arms， she said， “Thank you， children.It’s such an unforgettable Mother’s Day for me.”
微技能二 如何精心构建续写情节
要想写好读后续写，关键是有效构建续写情节，其中包含两个重要的步骤：第一步是依据两段首句，推理情节发展，搭建写作框架；第二步是增加相关细节，完善续写情节。构思时还要注意四个顺畅的呼应点。

一、抓住关键信息，构思续写框架
口诀：两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量
1.两段首句定一框：即由第一段的首句和第二段的首句可以定出第一段的框架。所给第一段的首句既能承接上文，也是本段的起始句，由第二段的首句可以推测第一段的结尾。
2.二框二首正能量：即由第二段的首句和根据文章应是美好结局或正能量的结局的特点可以预测故事结局，定出第二段的框架。
二、有效依据“五所”，丰富续写情节
以上步骤仅仅定出了写作框架，在构思时，还要进行情节扩充，让续写有血有肉。建议大家写“五所”（所见、所闻、所说、所思、所做），并对此进行设问，可以有效地丰富续写的主要情节。
1.所见：环境描写/人物描写/神情描写
2.所闻、所说：语言描写
3.所思：心理描写
4.所做：动作描写
三、四个顺畅呼应，进行有效衔接
1.续写首句与给出的首段首句的衔接；
2.续写首段尾句与给出的次段首句的衔接；
3.给出的次段首句与续写次段首句的衔接；
4.文章结尾升华与文章主题意义的衔接。

【典例】　（2021·八省市联考）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。　　During this past year， I’ve had three instances of car trouble.Each time these things happened， I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help.One of those times， I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep.I put signs in the windows， big signs that said NEED A JACK （千斤顶）， and offered money.Nothing.Right as I was about to give up， a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over， and the father bounded out.
He sized up the situation and called for his daughter， who spoke English.He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep， so we would need something to support it.Then he got a saw （锯子） from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road.We rolled it over and put his jack on top， and we were in business.
I started taking the wheel off， and then， if you can believe it， I broke his tire iron.No worries： He handed it to his wife， and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron.She was back in 15 minutes.We finished the job， and I was a very happy man.
The two of us were dirty and sweaty.His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands.I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand， but he wouldn’t take it， so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could.I asked the little girl where they lived.Mexico， she said.They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks.Then they would go home.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
When I was about to say goodbye， the girl asked if I’d had lunch.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
After they left， I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
【范文必背】
When I was about to say goodbye， the girl asked if I’d had lunch.Not until then did I hear my stomach rumbling （部分倒装）， I shrugged awkwardly.A smile of sympathy flickering across her face， she suddenly turned around and darted toward her truck.For split seconds， the girl turned up breathlessly， a paper bag held tightly in her hand.“Here you are.It will...do you good.” She stammered in broken English， grinning mysteriously.Maybe， it was her toy she didn’t need any longer.I waved to the family， seeing them walking across the street hand in hand （现在分词短语）.
After they left， I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.In sight came a hamburger and a 20－dollar bill （完全倒装）， to which a note was attached （定语从句）.It read， “I bought them with all my savings.Good luck.”As if a bolt of lighting struck me， I gaped in gratitude and meanwhile felt a stab of guilt for my misunderstanding her goodwill.I looked out of the window eagerly only to find
their truck just alongside.What a coincidence！The little girl returned me a sweet smile， her tinkling laughter filling the air.It was the first time I was not sick of my car trouble but lucky for seeing a beautiful heart.
一、抓住关键信息，构思续写框架
1.两段首句定一框：
由第一段的首句 When I was about to say goodbye， the girl asked if I’d had lunch.和第二段的首句After they left， I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.再结合所给短文内容，可以预测本段应主要写小女孩给“我”提供食物。
2.二框二首正能量：
第二段的首句After they left， I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.和根据文章应是美好结局或正能量的结局的特点可以预测故事结局：作者认识到人间的真善美。
二、有效依据“五所”，丰富续写情节
写“五所”（所见，所闻，所说，所思，所做），并对此进行设问。设问时要抓住段首句关键词
P1： When I was about to say goodbye， the girl asked if I’d had lunch.
Q1：What was my reply？ （about lunch） Did I have lunch？
Q2：What did the girl do？ （about the paper bag）
Q3：How did I feel？
Q4：How did they left？ （after they left）
P2：After they left， I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
Q1：What did I find in the paper bag？
Q2：How did I feel？
Q3：How did I change the opinion towards stranger？
Q4：What does the story intend to tell readers？
三、四个顺畅呼应，进行有效衔接
1.续写首句与给出的首段首句的衔接
Not until then did I hear my stomach rumbling.（首句女孩问是否吃午饭了，本句写直到这时我听到肚子咕咕叫）
2.续写首段尾句与给出的次段首句的衔接
I waved to the family， seeing them walking across the street hand in hand.（次段首句写在他们离开之后，本句写与他们告别）
3.给出的次段首句与续写次段首句的衔接
In sight came a hamburger and a 20－dollar bill， to which a note was attached.（次段首句写作者打开了包裹，本句接着写看到里面有汉堡包和20美元）
4.文章结尾升华与文章主题意义的衔接
It was the first time I was not sick of my car trouble but lucky for seeing a beautiful heart.（照应第一段，突出主题：美丽的心灵）
微技能三 如何精细打磨续写语言
构思好续写情节以后，下一步就是进行续写。在阅卷时，阅卷老师首要关注的是续写的语言，因此续写语言的高低与否直接决定着续写的成功与否。首先要规避常见错误，确保拿到及格分，再次要尽力提升写作的语言，努力达到最高档。
一、5大升级路径，词汇亮人一眼
　升级路径1：笼统词→具体词
①Because of her hatred， she looked at him.
