第08讲 读后续写精彩纷呈动作描写之”说“（讲义）-2024年高考英语一轮复习讲练测（新教材新高考）

这是一份第08讲 读后续写精彩纷呈动作描写之”说“（讲义）-2024年高考英语一轮复习讲练测（新教材新高考），共9页。

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目录
【多种表达】
【精彩典例】
【2023年新高考全国I卷】“I knew yu’d win! I am prud f yu. Yu made it!” he said excitedly.
“我知道你会赢的！”我为你感到骄傲。你做到了！”他兴奋地说。
【广东省河源市2023-2024学年高三开学联考】 “Yu can slwly start a new life with this mney, friend,” Officer Jacksn said encuragingly.
“朋友，你可以用这笔钱慢慢地开始新的生活，”杰克逊警官鼓励地说。
3.【广东省六校2023-2024学年高三联考试题】 tw weeks later, his secretary called, “Mr. Slaight wants t knw if yu’d like t cme and auditin fr a new schl life shw.” I immediately answered，“Sure!”
但两周后，他的秘书打电话说：“斯莱特先生想知道你是否想来参加一个新的学校生活节目的试镜。”我立刻回答说：“当然可以！”
4. 【2022年厦门大学附中2022-2023学年期中】As the bat was appraching, Kiana pinted t her father and sister and smene screamed, “They are in the water! Help!”
当船驶近时，基亚娜指着她的父亲和妹妹，有人尖叫道：“他们在水里！”救命！”
“I did finish my wrk," he emphasized.
“我真的完成了工作。”他强调说。
“It is all yur fault!" he retrted.
“那都是你的错!” 他反驳说。
7. Lily sclded the child gently fr being naughty.
Lily轻声责备了那个调皮的孩子。
8. “Hannah? Yu knw where she is? Hw is she? Please tell me,” he begged.
“Hannah?你知道她在哪儿吗？她怎么样？请告诉我。”他恳求道。
9. She managed a frced smile, murmuring “Thank yu, anyway,” and turned tward the drway.
她勉强一笑，低声说“无论如何谢谢你”，转身朝门口走去。
10. “There’s a Christmas wish cntest n the newspaper,” Amy’s mm annunced. “Write
a letter t Santa, and yu might win a prize.”
“报纸上有一个圣诞愿望竞赛。”Amy的妈妈宣布，“给圣诞老人写封信可能会得奖。”
【多种表达】
N.1 在前面：说话人+说话内容
“说”后用逗号，引号内第一个字母大写，句尾标点符号放在引号内。
1.（2023年新高考I卷真题）I said, “It’s yu wh make me fall in lve with writing, my scial studies teacher. Withut yur recgnitin and guidance, I culdn’t have written this article. Again thank yu very much!”
我说：“是你让我爱上了写作，我的社会研究老师。如果没有你的认可和指导，我就不可能写这篇文章。再次非常感谢你！
2.He added sftly “I miss yu.”
他又温柔的说了一句:“我想念你。”
N.2 在句中：说话内容+说话人+说话内容
“某人说”可以写作“sb. said”也可以写作“said sb.”；“某人说”前面引号内用逗号，引号外第一个字母小写。“某人说”后面如果用句号，则后面引号内第一个字母大写；“某人说”后面如果用逗号，则后面引号内第一个字母小写。
1.“I can’t get it ut!” I shuted, my vice sunding unnaturally lud in the enclsed space.
“我拿不出来！”我喊道，我的声音在封闭的空间里听起来很奇响。
2.His sn smiled smewhat shyly, and replied sftly,“Me,t,Dad!”
他的儿子有些腼腆地笑了笑，轻声答道:“我也是，爸爸!”
3.“Very clever,” said the teacher, ndding his head as if pleased.
“很聪明，”老师高兴地点了点头说。
4.“我的答案是对”汤姆争辩道，“你的答案是错的。”
“My answer is right," argued Tm, “and yurs is wrng.”
5. “Did yu g skating a lt last year?” I asked, blurting ut the first thing that came t my mind.
“你去年经常溜冰吗？”我问，脱口说出出现在我脑海里的第一件事。
6.“T yur health!” said Mr. White, wh als emptied his glass, and wiped his muth with his handkerchief.
