初中英语中考复习 08 成长记忆 2021年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

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素材储备与写作指导
成长历程的话题无外乎是有关学生成长过程中所经历过的事件，以及从中学习到的经验和教训，主要集中于学生走向成熟、摆脱稚嫩的过程。从学生的身份角度来讲，话题可能会涉及家庭生活和学校学习方面所拥有的成长经历，以及人生体验而引发的处事态度、人生观、价值观、人格品质等方面的回顾和分析，并进行领悟和自我完善。如，通过某个挫折学会了自我鼓舞;通过某次经历学到了自信独立;通过某项活动提高了自身能力等等。而这些题目既可以是全命题文章，也可以是半命题文章，话题多样，要谨慎审题，安排好文章结构。
我们就以某次经历为例，来具体剖析如何写好这类作文。
实践案例
.题目
Write at least 60 wrds with the tpic“I learn frm this experience". (请你以“我从这次经历中学会”为题， 写一篇不少于 60个词的短文。).每个人在成长历程中，都有着各种各样经历，这些经历对其成长也起着不同的影响。请你选取一次经历进行描述，并与大家分享你从中学会了些什么。
审题
这是一篇以成长中的学习为主题的半命题记叙文。learn 后面可以补充t be ... 1 t dsmething / smething这些形式，但具体选择什么取决于后面的“this experience"。乍一看，应该有很多话题可供选择，或许会无从下手。但仔细思考，应该选取那些对个人成长起积极影响和作用的经历，比如“学会团队合作的一次活动”、“学 会诚实守信的一次体验”“学会尊重他人的次经历”等，题目明确要求“就其中个进行描述”，并且要交代 “你从中学会些什么”。因此，选取一个有意义的话题进行描述，交代清楚几大要素:人物、时间、地点、发展经过(即wh 1 when 1 where 1 what)，并写出它对自身成长的重要性(即hw).这些是文章的内容精髓。所以，该题目的审题核心词在于:“一次经历”和“学会些什么”。同时还需要注意的是，对于“经历”的描述应使用过去时。
段落结构
本文可采用三段式的写作结构:
第一部分The 1st part
补充题目，引人文章的主题，为想要记叙的主题进行铺垫。如:
During my prcess f grwing up, I learn a lt frm the experience
I have had this experience that teaches me a lt abut
I remember ne experience clearly because it enables me t realize that ...
第二部分The 2nd part
文章的中心部分，对选取的话题展开描述。如:
It happened n ... /in ..
When I was at the age
第三部分The 3rd part
文章的结尾段，对全文进行总结，情感升华，首尾呼应，说明“学会些什么”。如:
Frm this ... experience, I realize / learn that ...
... was knwn / learnt frm this experience, and I will / wn't ... in the future.
核心语汇
■grwth 成长(名词)
grw up 成长
learn frm sb.向某人学习
. learn abut sth.了解某事
. learn the lessn f ...得到教训
. learn .. by heart/ keep ... in mind牢牢记住
be fully aware f ...充分意识到
■... play an imprtant rle...起重要作用
. develp a gd habit f ..养成的好习惯
■vercme:/ slve / wrk ut difficulties克服/解决困难
■experience the excitement f grwing up体验成长的快乐
manage t d 1 succeed in ding成功做某事
enable ... t d ...使能够做
■team wrk (spirit)团队合作(精神)
. be respnsible fr.对负责
参考句型
. Life is full f ups and dwns.生活处处有苦也有乐。
. The reasn why ... is that 的原因是
This experience taught me a lt because 这次经历教会我很多，因为
Thanks t this experience, I finally realize that... 多亏了这次经历，我终于意识到
Grwing up means we shuld ...成长意味着我们应该
. I didn't realize hw imprtant ... is until ...直到我才意识到的重要性。.
I realize that .. is s imprtant that I must ..我意识到如此重要， 我一定
It is ... that makes me grw up mre ..正使得我成长得更
. I learn frm the experience that ...我从这个经历中学到
. Difficulties and frustratins are unavidable.困难和挫折是不可避免的。
We shuld pull urselves tgether.我们应该振作起来。
习作1
I learn lve frm this experience
My mther teaches me a lt f things. But the mst imprtant is that she teaches me hw t lve thers.
Last mnth, my mther tk me t a charity rganizatin where lts f peple were waiting there t dnate mney t sme pr children in the remte cuntryside. Besides mney, we als bring a lt f used clthes. She tld me she wished there wuldn't be pr children wh suffered frm hunger and cld. She als hped me t be a persn full f lve.
I learn lve frm this experience. I hpe there will be mre lve in the wrld.
