初中英语中考复习 09 校园生活 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

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素材储备与写作指导
校园生活是比较好写、有东西可写的话题，因为作为学生，大部分的时间都是在学校这个大环境中度过的。就考试题目而言，要选取校园生活中丰富多彩、受益匪浅、意义非凡的些话题， 如:最喜欢的校园活动、 最成功的竞赛经历、 最难忘的师生情谊、 最不舍的好友陪伴、最受益的一次课堂等。只要内容是积极向上的，都可以进行取材。同样的，语言上一定要注意用多样的句型和生动的词汇来使记叙更流畅、更吸引人。
我们就以最常见的"activity" 为例来进行详细说明。
实践案例
题目
Write a shrt passage f at least 60 wrds n the tpic "The mst / est
activity I tk part in at schl". (以“我在校参加的-次最 的活动”为题，写一篇
不少于60个词的作文。)
为了丰富学生生活，给学生提供更多的学习和展示平台，学校每年举行各种活动，请选取其中一项活动，谈谈你的经历和对这项活动的评价。
审题
这篇全命题文章在审题过程中要注查的核心词有“活动”、“经历”、“评价”，这些是作的重要得分点。
(1)“活动”要求前面补充定语，即某形容词最高级，井且该形容词应是有积极向上意的，如interesting / exciting / unfrgettable 1 meaningful等等。选材方面要选择学生在校里参加的某一项具体活动，比如“机器人设计比赛”、“歌唱比赛”、“英语单词拼写活动”“跑步比赛”等。
(2)“经历”是文章的重点部分，要求阐述自己的经历，从自身出发，写出自己的真情感。要注意该部分的时态应该是过去时，交代清楚叙事的几大要素。注意要用相对应的语来突出所补充的形容词，如补充词是interesting,则语言就要生动活泼、突出如何有趣。(3)“评价”这部分是对补充题目中形容词的一个呼应 和拓展，学生要在这部分里把这活动的积极影响充分表达出来。
段落结构
根据题目要求，可以参考以下结构进行写作:
第一部分The 1st part
点明你曾参加过的你认为最 _的一次学校活动。
Our schl hlds a variety f activities t enrich ur campus life. Or f the mst interesting 1 exciting / meaningful 1 creative 1 successful unfrgettable activities is ...
第二部分The 2nd part
阐述你参加这项活动的经历。
I tk part in activity last year.
I was very excited t take part in .. activity when ...
第三部分The 3rd part
你为何认为这项活动最 (补充题目的形容词)，对你有什么积极影响，首尾呼应。
... makes the activity s and I learn frm it.
It has a great effect n my ... and I hpe ur schl will prvide mre chances like that.
核心语汇
campus life校园生活
take part in/ jin in参加
take an active part in积极参加
make full use f these activities t imprve neself充分 利用这些活动提升自.
prvide us with mre pprtunities t study提供更多学习机会
enrich ur life丰富我们的生活
a sense f fulfillment成就感
make an effrt/ make effrts t d努力做某事
make a jint effrt共同努力
make prgress取得进步
参考句型
... activity takes place / is held in ur schl every year.我校每年都举...活动。
The mre activities we take part in, the mre clrful life we will have.
参加的活动越多，生活就会越丰富多彩。
The reasn why I like this activity is that 我 喜欢这项活动的理由是
Taking part in the activity enables me t ...参加这些活动使我能够
Thrugh this activity, I learn that ...通过这项活动我学到了
It is this activity that helps me 正是这项活动帮助我
习作一
The mst exciting activity I tk part in at schl
I like English, and the English Debating Cntest is the mst exciting activity fr me at schl. I tk part in the cntest last mnth and ur team wn the first prize.
We were very excited but the result was nt surprising because we practiced a lt tgether, which is ne f the reasns why I lve this activity cperatin. Withut the teammates' jint effrts and encuragement, there is n way f achieving success. On the ther hand, this activity teaches me t be cnfident. It is self- cnfidence that helps me express myself ut lud. And I believe it makes me a better man in the future.
I’m lking frward t the next English Debating Cntest.