“祝你健康!”White先生说，他也把杯子倒空了，用手帕擦了擦嘴。
N. 3 在后面：说话内容+说话人
陈述句引号内用逗号，引号外第一个字母小写；疑问句或感叹句引号内用问号或感叹号，引号外第一个字母小写。可以写作“sb. said”也可以写作“said sb.”。
1. “ I wuld like t g with yu, but I haven’t finished my hmewrk.” She said.
她说：“我想和你一起去，但我还没有做完成作业。”
2..“He is a fine yung man," bserved Stephen.
“他是一位优秀的年轻人，”斯蒂芬评论道。
“Yu're crazy!" she laughed.
“你疯啦!”她哈哈大笑起来。
“Help, help!” he cried/screamed.
“救命啊,救命啊!” 他高声喊道。
【１被副词修饰】
1.【2022年新高考全国I卷】The children said ludly, “Happy Mther’s Day!”
孩子们大声说：“母亲节快乐！”
2.“I wn’t let yu dwn,” he replied cnfidently.
他信心十足地回答道，“我不会让你失望的。”
3.“My best friend is leaving, ”she said sadly.
“我最好的朋友要走了，” 她难过地说。
4.“That's impssible," she thught alud.
“那不可能，”她自言自语地说。
【２被介词短语修饰】
1.“D yu knw the answer ?” he said with eagerness.
“你知道答案吗？”他急切地说。
“Of curse,” Nancy replied with a smile.
“当然,”南希笑着回答。
3.The huse gt really nisy at that time, with everybdy hllering and shuting at the tp f his vice.
那栋房子真是很吵闹，每个人都在用最大的嗓门大喊大叫。
4.“Christine! Take care f yur yung brther!” Mther shuted at the tp f her vice.
“Christine!照顾好你弟弟！”母亲高声喊道。
【３被非谓语短语修饰】
1.“I didn’t get an ideal scre in the math exam, ”said Lily, disappinted.
“我在数学考试中没有得到理想的分数，”莉莉失望地说。
2. “Time t g.” I whispered t the girl, wishing she culd fllw me right away.
“该出发了。”我轻声对小女孩说，希望她能立马跟上。
3.“ He turned me ut f the rm this mrning, ”said James, stamping his ft with excitement.
早上他把我赶出了房间，”詹姆斯激动的跺着脚说。
4.“I didn't knw what I was ding,”she said, laughing.
“我不知道我在做什么，”她笑着说。
5. “I'll get us sme cffee,” she said, heading fr the kitchen.
“我去给我们拿点咖啡，”她说着朝厨房走去。
【４被状语从句修饰】
say后接状语从句，增加了细节描写。即：“...”sb said,as/when/befre/as if...
1.“What a beauty!” said the nurse when she came t the dr.
“多美啊!”护士走到门口时说道。
2.“Watch ut!” she shuted, as the car started t mve.
“当心!”当汽车开始移动时，她喊道。
【５被并列句修饰】
say后接并列谓语或接并列句，增加了动作描写。即：“...”sb said, and (then he)
1.“I was attacked by a wlf and I thught I wuld never see yu again.” Mac hugged them and burst ut crying.
“我被狼袭击了，我以为再也见不到你了。”麦克抱着他们，大哭起来。
【６被...+动作描写来修饰】
1. Frank quickly tld Belle Ringer and the ther tw drivers abut Stevie's surgery, and then sighed.
弗兰克快速地告诉Belle Ringer和其他两名司机 Stevie手术的事，说完之后叹了口气。
2.“I dn't believe yu any mre”He turned arund, slammed the dr and strmed ut.
“我再也不相信你了。”他转过身，砰的一声关上门，冲了出去。
3. James murmured a thank yu and ran hme all the way.
James 轻轻地说了声“谢谢”后一路跑回了家。
4. He paused, lked straight int her eyes, and said in a quiet vice, “That's true.
他停下来，直视着她的眼睛，平静地说:“那是真的。”
5. The Queen, quite ut f breath frm yelling and screaming, went up t Alice and asked,“Have yu met him yet?”
女王因为大声喊叫而气喘吁吁地向爱丽丝走过来并且问道:“你见过他吗?”
6.“Drive safely," he said, and waved gdbye.
“小心开车，”他说着挥手告别。
7.“Cme here,” said the little man, and tk her t ne f the crners f the building.
【7不出现“说”，...+动作描写来修饰 】
1.“I was attacked by a wlf and I thught I wuld never see yu again.”Mac hugged them and burst ut crying.
