2020新课标高考英语二轮教师用书：专题5　应用文写作



专题五　应用文写作
[三年考情分析]
卷别
年份
命题形式
信息提示形式
体裁
写作内容
浙江卷
2019
提纲式
文字提示
电子邮件
感谢朋友的帮助
浙江卷
2018
提纲式
文字提示
求职信
应聘做志愿者
浙江卷
2017
提纲式
文字提示
电子邮件
邀请朋友参加郊游

[命题规律]
1．体裁以书信/电子邮件为主，发言稿、日记、书面或口头通知和网络发帖都属于应用文。
2．命题形式主要是提纲式，有文字提示，但开放性在增大，有些也可归类为半开放式。
3．话题贴近考生的日常生活，常涉及中学生的学习、生活以及他们所熟悉和关注的话题，特别是弘扬中国传统文化，突出中国传统价值观。
[命题趋势]
1．预计2020年高考对应用文写作的考查仍将是文字提示类作文，以书信类为主，但为了使考生发挥出写作水平，试题将保持较大的开放性，给出的提纲会高度简洁、概括，为考生留有较大的发挥空间。
2．话题选材与考生的学习、生活、价值观等密切相关，包括学校生活、人际交往、社会活动、传统文化等，重在考查实际生活中的书面表达能力。
[应用文写作解题四步骤]
第一步：认真审题
(1)审体裁，避免格式错误；(2)审时间，避免时态错误；(3)审语气，避免直白生硬。
第二步：拟全要点
研读题目要求中的关键词，用汉语将其写在稿纸上并作为扩展句子或段落的根据，拟要点时要求考生仔细审题，对题目要求中的文章提示要仔细研读，确保要点全面。
第三步：适当补充
由于高考作文的文字提示比较简单，为了行文连贯和满足词数要求，必须适当补充细节，需注意的是在增加细节时一定要适当，切忌任意发挥，画蛇添足。
第四步：成文
合理使用过渡词和关联词，使作文条理清晰、结构层次分明、语言自然流畅。

A篇 (2019·浙江卷)
假定你是李华，经常帮助你学习英语的朋友Alex即将返回自己的国家。请给他写一封邮件，内容包括：
1．表示感谢；
2．回顾Alex对你的帮助；
3．临别祝愿。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Alex，
I'm sorry to hear that you are going to return to your country very soon and I'm writing this email to express my gratitude for your help.
First of all，thank you for helping me learn English.Without your help，I would not have made so great progress in English­learning. Besides，what you told me about your country broadened my horizons and aroused my interest in foreign culture.
I wish you all the best in the future and have a good journey.
Yours，
Li Hua
B篇 (2018·浙江卷)
假定你是李华，你校英语协会招聘志愿者，接待来访的国外中学生。请你写信应聘，内容包括：
1．口语能力；
2．相关经验；
3．应聘目的。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Sir/Madam，
I've learned that the English Association of our school is now in need of some volunteers to receive foreign students visiting our school.I'm writing to apply to join it，thinking that I'm well qualified for the job.
For one thing，I have developed fluency in spoken English.I have no difficulty communicating with them.What's more，I have accumulated related experience by working part­time in a travel agency，accompanying some foreign tourists.And I treasure this as a good chance to broaden my perspective as well as improve my spoken English.
Looking forward to your reply at your convenience.
Yours，
Li Hua
C篇 (2017·浙江卷)
假定你是李华，计划组织一次郊游，请给你的英国朋友Chris写封邮件邀请他参加。内容包括：
1．参加者；
2．时间、地点；
3．活动：登山、野餐等。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Chris，
How are you doing?
I plan to go for an outing，and I would like to invite you to participate.Five of my foreign friends，including you，have been invited to the outing.The time is scheduled for October 1—5，2017.At eight on the morning of October 1，we are to gather at the gate of the Orient Hotel，and there will be a minibus waiting for us.We are going to climb the hill，have a picnic and go camping in the canyon.This activity is busy and interesting.If you have time，you are always welcome to join us.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua


题型一　书信、电子邮件


1．hold a wide range of activities 举办各种各样的活动
2．enjoy a colorful and fruitful life 享有丰富多彩的生活
3．get well prepared for the future 为未来做好准备
4．spare no efforts to improve ourselves 努力提升我们自己
5．learn to take responsibility for yourselves 学会为你们自己负责
6．give me strength to face the challenges in my life给我面对生活中挑战的力量

★精彩开头　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I'm more than delighted to receive your e­mail saying that you have been offered a good job in a big company.
很高兴收到你的邮件，说你被一家大公司聘用了。
2．I'm writing in reply to your notice for a volunteer, hoping that I may have an opportunity to act as a tour guide.
我写信回复你们招聘志愿者的启事，希望我有机会担任导游。
3．I'm sorry not to reply to your e­mail in time because I have been busy these days.
很抱歉没有及时回复你的电子邮件，因为这些日子我一直很忙。
★正文佳句　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．Many people prefer taking the subway to driving cars because it is fast and environmentally friendly.
很多人喜欢坐地铁胜过开车，因为坐地铁又快又环保。
2．As for my favourite figure in Chinese history, it must be Wei Yuan, a great thinker in the late Qing Dynasty.
至于中国历史上我最喜欢的人物，那一定是魏源，一位晚清时期的大思想家。
3．I intend to give up my present post in order to get a more challenging opportunity.
我打算放弃目前的工作，以换取一个更具挑战性的工作。
★余味结尾　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．We hold the belief that the visitors will not only understand traditional Chinese culture better but appreciate its unique beauty.
我们相信，游客不仅能更好地理解中国传统文化，而且还能感受它的独特之美。
2．Hard work never fails to pay off. We should be diligent in order to have a better future.
努力终会获得回报，为了更加美好的未来，我们应该勤奋。
3．Please let me know if you are interested and if you have any other question I'd be happy to help.
如果你感兴趣，请告诉我。如有问题，我将乐意帮忙。

(2019·浙江湖州高三联考)假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请给你的美国朋友Jim写一封邮件，告诉他你打算参加龙舟训练营，希望他一起参加。内容包括：
1．介绍训练营的相关内容(例如：时间、地点、参加者等)；
2．说明你打算参加的原因；
3．询问对方的意向。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词：龙舟训练营Dragon Boat Training Camp
Dear Jim，







Yours，
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Jim，
I'm writing to tell you my exciting plan for the summer holiday.I intend to join a Dragon Boat Training Camp.I wonder if you'd like to go with me.
This camp will open on July 20th，which offers teenagers a chance to enjoy sports and learn about Dragon Boat Festival.As you know，I love both Chinese culture and boating，so that I am definitely in.If you are interested，I'll send you more relevant information.
Hope to meet you at the training camp this summer.
Yours，
Li Hua


1．on behalf of all the students 代表所有学生
2．invite you to participate in our family get­together 邀请你参加我们的家庭聚会
3．confirm your participation at your early convenience 方便的话尽早确认参加
4．with the Mid­Autumn Festival around the corner 随着中秋节的临近
5．have a better understanding of the true meaning of success 更好地理解成功的真正含义
6．arouse our enthusiasm for the traditional Chinese culture 唤起人们对中国传统文化的热情

★精彩开头　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I'd like to invite you to go for a visit with us to the nearby nursing home next Saturday for the Double Ninth Festival.
我想邀请你下周六重阳节与我们一起去访问敬老院。
2．A Chinese Classics Reciting Contest will be hosted in my school. Knowing that you are really into Chinese culture, I'm writing to invite you to participate in it.
我校将要主办“中华经典文学诵读比赛”，知道你对中国文化很感兴趣，我写信邀请你参加。
3．I'm writing to share with you the news about the charity party to be held by our Students' Union next Wednesday. On behalf of the Union, I sincerely invite you to come.
我写信是想和你分享下星期三我们学生会举行的慈善聚会的消息，我代表学生会诚挚地邀请你们到来。
★正文佳句　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．Here are some details about this activity, which are listed as follows.
下面是关于本次活动的一些细节，列举如下。
2．On April 21, an old craftsman will be invited to our class to teach us how to do paper­cutting, which is a traditional Chinese folk art form with a long history.
4月21日，我们将邀请一位老工匠来我们班教我们做剪纸，这是一种历史悠久的中国传统民间艺术形式。
3．The exhibition will take place in our school art gallery on April 26th, aimed to encourage students to respect knowledge and advocate science.
展览将于4月26日在我们学校美术馆举行，目的是鼓励学生尊重知识，倡导科学。
4．I think it is a good chance to appreciate local operas, which will surely help you learn more about Chinese culture.
我认为这是欣赏当地歌剧的好机会，这无疑有助于你更多地了解中国文化。
5．By participating in the activity, not only can we gain much confidence in learning English, but also we can broaden our horizons.
通过参加活动，我们不仅可以增强学英语的信心，还可以拓宽视野。
6．I'm fully convinced that it will help you have a better understanding of traditional Chinese culture.
我完全相信它有助于你更好地了解中国传统文化。
★余味结尾　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I really hope you can come and have fun with us. I would appreciate it if you could give me an early reply.
我真希望你能来和我们一起玩。如能尽早答复，我将不胜感激。
2．I would appreciate it if you could accept my invitation. Best wishes for a happy Spring Festival in China.
如能接受我的邀请，我将不胜感激。祝你在中国春节愉快！
3．I sincerely hope you can come and have a good time. Looking forward to your reply.
我真诚地希望你能来度过一段愉快的时光。期待你的答复。