→Because of her hatred， she glared at him.
②They walked onwards with exhausted bodies through the desert.
→They trudged onwards with exhausted bodies through the desert.
　升级路径2：简单词→高级词
①The advice the old man gave Tom was very important .
→The advice the old man gave Tom was very significant/vital/critical.
②I should be free any time after school next week.
→I should be available any time after school next week.
　升级路径3：单词→短语
①Hearing the bad news， the boy cried sadly.
→Hearing the bad news， the boy burst into tears sadly.
②After a day’s work， we all tired.
→After a day’s work， we all worn out.
　升级路径4：运用有表现力的副词
恰当地使用富有表现力的副词，能够使文章更加丰富多姿，描写地更为准确，文章更有生机。使用这些副词时，要注意把握这些词汇的确切内涵，并且符合故事发展的内在逻辑。
①The day was bitterly cold；the moon was shining brightly in the sky.
②Having no choice， I slowly raised the book ，hoping to hide myself.
③I was quietly， joyfully and patiently watching as the sun painted a brand－new day.
④On our way back home，my father held me tightly，wearing a big frown.
　升级路径5：运用有表现力的介词短语
介词with或in后加表示情绪、个性等的名词，经常可以与相应的副词互换，恰当地使用此结构可以增加表达的多样性。
①She gazed up at him， glowing happily.
→She gazed up at him， glowing with happiness.
② Like a lamp，the moon shone from above.The stars twinkled their eyes curiously.
→Like a lamp，the moon shone from above.The stars twinkled their eyes with curiosity.
二、8大抢分句式，档次瞬时提升
　抢分句式1：Doing...， 主＋谓……
doing作状语，逻辑主语与句子的主语一致，构成主动关系；有时可以在doing前加before， after， while等。
①He was trembling in a blanket and he said， “I’m cold.”
→Trembling in a blanket， he said， “I’m cold.”
②I sat back in an easy chair and fell asleep.
→Sitting back in an easy chair， I fell asleep.
③When I saw no one noticing us， I put the Christmas present down and left.
→Seeing no one noticing us， I put the Christmas present down and left.
　抢分句式2：主＋谓……， doing...
doing作伴随状语，与句子的谓语动词同时发生，逻辑主语与句子的主语一致，构成主动关系。
①“Here，” he said.At the same time he handed the coins to the gatekeeper.
→“Here，” he said，handing the coins to the gatekeeper.
②For a few moments I just stood there.I held that ten－dollar bill and I wondered what to buy and who to buy it for.
→For a few moments I just stood there， holding that ten－dollar bill and wondering what to buy and who to buy it for.
　抢分句式3： 独立主格结构
·主语＋谓语……， 逻辑主语＋doing/done...
·逻辑主语＋doing/done， 主语＋谓语……
·逻辑主语与doing构成主动关系，或者逻辑主语与done构成被动关系构成独立主格，有时前面有介词with，在句中常作状语。
①He stood there and tears of gratitude were welling up in his eyes.
→He stood there， （with） tears of gratitude welling up in his eyes.
②Her father was lying on his back， and his dog was trapped under the truck.
→Her father was lying on his back，（with） his dog trapped under the truck.
　抢分句式4：表情感类的形容词，主＋谓……或主＋谓……，表情感类的形容词
情感类的形容词在句中作状语，说明主语的情感状态，可以转化为表情感类的形容词，主＋谓……。有时可以放在句后：主＋谓……表情感类的形容词。
①He was eager and excited， and she waved her hands， trying to attract others’ attention.
→Eager and excited， she waved her hands， trying to attract others’ attention.
②To Annie’s delight， surrounded by his classmates， Mark seemed like a rock star， and he was cheerful and proud.
→To Annie’s delight， surrounded by his classmates， Mark seemed like a rock star， cheerful and proud.
　抢分句式5：方式副词，主＋谓……
方式副词在句中作状语，修饰谓语动词，一般放在宾语后，但有时根据需要可以放在句首，有时放在实义动词前。
①It was fortunate that the cat was still alive， though badly injured.
→Fortunately， the cat was still alive， though badly injured.
②Gently， she picked up the first baby， ran back outside and laid it on the sidewalk.
　抢分句式6：全部倒装：地点状语或表示运动方向的副词＋谓（vi.）＋主（名词）
该句型是一个全部倒装句，主语必须是名词，谓语动词为不及物动词，常见的表运动方向的副词有：in， out， off， away， up， down， outside， inside等。
①An old woman sat ahead.
→Ahead sat an old woman.
②The crowd went away one by one.
→Away went the crowd one by one.
　抢分句式7： 强调句型：It was＋被强调成分＋that＋（主语）＋谓语……
除了强调句型，在突出某一成分时，还可以用部分倒装句型。
He knew what had happened then.
→It was then that he knew what had happened.
→Only then did he know what had happened.
→Not until then did he know what had happened.
抢分句式8: 非限制性定语从句：...，which...
We’ll also spend some fun time together, singing, dancing and playing games.We hope it will make them happy.
→We’ll also spend some fun time together, singing, dancing and playing games，which we hope will make them happy.
【即时训练】　
Ⅰ.请用高级词汇升级下面考生作文中加黑的一般词汇
Dad__opened__the__box__and__a__sweet__little__dog__appeared．Surprised，Poppy jumped backwards，with her back arched and tail wagging.Then，she barked with joy，eyes fixed on the cute little companion.Not feeling shy，the little dog jumped forward to greet Poppy.Immediately，both dogs began a game of chase in the house.Instantly the house came back to life，with happy barking lingering around it.Such a scene made mom and dad laugh in relief.But at once，both of them didn’t speak.As memories of their son came to mind，they felt a deep longing for their son.