“我被狼袭击了，我以为再也见不到你了。”麦克抱着他们，大哭起来。
2.He interrupted the silence with an annuncement: “The deadline t enter fr the Cmpetitin is tmrrw.”
他用一则通知打断了沉默:“报名参加比赛的截止日期是明天。”
3.She suggested a walk in the pen air and he readily agreed.
她提议去户外走走，他欣然同意了。
4.He went alng, stpping his friends beginning endlessly his statement.
他走过去拦住他的朋友们，开始了他无休止的陈述。
错误一 滥用修饰词
【典例1】“Hw can yu d this?"she said very angrily, lking at me furiusly.
【点睛】 此句使用了大量副调。并且套用了分词作伴随的句型。过度使用副词让阅卷老师觉得你词汇贫乏。废话连篇，对情节发展和刻画人物性格没有帮助。
【典例2】“That is fantastic news,”he said happily.
【点睛】 此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人的表情，过度强调对话标签会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。
错误二 追求花哨，过度使用“对话标签”
【典例】“Hey，hw are yu?”“I’m fine, hw are yu?”
“Hw is the weather?”“Terrific! Nice day fr a walk isn't it?”
【点睛】 这样的对话在现实生活中很真实，但是小说毕竟是艺术加工，无助情节推动的，不能刻画人物性格的日常寒暄和偏离文章主线的对话绝对不用。
错误三 用词不当，逻辑混淆
【典例】“I can't believe it,” Emma gasped.“That's hilarius,” Henry chuckled.
【点睛】这里把动作描写逻辑混淆了，gasp(喘息)不能.chuckle(轻笑)出一句话。
“I can't believe it” Emma said with a gasp.(Dialgue tag+with介词短语)
错误四 重复使用，废话堆积
【典例】“I tld yu already,”I said, glaring.
【点睛】 此句对话中的主语“1”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用 dialgue tag“I said”来说明说话对象。可以加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。I glared at him,“I tld yu already.”
【模拟速递】
【广东省执信中学2023-2024学年高三开学试题】
When my dad arrived, he went as usual, straight t the balcny and saw his flwers lying n the flr like dead animals. In n time, he gt annyed and strmed int ur rm, questining us in glare wh it was that made such a mess f his flwers. Instead f crying, brave Maria held ut the flwers and explained what we meant t d and hw it ended up this way. She was afraid that dad might punish her, but at the same time she hped that dad wuld smile at ur warm actins. Deeply tuched, dad held the flwers tightly and gently, and immediately gathered us int his arms, saying , “Yu are my best flwers!”
当我爸爸到达时，他像往常一样，径直走到阳台上，看到他的花像死动物一样躺在地板上。很快，他就怒气冲冲地冲进了我们的房间，怒不可遏地问我们，是谁把他的花弄得一团糟。勇敢的玛丽亚没有哭，而是拿出花，解释我们打算做什么，以及它是如何这样结束的。她担心爸爸会惩罚她，但同时她也希望爸爸会对我们温暖的行为微笑。爸爸深深地感动，紧紧而温柔地握着花，立刻把我们抱在怀里，说：“你们是我最好的花！”
【2022年新高考II卷】
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day f the big crss-cuntry run. Students frm seven different primary schls in and arund the small twn were warming up and walking the rute(路线)thrugh thick evergreen frest.
I lked arund and finally sptted David, wh was standing by himself ff t the side by a fence. He was small fr ten years ld. His usual big tthy smile was absent tday. I walked ver and asked him why he wasn’t with the ther children. He hesitated and then said he had decided nt t run.
What was wrng? He had wrked s hard fr this event!
I quickly searched the crwd fr the schl’s cach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids frm ther schls wuld laugh at him,” he explained uncmfrtably. “I gave him the chice t run r nt, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustratin(懊恼). I knew the cach meant well—he thught he was ding the right thing. After making sure that David culd run if he wanted, I turned t find him cming twards me, his small bdy rcking frm side t side as he swung his feet frward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him frm walking r running like ther children, but at schl his classmates thught f him as a regular kid. He always participated t the best f his ability in whatever they were ding. That was why nne f the children thught it unusual that David had decided t jin the crss-cuntry team. It just tk him lnger—that’s all. David had nt missed a single practice, and althugh he always finished his run lng after the ther children, he did always finish. As a special educatin teacher at the schl, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was prud f his strng determinatin.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
We sat dwn next t each ther, but David wuldn’t lk at me.
