2025版高考英语一轮总复习写作培优第2部分第3讲如何润色语言__升级有技巧课件

这是一份2025版高考英语一轮总复习写作培优第2部分第3讲如何润色语言__升级有技巧课件，共35页。PPT课件主要包含了典例1　，典例2　，典例3　，典例4　，典例5　，典例6　，典例7　，典例8　等内容，欢迎下载使用。

构思好续写情节之后，在具体的续写时，我们应对所罗列的要点进行筛选、整合、打磨，让文章语言更出彩。首先，考虑与原文用词特点和行文风格的一致。观察有无直接引语、各类从句、特殊句型、非谓语动词的灵活运用等。通过模仿创新，提高与原文的协调性，使用多样的句式和结构以及有效的衔接词，力求在各个语言层次的表达风格上与原文保持一致。同时，确保语言运用的正确、生动、形象。根据情节需要可以运用一些优化语言的技巧提升语言表达效果。
微技能一添加状语，表达更生动在写作过程中，我们经常通过添加状语来交代时间、原因、目的、方式、条件、伴随状态、心理状态等，使句意更加清楚明了，同时也可以使语言更加丰满。
即时演练(一)通过添加状语使下列句子更为生动1．The man lked Lily up and dwn.→________________________________________________2．The dg leapt t his feet, snrted happily and bunded frward.→__________________________________________________________________________________
The man lked Lily up and dwn in disbelief.
Upn his master's arrival, the dg leapt t his feet, snrted happily and bunded frward.
3．After finishing his wrk, the man tipted t the bed.→_______________________________________________________________________
After finishing his wrk, the man tipted t the bed s as nt t wake his baby.
微技能二细化动作，形成动作链在读后续写的写作中，动作描写占有相当大的比重。学生在续写过程中存在的典型问题就是语言表达欠生动，描写人物动作时粗略带过，对于一些微小的动作描写往往兼顾不到。解决这一问题的有效方法之一是在写作过程中要细化动作，把原来的动作分解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作链，这样才能使人物或描述的场景更有画面感和立体感。
即时演练(二)通过细化动作使下列句子更为生动1．Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew.→______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．Jasn gt n a taxi.→__________________________________________________________________________________________
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actins we knew—we yelled at the bear, hit pts hard, and fired blank shtgun shells int the air.
Jasn stpped a taxi, jumped in with his suitcase and tld the driver “G t the plice statin, please.”
微技能三把静态写成动态，刻画鲜活画面在对人物和事物进行描写时，如果只有静态的描写，往往会显得呆板。这时，我们就可以通过将这些静态描写转换为动态描写，赋予这些客观事物以运动感、活力感、变化感，使其“活”起来。在读后续写中恰当地使用动态描写可以更加鲜活地表现人物和事物，使文章更加引人入胜。
即时演练(三)通过将静态写成动态使下列句子更为生动1．When the hst annunced that she wn the prize, she was excited.→_____________________________________________________________________________________2．Upn hearing the bad news, she felt very sad.→_______________________________________________________________________
When the hst annunced that she wn the prize, her eyes twinkled with excitement.
Upn hearing the bad news, her heart ached, tears streaming dwn her cheeks.
微技能四巧用修辞手法，表达更形象修辞手法在文学作品中是一种必不可少的手段。在续写时运用修辞手法不但可以发散学生的思维，还可以使描写更生动，同时也可以增加文章亮点，提升文章的层次。写作中最常用的就是比喻、拟人、夸张等手法。
即时演练(四)根据提示利用修辞手法使下列句子更为生动1．There's enugh fd in the cupbard.(夸张)→________________________________________________________2．She received the bad news at midnight.(拟人)→___________________________________________3．Mac was frightened f what happened just nw.(比喻)→__________________________________________________
There's enugh fd in the cupbard t feed an entire army!
The bad news kncked at her dr at midnight.
Mac felt what happened just nw was like a bad dream.
