2023届高考英语二轮复习读后续写：逐梦人生课件

这是一份2023届高考英语二轮复习读后续写：逐梦人生课件，共26页。PPT课件主要包含了注意观察环境细节描写，捕捉续写点等内容，欢迎下载使用。

Step 1 analyze the stry with 6Rs
1Read fr characters 2Read fr plt 3Read fr emtinal changes 4Read fr cnflict 5Read fr theme 6Read fr language
1R Read fr the characters
I'm ready t learn everythingBut when d we bake?
abut t start as an actual baker's assistant, ding what he lved
Bake? I rder whlesale nw. N mre baking. I'm t ld.I used t bake it all. Bread and cakes. And n ne did it better than me.
determined，hpeful, cnfident, hardwrking, a yung man with a dream
wise, hardwrking, an elderly wman with a faded dream
wner f Rssi's Bakery
2R Read fr the plt and emtinal changes
plt muntain
①Aram wanted t start as a baker's assistant
hpeful, excited
Mrs Rssi wanted Aram t be the cash register
disappinted
Mrs Rssi held up her hands and Aram knew why she stpped baking
climax 冲突最大化，也是情节转折点
Then a thught ccurred t Aram that he culd ask Mrs Rssi t teach him.
Mrs Rssi finally said, "Let's buy the ingredients first."
一段首句暗示出现转折点，cnflict还在继续
给出slutin， 结尾正能量
Read fr the cnflicts
abut t start as an actual baker's assistantIt was the perfect experience fr his future career. I'm ready t learn everythingBut when d we bake?
Let's start with the cash register,because that's what yu'll be ding.Bake? I rder whlesale nw. l used t bake it all. Bread and cakes.N mre baking. I'm t ld.
Read fr theme
And here he was, abut t start as an actual baker's assistant, ding what he lved.It was the perfect experience fr his future career. Rssi's Bakery, he was sure, wuld ne day be knwn as the place where he gt his start.I'm ready t learn everything
N mre baking. I'm t ld.And n ne did it better than me. Peple used t line up arund the crner. Everyne wanted my baked bread.
lve fr bakerystick t his dreamkeep learning
lve fr bakeryhigh skills f bakery
their lve fr bakery will bring life t the bakery
Read fr language
无灵主语句+非谓语动词，描述烘焙店美食的香味
环境描写，描写烘焙店的招牌，注意2个形容词 faded, wden
利用描写人物动作和人物对话表达人物情感
双连动作+非谓语动词，具体描写人物动作
用无灵主语句+ 结果状语从句，表现人物的失望，难过
2个形容词描写Rssi夫人的手
Rssi夫人回想当年顾客排队买面包的热闹场面，那是烘焙店曾经的盛况，也是续写部分情节可衔接处
频繁利用非谓语动词做状语，描写Rssi夫人具体的动作；利用非谓语动词短语做定语描写店内的货架和货架上的空瓶，烘托Rssi夫人内心的悲伤
Read the 2 given sentences 推测续写情节
Then a thught ccurred t Aram that he culd ask Mrs Rssi t teach him.
What did Aram say t Mrs Rssi?Hw did Mrs Rssi react t his request? What did Aram d r say ?Result-----Mrs Rssi agreed t teach him
3 principlesactin-respnsecnflict-slutin negative-psitive
what was the respnse f Aram?Hw t learn t bake?a gd ending
标题隐含店名，尾句可描写新的招牌上的店名
二段可写Aram梦想成真，成为烘焙师，做自己最爱的梦想中的职业
与标题和特定情节的衔接
二段可添加细节描写面包做好后，空气中弥漫的面包的香味
与特定物品和特定伏笔的衔接
二段尾句描写招牌和招牌上的新店名，呼应衔接
一段可写Aram说自己想和Mrs学习烘焙
一段可利用对话描写，交代Aram告诉 Mrs. Rssi 要学习烘焙，做烘焙师不想做收银员
一段可描写Aram想做Mrs Rssi的手，交代两代人梦想的延续，手艺的传承
与特定物品和特定情节的衔接
empty bttles, ingredients, shelves, kntted, swllen fingers在续写一段都应提及
二段可写面包的香味吸引很多人排队购买，与此衔接呼应
情感细节描写：吃惊、激动、快乐，满足动作细节描写：添加人物肢体动作适当的对话细节描写：Aram向Mrs Rssi请求学习烘焙 的话场景细节描写：Aram和Mrs Rssi学习烘焙的场景，顾客排队的场景等
添加细节描写（与原文语言特点一致）
动作细节描写（构建动作链，利用双连动词或非谓语动词）
1.犹豫了一会儿，他鼓起勇气对罗西夫人说。①He hesitated fr a while, and gathered all his curage t speak t Mrs Rssi. (双连动词）②Hesitating fr a while, he gathered all his curage t speak t Mrs Rssi. （非谓语动词做状语）2.罗西夫人惊讶地扬起眉毛，呆住了，仿佛钉在在地上一样。①Mrs Rssi raised her eyebrws in surprise, and frze, as if rted t the grund. （神态描写+情感词汇+比喻）②Raising her eyebrws in surprise, Mrs Rssi frze, as if rted t the grund. （非谓语动词做状语）
3.她挠了挠肿起的手指，伤心地摇了摇头，叹了口气。① She scratched her kntted, swllen fingers, shk her head sadly and sighed. (三连动词+情感词汇）② Scratching her kntted, swllen fingers, she shk her head sadly and sighed. （非谓语动词做状语）
情感细节描写 （利用无灵主语句和独立主格）
4.听到这话，Aram高兴得跳了起来，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。①Hearing this, Aram jumped fr jy, and his eyes sparkled with excitement. (神态描写+情感词汇）②Hearing this, Aram jumped fr jy, with his eyes sparkling with excitement. (with 复合结构）③Hearing this, Aram jumped fr jy, his eyes sparkling with excitement. （独立主格结构）
环境细节描写---利用无灵主语句
5.整个店铺都静静地见证了这个神奇的过程。The whle shp quietly witnessed the amazing prcess. 6.当面包从烤箱里拿出来时，空气中弥漫着罗西夫人曾烤出来的最好的面包的香味。When the bread was taken ut f the ven, the air smelled f the best bread ever baked by Mrs Rssi.
1 个 gd ending
对话式结尾阿兰姆说:“罗西太太，谢谢你教我烘焙来实现我的梦想。”Aram said,“Thanks, Mrs Rssi, fr teaching me hw t bake t realize my dream." 场景描写式结尾人们又在街角排起了队，想要烤面包，褪色的木头招牌又闪耀着新名字“阿兰姆和罗西面包店”Peple lined up arund the crner again, wanting the baked bread,  and the faded wd sign shined again with a new name “Aram and Rssi's Bakery”
首尾呼应式结尾许多年过去了，看着挂在店外的“阿兰姆和罗西的面包店”的招牌，他满心感激，他就是在这里开始成为一个真正的面包师。Many years have passed, lking at the sign “Aram and Rssi's Bakery” hanging utside the shp, he was full f appreciatin abut this place where he gt his start as a real baker.主旨升华式结尾阿兰姆突然想到:“一个人无论发生什么事都应该坚持自己的梦想。”It struck/ccurred t Aram that “One shuld stick t his/her dream n matter what/whatever happens.”
与原文三段首句中cash reggister的呼应
衔接二段首句中的关键信息buy the ingredients first
与原文I am t ld和kntted, swllen hands 的衔接呼应应
与段首句关键信息ask Mrs. Rssi t teach him的衔接应