(2019·浙江绍兴一中期末)假定你是国际班的班长李华，你打算邀请外教Bruce Lee到你们班开办一个有关西方文化知识的讲座。现请你给他写一封邀请信。
内容包括：
1．同学们对他的课以及西方文化非常感兴趣；
2．大家特别希望详细了解节日文化；
3．讲座时间：下周三下午4：00到5：00。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Mr.Lee，
I am writing to invite you to give our class a lecture on western culture.We all show great interest in your lessons and are particularly curious about the customs and traditions in your country，which are so mysterious and fantastic to us.We'd appreciate it if you could deliver such a lecture about western customs，and something related to your traditional festivals.The lecture is to be held from 4 p．m to 5 p．m.next Wednesday.Will you be available then?
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua


1．have strong team spirit 有较强的团队精神
2．have a good command of English 英语掌握得很好
3．have a good relationship with others 与他人保持良好的关系
4．have a gift for communicating with others 有与别人沟通的天赋
5．apply for the position as a student volunteer 申请做学生志愿者
6．have no difficulty communicating with others in English 用英语和别人交流起来毫不费力

★精彩开头　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I am happy to know you are advertising for some volunteers, so I'm writing to apply for this job.
很高兴知道你们在招聘志愿者，我写信是想申请这份工作。
2．I'm writing in the hope that I can obtain an opportunity to further my study in Computer Science in your university.
我写信是希望能获得在贵校计算机专业深造的机会。
3．Having heard that you are recruiting volunteers to teach in the countryside, I am writing to apply for a chance to become a volunteer.
听说你们在招募下乡支教志愿者，我想申请做志愿者。
★正文佳句　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．Here are my qualifications, which are listed as follows.
下面是我的优势，列举如下。
2．Not only am I qualified for the job, but I have the right personality for it.
我不仅具备做好这项工作的资格，而且还具备相应的人格魅力。
3．In addition, I also participate in various social activities in my spare time to seize every opportunity to enhance my personal ability as well as to enrich my business experiences.
此外，为了抓住每一个提升我个人能力的机会和丰富我的工作经历，在业余时间里，我也参加了各种社会活动。
★余味结尾　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I would be grateful if you could give me an opportunity and I am sure I can perfectly live up to your expectations. Looking forward to your early reply.
如果您能给我一个机会，我将感激不尽，我坚信我一定不辜负您的厚望。期待您的早日答复。
2．I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and necessary application materials.
如果您能给我提供一些信息和必要的申请材料，我将不胜感激。
3．Should you offer me an interview，I would be most grateful. Looking forward to your early reply.
如果你能给我机会去面试，我将感激不尽。期盼着你的早日回复。

(2019·东北师大附中高三调研)假如你是李华，得知某杂志社打算组建一个免费英文网络翻译团队，现正在招募英语翻译，你对此很感兴趣，所以用英文给杂志社的编辑写一封申请信，主要内容包括：
1．个人情况(年龄、学历、英语水平等)；
2．加入团队的目的和决心；
3．你的联系方式。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；
3．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Editor，
My name is Li Hua.






Truly yours，
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Editor，
My name is Li Hua.I'm writing to apply for an English translator in your online English translation team.
I'm a girl of 18，presently studying at a high school.Through years of efforts，I've got a good command of English，which makes me qualified to be a translator.To further improve my language skills and broaden my horizons，I wish to become a member of your team.If given the opportunity，I will show you my great sense of responsibility for work.Please reach me at 61188888 at any time.
If you could take my application into account，I would be very grateful.
Truly yours，
Li Hua


1．give rise to the traffic problems 引发交通问题
2．keep a positive attitude towards life 对生活保持乐观态度
3．live up to my parents' expectations 不辜负父母的期望
4．pass our love and friendship to others 把我们的友谊和爱传递给别人
5．get actively involved in class activities 积极参与课堂活动
6．make a contribution to protecting the environment 为保护环境做贡献

★精彩开头　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I know from your letter that you have trouble in learning English. I am writing to offer you some advice.
从你的来信中得知你在学习英语方面遇到了困难。我写信给你提供一些建议。
2．I have received your letter saying that you plan to pay a visit to China next month and stay for ten days. Perhaps the following suggestions are helpful to you.
我已经收到了你的来信。信上说你打算下个月来旅游，并在这儿待十天。可能下面的建议会对你有所帮助。
3．I'm more than pleased to have received your e­mail. Now I'm writing to give you some advice on how to learn English well in high school.
很高兴收到你的电子邮件。现在，关于如何在高中学好英语，我写信给你一些建议。
★正文佳句　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．The contest will begin at 2: 00 p．m. and last two hours, during which time 15 well­prepared contestants will deliver their speeches.
比赛将于下午两点开始，四点结束，在此期间将会有十五位准备充分的参赛者发表演讲。
2．In my humble opinion, it makes good sense to take the following actions.
依我的拙见，采取下列行动是明智的。
3．By the way, you may take Bus No. 322，which will take you directly to the club.
顺便说一下，你可以乘坐322路公交车，它会直接把你带到俱乐部。
★余味结尾　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I hope these suggestions will be of use to you. Remember: The man who has made up his mind to win will never say “impossible”．
我希望这些建议会对你有用。记住：一个决心要成功的人从来不说“不可能”。
2．I hope that my suggestions are helpful to you anyway. I would be more than happy to see your improvement.
无论如何，我希望这些建议能对你有所帮助。我会非常高兴看到你的进步。
3．If you have any questions or requests, please do not hesitate to tell me.
如果你还有任何问题或要求，请及时告诉我。

(2019·安徽合肥高三质检)假定你是李华，来自阳光中学。你校乒乓球队应邀去澳大利亚一所中学参加中学生乒乓球联谊赛。请你给举办学校的联系人威廉姆斯先生写一封邮件询问相关事宜。要点如下：
1．接受邀请，表示感谢；
2．询问食宿、交通及比赛日程等方面的安排；
3．提出相关建议。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头语和结束语都已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear Mr. Williams，
I'm Li Hua，a student from Sunshine Middle School.






Thank you for all your help and look forward to your reply.
Yours，
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Mr. Williams，
I'm Li Hua，a student from Sunshine Middle School.I'm writing to thank you for your invitation and we are delighted to accept it.Playing a table tennis match will no doubt help strengthen our friendship.Could you give me detailed information about the relevant arrangements，such as the accommodation？If so，we can make preparations in advance.Besides，is it possible for you to pick us up at the airport upon our arrival？Also，I would appreciate it if we could work out a proper schedule for both sides.
Thank you for all your help and look forward to your reply.
Yours，
Li Hua


1．be of vital importance to us human being 对我们人类很重要
2．recommend you a website on English writing 向你们推荐一个英语写作网站
3．enrich the after­school lives of foreign students 丰富留学生的课余生活
4．enrich our knowledge and broaden our horizons 丰富我们的知识，拓宽我们的视野
5．be great fun and beneficial to your language learning 非常有趣而且有益于你们的语言学习
6．sign up for the individual oral English training program 报名参加英语口语个人培训