A__few__weeks__later__the__boy__arrived__home__from__university．Poppy welcomed him as usual.As he missed Poppy so much and was looking forward to seeing her，he bent down to hug her.Suddenly，a small golden puppy came up to her.He was very surprised to see a strange creature at home.“Oh，my gosh，I can’t believe that you got yourself a puppy.” the boy shouted.Noticing his shocked face，his parents laughed.“This puppy is for Poppy，” his mom answered，“Sometimes，we’ve found Puppy a replacement for you.However，to us，you are irreplaceable，Sweetie.” Touched by his mother’s words，the boy tried to hold back his tears and decided to come back to see his parents as often as possible.
①Surprised→Amazed
②jumped→leapt
③Immediately→In__a__flash
④happy→joyful
⑤didn’t speak→went__silent
⑥came to mind→crowded__in
⑦Suddenly→All__of__a__sudden
⑧very surprised→shocked
⑨shouted→exclaimed
⑩answered→replied
⑪tried→struggled
⑫decided→was__determined
Ⅱ.请用高级句式升级下面考生作文中加黑的一般句式
Dad__opened__the__box__and__a__sweet__little__dog__appeared．①Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the little dog.She lowered her head to watch it curiously.Then she became so excited that she accidentally knocked over the box in an attempt to get closer.②The box was tipped over and out came the little one，who was not shy and instantly got familiar with Poppy.③It didn’t take long before the two played around the house and cheerfully ran after each other.
A__few__weeks__later，the__boy__arrived__home__from__the__university．④He had been missing his parents and the dog since it was the first time that he had been away from home for such a long time.⑤When the boy caught sight of Poppy，he went rushing toward the dog and he bent down to give her a big hug.Suddenly，the boy noticed the little dog.“Oh my god，who is this？” His parents laughed at the look of surprise on his face.“It’s Poppy’s new companion.” said Mom.
1．用非谓语结构作时间状语升级句①
Noticing__the__little__dog,__Poppy__jumped__with__joy.
2．用with复合结构升级句②
With__the__box__tipped__over,__out__came__the__little__one,__who__was__not__shy__and__instantly__got__familiar__with__Poppy.
3．用非谓语结构作伴随状语升级句③
It__didn’ t__take__long__before__the__two__played__around__the__house,__cheerfully__running__after__each__other.
4．用强调结构强调主句宾语升级句④
It__was__his__parents__and__the__dog__that__he__had__been__missing__since__it__was__the__first__time__that__he__had__been__away__from__home__for__such__a__long__time.
5．用省略结构升级句⑤
When__catching__sight__of__Poppy,__he__went__rushing__toward__the__dog__and__bent__down__to__give__her__a__big__hug.
微技能四 如何丰富细节描写
读后续写试题都是要求考生续写人物经历，补充故事情节。考生答题中存在的典型问题为续写内容欠丰满、语言表达欠生动等。其中一个重要原因就是，考生不会根据文章主题和故事发展的需要生动、细致地描写主要人物的动作和心理，导致续写文章情节失真、内容平淡、人物苍白、语言空洞。那么，续写该如何写呢？我们应该用展示而非讲述的描写方式。通过具体细节描写，生动形象地刻画人物和事件。
Ⅰ.讲述(tell) VS 展示(show)
讲述(tell)
一般来说是对事件宽泛的、抽象的总结，作者直接告诉读者所描述的对象
展示(show)
通过对人物动作、语言、想法、感觉以及自然风景、场面气氛等细小环节或情节的描写
【典例】　谢尔顿非常生气。
讲述：Sheldon felt very angry.
展示：①Sheldon felt so angry that he stormed out of the room, slamming(砰地关上) the door furiously behind him.(冲出房间；狠狠摔门)
②Filled with anger(狂怒), Sheldon was unable to utter a single word.(充满愤怒；说不出话)
③Boiling with rage(愤怒), Sheldon shook his fist at me.(怒火中烧；挥舞拳头)
Ⅱ.概括表达VS细节描写
一、动作和神情描写
1．精选动词，刻画具体的动作。
例：看到直升机，简非常高兴。
概括表达： Seeing the helicopter, Jane became very happy.
细节描写：①At the sight of the helicopter, Jane beamed with wild joy.
②The moment she caught sight of the helicopter, Jane’s eyes/ face lit up with delight.
③Instantly she caught sight of the helicopter, a bright smile lit up Jane’s face/eyes.
2．添加修饰成分，做到生动描写
(1)可以添加介词短语或者副词来修饰动词。
①with＋情感名词
with delight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/satisfaction/anger/rage/
patience/fear/terror/embarrassment/pride/caution/care/patience/certainty等
例：Her eyes shone with excitement.
她的眼睛中闪烁着兴奋的光芒。
②with＋身体部位
with its hungry red eyes/its sharp teeth/her shaky hand/her pale lips等
例：The ferocious wolf stared at Mac with its hungry red eyes.
此处用with its hungry red eyes来修饰动作stare，使狼凶狠的形象更加丰满。
③in＋名词
in surprise/amazement/shock/sorrow伤心
in a high/low/sweet/loud/soft/weak voice用……的嗓音
例：He gazed at me in surprise.
他吃惊地注视着我。
④副词
suddenly/immediately/instantly/rapidly/firmly/slowly/angrily/happily/excitedly等
例：He carefully jumped over the broken glasses.