点评：
这篇习作的整体结构安排有失偏颇，开篇点题“最振奋人心的英语辩论赛”活动，然后只用一个句子表明自己参加过这次活动，接下来阐述这项活动的教育意义一。合作”和“自信”，最后结尾以表达愿望结束。这样的安排重点谈论了“评价” 而忽略了描述“经历”，不符合题目要求中的结构安排，也不能有效地从经历描述中看出“最振奋人心”这一主题。但语言方面该学生的水平还是较高的，用词地道，表达流畅，surprising 1cperatin / express / jint effrts 1 lk frward t 等为文章添彩；句型丰富，用到了强调句、定语从句等:句与句之间的逻辑关系词如because 1 n the ther hand等也使文章整体紧凑有力。因此，如果在审题上能够再权衡一下“经历”和“评价”，将其在内容上的比例再调整下，这篇文章将会提升一个档次。
修改稿
The mst exciting activity I tk part in at schl
I like English, and the English Debating Cntest is the mst exciting activity fr me at schl.
I tk part in the cntest last mnth. Our team gt well prepared fr it and rehearsed many times. Of curse, difficulties and disagreement appeared smetimes but the teammates' gal was the same - t win the first prize. And finally we achieved ur gal because we supprted and encuraged each ther until the end.
I learn cperatin frm this activity. Teamwrk is the key t ur success. Besides, this activity als teaches me t be cnfident. It is self cnfidence that helps me express myself ut lud. And I believe it makes me a better man in the future.
I'm lking frward t the next English Debating Cntest.
习作2
The mst meaningful activity I tk part in at schl
As a Grade Nine student, althugh I'm busy with my study, I take part in a variety f activities at schl And the 1000-meter race is the mst meaningful ne.
I tk part in this race last year. I tried my best and I believed I culd hld n t the finishing line because I had practiced running very hard, T my great jy, I made it!Althugh I didn't get any prize, I brke my recrd in the game. I brught hnr t nt nly myself, but als my class.
Therefre, the 1000 meter race is the mst meaningful activity I tk part in at schl.
点评:
这篇文章内容完整，表达流畅，通过对“参加千米赛跑”的描述，体会到这一-活动“意义非凡”一一“尽管没有获奖，但是因为自己的努力和坚持，打破了自己的最佳纪录，并且为自己和班级都赢得了荣誉”。简单的描述中却透露着莫大的自豪，这就是紧扣主题“有意义”。语言方面，该生用词简洁，无浮夸之词，表达流畅，朗朗上口，时态准确无误。因此，从这篇文章来看，“简洁” 有时候也可以写出优秀作文。
相关话题优秀范文解析
（一）
Getting n with Classmates
There is a lt f fun in my schl life, because I have many lvely and friendly classmates there. We get n well with each ther.
I ften study in the classrm with my classmates. While meeting with difficult prblems in ur hmewrk, we discuss them tgether.When classmates are in truble, we try ur best t help them. After schl, we play sprts n the playgrund. We play basketball, ftball, badmintn and sn. Smetimes we have sme class activities, such as singing sngs tgether.We are in a harmnius class.
I am very glad t meet my classmates, wh bring me s much fun. I hpe that we culd all get int a gd senir high schl.
参考译文
和同学相处
我的校园生活充满着很多乐趣，因为在那里我有很多可爱又友好的同学。我们相处得很好。我经常和我的同学在教室里学习。当做作业遇到难题时，我们会起讨论。 当同学有西难的时候。我们会尽最大的努力来带助他们，课后，我们在操场上活动。我们年球阳足球，打羽毛球，等等。有时候我们有电班级活动， 比如起明取。 我们(生活)在一个和谐的班级里。
我非常高兴遇到我的同学们，他们带给我很多的快乐。我希望我们都能进入一个好的高中。
亮点词汇
friendly友好的
difficult .困难的
discuss讨论
in truble在困难中
class activities班级活动
discuss讨论
出彩句型
There is a lt f fun in my schl life.我的校园生活充满着很多乐趣。
We get n well with each ther.我们相处得很好。
We try ur best t 我们尽最大的努力来
We are in a harmnius class. 我们(生活)在一个和谐的班级里。
I am very gad t...我非常高
高分点评
本文的主题明确，逻辑清晰，主要叙述了和同学相处的时光，表达了浓浓的同学之博。文章采取了三段式的写法，开篇点题，中间详细展开，最后再进行回应，并表达自己的期里，脉络清楚，文章的句式简法而又富有变化，短语、 词组的运用也恰到好处，如”a it f fun”"get n well with" 等。

（二）
A Relay Race
The sprts meeting in ur schl is very interesting, and many students participate in it every year.