点评:这篇习作从结构上看基本是完整的，但从整体内容上看，与其说是从“this experience"中学会"lve" ，倒不如说是“my mther"教会我的，所以主题上对于“this experience"的处理不是很恰当，即没有在审题的时候抓住核心词“-次经历”，而是偏重于突出“母亲”对“我”影响，而非具体描述这次经历。语言上问题不大，出现一处时态 上的错误，we als bring应为we als brught。除此以外，句型结构比较单， 还可以通过变化句型来使文章再提高一个档次。
修改稿
I learn lve frm this experience
I had an unfrgettable experience that taught me t lve thers.
Last mnth,my mther tk me t a charity rganizatin where 1 had never been.When I saw s many peple waiting there t make dnatin I felt shcked and mved. A vlunteer tld me here were lts f pr children wh didn't have enugh mney t buy fd r clthes Anther ne advised me t dnate sme bks because it wuld be helpful fr thse children t gain mre knwledge. S I returned hme and brught lts f bks immediately.
It is lve that enables s many peple t care fr thers wh they even dn't knw. It is lve that makes the wrld a happy place. After this experience, I decide t jin in charity activities mre ften t spread my lve t thers.
习作2
I learn t be brave and independent frm this experience
In the prcess f grwing up, it is unavidable t face sme difficulties. But there is n need t be frightened because learning smething frm them is the mst imprtant.
Last year, I went abrad fr sightseeing. I was s excited at the beautiful scenery that I failed t stay clse with my parents. I lst my way. Tears and fear tuned ut t be useless,s I had t calm dwn. I knew I must depend n myself.Finally, I managed t find the lcal plice and the prblem was slved.
Frm this experience, I learn t be brave and independent, because curage and independence can help me vercme difficulties and get prepared fr ther prblems in the future.
点评:成长历程有很多可以写的东西，-次印象深刻且有教育意义的经历不失为一一个易写的话题，可以轻松做到写之有物兼顾语言精练，这篇习作便是如此。以“人生难题”为引人，“异国迷路”为主题，“勇 气加独立”为成长教训，结构安排上中规中矩，可以得到满分。从unavidable / there is n need t / be excited at / turn ut等地道表达和多样的句型结构中，也可知该生语言修养上乘，思路清晰。本篇作文语句精简，无冗赘之辞，所以可以算是一篇A档优秀作文。
相关话题优秀范文解析
（一）
Muntain Climbing
last summer, I went muntain climbing tgether with my father. I still remember the day until nw.
We started climbing the muntain early in the mrning.But when the sun came up, it became very ht. I gt all
sweaty, feeling dizzy and tired, s 1 culdn't help cmplaining and wanted t quit. Hearing my cmplaint, my father encuraged me nt t give up and helped me wipe away the sweat n the face. He said, "We wn' t see the fantastic scenery unless we reach the tp." | suddenly cheered up and cntinued t climb with full strength. We gt t the tp at last and enjyed the beauty f the nature that I had never seen.
I culd never frgt that experience and the lessn frm that day. The beauty can nly be seen after yu make yur effrts.
参考译文
爬山
去年暑假，我和爸爸一起去爬了山。 直到现在我还记得那天。
一大早， 我们就开始爬山。但是当太阳出来的时候，天气变得很热。我全身都是汗，又晕又累，所以我禁不住抱怨起来，并想要放弃。听到了我的抱怨，爸爸鼓励我不要放弃，并帮我擦掉了脸上的汗。他说:“除非我们到达山顶，否则无法看到美丽的景色。”我突然受到了鼓舞，继续全力往上爬。我们最终到达了山顶，并欣赏到了我从未看过的大自然的美丽。
我永远不会忘记那次经历，也不会忘记那天得到的启示。美丽只有在你努力过后才能看到。
亮点词汇
tgether wit.h.. 一走
cme up出来;出现
sweaty 出汗的
dizzy .眩晕的
cmplaint抱怨;怨言
wipe away擦掉;抹掉
出彩句型
I culdn’t help 我禁不住
，my 听到了我爸爸.
We wn't.. unless.我们不会... 除非
The beauty can nly be seen after yu make yur effrts美丽只有在你努力过后才能看到，
高分点评
本文描述了作者和爸爸的一一次爬山经历，丰富的细节描写，使人有身临其境的感觉。作者在文中运用了丰富的句型，如when引导的定语从句和unless引导的条件状语从句，为文章润色不少。最后得出的启发，更是点出了文章的主旨，将文章提升了一个高度。
（二）
G Back Hme Alne
There was an unfrgettable experience in my childhd.When 1 was seven years ld, my mther wuld pick me up frm the schl every day. But ne day, my mther tld me that she wuldn't d this any mre. 1 was afraid f ging back hme alne, s 1 tried t persuade her. Althugh 1 tld her my fear, she still insisted n her idea.She thught "It was gd fr me t learn t be independent.The next day after schl ,I tk a bus t g back hme. I frgt t see the bus rute when I get when the bus was mre and mre far away frm my hme, 1 felt very terrified.Finally, I g 1 the last stp, and then tk the Same bus back hme.