他小心翼翼地跳过碎玻璃碴儿。
Carefully，he jumped over the broken glasses.
小心翼翼地，他跳过了碎玻璃碴儿。
(2)运用合适的修辞手法。
在动作描写中也可以运用明喻、暗喻、拟人、夸张等写作手法，让你的写作更加生动传神。
例1：She howled long and loud like a ferocious wolf and then jumped at Buck.
此句把她比作凶残的恶狼，用到了明喻的写作手法，使整句的动作描写更有力度，更有画面感。
例2：She went home in a flood of tears.
此处在动作描写中添加了in a flood of tears夸张描写，生动传神地体现了她当时的情感状态。
3．分解细化动作，构建动作链
学生要学会分解动作，形成一个完整的动作链，让描写更加丰富生动。
(1)如何构建动作链。
写记叙文就像是拍电影，所有场景都像画面一样，一帧一帧地呈现出来。
如：“上车”这一动作。很多同学不知道该如何刻画细节，只能把动作写得非常单一，比如就是：get into the car 或者是 get on the car.但是实际上，我们可以把这个动作按时间轴的顺序设计出，“拦车→上车→告诉司机目的地”三个步骤来写。
例：She stopped a taxi, got into it and told the driver her destination.
(2)动作链的表达可用并列谓语动词来体现，即A and B或者 A, B and C。
例：He reached deep into his pocket, pulled out a handful of change, and held it up to the farmer.
他把手伸进口袋深处，拿出一把零钱，然后拿到农夫面前。
(3)动作链的表达可用非谓语来体现。
例1：Looking up at the farmer, the boy said, “Thank you.”
男孩抬头看着农夫说：“谢谢你。”
例2：The dog awkwardly wobbled towards the others, doing its best to catch up.
那只小狗苯拙地摇晃着走向其他人，用尽全力追赶。
(4)动作链的表达可用状语从句，如when，while，as，before，after引导的时间状语从句来体现。
例1：When I arrived there, I walked to the door and knocked.
我到那里后，走到门前，敲了敲门。
例2：As I waited at the stop, I heard a big noise.
在车站等车时，我听到了巨大的噪声。
(5)动作链可以和情感，环境，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面。
例：Burning with anger, he glared at me with his big frightening eyes , yelling, “You’re such an idiot.”
此处的burning with anger是情感描写，glare和yell是动作链，同时将动作和语言描写结合在了一起，形成了饱满的动作面，属于高分表达。
二、心理描写
用外在动作和表情展示人物心理。
他很失望。
概括表达：He felt hopeless/desperate.
细节描写：①Upon hearing the bad new, he was suddenly thrown into a world of darkness and sank into hopelessness.
听到这个坏消息，他突然被投入黑暗世界，陷入绝望。
②His beliefs in looking forward and seeing the positive in everything deserted him.
他那种向前看、看到一切事物积极一面的信念抛弃了他。
三、外貌性格描写
运用多种句式进行外貌和性格描写。
1．外貌描写
例1：她圆圆的脸上有一双蓝色的眼睛，还有两个可爱的酒窝。
①On her round face are a pair of blue eyes and lovely dimples.(倒装句型)
②She is a girl with a pair of blue eyes and lovely dimples on her round face.(with引导的介宾结构作后置定语，补充说明人物信息)
例2：李老师三十多岁，身材适中，常梳着马尾辫。
①Miss Li is in her thirties with a medium build and has her hair in a ponytail.(由and连接的并列句；with短语用作状语，表示伴随状态)
②Miss Li is a medium－sized woman in her thirties who often wears/ties her hair in a ponytail.(定语从句补充介绍人物特征)
③Miss Li, in her thirties, is of medium size, and often has her hair tied in a ponytail.(“be of ＋adj.＋n.”结构表示人或物具有某种特征。常用的名词有：size, height, weight, build, age, shape等)
2．性格描写
例1：Such is Ms.Han, an easygoing, kind and warm－hearted woman.
韩老师是一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。
例2：Though he comes from a poor family, he is a person of great determination and courage.
他虽出身贫寒，但拥有坚强的意志和勇气。
四、对话描写
对话描写的3种表现形式。
1．提示语在前
例：A few minutes later, she said, “Grandmother, I am finished now.”
2．提示语在后
例：“Here is Susan！” the girls cried.
3．提示语在中间
例：“I’d like to go with you，” replied Susan, “but I cannot finish the task grandmother set me to do.”
五、环境描写
环境描写，不仅可以揭示故事发生的背景，还可以渲染气氛、衬托人物的内心世界。适当的环境描写可以让文章读起来有立体感和真实感。
例1：Summer sees the mountains turn bright green with growing rice.During autumn, these same mountains are flash gold, and in winter they are covered in sheets of white frost.
夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。
例2：A little way off was a little brook, rushing and sparkling along between green banks.
不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。
【即时训练】
Ⅰ.根据提示用英语写出动作链
1．情节前提：看到失散的儿子，一把抱住。
以“抱住”为关键词写出动作链。
(1)设计动作链：冲上前→蹲下来→一把抱住
(2)用并列谓语：She__dashed__forward,__knelt__down__and__gather__her__son__into__her__arm.
2．情节前提：“做饭”。
(1)设计动作链： 打开冰箱→拿出食物→做饭
(2)用并列谓语：She__opened__the__fridge,__took__out__the__food__she__needed__and__started__to__cook.