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I watched as David mved up t the starting line with the ther runners.
【答案】
We sat dwn next t each ther, but David wuldn’t lk at me. I said gently and quietly, “N ne can change yur mind, except yurself. If yu desire t challenge yurself, there is nthing t d with thers’ thughts.” He sat still with a deep breath. “Yu have a full preparatin befre this event, which is the mst imprtant reasn why yu shw up here”, I added with a sincere tne. Hearing my wrds, David turned t me tremblingly with tears spilling ut f his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determinatin t finish the crss-cuntry run. His cach heard what David said and gave me a lk—the kind that was mre determined than anyne else’s.
I watched as David mved up t the starting line with the ther runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely lng fr yung children, nt t mentin a child with a brain disease. David insisted n running as if he had frgtten all his weaknesses, thugh he was tripped ver within the a few kilmeters. It didn’t take lng befre he picked himself up again and cntinued his missin. Classmates all appeared n the racing track, cheering fr him. “Cme n! Yu can make it! We are prud f yu!” they shuted enthusiastically. T everyne’s jy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th. It was n mre imprtant whether he wn the first place r nt. It was his brave heart and strng faith that culd make smething unusual happen finally.
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者是一名特殊教育教师，在大型越野赛跑那天，发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因，他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫，所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心，不理会别人的看法，大卫最终参赛，尽管遇到困难，他战胜了自己，这已经无关名次，而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不愿看我一眼。”可知，第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛，大卫经过强烈的心理斗争，最终决定参加比赛。
②由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知，第二段可描写大卫开始参赛，虽然中途遇到困难，仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛。
续写线索：鼓励大卫——心理变化——决定参赛——克服困难——加油助威——完成比赛——感悟
词汇激活：
行动类：
①深呼吸：with a deep breath/breathe deeply
②坚持做：insisted n ding/be stick t ding
情绪类：
①热情：enthusiastically /with great passin
②骄傲：be prud f/take pride in
[高分句型1]Yu have a full preparatin befre this event, which is the mst imprtant reasn why yu shw up here. (由which引导的非限制性定语从句和why引导的限制性定语从句)
[高分句型2]Hearing my wrds, David turned t me tremblingly with tears spilling ut f his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determinatin t finish the crss-cuntry run. (现在分词作状语和省略that的宾语从句)
[高分句型3]It was his brave heart and strng faith that culd make smething unusual happen finally. (由It 结构引导的强调句型)
目标1
精彩纷呈的不同的“说”
目标2
不同位置的“说”
目标3
掌握不同修饰法的“说”
目标4
避免易错、易丢分的“说”
目标5
经典赏析
目标6
真题感悟
精彩纷呈的不同的“说”
一般说
say说; speak说；tell告诉；add补充说；insist坚持说；chat (聊天)
哭着说
cry哭叫；大声说；sb呜咽着说; weep ut哭着说出
笑着说
smile 微笑着说; laugh 笑着说；say with a smile ; chuckle(轻笑着说)
音调说
call 喊，叫; yell喊叫(因激动，恐惧); shut 高喊;大声喊叫;scream 惊呼，高声叫道；scream (尖叫),rar (吼叫),, let ut a lud vice (大叫/大声呼喊),
whisper(小声/低语)，murmur (低语/嘀咕/低声抱怨)
褒贬说
praise 称赞； cmplain 抱怨；sigh叹息；mutter低声抱怨；murmur嘟囔
问答说
ask问；explain解释说； reply=respnd 答复,回答； answer 回答
demand 质问； inquire (询问)； tell告诉
反对说
disagree不同意；deny否认；scld责备;cntradict反驳说；argue争论；prtest抗议
声明说
state声明；declare宣布；annunce宣布;claim声明;pint ut指出
评论说
cmment; bserve; remark;hint(暗示)；add (补充说)
观点说
admit 承认；agree 同意； advise 劝告，建议 ；suggest 建议；argue 主张
acknwledge承认；
其他说
repeat 重复；prmise答应/许诺；cmfrt安慰；warn 警告；whisper 悄声说; 低语 道 ；beg 恳求 ；prmise 承诺道；emphasize=stress强调 ; swear发誓；
位置灵活的“说”
多种修饰的“说”
低分的“说”
经典赏析