This year, I tk part in the relay race, in which I ran the last lap. It was the final event at the sprts meeting. Everyne paid great attentin t it. All the runners gt ready at the starting line. As sn as the race began, everyne was t nervus t cheer. When it was my turn, I culd feel that a runner was catching up with me, s I tried my best t run faster.Finally, ur class wn the first prize in this mst exciting event.
1 was very happy that | wn the prize fr my class. This was the mst unfrgettable sprts meeting that I had had.
参考译文
一次接力赛
我们学校的运动会很有趣，每年很多学生都会参与到其中去。
今年，我参加了接力赛，在比赛中我跑最后一棒。 这是运动会的最后一个项目。每个人都很关注这个项目。所有的运动员在起跑线上做准备。比赛一开始，所有人都紧张得停止了呼喊。当轮到我时，我能感到有一名运动员正在追上我，所以我尽最大的努力让自己跑得更快一些。最后，我们班在这项最激动人心的项目中赢得了第一名。
我非常高兴自己为班级赢得了奖项。这是我最难忘的一次运动会。
亮点词汇
participate in.参加...参
relay race接力赛
starting line起跑线
nervus 不安的;紧张的
win the first prize赢得一等奖
出彩句型
Everyne paid great attentin t...每个人都很关注
nervus不安的，掌来的
as sn as... .一就
everyne was 每个人都以至
It was ne's turn.轮到某人。
This is the mst unfrgettable.. that I had.这是我最难忘的
高分点评
本文将接力赛的"interesting" 描写得淋漓尽致，使读者产生身临其境的感觉，感受着运动场.上的紧张与激动。本文的开头、过程、结尾交代得清清楚楚，让读者一览便明。作者在文中还运用了大量的精彩句式，如 t.." "It was ne' s turn."等。
相关话题满分作文必背
（一）
书面表达：
Write a passe f at less 60 wrds abut the tpic “A ten minute break'.(以“十分钟的休息时间”为题写篇不少于 60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)
提示:进入初三以来，同学们信感学习任务重，压力大。许多同学争分夺秒，甚至连课间十分钟的休息时间也在看书做题。请以“A ten minute break"为题，描写这一现象(包括你自己的做法)，并针对这一现象谈谈你的看法。
A ten-minute break
Graduatin is arund the crner, s we are under a lt f pressure and spend mst time ging ver lessns. Sme f my classmates even make use f their ten-minute break t d their hmewrk. But fr me, I just want t take a gd rest during this perid f time in rder t learn mre efficiently in my next class. The reasn is that we are nt supermen, and we need rest, which can ensure us a fresh mind t learn better. If we keep wrking hard during the ten minute break, there is n dubt that sme students will be s0 tired that they will even fall asleep in class Therefre, when a class is ver, I advise all f us t walk ut f the classrm and take a dep breath t have a gd rest.
（二）
Write a passage n “A letter t my headmaster/headmistress”in at least 60 wrds abut the accrding t the given situatin (以“给校长的一 封信” 为题，写筒不少于60个词的文章。提示:初中学习阶投肯定给你留下许多回忆，有甜美， 有苦湿，这些都是宝贵的人生经话在即将告别你的初中生活时，请你以Susan的名义给校长写封信，分享件让你最难忘的校园活动，并提出一”个你最希望学校改进的方面。
Dear Headmaster,
My graduatin is appraching and I am writing t share an unfrgettable activity with yu and discuss ne prblem abut ur schl.
Our schl hlds varius activities fr us every year and they bring us lts f wnderful memries. Thank yu and all f ur teachers. One f my favrite activities is ur last sprts meeting. It was special because mst f the teachers, including yu, jined us, which made the sprts events far mre exciting and meaningful than befre.
I als want t tell yu ne prblem that I want ur schl t slve. Our cafeteria prvides us with delicius lunch but there are t few seats. Sme students have t stand by the table fr fd. Therefre, I hpe yu will help imprve the situatin in ur cafeteria.
Sincerely yurs,
Susan