3．情节前提： 她获奖，要发言。
以“发言”为关键词写出动作链。
(1)设计动作链：看了眼奖杯→深吸一口气→说到……
(2)用并列谓语：She__glanced__at__the__trophy,__took__a__deep__breath__and__said，“...”
(3)用非谓语动词：She__glanced__at__the__trophy,__taking__a__deep__breath__and__saying，“...”
Ⅱ.运用细节描写，完成下列句子
1．The smile on her face shone__like__a__diamond．
她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。
2．She slipped__out__of__bed and tiptoed__to__the__window．
她溜下床，踮起脚尖走向窗户。
3．She froze__with__shock,__as if rooted to the spot.
她吃惊得呆住了，就像在原地生了根似的。
4．Her eyes widened__further and his mouth opened.
她的眼睛睁得更大了，他的嘴张开了。
5．It was beginning to snow, and snowflakes were__blinding__my__eyes．
天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。
6．A dense earthly sweet smell rose from the ground，enveloping__everything__within__its__soft__embrace．
一股浓郁的泥土般的香味从地上升起，把一切都包裹在它柔软的怀抱里。
7．After he knew what the problem was，his__mind__began__to__race,__trying__to__think__of__a__good__solution．
得知问题所在之后，他的大脑开始急速运转，想要想出一个好的解决方案。
8．Taking a deep breath, I managed to calm__myself__down__and__walked__up__to__the__platform__confidently．
深吸一口气，我成功地让自己镇定，然后自信地走上了讲台。

A
(2021·湖北八校第二次联考)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The story of my new family member
We found a lonely dog a few weeks ago, walking along the road in the countryside.All of a sudden, he was jumping on cars, and at the same time we thought maybe his family was camping somewhere in the neighboring areas.As a consequence we passed by him without hesitation.A few hours later, on our return trip, he was still in the same place, again and again，making an attempt to get people to stop for him.When he caught sight of us approaching, he lay down in the middle of the road，so we failed to get around him.
My father braked hard, pulled up and looked around for a few minutes, trying to figure out whether there was anyone around from whom he had been separated.After getting off the car, we checked the dog carefully.It didn’t appear so.Then we took a good look at the poor but cute dog.He gazed at us eagerly with gloomy eyes.We circled around him in total silence.We had an overwhelming desire to find out what was wrong with him.Unfortunately, we couldn’t find any clues.He had no collar and he was really too thin.Eventually we decided that he had been abandoned.We showed great sympathy for the poor dog.How helpless he was on such an occasion！He was homeless and he had no one to rely on.
On seeing the scene, we couldn’t help begging my parents to raise him.My mother agreed excitedly, “I love this lovely dog.How poor he is! It is high time that we should bring him home.”She stared at the dog with tears welling up in her eyes.We knew my mother was willing to adopt the dog because she was so sweet and she loved dogs very much.My father thought it was dangerous to raise a dog due to the fact that we were too young.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
My father said firmly, “If he doesn’t bite me when I try to pick him up to put him in the car, then we have a new dog.”　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
We took him to the vet (兽医), who said the dog appeared to be in good health.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
【写作思路】　
本文讲述了作者一家在乡下散步的时候看到了一条被遗弃的狗。它可爱聪明，却十分瘦，作者一家对是否收养它展开了讨论。
进行续写时，要通过分析所给的提示句，构思好要续写的情节。根据续写部分的第二段的提示句可知，续写的第一段应该会讲述这只狗加入作者家和作者一家对它的照顾；从作者一家带它去看兽医并联系原文说它很瘦可知，本段应该会讲到它还是很瘦。
续写的第二段：段首句讲到兽医说这只狗很健康，可见此段续写的内容应该聚焦于作者一家得知此信息后的激动心情并描述他们与这只狗的相处过程。
【参考范文】
My__father__said__firmly,__“If__he__doesn’t__bite__me__when__I__try__to__pick__him__up__to__put__him__in__the__car,__then__we__have__a__new__dog.”The dog happily joined us with no fight at all, and the only thing we were in danger of was getting licked.He kept sticking his head between the two front seats and thanked us for picking him up.The dog had clearly been on the road for some time, and he was really too thin.So we fed him a lot over the course of the next two weeks striving to look after him with the hope that he would get stronger (同位语从句)．Unfortunately, all our efforts were in vain.He was still very thin.
We__took__him__to__the__vet__(兽医),__who__said__the__dog__appeared__to__be__in__good__health.The vet guessed the dog was about two years old.He gave the dog all the required shots and we left.“Amazing! The dog is healthy.” My mother said in an excited voice.So thrilled were we that we headed home immediately (部分倒装)．We did love our new family member.The dog was a sweet companion to our family, who was a quick learner and knew how to respond to different instructions.We learned a lesson from the experience that kindness and sympathy would make a big difference to our life.
B
(2021·潍坊市高三统一考试)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
An honest mistake
Karie double－checked the words on her spelling test.If she got 100 percent right today, she’d win her class’s First－Quarter Spelling Challenge and a brand new dictionary.Plus, Ms.McCormack had promised to do a handstand if anyone got a perfect score.
Three more words to go.N－i－c－e－l－y.Q－u－i－c－k－l－y.H－o－n－e－s－t－y.Wait! She’d spelled “honesty”， not “honestly”．She hurriedly erased the t－y and wrote l－y before handing in her paper.
Ms.McCormack graded the test papers at the break.Meanwhile, Karie sat restlessly in her seat with her fingers crossed.Then, Ms.McCormack walked to the front of the room and cleared her throat.As if she were an Olympic gymnast, Ms.McCormack’s feet flipped (空翻) into the air.
“Congratulations, Karie! You did it！” she announced while upside down.