微技能五积累描述性词句，续写意蕴丰满1．注重情感描写——让人物情感更丰富人物情感描写是对人物在特定环境下产生的想法、感触、联想等心理活动的描写，旨在深刻揭示人物的精神世界。在读后续写中，描写人物的情感是常用的描写方法，恰当的情感描写能够表现文中人物的性格，推动事件的发展。在描述人物情感时，要突出文章的中心，与人物的性格吻合，符合事件发展的逻辑。要选用恰当的词句通过情感描写精确地刻画人物的内心世界。
(1)常用词汇cheerful adj.快乐的excited adj.兴奋的jyful adj.欢乐的pleased adj.欣喜的，高兴的；满意的tear n．[常用复数]眼泪，泪珠srrw n．悲痛；忧伤sadness n．悲伤，忧愁
pain n．痛苦grief n．悲痛glare v．对……怒目而视annyed adj.恼怒的，气恼的shame n．羞愧；耻辱hpeless adj.没有希望的，绝望的anxiety n．焦虑be wild with delight欣喜若狂be in high spirits情绪高涨
be seized with panic惊慌失措a strng sense f lss强烈的失落感be dwn in spirits情绪低落lse ne's spirit垂头丧气get mad/crss at sb.对某人勃然大怒ignre a cmplaint对抱怨不予理会stamp ne's ft in anger愤怒地跺脚feel discuraged感到泄气的
(2)常用语句The surface f the calm lake stirred the waves, and my md was as cheerful as a wave.平静的湖面激起了浪花，我的心情也像浪花一样欢快。I culdn't restrain my jy and jumped int the huse.我抑制不住内心的喜悦，蹦蹦跳跳地进了家门。We were very pleased t hear this encuraging news.听到这个令人鼓舞的消息，我们十分高兴。
He was delighted t receive recgnitin fr his achievements.他的成就获得了认可，他很开心。He std silently, tears rlling dwn his cheeks.他静静地站着，眼泪顺着脸颊流下来。I feel like I am flating in an cean f sadness.我感觉自己正漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。As he lked at Katherine，great srrw cluded his eyes.他看着凯瑟琳，满眼忧伤。
He was tngue-tied with anger.His hands trembled and he shuted fr half a day.他气得张口结舌，双手直颤抖，大喊大叫了半天。Ellen felt bth despair and anger at her mther.埃伦对她的母亲感到既绝望又生气。Andy's face paled with disappintment, perhaps with anger as well.安迪的脸色由于失望而变得苍白，也许还掺杂着气愤。He is just mad at me because I dn't want t g.因为我不想去，他就对我火冒三丈。
She was t frightened t tell her family what had happened.她太害怕了，不敢告诉家人发生了什么事。His heart was punding, as if he were frightened.他的心怦怦跳，似乎被吓坏了。My brain is blank.I just want t leave this hrrible place.我的大脑一片空白，只想离开这个恐怖的地方。
We were all astnished at the unexpected news.我们都对这意外的消息感到惊讶。All thse present t listen t her sad stry were mved t tears.所有在场的人听了她悲伤的故事都感动得流下了眼泪。
2．注重环境描写——烘托故事情节环境描写是指对人物所处的具体的社会环境和自然环境的描写。其中，社会环境是指能反映社会、时代特征的建筑、场所、陈设等景物以及民俗民风等。自然环境是指自然界的景物，如季节变化、风霜雨雪、山川湖海、森林原野等。在进行读后续写时，要着重事件发生的地理位置和天气变化等。
(1)常用词汇beach n．海滩situate vt.使(某物)位于nrthern adj.北方的，北部的rural adj.农村的beneath prep.在……下方rck n．岩石muntain n．山a favrably situated city位置优越的城市
the thinly ppulated rural area人烟稀少的农村地区the blue sky蓝天the sngs f birds鸟鸣the fragile flwers娇嫩的花the green grass青草the fragrant rses芬芳的玫瑰the setting/rising sun落日/冉冉升起的太阳
(2)常用语句There is a small village midway between these tw twns.在这两个镇的中间有个小村子。The bkstre is within a stne's thrw f the schl.那个书店就在学校的附近。Dark cluds were gathering in the sky.乌云密布。The night sky is lit up by flashes f light.一道道光照亮了夜空。
The sun was nw high in the suthern sky.太阳正高挂在南边的天空。The sun went in, and the breeze became cld.云层遮住了太阳，微风有了凉意。The mist melted rapidly in the mrning sun.在早晨的阳光下，薄雾很快就消散了。The muntain area is cvered entirely in dense jungle.山区完全掩映在茂密的丛林中。
The muntain tp was cvered with snw.山顶被积雪覆盖。The regin is uninhabited except fr a few small muntain villages.除了几个小山村之外，这个地区杳无人烟。Bathed in the sunshine and delighted by fantastic scenery, we headed fr the destinatin.沐浴在阳光下，享受着美丽的风景，我们向目的地出发。