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高考英语（2011~2020）真题专项练习 专题33.书面表达之读后续写
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这是一份高考英语（2011~2020）真题专项练习 专题33.书面表达之读后续写，共18页。
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall，my wife Elli and I had a single gal:t phtgraph plar bears. We were staying at a research camp utside “the plar bear capital f the wrld”-the twn f Churchill in Manitba，Canada.
Taking pictures f plar bears is amazing but als dangerus. Plar bears-like all wild animals-shuld be phtgraphed frm a safe distance. When I'm face t face with a plar bear，I like it t be thrugh a camera with a telepht lens. But smetimes，that is easier said than dne. This was ne f thse times.
As Elli and I cked dinner，a yung male plar bear wh was playing in a nearby lake sniffed，and smelled ur garlic bread.
The hungry bear fllwed his nse t ur camp，which was surrunded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He std n his back legs and pushed at the wden fence psts.
Terrified，Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew. We yelled at the bear，hit pts hard，and fired blank shtgun shells int the air. Smetimes lud nises like these will scare bears ff. Nt this plar bear thugh-he just kept trying t tear dwn the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radied the camp manager fr help. He tld me a helicpter was n its way，but it wuld be 30 minutes befre it arrived. Making the best f this clse encunter(相遇)，I tk sme pictures f the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wuldn't last thrugh 30 mre minutes f the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes，but desn't hurt them. S I apprached ur uninvited guest slwly and，thrugh the fence，sprayed him in the face. With an angry rar(吼叫)，the bear ran t the lake t wash his eyes.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
A few minutes later, the bear headed back t ur camp.
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Paragraph2:
At that very mment, the helicpter arrived.
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【解析】
本文主要讲述了人与熊对抗，之后成功脱险的故事。主人公的感情线变化为：兴奋渴望→惊恐→放松。剧情线以主人公如何与北极熊周旋并成功摆脱它展开。
由第一段的段首提示句可知：几分钟后，熊又回到营地。接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐的画面，例如“Rars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness.”这不仅合理地描写了熊的反应，也描绘出让人战栗的场景。
由第二段的段首提示句可知：此时，直升机到了。如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描写成“After thrughly scrutinizing the area, the bear trtted frward a few steps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景。“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而泣的状态，例如“My heart leaped with jy as I knew we were likely t be saved.”
最后，结尾部分需要迅速收束，并说明成功逃脱的结局。
关于画线词：Elli作为女主人公，是续写内容中应该出现的画线词，nises, pictures, fence, spray与熊有关，也在两段续写内容中出现。最终，两人回归安全状态，因此画线词safe也可自然而然地出现在续写内容中。由此划分画线词，可迅速锁定需使用的画线词范围，辅助构思。
【范文】
A few minutes later, the bear headed back t ur camp. Rars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness. The nises turned Elli and I pale with hrrr. I feared that the giant wuld destry ur whle fence. He rared repeatedly, shattering what was left f the silence. Elli seized this pprtunity t take sme pictures f the bear. The animal’s nises eched all arund us. We betrayed ur feelings by huddling tgether, shivering with fear. After thrughly scrutinizing the area, he trtted frward a few steps.
At that very mment, the helicpter arrived. My heart leaped with jy as I knew we were likely t be saved. Elli used pepper spray again t buy us enugh time. But this time the bear became mre alert. He regarded us with the merciless necessity f hunger, s we thrw all the fd we have. He then turned away and started devuring. As we were climbing the rpe ladder, Elli prayed like thusand times t shw thankfulness f being safe and sund.
2.（2020年，新高考全国I卷，山东）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet. Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman. She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by. The little by -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish yu culd see him,” she said t her wn children, Jhn, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney, but I dn't see what he can d.”
After their mther left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard. “I wish we culd help him t earn mney,” said Clara. “His family is suffering s much.”
“S d I,” said Harry. “We really shuld d smething t assist them.”
Fr sme mments, Jhn said nthing, but, suddenly, he sprang t his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish(完成).”
The ther children als jumped up all attentin. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne. “I tell yu what we can d,” said Jhn. “Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Jhn sent us? Well, we can make ppcrn(爆米花), and put it int paper bags, and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn's idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.
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With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business.
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【答案】
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t. S, they went t the lcal supermarket tgether. They bught a bag f crn and sme special bags fr ppcrn. When they gt hme, they made a lt f ppcrn and put it in the special bags. With the ppcrn, they went t Bernard’s hme. They tld Bernard hw t sell the ppcrn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family als felt very happy t help this family.