The whole class burst into applause! Ms.McCormack righted herself and presented Karie with her prize.Karie grinned as she read the label on the box：
To Karie Carter, for her perfect first－quarter score in spelling.
“Is everything OK？” Mom asked as Karie burst through the front door after school.Karie didn’t answer.As if by magic, she took out her spelling test paper and prize and showed them to her mother.Mom hugged her, asking her to put the test paper on the fridge so that Dad could see it when he got home.
Karie took another look at the test paper before putting it on the fridge.Her hands stopped in mid－air.She just couldn’t believe her own eyes.“Honesly”？
YES! H－O－N－E－S－L－Y!
Mom sensed something unusual and asked why.Karie stuffed the test paper into her backpack and explained that she was just too excited.Mom brought her some tea.Yes, a “t” was exactly what she needed.
After drinking a little, Karie plodded (沉重缓慢地走) down the hall, lost in thought.How could she tell the class she hadn’t earned the prize and that Ms.McCormack did the handstand for nothing?
注意：续写词数应为150左右；
Later Dad came in with excitement.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
The next morning, Karie went to school earlier than usual.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
【写作思路】　
本文主要讲述Ms.McCormack向学生承诺，如果哪个学生在拼写测试中得满分，她将在教室里做个倒立动作并奖励那个学生一本新字典。学生Karie写错了一个单词，老师批改时并未发现所以给Karie批了满分，并兑现了诺言。当Karie回到家时，她才发现自己的试卷上一个单词的拼写是错误的，并因此陷入沉思。
续写第一段：本段所给的提示信息是父亲兴奋地回到家。考生可在本段描述父亲要看Karie的试卷以及父亲看到成绩后的喜悦心情，并向她表示祝贺，同时还要描写Karie的心理变化过程；考生也可在本段描述父亲发现女儿的拼写错误，并耐心教育女儿要做诚实的人。
续写第二段：本段所给的提示信息是第二天Karie比平时更早地来到学校。再结合标题可知，考生在本段中应描写Karie向老师说明情况并归还字典，同时还要描写老师对此的反应。
【参考范文】
Later__Dad__came__in__with__excitement.“Where’s your spelling test paper，Karie？” Dad asked eagerly.Karie looked away from her father.Anyhow, she reluctantly went to her room and pulled out the test paper.Dad fixed his eyes on the paper, a pleasant smile lifting the corner of his mouth (独立主格结构)．“I’m proud of you, sweetie.We need to celebrate it tonight.”Karie pretended to be smiling all the time.Meanwhile a sense of guilt rose inside her.Feeling she did not deserve the prize, she had a sleepless night for the first time in her life.
The__next__morning,__Karie__went__to__school__earlier__than__usual.Ms.McCormack was unlocking the classroom.“You’re an early bird，” Ms.McCormack said.Karie’s hands trembled.She handed her teacher the spelling paper and the dictionary.“I can’t keep this.I misspelled ‘honestly’ and you didn’t catch it.”For a moment, Ms.McCormack stood quietly reading the label on the dictionary.Then picking up her pen, she crossed out (删掉) the word “perfect” and wrote “honest” before returning the dictionary to Karie.“Keep this, but for honesty.”
C
(2021·湖北重点中学高三联考)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
A sudden call came into Jimmy Gilleece’s bar this past March.A newly married woman who had spent the afternoon at the dive beach bar couldn’t find her wallet.She didn’t care about her ID, credit cards, or $150 in cash, but her wedding ring was just inside.
Gilleece, 42, didn’t like the idea that a theft could have happened at his place, so he spent hours searching 16 different cameras, watching the woman’s every step until she went to sit on a bench outside and left when her ride arrived.Within minutes，a young man approached the bench, put something in his pocket, and walked off.Gilleece posted a clip on the bar’s social media’s page.“I didn’t want to criticize him，” he said.“I just asked if anybody knew who the guy was.” Within hours, Gilleece got a text message from 17－year－old Rivers Prather, who admitted taking the wallet and said he’d done it because he hadn’t eaten for two days.Thinking the ring was fake, he threw the wallet into the ocean and took the money to buy a sandwich.
Gilleece, unsure whether he should believe Prather, told the teenager to meet him at the docks.There, they talked, and Prather said that he wasn’t getting along with his family and had been living in the woods for a week.Gilleece, a father of two，looked at Prather carefully—his small body, his flushing (发红的) cheeks—and saw him for what he was : more of a kid than a criminal.
However, the police were already on the case and because of the missing ring, Prather could be facing severe charges.Gilleece decided to help.He employed two local divers to search the waters where Prather had thrown the wallet.Meanwhile, the police wanted Gilleece to bring the teen to the station.Instead，Gilleece called the police and told them, “He’s going to be at the docks with me tomorrow.”
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
A crowd had gathered to watch the two divers search in the strong current.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
But it wasn’t over for Gilleece.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
【写作思路】
首先要细读所给文本内容，构建出文内线索。从Gilleece对Prather的态度可以看出，他更像是一个孩子而不是罪犯，为下文的情节设置提供了重要的参考依据。
进行续写时，要通过分析所给的提示句构思好要续写的情节。根据续写第一段的提示句可知，本段续写的内容应该围绕寻找戒指的过程展开；而根据续写第二段提示句可知，第二段的续写则应该围绕Gilleece对Prather的后续帮助而展开。
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A__crowd__had__gathered__to__watch__the__two__divers__search__in__the__strong__current.More than an hour passed, with no sign of the ring, Gilleece grew worried，especially when the police began questioning Prather and trying to get him to admit to keeping the ring.Each passing minute increased the chances that the police would arrest the young man (同位语从句)．Then a diver popped up (突然出现)．In his hand was the wallet, and inside was the ring.Cheers erupted from the crowd.Even the police were happy.