★精彩开头　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．Learning that you are coming to Beijing for a vacation, I'm writing this letter to offer my recommendation.
得知你将来北京度假，我写这封信的目的是给出我的推荐。
2．I'm more than pleased to know that you are learning Chinese. I'd like to recommend a website to you, one for non­Chinese speakers who are learning Chinese, especially for beginners.
得知你在学汉语，我非常高兴。我想向你推荐一个网站。对于汉语非母语的学习者来说，这是一个供母语非汉语的人学习汉语的网站，尤其适合初学者。
3．I've received your letter which says you're going to take part in the Beauty of China Exhibition. Now it affords me much pleasure to recommend a special job to you.
我已收到你的来信，知道你将参加“美丽中国”艺术展。现在我很高兴向你推荐一项特别的工作。
★正文佳句　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．The website possesses a number of advantages. Firstly, it provides you with a variety of online courses, such as Chinese idioms, dialogues and customs.
这个网站有很多好处。首先，它为你提供各种在线课程，如汉语成语、对话和习俗。
2．I am convinced that the program will help you gain a better understanding of Chinese culture.
我相信这个节目会帮助你更好地了解中国文化。
3．Therefore I think not only will it be a good opportunity for you to show your talent but also you can offer us guidance.
因此，我认为它不仅是你展示才能的好机会，而且你还能给我们提供指导。
★余味结尾　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．I hope you will find this website attractive and helpful. Wish you a happy learning time.
希望这个网站对你有吸引力并且有所帮助。祝你学习愉快。
2．In a word, he would be a good choice. I would be grateful if you would like to take my recommendation into consideration.
总之，他是个不错的选择。如果您愿意考虑我的建议，我将不胜感激。
3．Only in this way can we live in comfortable and beautiful surroundings.
只有这样我们才能生活在舒适、美丽的环境中。

(2019·浙江杭州教学检测)假定你是李华，你的美国笔友Jack热爱中国传统文化，最近打算来中国工作生活一段时间，但是不确定应该去往哪个城市，写信向你咨询。请你给他写一封回信，内容包括：
1．你推荐的城市；
2．推荐的理由(不少于两条)；
3．美好祝愿。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Jack，
I am so pleased to learn that you are to spend some time in China.
I recommend you stay in Beijing，the capital and cultural center of China.The city enjoys a high reputation for its abundance of ancient architecture，which represents the traditional local lifestyles.And there are also plenty of museums where precious relics of historical interest are waiting for you to explore.Besides，the exceptional Peking Opera performances there are also what you can't miss.
I wish you a very happy and meaningful time in China!
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
题型二　书面通知或告示

1．gather at the school gate 在学校大门口集合
2．be expected to attend on time 期待按时参加
3．be put off because of the heavy rain 由于大雨被推迟
4．raise our awareness of environmental protection 提高我们的环保意识
5．to satisfy your thirst for the knowledge of the Silk Road 为了满足你们对于丝绸之路知识的渴求
6．encourage students to take part in some outdoor activities 鼓励学生参加一些户外活动

★精彩开头　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．A report will be given on English literature by Professor Yang from Hong Kong University.
来自香港大学的杨教授将做英语文学报告。
2．In order to deepen our understanding of campus culture and stimulate the creativity and imagination of the students, our school will hold a thrilling event.
为了加深我们对校园文化的理解并激发学生们的创造力和想象力，我们学校将举办一个刺激的活动。
3．An exciting event Learning English from Films is around the corner, with the intention of making our school life more colorful and meaningful.
“通过电影学英语”这一激动人心的活动即将到来，目的是使我们的校园生活多彩且有意义。
★正文佳句　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．Those who are interested in it are warmly welcome.
我们将热烈欢迎那些对此感兴趣的人。
2．As scheduled, the lecture will be held in our lecture hall, at 3: 00 next Tuesday afternoon.
按照安排，演讲将于下周二下午三点在演讲大厅举行。
3．Any foreign student who is studying at our school and interested in Chinese poems is welcome to take this optional course.
任何外国留学生，只要在我们学校学习并对中国诗歌感兴趣，都欢迎选修这门课程。
★余味结尾　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　
1．Please take your notebook with you and turn up on time.
请带着笔记本按时到场。
2．If you are interested in it, please go there on time.
如果你们对此感兴趣，请按时到那里去。
3．Be sure to attend it on time. I dare say you will gain a lot from it.
一定按时参加，保证你们受益良多。

(2019·浙江余姚模拟)最近，某科技公司推出一款新型手机，请你根据下表提示，为该款手机写一篇英语广告。
品名
Smart Mobile Phone 9
功能
除了具备手机的一般功能外，还具备一般便携式电脑的功能，支持4G、Wi­Fi等上网模式
特点
体积小、重量轻、易携带、价格合理，适合移动办公人士使用
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Smart Life from Our Smart Mobile Phone 9
Smart Mobile Phone 9 will make your life smarter in an all­round way!
Besides the general functions as a handset，it also serves as a laptop，with which you can surf the Internet wherever you are by using the 4G or Wi­Fi model.It is so intelligent that it is ideal for office workers who are always on the go.
Due to its small size and being light in weight，it is very convenient to carry.What's more，it is a high­quality product sold at a reasonable price.


技法一　认真审题，拟全要点
1．审体裁，避免格式错误
无论书信还是通知都有各自的格式，写对格式是考生写作成功的第一步。
(1)书信的格式：
Dear ×××，


Yours，
Li Hua
(2)通知的格式：
★书面通知：
①在正文之前的正中位置写Notice字样。
②结尾要写明通知发布单位。
★口头通知：
①固定的开场白：Ladies and gentlemen/Boys and girls, may I have your attention please?
②结尾要有结束语：That's all. Thank you等。
2．审时间，避免时态错误
要正确判断谓语动词的时态，这是句子的核心。例如2019全国卷Ⅰ申请信的主体时态是一般现在时；2018全国卷Ⅱ通知的时态以一般将来时和一般现在时为主。
3．审内容，避免要点缺失
遗漏要点是写作大忌。如果要点不全，即使语言正确，结构合理，连贯通顺，也不可能得高分。


(2019·全国卷Ⅰ)假定你是李华，暑假在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要举办中国画展览。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括：
1．写信目的；2.个人优势；3.能做的事情。
注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。





考生作文
Dear Mr，
I am Li Hua. I am a Chinese student and now I am studying in London in the summer vacation. I'm very happy to learn that your local gallery will hold a Chinese painting exhibition. I would like to do some voluntary work for the exhibition.So I am writing this letter asking to be a volunteer.
I am good at English and like Chinese paintings. I would like to volunteer to help visitors, introduce Chinese paintings, spread Chinese culture, and strengthen world cultural exchange. My aim is to let China go to the world and let the world understand China. I would appreciate it if you could consider my request.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

名师点评
总体来说，此篇作文格式、人称、时态、要点等都符合要求。存在的问题如下：
(1)用词不当：Mr不能单独使用，需和姓氏等连用。
(2)结构不当：首段背景介绍应简略，重点应放在个人优势和能做的事情上等。
(3)语义重复：第一段的后两句有重复的嫌疑，用一句话就可解决的事情无需用两句话。
(4)词汇提升：very happy, be good at, like，consider等词汇都可以寻求更高级的表达。
(5)句式提升：此篇开头的前两句可读性不强，可用名词短语作同位语和定语从句进行提升；第三句的主动语态可改成被动语态。
(6)另外，其他词汇、句式等也可以进一步提升。

作文提升
Dear Sir，
I am Li Hua, a Chinese student who is taking a summer course in London. I'm more than thrilled to learn that a Chinese painting exhibition will be held in your local gallery. I am writing to apply for the post of a volunteer.
I have a good command of English as well as being keen on Chinese paintings, which enables me to introduce visitors to Chinese paintings easily. Besides, I would like to spread Chinese culture and strengthen world cultural exchange through this activity. My aim is to let China go to the world and let the world understand China. I would appreciate it if you could take my request into account.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua


Ⅰ.结合下列写作要求，完成谋篇及拟点任务。
假设你是李华，你的外国网友Peter因迷恋手机游戏而被父母批评，他为此写信向你抱怨。请给他写一封回信，要点包括：
1．对Peter受到批评表示遗憾；
2．指出Peter的错误；
3．给出建议。
注意：1.词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。