With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business. He tk the ppcrn arund t the huses and sld all his ppcrn. He earned a lt f mney. Then, he wanted t be self-dependent. Therefre, he asked Mrs. Meredith t teach him hw t make ppcrn. After that, nt nly did he sell ppcrn, but he als added cream and salt t the ppcrn t make it taste better. Bernard grew up t be a remarkable man. He did nt frget the help f Meredith’s family, and he als did what he culd t help thse in need.
【解析】
【分析】
本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。
【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。
2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。
3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.(当Meredith太太听到Jhn的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。
3.（2020年1月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I'm ging t miss yu s much, Pppy, "said the tall, thin teenager. He bent dwn t hug his ld friend gdbye. He std up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying nt t let his emtins(情绪)get the better f him.
His parents were nt quite able t keep theirs under cntrl. They had driven their sn several hurs ut f twn t the university where he wuld sn be living and studying. It was time t say gdbye fr nw at least. The family hugged and smiled thrugh misty eyes and then laughed.
The by lifted the last bag nt his shulder, and flashed a bright smile.” I guess this is it, “he said.” I'll see yu back hme in a mnth, kay？"His parents ndded, and they watched as he walked ut f sight int the crwds f hundreds f students and parents. The by's mther turned t the dg, “Okay, Pppy, time t g back hme.”
The huse seemed quiet as a tmb withut the by living there. All that week, Pppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favrite ty, r even in her daily walk. Her wners were sad t, but they knew their sn wuld be back t visit. Pppy didn't.
They ffered the dg sme f her favrite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit n the sfa, but the ld girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her wners started t get wrried. "What shuld we d t cheer Pppy up？"asked Dad. “We've tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, “smiled Mm.” Withut anybdy left in the huse but us, this place culd use a bit f fun. Let's get a little dg fr Pppy."
It didn't take lng befre they walked thrugh the frnt dr carrying a big bx. Pppy welcmed them hme as usual, but when she saw the bx, she stpped. She put her nse n it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever s slwly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared.
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Para 2. A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm university.
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【答案】
Para 1.
Dad put the bx n the grund and pened the tp. A shiny little wet nse ppped up. Then tw fluffy paws. Next the bx tipped ver sideways, and ut tumbled a mass f wiggly glden silliness. Pppy was amazed. She wagged furiusly. She barked with jy. She smiled, her tngue llling ut as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg. “That didn’t take lng,” remarked Mm, as bth dgs went raring arund the huse in an imprmptu game f chase. Dad laughed.
Para 2.
A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm university. He had missed Pppy and was lking frward t seeing her. When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t. “Oh my gsh, wh is this?” he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the lk f shck n his face. “That’s Pee-wee,” said Dad. “I can’t believe yu gt yurselves a puppy!” “We didn’t,” replied Mm. “This puppy is fr Pppy!”
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了男孩要去上大学，和自己的狗Pppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里，Pppy也非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Pppy买一条小狗作伴。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：爸爸打开盒子，一条可爱的小狗出现了。所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况；第二段开头是：几个星期后，男孩从大学回到家里。本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Pppy的。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：a mass f，with jy，lk frward t等高级词汇；非谓语动词的运用The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg.；时间状语从句When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t.等高级句式。
4.（2018年6月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre. He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West.
We tk a plane t Albuquerque, a big city in the state f New Mexic. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternn. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up frm the airprt and drve us up t his farm in Pecs.
His wife Tina cked us a delicius dinner and we gt t knw his sns Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestrm f the farm huse listening t the frgs and water rlling dwn the river nearby. Very early in the mrning, Uncle Paul wke us up t have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn n my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went t help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul t take the sheep ut t graze(吃草). I was impressed t see my dad and Uncle Paul riding hrses. They lked really cl.
In the afternn, I asked Uncle Paul if I culd take a hrse ride, and he said yes, as lng as my dad went with me. I wasn’t ging t take a hrse ride by myself anyway. S, my dad and I put n ur new cwby hats, gt n ur hrses, and headed slwly twards the muntains. "Dn’t be late fr supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep t the track s that yu dn’t get lst!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm huse were ut f sight. It was s peaceful and quiet and the clrs f the brwn rcks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternn sun mixed t create a magic scene. It lked like a beautiful wven(编织的) blanket spread ut upn the grund just fr us.
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse.
注意：
（1）所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；
（2）至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
（3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. ____________
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Paragraph 2: We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. _____________
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【答案】
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. My hrse turned t the left t avid the little rabbit as I held n tightly and tried nt t fall. Then my dad turned arund and shuted, “Hld n!” All f a sudden the hrse began t run. My dad tried t keep up behind us. Fr a few minutes my hrse slwed dwn t a trt and then stpped beside a river. I lked arund and realized that we were way ff the track.