But__it__wasn’t__over__for__Gilleece.He’d been troubled about Prather sleeping in the cold woods.Gilleece knew his home was big enough to give Prather a place to live for a while.He told the teen he could stay with his family until he got on his feet again.He also gave the kid a job at his bar.“Most people would have given the footage to the police, but he chose to believe me and help me.I’ll work hard to become a good guy, just as he expected，” Prather said in an interview.
D
(2021·潍坊市高三联考)
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We were bathed in the sunshine of the weekend when an adventurous idea hit me, to go to Panisha Island for a brand new weekend with my brother Jack! Actually, Jack was a good partner, quick－minded and no panic in trouble.
An adventure waited for us ahead.It was only a little after 12 o’clock and it couldn’t hurt to go on a little exploration time.Could it?
We didn’t want to play games at home anyway so I asked Mum, “Can we go to Panisha Island to explore？”
“Oh alright! I guess it’s only a short boat ride away.Be back by 5 o’clock ！” Mum answered us.
We thanked Mum and got on our blue bike.We got to the pier (码头)and bought a two－way ticket to Panisha and back.The sea air blew on our face like silk.I stared out into the sea.I must have stared for a while because soon I heard，“PANISHA ISLAND”．
The moment we got off the boat, we were fascinated by everything around, the clear water, the blue skies, the singing of the birds...but we had no time to appreciate these.We impatiently rushed to what was called Tiger Jungle, surrounded by vast expanses of jungle with various puzzles and traps waiting for us to explore.Lizards, birds, and lots and lots of bugs...Suddenly a rabbit sprung out, staring at us, as if to ask us where we were from.Bees and spiders were also annoying to unprepared us.Seeing a snake winding its way in the bushes farther, I let out a scream! Jack smiled slyly and commanded me to be calm.
A tough passageway led us to natural pools, shallow waters with fishing spots, overgrown bushes and even a plane crash site.“Why not catch some fish here？”I excitedly suggested.Jack was hesitating when a roar (吼叫), like a true tiger, came out from the farther jungle! Jack thought hard and decided to get back quickly.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
Suddenly I missed a step and fell into the pool.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
There was not much time left for the return trip.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
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本文开篇即叙述我想和Jack进行一次探险之旅，因为Jack一向是一个遇事不慌且反应迅速的人，此时文中有暗示，时间刚刚过12点，时间上也合适，所以我向妈妈请求去岛上探险，但妈妈的要求是5点之前回来。而当我和Jack来到了岛上之后，由于被好奇心驱使和时间的限制，我们迫不及待地进入了丛林探险，我们在接二连三地碰到意想不到的动物后Jack决定快速返回。
根据续写部分的第一段的提示句“Suddenly I missed a step and fell into the pool”可知，续写的第一段主要讲述我在落入游泳池后的挣扎和被救助过程；根据续写部分的第二段的提示句“There was not much time left for the return trip”可知，续写的第二段主要讲述在我们的返程时间所剩无几时，我们所发生的事情。通过原文可预测，在我们的努力之下，我们安全无恙地返回，但是其过程会充满波折。
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Suddenly__I__missed__a__step__and__fell__into__the__pool.I was extremely scared，struggling in the water.Seeing what had happened (现在分词短语＋宾语从句), Jack swiftly reached out his right hand, but unfortunately beyond my reach.Then he immediately picked up a stick from behind and gave the other end to me.However, the bank of the pool was too slippery and I was too scared to move.“Calm down! Grab at it firmly！” Jack encouraged in a loud voice.With his help and all my strength, I successfully got out.
There__was__not__much__time__left__for__the__return__trip. Afraid of missing the boat back, Jack dragged me to the pier in a hurry.Meanwhile, I was looking back once in a while for fear that a beast might catch us up.We managed to catch the return boat finally but I had not yet got over the scare.Frightened and tired as I was (让步状语从句), I congratulated myself on returning safe and sound.My brother and I harvested a meaningful exploration and really spent a brand new weekend.
E
(2021·广东八校第一次联考)
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Devi looked through the observation window at the kids below, all waiting in line to get into the pool.She turned to her mother with a furious frown on her face.“Mom, they’re all little kids！I’m 15 already! This is ridiculous！”
“I know, Devi，” replied her mother, “but you’re a beginner，too, and you have to start somewhere！”
Devi had never been to a swimming lesson in her life.Between schoolwork and helping on her grandfather’s farm, she hadn’t had time for lessons.The closest swimming pool Devi had been to was the inflatable (需充气的) alligator pool her mother bought her when she was five.Now that Devi was older, her mother had found a new job in the city, and Devi faced a new challenge—school field trips to the local pool.
The first day that Devi went with her class to the pool, she had no idea what she was in for.What could be so difficult about swimming? Devi confidently slipped into the water and held onto the side of the pool, expecting to be able to touch the bottom with her feet.But when Devi let go of the side of the pool, she slipped under the water—the whole pool was one big deep end！Devi threw her arm toward the side of the pool and grabbed the ledge, out of breath.“I really can’t swim! Everyone’s going to laugh at me！” she thought to herself in a panic.