(一)认真审题
1．本文为信件，属于应用文，应注意书信的格式。
2．时态以一般现在时为主。
3．人称以第二和第一人称为主。
(二)拟全要点
1．听到你受到父母的批评我感到很遗憾。
2．老实说，你确实该受责备。
3．作为学生，我们的首要任务是努力学习而不是沉迷于手机游戏。
4．你父母的所作所为都是因为他们关心你。
5．你非常有必要合理安排学习和休闲时间。
6．你绝不该再沉迷于手机游戏从而让你的父母失望。
(三)范文填充
Dear Peter，
I'm sorry to hear that you were scolded by your parents.But to be honest，1.it is indeed you that are to blame．
To start with，it is the primary task 2.to study hard rather than stay addicted to phone games．In addition，the reason why your parents criticised you is 3.that they care about you．How I wish you could put yourself in their shoes! What's more，it is necessary that 4.you arrange your time for study and leisure wisely．At no time should you let phone games absorb you again and disappoint your parents.
Hope what I say will cheer you up.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
Ⅱ.书面表达(邀请信)
(2019·浙江六校教育研究会联考)假定你是李华，正在你班学习汉语的英国留学生Bill对中国的建筑很感兴趣，周末你想带他到苏州园林游玩。请你给Bill写一封电子邮件，邀请他一同前往。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Bill，
How are you doing? I'm writing to invite you to visit Suzhou Gardens with me.
As the weather is excellent this weekend, I will pay a visit to Suzhou Gardens, a beautiful tourist attraction. As far as I know, you are deeply interested in Chinese history and culture, especially Chinese buildings of fancy designs. In Suzhou Gardens, I'm convinced that you are sure to be attracted by varieties of buildings. If free, would it be possible for you to meet me at the railway station at 6 a．m. on Saturday morning? We will go there by train and return on Sunday afternoon. I would be delighted if you could be with me.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours，
Li Hua
技法二　引人入胜的开篇语
1．如何写好开头？
开头一般来说要做到开门见山，使读者了解文章要谈什么，最好能立刻引起读者的兴趣。
(1)背景法——说明事件发生的时间、地点、背景等。
[典例]Last week I took part in a farmwork programme in the suburbs.(2019·北京高考书面表达)
(2)数据法——引用已经被证实的某些统计数字来引出话题。
[典例]The box­office income of Chinese movies witnessed a constant increase from about 17 billion yuan in 2012 to over 40 billion in 2015. (2017·江苏高考书面表达)
(3)主题句法——提出一个观点或论据作为文章要阐明和论述的主题。
[典例]When it comes to the season I like best，summer will always occur to me in no time.(2016·四川高考书面表达)
(4)实例法——通过一个实例或现象引出话题。
[典例]Online voting becomes increasingly popular，and many competitions get people involved in it.(2016·江苏高考书面表达)
(5)问题法——用提出问题的方法来引出文章的内容，以吸引读者的注意力。
[典例]Why do we go to university? Different people have different opinions.
(6)引语法——摘录或引用某些名人的名言或常见的习语、谚语作为文章的开端。
[典例]There is an old English saying, “Gain time, gain life”. Then what is time? Time is something that we can't see or touch, but we can feel it pass by.
2．书信的开头
英语书信的特点是开门见山，在写作中我们常用I'm writing to do sth.来表达目的；用I'd like to do sth.来表示打算。
求职信可说
I'm writing to apply for the position ... 或Learning from ..., I'd like to apply for the post ...
咨询信可说
I'm writing to inquire/ask for some information about ...
感谢信可说
I'm writing to express my thanks for ... 或I'd like to convey my heartfelt thanks to you for ...
建议信可说
I'm writing to express my view concerning ...
投诉信可说
I'm writing to complain about ...
道歉信可说
I'm writing to make an apology to you for ...
邀请信可说
I'm writing to tell you something about ... Would you like to ...?
3．通知的开头
直接说明通知内容，常用there be句式或被动语态。
[典例1]An English Club will be set up on September 16, 2020 in our school.
[典例2]There will be a lecture on American culture in our school on Friday evening.
[典例3]A five­day outdoor survival training will be organized by our school during the summer vacation yet to come.
[典例4]An exciting event “Innovations on Campus”is around the corner.Each of you is expected to be part of the event which encourages creative minds and gives full play to your DIY skills.


(2018·全国卷Ⅱ)你受学生会委托为校宣传栏“英语天地”写一则通知，请大家观看一部英文短片Growing Together，内容包括：
1．短片内容：学校的发展；
2．放映时间、地点；
3．欢迎对短片提出意见。
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。








考生作文(开头)
名师点评
作文提升
　　There is going to have a short English film this weekend.Its name is Growing Together. It's mainly about the development of our school.
(1)文中there be结构使用错误。
(2)开篇用了三个简单句，让阅卷人一看就觉得是初级水平，应采用高级句式进行提升。
(3)有些单词如about也可以进行优化。

　　There is going to be a short English film named Growing Together this weekend，which is mainly related to the development of our school.

Ⅰ.请用上述开头法翻译下列句子。
1．上周日，我和同学们去了香山公园。
Last Sunday, my classmates and I went to Xiangshan Park. (以背景开篇)
2．眼下，街谈巷议，人们的热门话题总离不开“三贵”：买房贵、上学贵、看病贵。
Nowadays it is often talked about that there are three things that people can't afford. It is expensive to buy houses, to pay for the children's education and to see the doctor.(以主题句开篇)
3．当有那么多方式可以与学生家长沟通时，家访还有必要吗？
Are home visits necessary when there are so many ways to communicate with students' parents？(以问题开篇)
4．正如谚语所说的那样“时间就是金钱”，是的，情况确实就是这样。
As the saying goes, “Time is money.” Yes, it's indeed the case.(以引语开篇)
5．最近的研究表明，有50%的学生不吃早饭。
A recent study shows that 50% of the school kids don't have breakfast.(以数据开篇)
6．当今，很多大城市的人们在抱怨交通拥挤，这已经严重影响了人们的日常生活和经济发展。
Nowadays, people in many big cities are complaining about heavy traffic. It has seriously influenced people's daily life and economic development.(以实例开篇)
Ⅱ.书面表达(建议信)
(2019·湖南省六校联考)假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jamie来信说他对中国传统文学非常感兴趣，但在阅读时遇到了困难，比如很多汉字不认识，读不懂文章的意思等，希望得到你的帮助。请给他回信，内容包括：
1．表示理解并给予安慰；
2．提出建议。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：中国传统文学traditional Chinese literature；汉字Chinese character







【参考范文】
Dear Jamie，
I am more than glad to know that you are interested in the traditional Chinese literature. It's never easy to learn Chinese characters and essays. Even native Chinese speakers may find it hard to learn them well, so you don't have to feel upset. Here are some useful tips.
First, turn to the Internet for help when you have a problem, where you can learn how to read and write the characters. Second, you can learn from Chinese people around and I'm always here to help you. But the most important is to keep on learning and practicing. You are sure to make progress!
Best wishes!
Yours，
Li Hua
技法三　丰富充实的细节信息
高考书面表达多为开放性作文，题目要求中的提示很少。如果只是简单翻译提示内容，词数肯定不够，因此在写作时需要适当充实一些与提示内容相关联的细节信息内容。
1．列举具体的实例进行补充说明。
[例1]我要花一些时间和父母在一起。
I'll spend some time staying with my parents.
→I'll spend some time staying with my parents, chatting with them and doing some housework.
[例2]我是一个充满活力的健康男孩，我非常喜欢体育运动。
I am a healthy boy full of energy and I like sports very much.
→I am a healthy boy full of energy and I like sports very much, especially outdoor activities. Whenever I have time, I'll go hiking or mountain­climbing with my classmates.
2．增添相关的神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等内容。
[例1]旅行了一周后，他回到了家。
After a week's trip, he returned home.
→After a week's trip, he returned home, tired but happy.
[例2]我有时去村西的小河游泳。
I went swimming in the river in the west of the village now and then.
→I went swimming in the river in the west of the village now and then, in which the water was very clear.
3．增添相关信息的时间、地点等内容。
[例1]我要和父母一块去超市购物。
I'm going to do some shopping in the supermarket.
→I'm going to do some shopping in the supermarket and won't be back until 5: 00 o'clock in the afternoon.
[例2]我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。
I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return.
→I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library.
4．增添相关的原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的等内容。
[例1]我将参加一些社会活动。
I will take part in some social activities.
→If possible, I will take part in some social activities so that I can know more about the society.
[例2]我需要好好休息，我要做些阅读。
I need a good rest. I'll do some reading.
→I need a good rest because I do feel tired after the hard work of all these years. I'll do some reading for fun, as well as for knowledge.
5．结尾适当发挥，写出个人感受、评价、愿望、倡议等。
[例1]Although I was very tired this summer holiday, I felt very happy for what I did.(个人感受)
尽管我这个暑假很累，但是我为我做的感到高兴。
[例2]I think such activities are necessary and meaningful.(评价)
我认为这样的活动很有必要也很有意义。
[例3]I sincerely hope my advice can be helpful to you and that you can enjoy your new school life. (愿望)
我衷心希望我的建议能够对你有所帮助，你能够享受你在新学校的生活。
[例4]As a student, it's our duty to protect our school environment and make it clean.(倡议)
作为一个学生，保护我们校园的环境并使之干净是我们的职责。