We had n idea where we were and it gt dark. Luckily the stars came ut and gave us a little light when we were lking fr the way t the farm huse. After what must have been several hurs, we suddenly heard the sund f sheep in the distance. My dad and I bth rde ur hrses twards the sund f the sheep. As we gt clser we saw Uncle Paul with a flashlight waving us ver. What a night!
【解析】
读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。
通过阅读所给文章可知，父亲带儿子去西部荒野的一个朋友家体验农场生活，见父亲和叔叔骑马，儿子也很想骑，于是亲身上马体验。
根据第一段所给首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse.这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从rabbit出现后带来的反应扩展开，可以写马的反应，也可以写人的反应，但要注意与第二段首句相呼应。
第二段首句是We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark.这一句呼应前文Uncle Paul的叮嘱——不要误吃晚饭，可从如何寻路返回农场去写。
续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
5.（2017年11月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A Vacatin with My Mther
I had an interesting childhd. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because f my mther---lving, sweet, yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
My tw sets f grandparents lived in Clrad and Nrth Dakta, and my parents decided t spend a few weeks driving t thse states and seeing all the sights alng the way. As the first day f ur trip apprached, David, my eight-year-ld brther, and I unwillingly said gd-bye t all f ur friends. Wh knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the mment f ur departure arrived, and we laded suitcases, bks, games, camping equipment, and a tent int the car and bravely drve ff. We bravely drve ff again tw hurs later after we’d returned hme t get the purse and traveler’s checks Mm had frgtten.
David and I were always a little nervus when using gas statin bathrms if Mm was driving while Dad slept: “Yu stand utside the dr and play lkut(放哨) while I g, and I’ll stand utside the dr and play lkut while yu g.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Hney, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gsh…I thught they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t abut t take any chances.
On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn’t we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. T ur great relief, Dad turned dwn the idea. Mm never culd understand ur bjectins(反对). If a strange family shwed up n her frnt drstep, Mm wuld have been delighted. She thinks everyne in the wrld is as nice as she is. We finally fund a vacancy in the next twn.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. ______________
Paragraph 2:
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. ______________
【答案】
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. Thinking f this tent, Mm suggested that we g camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Cnsidering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the dr f ur car pened, Mm strmed ut instantly and urged us t put up the tent. David and I were asked t pick up sme branches t build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mm had already lain dwn the grass cmfrtably in frnt f the tent, talking merrily with a lcal by at ur age, wh kept glancing at this tent curiusly. Sn we learnt that the by in rags even didn’t have a hme t live in. Of curse, Mm “frgt” t take this tent with us again.
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. And we als had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm. Thugh she did lve ging camping, she presented that pr by with this tent ut f sympathy. It was Mm that made my childhd clrful. And it was als she that shwed me the true meaning f giving.
【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。
【详解】
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个frgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点);
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多;
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式: 虚 拟 语 气 和 with 复 合 结 构 Mm suggested that we g camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Cnsidering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. what引导的主语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
6.（2017年6月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternn, Mac Hllan, a primary schl teacher, was cycling frm his hme t Alaska with his friends. One f his friends had stpped t make a bicycle repair, but they had encuraged Mac t carry n, and they wuld catch up with him sn. As Mac pedaled (骑行) alng alne, he thught fndly f his wife and tw yung daughters at hme. He hped t shw them this beautiful place smeday.
Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dg!” he thught. But when he lked t the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dg at all, but a wlf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He fund ut his can f hear spray. With ne hand n the bars, he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back f Mac's bike, tearing pen his tent bag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back nly t quickly restart the chase（追赶）。
Mac was pedaling hard nw. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful nt t shw dwn. He saw a steep uphill climb befre him. He knew that zxxk nce he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wlf’s teeth wuld be tearing int his flesh.
At this mment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car n their way t Alaska. They didn’t think much f it when they saw tw cyclists repairing their bike n the side f the rad. A bit later, they sptted what they, t, assumed was a dg running alngside a man n a bike. As they gt clser, they realized that the dg was a wlf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in frnt f it as the wlf was catching up fast, just a dzen yards away nw.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
【答案】
The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. Paul and Becky gt ut f the car immediately t give the help. With nthing n the hand, they didn't dare t fight against the wlf. Hwever, they still apprached t the wlf bravely. At the same time, the wlf als nticed them and turned its head back, hwling angrily twards Paul and Becky. Mac then jumped ff the bicycle and was ready t fight against the wlf. Then came the deadlck.