On the next field trip to the pool, Devi sat on the side on a bench, paralyzed with fear.She huddled with a towel over her shoulders, too embarrassed to try again.When she came home，her mother noticed right away that Devi was upset.“Honey, I’ve signed you up for Angela’s swimming lessons at the local pool.Soon you’ll learn how to swim just like everyone else，” she assured Devi, showing photos of Angela with her prize－winning students.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
Then came the time for Devi to take her first lesson.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
Soon Angela came over to where Devi sat and introduced herself.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
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Devi是一个15岁大的女孩，她从未上过游泳课。有一天，Devi的班级去当地游泳池实践，她以为游泳很简单，结果沉了下去，幸好她及时抓住泳池壁，才出了水面。她觉得大家都会嘲笑她，所以第二次去的时候，她只好坐在泳池边的长凳上，不敢尝试游泳。回到家之后，母亲看出了她的难过，并告诉她已经为她报名参加Angela的游泳课。
根据续写第一段首句和续写第二段的首句可知，续写第一段主要讲了Devi被妈妈带去游泳池后，仍然心存畏惧，举步不前。考生在本段应着重描写Devi的所见所闻所感，要体现出Devi内心的畏畏缩缩。
根据对续写第一段的构思和续写第二段首句可知，本段应该会写Angela到来之后怎么样帮助Devi消除心魔，并帮助她勇敢地踏入泳池。
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Then__came__the__time__for__Devi__to__take__her__first__lesson.She dragged her feet to the side of the pool and sat down, in doubt whether lessons would be helpful (同位语从句)．Scanning around, Devi spotted her instructor across the pool，together with the little kids who jumped into the water like fish leaping into the ocean (定语从句)．She watched in amazement.Envious as Devi was (部分倒装)，a flush of (一阵) embarrassment soon crept to her cheeks when a little girl passed by, asking her not to be scared.How embarrassing！She hung her head.
Soon__Angela__came__over__to__where__Devi__sat__and__introduced__herself.Devi was astonished to be made aware that Angela had never learned swimming until she was 20.Greatly inspired, Devi now regained hope.She entered the pool a second time in the company of Angela，several cheerful kids floating near to cheer her on (独立主格结构)．Devi began to feel more at ease, her movement less stiff and her breath more even.With a grateful heart, Devi realized that though she might not be a fearless swimmer, she would sure have fun trying.
F
(2021·扬州市高三适应性考试)
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It was January 24th.I had finally completed my last radiation treatment.It had been a long journey—eight months in total since my initial diagnosis of breast cancer—and I had been looking forward to this day for a very long time.My husband Casey, who was wearing a pink ribbon on his jacket，was waiting for me in the lobby at Sunnybrook Hospital in Toronto.As a symbol to raise people’s awareness of breast cancer, the pink ribbon had become a part of our life.On the way back home, we reflected on the past months and discussed what lay ahead for our family.
We arrived home in time to have dinner with our three children—Tyler, eleven, Brady, nine, and Eve, six.The kids greeted me with hugs that I think were a little bit tighter and lasted a little bit longer than usual.
We were heading to the skating rink (溜冰场) that night.My son Brady had a hockey game and if his Tiger team won, they would move onto the next round.As a typical Canadian hockey mom, I had always loved going to the rink to watch my kids play.But since my diagnosis, the rink and the Tiger players had come to mean even more to me: it was my happy time in those painful months.
When we arrived at the rink, we were greeted with warm hellos.You could tell it was a big game as there was a large crowd of Tiger parents gathering in the lobby outside the dressing room.About ten minutes before game time, Brady’s coach came out to the lobby and invited all the parents to come into the dressing room.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
As I stepped inside the court, I was struck by how quiet and how pink it was.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

I sensed their determination.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　

【写作思路】　
作者身患乳腺癌，完成了最后一次放疗出院，作者丈夫的夹克衫上系着一条粉红色的丝带——那是提高人们对乳腺癌认识的标志——在医院的大厅里等候。回到家后作者和丈夫以及三个孩子共进晚餐，饭后陪儿子Brady到溜冰场参加冰球比赛。比赛即将开始，Brady的教练来到大厅，邀请所有家长到更衣室。
根据续写第一段首句可知，作者走进赛场，被这里的安静和粉红色惊呆了。结合材料中提示的“粉红色丝带是提高人们认识乳腺癌的标志”可以推知，该段下文应当描写这场比赛的特殊意义：孩子们为了作者做了精心的安排；儿子Brady受到作者战胜乳腺癌的鼓舞，下决心要赢得比赛。
根据续写第二段首句可知，作者感觉到了儿子所在队伍的决心；据此可以推知，该段下文将描述儿子和他的团队比赛的全过程以及比赛结果。在编写故事情节时，应当抓住“粉红色丝带”和“作者战胜病魔对孩子们的鼓舞”这个中心去写。
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As__I__stepped__inside__the__court,__I__was__struck__by__how__quiet__and__how__pink__it__was.There in front of me quietly stood all the players decorated from head to toe in pink (完全倒装＋过去分词短语), and breast cancer symbols were painted on their helmets.They looked like fighters, brave and faithful, who were ready for a serious battle (定语从句)．Then my son Brady came over to me, saying, “We are so grateful that you have shown us through your fight what it really means to be a Tiger.Tonight, we are going to win the game just for you.”Inspired by what Brady said (过去分词短语＋宾语从句), all the players cheered, “It’s time for Tigers！”
I__sensed__their__determination.They stepped into the field confidently.During the whole game, each and every boy performed so wonderfully, skating swiftly and passing balls skillfully.They had never been so cooperative.Even when they fell behind by several points (让步状语从句), they didn’t lose heart (丧失信心)．Instead, they kept fighting together.I supposed they knew I was there for them all the time！And I should also tell them how grateful I was that they were there for me.Of course, the Tiger won the game that night.And I won mine, too.