(2017·全国卷Ⅱ)假定你是李华，想邀请外教Henry一起参观中国剪纸(paper­cutting)艺术展。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：
1．展览时间、地点；
2．展览内容。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。





考生作文
Dear Henry，
I am Li Hua.There will be a Chinese paper­cutting exhibition.It will be held in the art gallery in our city center.The time is from 8：00 am to 5：00 pm.I'm writing to invite you to see the Chinese paper­cutting exhibition.
Paper­cutting is a traditional art form in China.It has a long history.In the exhibition you can see many kinds of paper­cutting works.Some famous paper­cutting artists will perform how to cut paper on the spot.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

名师点评
(1)作文的词数偏少一些，主要是对于展览内容的描写没能适当增加细节所致。例如悠久的历史可以具体到时间有多长，剪纸有什么用途，你会有什么收获等。另外，结尾处可以增加个人的愿望等。
(2)第一段用了五个简单句，可用较复杂的句式进行优化。
(3)第二段中的一些句子也可以进行优化。例如可以用复合句，there be结构等。

作文提升
Dear Henry，
I'm writing to invite you to attend the Chinese paper­cutting exhibition to be held in the art gallery from 8：00 am to 5：00 pm next Sunday in our city center.
Paper­cutting is a traditional art form in China，which has a history of more than 1，500 years.People often beautify their homes with paper­cutting during festivals and weddings. In the exhibition you can see paper­cutting works of various patterns.In addition，there are famous artists who will perform how to cut paper on the spot.Through the exhibition，you can not only enjoy the folk art works，but also learn a lot.
I hope that you can grasp this opportunity to learn traditional Chinese culture further.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua


Ⅰ.根据括号内的提示完成句子。
1．However, it seems that people are not aware of the negative effects of mobile phones on communication. For example, many people begin to pay less attention to face­to­face communication(例如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流)．
2．At that moment, I became the focus of the whole class and was full of great pride and confidence(充满了自豪和自信)．
3．Several minutes had gone by(几分钟过去了), but the whole class was still in complete silence.
4．Besides, remember to speak slowly and clearly so that you can leave a good impression on the audience and judges(以便你能够给观众和裁判留下良好的印象)．
5．Let's develop good habits of saving energy in our daily life and try to make more contributions to our environment(尽力为我们的环境做出更多贡献)．
Ⅱ.书面表达(申请信)
(2019·贵州省部分重点中学联考)假如你是李华，准备参加在你市举办的“一带一路”国际青少年志愿者招聘活动，活动主办方要求能够熟练运用英语。请你用英语写封信，推荐自己。内容包括：
1．你的自荐理由；
2．你对活动的理解。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。




【参考范文】
Dear Sir，
I'm writing to apply to be a volunteer of the Belt and Road International Youth Culture Festival.
Firstly, I'm good at English and Chinese, which plays an important role in communicating with others. Secondly, I am fond of Chinese culture and have a rich knowledge of Chinese history, enabling me to make a detailed introduction to our splendid culture. What's more, this activity provides an opportunity to learn from students coming from around the world. I hope I can broaden my horizons and improve my ability so that I can make more contributions to society.
I believe I can be a qualified volunteer. If accepted, I won't let you down. Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua
技法四　巧妙的过渡，连贯的衔接
为使作文的上下文语义连贯，逻辑关系清晰，在句与句之间，段与段之间恰当地使用一些承上启下的衔接(过渡)性词语是非常必要的。
1．表示起始关系的过渡性词语。
above all, first of all, to begin with, according to, as you know/as is known, as is shown in...，when it comes to等。
[例1]First of all, I think it important to make more friends abroad.
[例2]As is shown in the picture, a tree is knocked down by the strong wind, while the grass stays as it is.
2．表示时间顺序的过渡性词语。
first(ly), second(ly), third(ly), then, later, in the end, finally, at last, after that, afterwards, since then, meanwhile等。
[例1]Secondly, we should get up early to memorize idioms and useful expressions.
[例2]Meanwhile, we all enjoyed the beauty of nature.
[例3]I had a bad cold last week. First, I had a running nose, but I did not take it seriously.Then I began to cough. After that, I had a fever and felt weak. Finally, I was sent to hospital and had to lie in bed for three days.
3．表示并列关系的过渡性词语。
and, or, also, as well as, neither ... nor ..., not only ... but also ..., either ... or ..., not ... but ...等。
[例1]Work hard, and you will be admitted to a key university.
[例2]Swimming not only benefits our health, but also helps us have a strong will.
4．表示转折关系的过渡性词语。
but, yet, however, while, otherwise, on the contrary等。
[例1]However, not until the match was over did we realize that we became the loser.
[例2]On the contrary, smart phones not only take up our valuable time, but also do great harm to our health.
5．表示因果关系的过渡性词语。
because, as, since, for, thanks to, due to, as a result of, so, therefore, as a result/consequence等。
[例1]Thanks to the doctor's timely treatment, he was saved.
[例2]Therefore, I suggest we should be given more time for sports and sleep.
6．表示条件关系的过渡性词语。
if, unless, in case (of), as/so long as, on condition that等。
[例1]I would be very grateful if you can meet him at the airport.
[例2]As long as you don't lose heart, you're sure to succeed.
7．表示递进关系的过渡性词语。
besides, in addition, what's more, furthermore, moreover, what's worse, still less, to make matters worse, worse still, on (the) one hand ... on the other (hand) ..., for one thing ... for another ...等。
[例1]In addition, we shouldn't neglect the fact that everyone wants a friendly and peaceful society.
[例2]On the other hand, online shopping also has many disadvantages.
8．表示列举事实的过渡性词语。
such as, for example/instance, take ... for example, that is to say, as follows, in other words等。
[例1]Take Beijing for example, it is one of the oldest cities in the world.
[例2]That is to say, if you want to succeed, you have to believe in yourself.
9．表示观点的过渡性词语。
in my opinion, in my view, in my point of view, as far as I am concerned, as for me, personally (speaking), I think ...等。
[例1]As far as I am concerned, I love wealth, but I value health more.
[例2]In my opinion, people shall not smoke in public places.
10．表示总结的过渡性词语。
in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a/one word, to sum up, all in all, on the whole, in general, generally speaking等。
[例1]In a word, success is important, and so is failure, because it's the mother of success.
[例2]All in all, traveling is the best choice to recharge ourselves and get ready for the new challenges.


(2018·全国卷Ⅲ)假定你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter 来信询问你校学生体育运动情况。请给他回信，内容包括：
1．学校的体育场馆；
2．主要的运动项目；
3．你喜欢的项目。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。





考生作文
Dear Peter，
I am delighted to hear from you.In your letter you asked me about the physical exercise in our school.I'd like to tell you about it.Our school has built a new stadium recently.There are many well­equipped facilities in the new stadium.The new stadium is behind the library and looks very beautiful.In the stadium we can hold many kinds of sports events，such as playing basketball and table tennis.My favourite is basketball.I think it has been giving me strength to confront the challenges in my life.I sincerely invite you to come to our school and join me in experiencing the physical exercise.
Yours，
Li Hua

名师点评
(1)本文的词数符合要求，而且还使用了delighted，well­equipped，favourite，confront，challenge等高级词汇，但给人感觉却像是一盘散沙，其原因是缺少衔接词，段落不清晰。
(2)可以采用英语作文最常用的“三段式”作文，加入适当的过渡衔接词语或句式，使其段落分明，层次清晰。
(3)另外，我们可以用一些高级词汇或高级句式对句子进行提升。

作文提升
Dear Peter，
I am delighted to hear from you.Since you asked me about the physical exercise in our school，I'd like to tell you about it.
Firstly, a new stadium has been built in our school recently，in which there are many well­equipped facilities.Located behind the library，the new stadium looks very beautiful.Besides，a wide range of sports events can be held there，such as playing basketball as well as table tennis.As far as I'm concerned, basketball is my favourite，because it has been giving me strength to confront the challenges in my life.
All in all, I sincerely invite you to come to our school and join me in experiencing the physical exercise.
Yours，
Li Hua