A few minutes later, the ther tw cyclists arrived. They fund the dangerus situatin, where three men circled the wlf. Mac's friends als jumped ff their bicycles and jined the fight with the wlf. Mre and mre cars stpped. Sme drivers tk ut the sticks frm the cars, and sme tk ut the knives, even the guns twards the wlf. In the meanwhile, the wlf might feel the peple's threats arund, s it began t step back slwly. Sn, it ran away ff the rad and disappeared in the distance.
【解析】
本文主要讲述了Mac在骑自行车前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追赶的故事。时态要考虑以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。同时要兼顾字数的要求，不要过多，关键词列出5个以上，需要均匀分布在两段中。考生要注意几个关键信息和情节变化并结合给出的内容提示进行合理构思。
7.（2016年10月，浙江高考）
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm. “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away.
With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst.
“Tm! ”she cried. “Help!”
N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him.
Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落）smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake.
As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter.Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.
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Paragraph 2:
It was daybreak when Jane wke up.
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One pssible versin:
Paragraph 1:
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Jane had t stay alne in the frest fr anther cld night. Althugh she felt a little sad, she didn’t get fearful. She thught abut Tm. “He must have called fr thse helicpters. Maybe he was in ne f them and will cme back again! I have t guide him tmrrw.” She fell asleep and dreamed f seeing Tm.
Paragraph 2:
It was day break when Jane wke up. She ate sme berries and then walked alng the stream, hping t find a suitable place t guide the helicpter. Frtunately, she saw a huge flat rck in an pen area at a distance. She rushed t the rck, climbed nt it and waited. T her great jy, the helicpter appeared again. The nearer it gt, the mre she flagged the yellw bluse. Luckily, the helicpter didn’t miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rck slwly. Tm jumped ff the helicpter and ran twards Jane. She brke dwn and burst int tears.
【解析】
◆题型解读
和以往的高考英语命题作文不同，读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络和关系。续写这篇短文时，考生需要明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置变化、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上，考生顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来。同时，在组织语言时，切记使用5个以上给出的提示词。
◆故事主线
已知线索：
吵架——出走——迷路——失联——自救——思念——寻路——直升机——飞离……拂晓……
可续写线索：
失望？坚信？曲折？直升机？Tm？自救？获救？
◆续写词汇
已给提示词汇：
Jane, Tm, lake, walk, climb, at a distance, t her great jy, helicpter, yellw bluse
话题激活词汇：
环境：frest, stream, rck, berry, valley, steep, cave, lake, waterfall (人口、环境与自然)
困难：hunger, starve, thirsty, injure, brken, bld, panic, shelter, survive (survival), suffer, cld, severe (天气与自然灾害)
活动: walk, climb, fall, crawl, taste, attempt, struggle t ne’s feet, make ne’s way t, pick up (人体与动作)
情绪：t ne’s great jy, break dwn
救援：rescue team, dctr, search fr, spt (天气与自然灾害)
意志品质：calm, curage, will (性格与行为特征)
评价：amazing, make it
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall，my wife Elli and I had a single gal:t phtgraph plar bears. We were staying at a research camp utside “the plar bear capital f the wrld”-the twn f Churchill in Manitba，Canada.
Taking pictures f plar bears is amazing but als dangerus. Plar bears-like all wild animals-shuld be phtgraphed frm a safe distance. When I'm face t face with a plar bear，I like it t be thrugh a camera with a telepht lens. But smetimes，that is easier said than dne. This was ne f thse times.
As Elli and I cked dinner，a yung male plar bear wh was playing in a nearby lake sniffed，and smelled ur garlic bread.
The hungry bear fllwed his nse t ur camp，which was surrunded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He std n his back legs and pushed at the wden fence psts.
Terrified，Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew. We yelled at the bear，hit pts hard，and fired blank shtgun shells int the air. Smetimes lud nises like these will scare bears ff. Nt this plar bear thugh-he just kept trying t tear dwn the fence with his massive paws(爪子).
I radied the camp manager fr help. He tld me a helicpter was n its way，but it wuld be 30 minutes befre it arrived. Making the best f this clse encunter(相遇)，I tk sme pictures f the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wuldn't last thrugh 30 mre minutes f the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes，but desn't hurt them. S I apprached ur uninvited guest slwly and，thrugh the fence，sprayed him in the face. With an angry rar(吼叫)，the bear ran t the lake t wash his eyes.
注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
A few minutes later, the bear headed back t ur camp.
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Paragraph2:
At that very mment, the helicpter arrived.
