高考英语续写讲评：sharing课件

这是一份高考英语续写讲评：sharing课件，共23页。PPT课件主要包含了两段词数要差不多，两段词数为150左右，A workman，A woman，Free，Love，Special，I利用非谓语，II利用形容词等内容，欢迎下载使用。
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Read fr plt
The smell f her blssms s filled with the air with sweetness that it seemed t take away the tiredness in his bnes and lift his spirits.He had never experienced such wnder frm the many blms f his wn garden.…the smell f them refreshed the sul……they still perfrmed their fantastic magic.…such remarkable relaxatin frm tiredness, such cmfrt in sadness, such spiritual nurishment as thse remarkable flwers prvided.
What was special abut the flwers?
S the man filled his arms with blssms and hurried jyfully hme.In rder nt t lse his valuable pssessin, the man planted the blssms in a small plt f land behind his huse. …the man ver and ver warned them against carelessness and wild play fr fear that they walk n the flwers and damage them. With the news spreading and mre peple cming t appreciate his treasure, the man became even mre cncerned abut his remarkable flwers.He was determined t prtect the flwers.
Did he lve the flwers?
Develp the plt
Paragraph 1He was determined t prtect the flwers. _______________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2Hwever, the flwers seemed t fade day by day, s the man went everywhere fr help. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________
What wuld he d t prtect the flwers?
build walls
warn children
take mre care f the flwers…
Why did the flwer fade away?
Where wuld the man get help?
What des the stry want t tell us ?
A. (para.2) Hwever, the flwers seemed t fade day by day, s the man went everywhere fr help. The man asked lts f peple fr help, but n ne can slve this prblem. Three days later, the wmen wh gave the flwer t the man, happened t cme t his huse t see the flwers. When seeing the dying flwers, the wman said gently t the man,“Yu take t much care f the flwers. They are magic flwers nt cmmn ne, s they shuld live in natural envirnment.” Hearing this, the man realized that he shuld nt verprtect the flwer.
Which ending is reasnable?
B.(para.2) Hwever, the flwers seemed t fade day by day, s the man went everywhere fr help. Every evening the wrkman wuld g t that rad where he met the wman but waited nthing. One day, when he was crying in the garden, a wman appeared. She said “Can I appreciate yur flwers?” The wrkman wanted t refuse but fund she was the wman he met that evening. The man said “I am srry fr destrying yur gift.” The wman smiled “The flwers were nt nly watered by water but als by heart and lve.” The wrkman was inspired by wman’s wrds and started t water them by lve and kindness. The flwers became charming again.
(para.2) Hwever, the flwers seemed t fade day by day, s the man went everywhere fr help. Exhausted and hpeless, he managed t find the wman wh gave him flwers. The wman said gently, “There’s n magic in my flwer. What exactly make it seem magical is sharing.” Hearing that, the man realized his mistake and threw away the warning sign immediately. Frm then n, mre and mre peple restarted t cme t appreciate the remarkable flwers, and the man’s garden was full f jyfulness again.
Plish the language
1. He didn’t feel satisfied. He even set a warning bard in his garden, saying “n entry”.
2. He saw his belved flwers dying. He felt very anxius.
3. He saw the flwer was in full blm again. He felt delighted.
Nt feeling satisfied, he even set a warning bard in his garden, saying “n entry”.
Seeing his belved flwers dying, he felt very anxius.
Seeing the flwer was in full blm again, he felt delighted.
He didn’t knw what else he culd d t save the flwers. He felt exhausted and depressed.
Exhausted and depressed, he didn’t knw what else he culd d t save the flwers.
III. 添加情感/神态/心理描写
He saw his belved flwers dying. He felt very anxius.
Seeing his belved flwers dying, he felt n pins and needles.
Seeing his belved flwers dying, he felt anxius with a fld f depressin welling up in his mind.
4.He saw his belved flwers dying. He felt very depressed.
Seeing his belved flwers dying, he felt like he was flating in an cean f sadness. 
2. He saw the flwer was in blm again. He felt delighted.
The man was wild with jy n seeing the flwers was in blm again.
Amusement gleamed in his eyes when he saw the flwers was in blm again.
Seeing the flwer was in blm again, he felt delighted with a satisfied lk n his face.
V. 点明主旨的句式
最终，他明白了这些花没有魔力，分享才有魔力。 (It dawned n sb that…)
It dawned n him that the flwers didn’t have magic but sharing did.
One pssible versin
(1)He was determined t prtect the flwers. S he built a high wall arund them. Nt feeling satisfied, he even set up rules as t wh culd enter the garden, hw they must enter, and what they must fllw while they were there. As a result, children were frbidden t enter and appreciate the flwers as befre. Fr his part, he cntinued t see t it that his treasure received enugh sunlight and water s that the flwers cntinued t perfrm their wnderful magic.
Hwever, the lwers seemed t fade day by day s the man went everywhere fr help. He visited every expert, nly t find his effrts in vain. He felt n pins and needles, seeing his belved flwers dying. One evening, he was wandering n the street aimlessly when he suddenly nticed the flwer wman n the same spt where he had met her, giving away her amazing flwers. It finally dawned n him that the flwers are gifts nt pssessins and that nly by sharing can the magic remain and last.