Ⅰ.请用过渡性词语完成句子。
1．First of all/To begin with(首先), the most significant thing is to set a goal, work out a plan and carry out your plan step by step.
2．As is known to all/As we all know(众所周知), shoes play an important role in our life, for it can protect our feet from being hurt.
3．I lost my way in the forest and to make matters worse/worse still(更糟的是), it became dark.
4．Besides/In addition/What's more/Moreover(况且), I can experience different cultures and widen my knowledge.
5．In a word/In conclusion/In short/In brief(总之), changes in our life in the past twenty years have brought us comfort and convenience.
Ⅱ.书面表达
(2019·重庆一中模拟)假定你是一名加拿大籍交换生 David，2018 年来到中国华为公司学习，期间好友李华在汉语学习和生活方面给了你很大的帮助。请你给他写信，表示感谢。要点如下：
1．简述你在公司学习期间遇到的困难，如语言、生活等；
2．感谢好友李华给予的帮助；
3．邀请他来加拿大旅游。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Li Hua，
I am writing to express my sincere gratitude to you for your generous help given to me.Without your encouragement and advice, I wouldn't have benefited so much from the experience.
During my stay in Huawei, I came across a lot of difficulties. First of all, Chinese was the major troublemaker for me. Due to a limited vocabulary, I was always afraid of communicating with others in Chinese. It was you who encouraged me to be confident to express myself fluently in Chinese. What's more, whenever I was overwhelmed by homesickness, you were always with me, and were ready to give me help patiently.
My appreciation is beyond any words and I will be more than pleased if I can show you around Canada in return for your kindness.
Yours，
David
技法五　高级的词汇，复杂的句式
1．使用高级词汇。
(1)标新立异
写作时恰当得体地使用高中学过的、别人可能想不到的词汇，会给阅卷人耳目一新的感觉。
[例1]We have too much homework to do at the weekend.
→We have endless homework to do at the weekend.
[例2]In the coming three years, our school life will be difficult.
→ In the coming three years, our school life will be challenging.
[例3]I should be free any time after school next week.
→I should be available any time after school next week.
(2)短语优先
多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。
[例1]Developing a good habit is also important.
→Developing a good habit is also of importance.
[例2]What's more, we can pour out the troubles we face, and release our pressure from different aspects.
→What's more, we can pour out the troubles we are faced with, and release our pressure from different aspects.
[例3]As the number of English learners is increasing, it's not difficult for them to understand these words in Chinese contexts.
→ As the number of English learners is on the increase/rise, it's not difficult for them to understand these words in Chinese contexts.
2．使用复杂句式。
(1)复合句
复合句包括定语从句、名词性从句(主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句和同位语从句)和状语从句。
[例1]A sailor who has experienced no storm will never become an excellent sailor.(定语从句)
[例2]What impressed me most was that they had had professional training. (主语从句和表语从句)
[例3]I am wondering whether you can pick him up at the airport.(宾语从句)
[例4]I hold the opinion that we should go to help them overcome the present difficulty. (同位语从句)
[例5]Whatever the result is, we should accept it with a smile, because we have tried our best. (状语从句)
(2)非谓语动词与with复合结构
非谓语动词包括不定式、动名词和分词(现在分词和过去分词)，特别是with复合结构的应用更是写作中的一大亮点。
[例1]Many questions have to be settled and much remains to be done in our educational work.
[例2]Touched by the teacher's words, we decided to work hard.
[例3]Knowing that our library is going to buy books, I'd like to give some suggestions.
[例4]With the society developing rapidly, it's necessary for us to have a good knowledge of English and computer.
(3)特殊句式与其他
[例1]It was when I entered senior high school that I realized the importance of English.(强调句型)
[例2]Only in this way can the children grow up mentally and physically healthy.(倒装句)
[例3]Although faced with many problems, they didn't lose heart.(省略句)
[例4]It is high time that both children and parents took action to make small changes.(虚拟语气)
[例5]What a good time we had with the peasants that day！(感叹句)
[例6]There is no need to worry about it as the government is now making every effort to provide more jobs.(there be句式)


(2017·全国卷Ⅰ)假定你是李华，正在教你的英国朋友Leslie学习汉语。请你写封邮件告知下次上课的计划。内容包括：
1．时间和地点；
2．内容：学习唐诗；
3．课前准备：简要了解唐朝的历史。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。





考生作文
Dear Leslie，
I am very glad to know you are interested in Tang poems.I'm writing to tell you the plan for the next class.
To start with，I want to stress that our next lesson will take place in Classroom 8 of the Teaching Building at 10 a．m.next Friday.Besides，in order to know more about Chinese culture，you will learn some Tang poems，which are popular among Chinese people.
I don't doubt that you should know about the history of Tang Dynasty in advance.I think it will make the class go smoothly.
I hope to receive your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

名师点评
本文的词数符合要求，但是由于缺少高级的表达而影响了文章的档次。
(1)有些词汇可进行提升，例如glad可升级为delighted，tell可升级为inform ...of ...，want可升级为intend，should可升级为be supposed to等。
(2)有些句式也可以提升，例如第二段第一句可以用主语从句和表语从句来表达，第三段可以用一个含有定语从句的复合句来表达。
(3)另外，非谓语动词以及there be句式的合理使用同样能提升文章的档次。

作文提升
Dear Leslie，
I am very delighted to know you have a taste for Tang poems.I'm writing to inform you of the plan for the next class.
To start with，what I intend to stress is that our next lesson will take place in Classroom 8 of the Teaching Building at 10 a．m.next Friday.What's more, in order to have a better understanding of Chinese culture，you will learn some Tang poems，which are popular among Chinese people.
There is no doubt that you are supposed to know about the history of Tang Dynasty in advance，which I think will make the class go smoothly.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

Ⅰ.请按要求进行词汇和句式的升级。
1．The teacher directed the gifted students towards the more difficult courses.(用高级词汇替代黑体词)
→The teacher directed the gifted students towards the more challenging courses.
2．I met one of my classmates on my way to school yesterday.(用短语替代黑体词)
→I came across one of my classmates on my way to school yesterday.
3．During holiday seasons, I will live in the countryside. There air is fresh and people are friendly.(用定语从句合并句子)
→During holiday seasons, I will live in the countryside, where air is fresh and people are friendly.
4．After most of the problems had been solved, I felt a great weight taken off my mind.(用with复合结构改写句子)
→With most of the problems solved, I felt a great weight taken off my mind.
5．Our parents have devoted their unconditional love to us, which indeed deserves our appreciation and reward.(用强调句型改写句子)
→It's our parents who/that have devoted their unconditional love to us, which indeed deserves our appreciation and reward.
6．The local government didn't realize the problem until the river was seriously polluted.(用倒装句改写句子)
→Not until the river was seriously polluted did the local government realize the problem.
Ⅱ.书面表达
(2019·银川六中模拟)为弘扬中国传统文化，学生会(the Student Union)将举行“诗歌朗诵大赛”(Poetry Reciting Contest)，邀请学校国际部学生参加。请你根据提示写一则通知。内容要点包括：
1．大赛的目的；
2．大赛的时间、地点；
3．朗诵内容：唐诗宋词(Tang and Song poetry)。
注意：1.词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Notice
Aimed to promote traditional Chinese culture, the Student Union is to hold the Poetry Reciting Contest.
There is no doubt that by reading poetry you can appreciate the beauty of Chinese classical literature. As scheduled, the contest is supposed to launch on June 6th, 2019 at the school Lecture Hall. Students from the international department are expected to take part. Additionally, it is recommended that you should prepare a few Tang and Song poems. Not only can the contest cultivate the habit of reading classic works but also arouse your interest in traditional Chinese literature.
Hopefully, you will benefit a lot and become immersed in the world of fascinating poetry. Your participation will surely make a difference.
The Student Union
技法六　规避重复，使用多样化的表达
为了使表达更生动，更富表现力，在写作时应尽量避免重复使用同一词语或句式来表达同一意思，使用多样化的表达方式可以使文章更具可读性。
1．规避词汇的重复。
[例1]I like reading while my brother likes watching football matches.
→I like reading while my brother enjoys watching football matches.
[例2]We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also built a library where the old playground used to be.
→We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also set up a library where the old playground used to be.
[例3]When going on trips, we should behave ourselves and obey the culture and customs there. Besides, the environment should be protected.
→When going on trips, we should behave ourselves and obey the culture and customs there. Besides, the environment is supposed to be protected.
[例4]Most of my classmates wanted to go to the park while I wanted to go to a nicer place.
→Most of my classmates wanted to go to the park while I had an idea of going to a nicer place.
[例5]I'm writing to ask for your help ... I'd appreciate it if you could help me.
→I'm writing to ask for your help ... I'd appreciate it if you could do me a favour.
2．规避句式的重复。
[例1]We can borrow five books most, and we can keep them for ten days.
→We can borrow five books most, and they can be kept for ten days.
[例2]I'm Li Hua, who is a student of Xinhua Middle School. I happen to have a book, which I think might help you.
→I'm Li Hua, a student of Xinhua Middle School. I happen to have a book, which I think might help you.
[例3]We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. We may have different ways to deal with such a situation.
→We may have different opinions in organizing class activities. There may be various ways to deal with such a situation.