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【解析】
本文主要讲述了人与熊对抗，之后成功脱险的故事。主人公的感情线变化为：兴奋渴望→惊恐→放松。剧情线以主人公如何与北极熊周旋并成功摆脱它展开。
由第一段的段首提示句可知：几分钟后，熊又回到营地。接下来可通过场景渲染，描写当时令人颤栗惊恐的画面，例如“Rars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness.”这不仅合理地描写了熊的反应，也描绘出让人战栗的场景。
由第二段的段首提示句可知：此时，直升机到了。如果想要进行续写两段的合理衔接，第一段的结尾可描写成“After thrughly scrutinizing the area, the bear trtted frward a few steps.”这样可以营造出危急的场景。“我们”看到直升机的到来，感到绝处逢生的喜悦，可以以人物心理描写作为第二段的开头，重点描写喜极而泣的状态，例如“My heart leaped with jy as I knew we were likely t be saved.”
最后，结尾部分需要迅速收束，并说明成功逃脱的结局。
关于画线词：Elli作为女主人公，是续写内容中应该出现的画线词，nises, pictures, fence, spray与熊有关，也在两段续写内容中出现。最终，两人回归安全状态，因此画线词safe也可自然而然地出现在续写内容中。由此划分画线词，可迅速锁定需使用的画线词范围，辅助构思。
【范文】
A few minutes later, the bear headed back t ur camp. Rars and screams pierced the silence with needle-like shrillness. The nises turned Elli and I pale with hrrr. I feared that the giant wuld destry ur whle fence. He rared repeatedly, shattering what was left f the silence. Elli seized this pprtunity t take sme pictures f the bear. The animal’s nises eched all arund us. We betrayed ur feelings by huddling tgether, shivering with fear. After thrughly scrutinizing the area, he trtted frward a few steps.
At that very mment, the helicpter arrived. My heart leaped with jy as I knew we were likely t be saved. Elli used pepper spray again t buy us enugh time. But this time the bear became mre alert. He regarded us with the merciless necessity f hunger, s we thrw all the fd we have. He then turned away and started devuring. As we were climbing the rpe ladder, Elli prayed like thusand times t shw thankfulness f being safe and sund.
2.（2020年，新高考全国I卷，山东）
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity. As the ecnmy was in decline, sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs. Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet. Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman. She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr. She knew they had prblems, and they needed all kinds f help. When she had time, she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.
One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk, and their little by. The little by -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish yu culd see him,” she said t her wn children, Jhn, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help t his mther. He wants very much t earn sme mney, but I dn't see what he can d.”
After their mther left the rm, the children sat thinking abut Bernard. “I wish we culd help him t earn mney,” said Clara. “His family is suffering s much.”
“S d I,” said Harry. “We really shuld d smething t assist them.”
Fr sme mments, Jhn said nthing, but, suddenly, he sprang t his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish(完成).”
The ther children als jumped up all attentin. When Jhn had an idea, it was sure t be a gd ne. “I tell yu what we can d,” said Jhn. “Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Jhn sent us? Well, we can make ppcrn(爆米花), and put it int paper bags, and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右:
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn's idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.
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With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business.
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【答案】
When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t. S, they went t the lcal supermarket tgether. They bught a bag f crn and sme special bags fr ppcrn. When they gt hme, they made a lt f ppcrn and put it in the special bags. With the ppcrn, they went t Bernard’s hme. They tld Bernard hw t sell the ppcrn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family als felt very happy t help this family.
With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business. He tk the ppcrn arund t the huses and sld all his ppcrn. He earned a lt f mney. Then, he wanted t be self-dependent. Therefre, he asked Mrs. Meredith t teach him hw t make ppcrn. After that, nt nly did he sell ppcrn, but he als added cream and salt t the ppcrn t make it taste better. Bernard grew up t be a remarkable man. He did nt frget the help f Meredith’s family, and he als did what he culd t help thse in need.
【解析】
【分析】
本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。
【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意--制作爆米花，让Bernard去卖爆米花。
2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的。
3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向后延续发展要合乎情理。
4.根据第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea, she thught it was a gd ne, t.(当Meredith太太听到Jhn的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意)可以针对如何实现制作爆米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started ut n his new business.(一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意)可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。
5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。
3.（2020年1月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I'm ging t miss yu s much, Pppy, "said the tall, thin teenager. He bent dwn t hug his ld friend gdbye. He std up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying nt t let his emtins(情绪)get the better f him.
His parents were nt quite able t keep theirs under cntrl. They had driven their sn several hurs ut f twn t the university where he wuld sn be living and studying. It was time t say gdbye fr nw at least. The family hugged and smiled thrugh misty eyes and then laughed.