After that, 1 learned t g back hme alne. And this experience made me knw mre abut independence.
参考译文
独自回家
我的童年有过一次难以忘怀的经历。
在我7岁的时候，我的妈妈每天会接我放学。但是有一天，妈妈说，她不会再接我放学了。我害怕一个人回家，所以我试图说服她。尽管我告诉了她我的恐惧，她仍坚持她的想法。她认为学会独立对我来说是件好事。第二天下课后，我就坐了-辆公共汽车回家。当我上车时，我忘记看路线了。因此，当车离我家越来越远时，我感到非常害怕。最后，我到达了终点站，然后坐了同样的公交车回家。
从那以后，我学会了独自回家。这次经历让我更了解了独立的含义。
亮点词汇
g back hme回家
persuade劝说;说服
far away frm.. 远
alne 独自地
independence 独立
出彩句型
There was a().. experience in my childhd在我的童年，有一次..的经历。
Althugh . she still insisted n her idea.即她仍坚持她的想法。
She thught it was gd fr me t..地她认对我好。
I frgt t... when I gt n.当我上车的时候我忘记..
高分点评
本文以颇具戏剧性的过程展现了作者学会独立的一个过程一学 会自己放学回家，文章细节生动，真实具体，并在其中呈现了“我” 和“妈妈”两个人物鲜明的性格特点。作者对宾语从句的运用非常娴熟，如"my mther tld me that."和"She thugh."，地加句式变化的同时，使文章的表达更为流利、顺畅。
满分作文必背
（一）
书面表达：
Write at least 60 wrds abut the tpic "I try, I grw!" (以“我努力，我成长”为题，写-篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)
提示:在你的学习和生活中，一定 遇到过很多困难或挑战，在应对这些困难和挑战的过中，你一定学习和体验过很多东西，请选其中-件，谈谈你的经历以及收获和体会。
I try, I grw!
As a Grade Nine student, the time f graduatin is appraching. Lking back n the
past three years study, there have been many difficulties fr me nt nly in study but als in life. There is an unfrgettable experience Id like t share with yu.
It was the first time that 1 didn't pass an imprtant exam At that time, 1 was 80depresed that 1 culd hardly cntrl myself After knwing that I was in bad md, my best friend spent all her free time cmfrting me and never spped encuraging me With her help and my wn fres, 1 finally succeeded in making prgress
After that, 1 will never lse cnfidence and will always keep wrking. because 1 firmly believe that if there is n sweat, there will be n sweet.
（二）
书面表达：
Write at least 60 wrds n the tpic "Harvest". (以“收获”为题，写箱不少于 60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。)
The fllwing is fr reference nly. (以下问题仅供参考。)
1. Which harvest impressed yu mst in yur grwth?
Hw did the harvest happen?
3. Why d yu think it was a harvest?
4. D yu have any changes after the harvest?
Harvest
In my grwth, giving an English speech in frnt f all the students was the greatest harvest.I had been afraid f English learning until it was my turn t give the class an English speech. With the help f my teacher, I, a rather shy persn by nature wh easily surfers frm stage fright, had t plunk up great curage t take part in it. T my surprise, 1 did it successfully.
Fr me, it was a meaningful step frward, small as it was, in the lng jurney tward the final success in my life, because 1 had truly gained cnfidence by participating This harvest enables me t be mre cnfident nt nly in English learning but als in many ther aspects f my life.
（三）
书面表达：
Write at least 60 wrds with the tpic "Grwing up". (请你以“成长”为题，写筒不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。
提示:在每个人的成长过程中，有些因素对人的成长具有重要的作用。如，一桩事、一件物、一个人、一段经历、一次体请你就其中的一个进行描述， 与大家分享。
要求:内容切题、语句通顺、意思连贯、字迹清楚。
Grwing up
Amng s many peple wh lve me in the prcess f grwing up, my father gives me the mst useful educatin. Fr example, when he taught me hw t ride a bicycle, I learnt mre than that.
When I was 10, my father tld me I culd try t ride a bicycle. After telling me sme skills, he just let me practice by myself. I kept practicing thugh I fell dwn many times.Three days later, I culd manage t ride the bicycle very well. And then my father said he wanted me t learn that sme skills were helpful while sme were nt suitable fr me. And the best way was t experience and practice by myself.
It is true, and it is very useful fr my grwth.