(2016·全国卷Ⅱ)假定你是李华，你校摄影俱乐部(photography club)将举办国际中学生摄影展。请给你的英国朋友Peter写封信，请他提供作品。信的内容包括：
1．主题：环境保护；
2．展览时间；
3．投稿邮箱：intlphotoshow @gmschool.com。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。





考生作文
Dear Peter，
I'm writing to invite you to participate in the International High School Student Photography Show，which will be held by our school photography club.
The theme of the International High School Student Photography Show is environmental protection，which aims to call on people to do what they can to protect the environment.It will start from September 1st and last for four weeks.As your best friend，I know you do well in taking photos.So I suggest you participating in it.You can not only show your talent but also do something for the environmental protection.
If you want to participate, you can send your photos to intlphotoshow@gmschool.com.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

名师点评
本文词数符合要求而且使用了高级句式，总体来说是一篇不错的作文。下面主要从规避重复方面谈一下存在的问题：
(1)本文在词汇上出现了一定的重复。例如participate (in)出现了三次，我们如果用join (in)，take part (in)来替换另外两个会更好。
(2)在句式上有两处使用了which引导的定语从句，而且两处距离较近，我们可以使用不同的表达方式。
(3)另外，其他的词汇、短语和句式也可以进一步优化。

作文提升
Dear Peter，
I'm writing to invite you to join in the International High School Student Photography Show to be held by our school photography club.
The theme of the International High School Student Photography Show is environmental protection，aiming/which aims to appeal to people to do what they can to protect the environment.It will start from September 1st and last for four weeks.As your best friend，I know you are skilled at taking photos.So I suggest you (should)participate in it.Not only can you show your talent but also do your bit for the environmental protection.
If you want to take part，you can send your photos to intlphotoshow@gmschool.com.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

Ⅰ.为避免重复，请用不同的表达法替换第二处黑体部分。
1．He likes playing football while his brother likes playing the piano.
第二个likes→enjoys/is fond of
2．We all know that when we need help, our friends will help us.
help us→lend us a (helping) hand/do us a favor
3．30 percent of girls want to become teachers while only 5 percent of boys want to do that.
第二个want→would like
4．Firstly, you should know about your own interest and advantages. Secondly, you should turn to your teachers and parents for help and consider their advice.
第二个should→are supposed to
5．The book is written in old Chinese, which is difficult to understand. It describes a tragedy about love and the decline about a big family, which exposes the social crisis.
which exposes→exposing
Ⅱ.书面表达(祝贺信)
(2019·昆明市诊断测试)假定你是李华，你的好友Peter在你校上周举办的“美丽校园”摄影比赛中获奖了。请根据以下要点给他写一封邮件：
1．表示祝贺；
2．你对获奖作品的看法；
3．希望他分享摄影经验。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Peter，
Congratulations on your winning the prize in the photo­taking competition held last week with the title of Charming School.
Your work stands out in the competition, which is quite representative of all works and close to the theme reflecting our school culture. Besides, skills of taking photos are also in the prior position. In a word, you've done well in all the required aspects. So you've got the prize and I feel proud of you. Congratulations to you again from the bottom of my heart!
I hope you can share with me your skills of taking pictures.
Yours，
Li Hua
技法七　使用地道英语，避免汉语式英语
由于语言环境存在差异，中国学生学习英语会受到汉语的影响，一些考生容易按照汉语的思维进行写作，从而出现了大量汉式英语。例如“好好学习，天天向上。”翻译为“Good good study, day day up.”然而这只是一个笑话而已！
1．避免词汇层面的汉语式表达。
[例1]It's known that the cost in big cities is very expensive.
→It's known that the cost in big cities is very high.
[例2]We walked a far way before planting trees.
→We walked a long way before planting trees.
[例3]My grandfather very likes red tea and has it every day.
→My grandfather likes red tea very much and has it every day.
[例4]He returned back to his hometown after graduation.
→He returned to his hometown after graduation.
[例5]He opened the light after he entered the room.
→He turned on the light after he entered the room.
[例6]Mother agreed me to see the film this evening.
→Mother allowed/permitted me to see the film this evening.
[例7]We lost the game, but we didn't lose our heart.
→We lost the game, but we didn't lose heart.
[例8]Under the help of the teacher, I have made great progress in my English.
→With the help of the teacher, I have made great progress in my English.
2．避免句子层面的汉语式表达。
[例1]There will have a meeting tomorrow.
There is going to be a meeting tomorrow.
[例2]We are impossible to finish the work in such a short time.
→It is impossible for us to finish the work in such a short time.
[例3]There are many students don't support the project.
→There are many students who don't support the project.
[例4]On the other hand, dogs are our best friends, bring us a lot of fun.
→On the other hand, dogs are our best friends, which/and bring us a lot of fun.
[例5]But now because my left foot was injured, so I cannot go with you as planned.
→But now because my left foot was injured, I cannot go with you as planned.
[例6]Although they tried hard, but they couldn't make her change her mind.
Although they tried hard, they couldn't make her change her mind.
[例7]While having our dinner, the doorbell rang.
→While we are having our dinner, the doorbell rang.
/While having our dinner, we heard the doorbell ring.

(2019·全国卷Ⅱ)假定你是校排球队队长李华。请写封邮件告知你的队友Chris球队近期将参加比赛，内容包括：
1．比赛信息；
2．赛前准备；
3．表达期待。
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。





考生作文
Dear Chris，
I'm Li Hua, captain of our school volleyball team. I'm writing to tell you that there is going to have a friendly volleyball match this weekend between us and Guangming Middle School. I think it is a close match.
In the friendly match, we should remember the principle of friendship first. But who doesn't want to win them? Now our team is busy preparing the game, from living to daily training. We plan to practice together in the gym this Wednesday and Thursday, lasting from 4 pm to 6 pm. We hope you to participate in it on time if you are convenient.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

名师点评
本文符合高考的要求，乍看起来还不错，但是文章中出现了较多的汉语式英语，从而影响了考生的得分档次。
(1)本文出现的汉语式英语多达5处，例如，汉语说“将会有……”，英语的地道表达是there is going to be；汉语中的“赢”可以跟人，但英语中的win后面不能跟人。
(2)另外，作文中的某些词汇如tell、remember等以及某些句式还可以进一步优化。

作文提升
Dear Chris，
I'm Li Hua, captain of our school volleyball team. I'm writing to inform you that there is going to be a friendly volleyball match this weekend between us and Guangming Middle School, which I think will be a close match.
This is a friendly match, so we should keep in mind that friendship comes first and competition second. Certainly, who doesn't want to win the game? These days our team have been busy getting prepared for the game, all members working very hard in the training. Practice takes place in the gym every afternoon，lasting about two and a half hours. We hope you can participate in the match if it is convenient for you.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours，
Li Hua