The by lifted the last bag nt his shulder, and flashed a bright smile.” I guess this is it, “he said.” I'll see yu back hme in a mnth, kay？"His parents ndded, and they watched as he walked ut f sight int the crwds f hundreds f students and parents. The by's mther turned t the dg, “Okay, Pppy, time t g back hme.”
The huse seemed quiet as a tmb withut the by living there. All that week, Pppy didn't seem interested in her dinner, her favrite ty, r even in her daily walk. Her wners were sad t, but they knew their sn wuld be back t visit. Pppy didn't.
They ffered the dg sme f her favrite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit n the sfa, but the ld girl just wasn't her usual cheerful self. Her wners started t get wrried. "What shuld we d t cheer Pppy up？"asked Dad. “We've tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, “smiled Mm.” Withut anybdy left in the huse but us, this place culd use a bit f fun. Let's get a little dg fr Pppy."
It didn't take lng befre they walked thrugh the frnt dr carrying a big bx. Pppy welcmed them hme as usual, but when she saw the bx, she stpped. She put her nse n it. Her tail began wagging(摆动)ever s slwly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意:
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1. Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared.
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Para 2. A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm university.
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【答案】
Para 1.
Dad put the bx n the grund and pened the tp. A shiny little wet nse ppped up. Then tw fluffy paws. Next the bx tipped ver sideways, and ut tumbled a mass f wiggly glden silliness. Pppy was amazed. She wagged furiusly. She barked with jy. She smiled, her tngue llling ut as she investigated the surprise. The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg. “That didn’t take lng,” remarked Mm, as bth dgs went raring arund the huse in an imprmptu game f chase. Dad laughed.
Para 2.
A few weeks later, the by arrived hme frm university. He had missed Pppy and was lking frward t seeing her. When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t. “Oh my gsh, wh is this?” he exclaimed. His parents laughed at the lk f shck n his face. “That’s Pee-wee,” said Dad. “I can’t believe yu gt yurselves a puppy!” “We didn’t,” replied Mm. “This puppy is fr Pppy!”
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。
【详解】
通过阅读所给文章可知，文章讲述了男孩要去上大学，和自己的狗Pppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里，Pppy也非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Pppy买一条小狗作伴。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：爸爸打开盒子，一条可爱的小狗出现了。所以后文应该是描写买来的小狗的样子以及这两只狗的相处情况；第二段开头是：几个星期后，男孩从大学回到家里。本段应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Pppy的。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：a mass f，with jy，lk frward t等高级词汇；非谓语动词的运用The little pup was nt shy and immediately starting yipping and jumping arund the lder dg.；时间状语从句When he bent dwn t give her a big hug, he fell ver in surprise as a small glden clud came racing up t lick his face t.等高级句式。
4.（2018年6月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was summer, and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre. He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West.
We tk a plane t Albuquerque, a big city in the state f New Mexic. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternn. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up frm the airprt and drve us up t his farm in Pecs.
His wife Tina cked us a delicius dinner and we gt t knw his sns Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestrm f the farm huse listening t the frgs and water rlling dwn the river nearby. Very early in the mrning, Uncle Paul wke us up t have breakfast. "The day starts at dawn n my farm," he said. After breakfast, I went t help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul t take the sheep ut t graze(吃草). I was impressed t see my dad and Uncle Paul riding hrses. They lked really cl.
In the afternn, I asked Uncle Paul if I culd take a hrse ride, and he said yes, as lng as my dad went with me. I wasn’t ging t take a hrse ride by myself anyway. S, my dad and I put n ur new cwby hats, gt n ur hrses, and headed slwly twards the muntains. "Dn’t be late fr supper," Uncle Paul cried, "and keep t the track s that yu dn’t get lst!" "OK! " my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm huse were ut f sight. It was s peaceful and quiet and the clrs f the brwn rcks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternn sun mixed t create a magic scene. It lked like a beautiful wven(编织的) blanket spread ut upn the grund just fr us.
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse.
注意：
（1）所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；
（2）至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
（3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. ____________
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Paragraph 2: We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark. _____________
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【答案】
Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. My hrse turned t the left t avid the little rabbit as I held n tightly and tried nt t fall. Then my dad turned arund and shuted, “Hld n!” All f a sudden the hrse began t run. My dad tried t keep up behind us. Fr a few minutes my hrse slwed dwn t a trt and then stpped beside a river. I lked arund and realized that we were way ff the track.
We had n idea where we were and it gt dark. Luckily the stars came ut and gave us a little light when we were lking fr the way t the farm huse. After what must have been several hurs, we suddenly heard the sund f sheep in the distance. My dad and I bth rde ur hrses twards the sund f the sheep. As we gt clser we saw Uncle Paul with a flashlight waving us ver. What a night!
【解析】
读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。
通过阅读所给文章可知，父亲带儿子去西部荒野的一个朋友家体验农场生活，见父亲和叔叔骑马，儿子也很想骑，于是亲身上马体验。
根据第一段所给首句Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse.这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从rabbit出现后带来的反应扩展开，可以写马的反应，也可以写人的反应，但要注意与第二段首句相呼应。
第二段首句是We had n idea where we were and it was getting dark.这一句呼应前文Uncle Paul的叮嘱——不要误吃晚饭，可从如何寻路返回农场去写。
续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
5.（2017年11月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A Vacatin with My Mther
I had an interesting childhd. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because f my mther---lving, sweet, yet absent-minded and frgetful. One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
My tw sets f grandparents lived in Clrad and Nrth Dakta, and my parents decided t spend a few weeks driving t thse states and seeing all the sights alng the way. As the first day f ur trip apprached, David, my eight-year-ld brther, and I unwillingly said gd-bye t all f ur friends. Wh knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the mment f ur departure arrived, and we laded suitcases, bks, games, camping equipment, and a tent int the car and bravely drve ff. We bravely drve ff again tw hurs later after we’d returned hme t get the purse and traveler’s checks Mm had frgtten.
David and I were always a little nervus when using gas statin bathrms if Mm was driving while Dad slept: “Yu stand utside the dr and play lkut(放哨) while I g, and I’ll stand utside the dr and play lkut while yu g.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Hney, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gsh…I thught they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t abut t take any chances.
On the furth r fifth night, we had truble finding a htel with a vacancy. After driving in vain fr sme time, Mm suddenly gt a great idea: Why didn’t we find a huse with a likely-lking backyard and ask if we culd set up tent there? David and I became nervus. T ur great relief, Dad turned dwn the idea. Mm never culd understand ur bjectins(反对). If a strange family shwed up n her frnt drstep, Mm wuld have been delighted. She thinks everyne in the wrld is as nice as she is. We finally fund a vacancy in the next twn.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. ______________
Paragraph 2:
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. ______________
【答案】
The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us. Thinking f this tent, Mm suggested that we g camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Cnsidering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the dr f ur car pened, Mm strmed ut instantly and urged us t put up the tent. David and I were asked t pick up sme branches t build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mm had already lain dwn the grass cmfrtably in frnt f the tent, talking merrily with a lcal by at ur age, wh kept glancing at this tent curiusly. Sn we learnt that the by in rags even didn’t have a hme t live in. Of curse, Mm “frgt” t take this tent with us again.
We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way. And we als had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm. Thugh she did lve ging camping, she presented that pr by with this tent ut f sympathy. It was Mm that made my childhd clrful. And it was als she that shwed me the true meaning f giving.
【解析】这是一篇读后续写。短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。
【详解】
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个frgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点);
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景： 此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多;
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。
【点睛】
文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式: 虚 拟 语 气 和 with 复 合 结 构 Mm suggested that we g camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Cnsidering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. what引导的主语从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句But what impressed me mst was that tent, which was frgtten deliberately by Mm.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。
6.（2017年6月，浙江高考）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternn, Mac Hllan, a primary schl teacher, was cycling frm his hme t Alaska with his friends. One f his friends had stpped t make a bicycle repair, but they had encuraged Mac t carry n, and they wuld catch up with him sn. As Mac pedaled (骑行) alng alne, he thught fndly f his wife and tw yung daughters at hme. He hped t shw them this beautiful place smeday.
Then Mac heard quick and lud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dg!” he thught. But when he lked t the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dg at all, but a wlf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He fund ut his can f hear spray. With ne hand n the bars, he fired the spray at the wlf. A bright red clud envelped the animal, and t Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back f Mac's bike, tearing pen his tent bag. He fired at the wlf a secnd time, and again, it fell back nly t quickly restart the chase（追赶）。
Mac was pedaling hard nw. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful nt t shw dwn. He saw a steep uphill climb befre him. He knew that zxxk nce he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wlf’s teeth wuld be tearing int his flesh.
At this mment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car n their way t Alaska. They didn’t think much f it when they saw tw cyclists repairing their bike n the side f the rad. A bit later, they sptted what they, t, assumed was a dg running alngside a man n a bike. As they gt clser, they realized that the dg was a wlf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in frnt f it as the wlf was catching up fast, just a dzen yards away nw.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
【答案】
The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. Paul and Becky gt ut f the car immediately t give the help. With nthing n the hand, they didn't dare t fight against the wlf. Hwever, they still apprached t the wlf bravely. At the same time, the wlf als nticed them and turned its head back, hwling angrily twards Paul and Becky. Mac then jumped ff the bicycle and was ready t fight against the wlf. Then came the deadlck.