Ⅰ.用地道英语替换汉语式表达。
1．Recently our village has taken place great changes.
→Recently great changes have taken place in our village．
2．I haven't heard from your letter for a long time and I miss you very much.
→I haven't heard from you for a long time and I miss you very much.
3．Would you please meet my uncle at the airport because this is the first time visit to the US?
→Would you please meet my uncle at the airport because this is the first visit to the US?
4．If you are convenient, let's meet at 3 pm, this Sunday at the entrance to the People's Park.
→If it is convenient for you, let's meet at 3 pm, this Sunday at the entrance to the People's Park.
5．All the students had started reading English before I didn't get up.
→All the students had started reading English before I got up．
Ⅱ.书面表达
(2019·昆明黄冈实验学校模拟)假如你是高三学生李华，计划10月6日动身前往温哥华 (Vancouver)姊妹学校交流一个月。请你给该校负责联络工作的布朗先生写一封信询问有关事项。内容包括：
1．课程开设；
2．课外活动(extracurricular activities)；
3．其他你关心的问题。
注意：1.词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Mr Brown，
I'm going to a sister school in Vancouver for a student exchange program on October 6, planning to stay for a month. I'm writing to ask you for some relevant information.
Firstly, what courses will I have to take and how long will each course last? Do I need to make any preparations for these courses in advance? Secondly, what extracurricular activities are provided in that school? Actually, I'm very interested in playing football. Are there any football training and matches available on a regular basis? By the way, where will I live when I am there? Honestly speaking, I prefer to be accommodated in a host family, which I'm convinced can help to improve my oral English quickly.
Yours，
Li Hua
技法八　画龙点睛的结束语
1．如何写好结尾？
结尾有概括全文内容，进一步强调或肯定文章的中心思想，升华主题的作用。
(1)照应开头
[典例]I think summer is certainly more fun than the other three seasons.I like summer best.(2016·四川高考书面表达)
(2)复述中心
[典例]We must protect the water as well as find ways to reuse it. If not, the last drop of water will be a teardrop.
(3)总结式
[典例]Therefore, we should give a second thought to these ratings whenever we go shopping.(2018·江苏高考书面表达)
(4)引用式
[典例]I believe my dream will come true one day because “Where there is a will, there is a way.”
(5)希望式
[典例]The Internet is now very important to me because it not only gives me a lot of fun but also it is very useful. I like it and hope you will like it too.
(6)问题式
[典例]Will you join us in the next century? How romantic and fantastic it will be!
2．如何写好书信结尾？
书信的结束语，我们见到最多的是I'm looking forward to .../Looking forward to ...。另外我们还可以使用一些功能句式，向对方表示友善的感谢或亲切的问候，表达愿望或期待等。
求职信可说：
I would be grateful if you would take my application into consideration.
I hope to have the opportunity of an interview.
咨询信可说：
I'm waiting for your early reply.
感谢信可说：
I must thank you again for your generous help.
Please accept my gratitude, now and always.
建议信可说：
In the end, I will be very glad if you find my suggestions useful.
I hope you will find these suggestions practical.
I'll appreciate you taking my suggestion into account.
投诉信可说：
I'd appreciate it if you ... as soon as possible.
邀请信可说：
I'm longing to hear from you.
3．如何写好通知结尾？
常常重申希望大家参加活动，或提出注意事项。
[例1]Please be there on time./Be sure to attend on time.
[例2]If you have any opinion about the film, please send an e­mail to studentunion@126.com. (2018·全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)
[例3]For any questions, call Li Hua at 44876655.(2014·辽宁高考书面表达)

(2016·全国卷Ⅰ)假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外资公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历(resume)。给外教Ms Jenkins写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。






考生作文(结尾)
名师点评
作文提升
If you can help me，I will very thank you.I hope to hear from your reply as early as possible.
　　(1)表达档次较低，as ...as possible本来是一个很好的表达方式，但由于early的错用而大打折扣(应为as soon as possible)。
(2)very thank you与hear from your reply更是汉语式英语，属于低级的错误。
I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to do so much for me.
Looking forward to your early reply.

Ⅰ.请用上述结尾法翻译下列句子。
1．不同的旅行方式都能让人们愉快，但我还是最喜欢乘火车旅行。
Different ways of traveling can make people happy, but I like traveling by train most.(照应开头)
2．爱是给予，爱是关注他人，我将尽力把我所有的爱奉献给他人。
Love is giving and love is paying attention to others. I will do my best to give all my love to others.(复述中心)
3．从这次经历中，我了解到细心非常重要，尤其在考试时，我们怎样细心都不为过。
From this experience, I learned that being careful is very important and that we can't be too careful, especially in examinations.(总结式)
4．不管怎样，有不同的文化，就有不同的习俗，如果你能“入乡随俗”，就会更好地享受这里的生活。
Anyhow, different cultures, different customs. If you “Do as the Romans do when in Rome.”，you will enjoy more of your stay here.(引用式)
5．作为一名学生，我非常支持这项活动，因为它很有意义，对学生很有帮助，我希望此类活动在将来能继续开展下去。
As a student, I am strongly for the activity because it is very meaningful and helpful. I hope that this kind of activity will continue in the future.(希望式)
6．找一个伙伴和我们一起去如何？这样我们可以互相帮助并且在旅途中保持愉快。
How about finding a companion to be with us? So, we can help each other and be happy during the trip. (问题式)
Ⅱ.书面表达
(2019·济南外国语学校模拟)假定你是李华，最近发现邻居Alex练习打鼓(drum)的声音已经影响到了你的生活。请你给他写一封邮件，内容包括：
1．写信目的；
2．说明影响；
3．提出建议。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。




【参考范文】
Dear Alex，
Recently，your drumming has become a bit of a noise problem for us，and I'm hoping we can have a talk and find ways to solve it.
The drumming is quite loud in the afternoon after school，and it is difficult for me to concentrate on my homework.Besides，when you play after 8：30 p．m. the noise keeps my parents awake as their bedroom is on the west side of the house.
I think it would help a lot if you could keep the window shut while playing.Shall we arrange a time convenient for both of us to brainstorm how to work this out?
Yours，
Li Hua


A篇 (2019·浙江金丽衢十二校联考)
假定你是校学生会成员李华，负责学校中国传统文化系列活动之一——Tea Party。请给外籍教师John写一封邮件，邀请他前来参加。内容包括：
1．活动的时间、地点；
2．活动的具体安排；
3．你的联系方式。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear John，







Yours，
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear John，
I am Li Hua，a member of the Students' Union.I am writing to invite you to participate in our Tea Party on next Saturday evening at the International Center.
This party is part of a series of Chinese traditional culture activities，aiming to help foreign friends to have a better understanding of Chinese traditional culture.A variety of activities have been arranged for the Tea Party，which will bring you a great experience of the art of serving tea.If you are interested，you can write back or call me at 123456789.
Looking forward to your presence.
Yours，
Li Hua
B篇 (2019·浙江宁波模拟)
假定你是李华，打算今年暑假去美国旅游。请你给Travel America国际旅行社写一封电子邮件进行咨询。内容如下：
1．请其推荐合适的旅游路线；
2．请其告知相关的旅游费用。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数；
3．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Sir/Madam，







Yours，
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Sir/Madam，
I'm planning to travel to the U．S.A.in the coming July.Therefore，I'm writing to inquire about travel routes of your agency.
I intend to stay in America for about 10 days，during which I hope to have a look at some unique natural scenery and have a taste of local customs.So，could you please recommend some suitable travel routes？In addition，I'd like to know the prices of the routes，covering all the traveling expenses.
A reply at your earliest convenience is highly appreciated.
Yours，
Li Hua
C篇 (2019·浙江杭州七校联考)
假如你是李华，在上海学习的英国朋友Tony给你发邮件说周末要来杭州找你玩。请你根据要点提示给Tony写一封邮件向他介绍这两天的安排。
1．周五晚上在杭州火车站接Tony，住预订的酒店；
2．周六参观杭州名胜；
3．周日在家活动；
4．冬季寒冷，请多备衣物。
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear Tony，







Yours，
Li Hua
【参考范文】
Dear Tony，
Welcome to Hangzhou.As a tourist city，Hangzhou offers tourists breath­taking scenery.The arrangements for your visit are as follows.
On Friday evening we shall meet at Hangzhou Railway Station and then head for the hotel.The next morning，we will visit the West Lake and Leifeng Pagoda，which are both famous attractions and will surely impress you deeply.
On Sunday I'd like you to meet my family，making dumplings and getting to know Chinese culture.Be sure to keep yourself warm since it's colder here.
Yours，
Li Hua
D篇 (2019·浙江温州模拟)
上周六，校学生会组织了一次参观雅琳农业生态园的活动。假定你是李华，请你给校英文报写一篇报道。活动内容包括：
1．观赏花草；
2．采摘蔬果；
3．了解现代农业。
注意：
1．词数80左右，题目已为你写好；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Students' Visit to Yalin Ecological Garden







【参考范文】
Students' Visit to Yalin Ecological Garden
Last Saturday，some students took part in an activity organized by the school Student Union.They paid a visit to Yalin Ecological Garden.
Upon arrival，they were greatly attracted by the garden.They admired various beautiful flowers，trees and plants.Then，they went into the fields to pick fruit and vegetables.They also learned a great deal of knowledge about modern agriculture from the gardeners.
This activity benefited the students a lot.It not only broadened their horizons but also raised their awareness of green life.