A few minutes later, the ther tw cyclists arrived. They fund the dangerus situatin, where three men circled the wlf. Mac's friends als jumped ff their bicycles and jined the fight with the wlf. Mre and mre cars stpped. Sme drivers tk ut the sticks frm the cars, and sme tk ut the knives, even the guns twards the wlf. In the meanwhile, the wlf might feel the peple's threats arund, s it began t step back slwly. Sn, it ran away ff the rad and disappeared in the distance.
【解析】
本文主要讲述了Mac在骑自行车前往阿拉斯加的途中，被一只狼追赶的故事。时态要考虑以一般过去时为主，人称以第三人称为主。同时要兼顾字数的要求，不要过多，关键词列出5个以上，需要均匀分布在两段中。考生要注意几个关键信息和情节变化并结合给出的内容提示进行合理构思。
7.（2016年10月，浙江高考）
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tm, had driven three hurs t camp vernight by a lake in the frest. Unfrtunately, n the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started t quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was s angry that she said t Tm. “I’m ging t find a better spt fr us t camp” and walked away.
With n path t fllw, Jane just walked n fr quite a lng time. After she had climbed t a high place, she turned arund, hping t see the lake. T her surprise, she saw nthing but frest and, far beynd, a snwcapped muntain tp. She suddenly realized that she was lst.
“Tm! ”she cried. “Help!”
N reply. If nly she had nt left her mbile phne in that bag with Tm. Jane kept mving, but the farther she walked, the mre cnfused she became. As night was beginning t fall, Jane was s tired that she had t stp fr the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much t be with Tm and her family. She wanted t hld him and tell him hw much she lved him.
Jane rse at the break f day, hungry and thirsty. She culd hear water trickling (滴落）smewhere at a distance. Quickly she fllwed the sund t a stream. T her great jy, she als saw sme berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling strnger nw, Jane began t walk alng the stream and hpe it wuld lead her t the lake.
As she picked her way carefully alng the stream, Jane heard a helicpter.Is that fr me? Unfrtunately, the trees made it impssible fr peple t see her frm abve. A few minutes later, anther helicpter flew verhead. Jane tk ff her yellw bluse, thinking that she shuld g t an pen area and flag them if they came back again.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.
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Paragraph 2:
It was daybreak when Jane wke up.
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One pssible versin:
Paragraph 1:
But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again. Jane had t stay alne in the frest fr anther cld night. Althugh she felt a little sad, she didn’t get fearful. She thught abut Tm. “He must have called fr thse helicpters. Maybe he was in ne f them and will cme back again! I have t guide him tmrrw.” She fell asleep and dreamed f seeing Tm.
Paragraph 2:
It was day break when Jane wke up. She ate sme berries and then walked alng the stream, hping t find a suitable place t guide the helicpter. Frtunately, she saw a huge flat rck in an pen area at a distance. She rushed t the rck, climbed nt it and waited. T her great jy, the helicpter appeared again. The nearer it gt, the mre she flagged the yellw bluse. Luckily, the helicpter didn’t miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rck slwly. Tm jumped ff the helicpter and ran twards Jane. She brke dwn and burst int tears.
【解析】
◆题型解读
和以往的高考英语命题作文不同，读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络和关系。续写这篇短文时，考生需要明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置变化、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上，考生顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来。同时，在组织语言时，切记使用5个以上给出的提示词。
◆故事主线
已知线索：
吵架——出走——迷路——失联——自救——思念——寻路——直升机——飞离……拂晓……
可续写线索：
失望？坚信？曲折？直升机？Tm？自救？获救？
◆续写词汇
已给提示词汇：
Jane, Tm, lake, walk, climb, at a distance, t her great jy, helicpter, yellw bluse
话题激活词汇：
环境：frest, stream, rck, berry, valley, steep, cave, lake, waterfall (人口、环境与自然)
困难：hunger, starve, thirsty, injure, brken, bld, panic, shelter, survive (survival), suffer, cld, severe (天气与自然灾害)
活动: walk, climb, fall, crawl, taste, attempt, struggle t ne’s feet, make ne’s way t, pick up (人体与动作)
情绪：t ne’s great jy, break dwn
救援：rescue team, dctr, search fr, spt (天气与自然灾害)
意志品质：calm, curage, will (性格与行为特征)
评价：amazing, make it
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