高考英语写作专题 个人生活方式

这是一份高考英语写作专题 个人生活方式，共4页。
道歉信
假如你是新华中学的学生李华，你的美国朋友Tm一周前给你发电子邮件，询问你暑假里的打算，但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复。请根据以下要点给他回封邮件：
1. 未及时回信的原因；
2. 你假期的打算(如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等)
注意：1. 词数80左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
Dear Tm，






Yurs，
Li Hua
【范文】
Dear Tm，
Hw is everything ging n with yu? I'm writing this letter t express my aplgy t yu fr nt writing yu back in time.
In the first place, I'll be s happy if yu culd accept my aplgy. ①It's f great imprtance fr me t make full preparatins fr the final exam last week. Therefre, I culdn't spare enugh time t write yu back in time. What's mre, I am willing t tell yu that I am t d sme part­time jbs in the summer hliday. ②N ne can deny the fact that we can have ur visin bradened in the prcess. ③Last but nt least, it must be pinted ut that I wuld lve t g travelling during this hliday.
I am lking frward t hearing frm yu. ④And I'll appreciate it very much if yu culd give me an early reply.
Yurs，
Li Hua
点评：
1. 词汇美：文章运用了很多高级词汇，如be ging n with, express ne's aplgy t, in time, in the first place, be f great imprtance, make full preparatins fr, what's mre，be t d, deny, braden, last but nt least, pint ut等。
2. 句式美：①句It作形式主语，真正的主语为后面的不定式短语t make full preparatins fr the final exam last week。
②句the fact后接that引导的同位语从句，that在从句中不作成分，但不可省略。
③句it是形式主语，真正的主语是that引导的主语从句，that在从句中不作成分。
④句if引导条件状语从句，it为指示代词，指代if从句的内容。
Ⅱ. 读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
An 80­year­ld man was sitting n the sfa in his huse alng with his 45­year­ld highly educated sn. Suddenly a crw perched (栖息) n their windw.
The father asked his sn, “What is this？” The sn replied, “It is a crw.” After a few minutes, the father asked his sn fr the secnd time, “What is this？” The sn said, “Father, I have just nw tld yu that it's a crw！”
After a little while, the ld father again asked his sn fr the third time, “What is this？”
At this time sme expressin f irritatin (恼怒) was felt in the sn's tne when he said t his father with a rebuff (生硬回绝), “It's a crw, a crw.” A little while later, the father again asked his sn the furth time, “What is this？”[悬念1]
This time, the sn shuted at his father, “Why d yu keep asking me the same questin again and again, althugh I have tld yu s many times ‘IT IS A CROW’？ Are yu nt able t understand this？”
A little while later the father went t his rm and came back with an ld tattered (发皱的) diary, which he had maintained since his sn was brn.
On pening a page, he asked his sn t read that page.
When the sn read it, the fllwing wrds were written in the diary：[悬念2]
Tday my little sn aged three was sitting with me n the sfa when a crw was sitting n the windw. My sn asked me 23 times what it was, and I replied t him all 23 times that it was a crw. I hugged him lvingly each time he asked me the same questin. I did nt feel irritated at all but I rather felt affectin fr my inncent sn.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
After reading the diary,


Feeling ashamed, the sn gt dwn n his knees befre his father.


一、理清文章大意
关键：Wh: the sn and his father
Where: in the huse
What: the diary
Hw: the sn was ashamed
大意：父亲问了儿子四次“这是什么”，儿子回答四次“乌鸦”后开始大发雷霆。父亲拿出以前记录不厌其烦回答儿子23遍同样问题的日记让儿子看。
二、挖掘文中悬念点
悬念1思考：文章为什么用了四次“What is this？”？
悬念2思考：儿子读完日记后有什么感受？
三、分析段落开头语
段首句1思考：
①读完日记后儿子会哭吗？
②儿子会想起自己的童年旧事吗？
③儿子想自己要是老的时候，自己的儿子会怎么看自己？
段首句2思考：
①儿子为什么羞愧地跪下？他会对父亲说些什么？
②儿子会联想到儿时父亲为自己所做的一切而向父亲承诺些什么吗？
通过以上思路，预设续写情节如下：
Paragraph 1：感动流泪→回想起日记中记录的内容→反思：自己老的时候儿子会怎样对待自己
Paragraph 2：感到惭愧，跪下道歉→求得宽恕→许诺
【范文】
After reading the diary, the sn was filled with tears and began t reflect n the days when he sat tgether with his father. His father patiently answered the same questin all 23 times withut feeling any irritatin while his father asked him the same questin just fur times! The sn thught t himself: If I attain ld age, hw will my sn lk at me? Will he think f me as a burden? Will he shut at me because f my pr sight, pr hearing r pr understanding?
Feeling ashamed, the sn gt dwn n his knees befre his father. He made an aplgy t his father, begging his father t frgive him fr his bad behaviur. He said this alud, “I prmise t see yu happy frever, Dad. It is yu wh have cared fr me since I was a little child, shwering yur selfless affectin n me. Yu wrked hard t make mney s that I culd affrd t g t university. I will serve yu in the best way n matter hw yu behave.”
点评：
1. 使用恰当的修饰词让描写更加生动。
①patiently一词与上文作者对父亲的不耐烦形成了鲜明对比。
②withut feeling irritatin巧妙地呼应了上文的At this time sme expressin f irritatin was felt。
③selfless一词用得精妙，概括了父亲的伟大，折射了作者惭愧的原因。
2. 词汇与语法结构丰富、准确。
①all 23 times与上文照应，与父亲问了四次同样的问题作者就不耐烦形成强烈反差，此处是全文的点睛之笔。
②It is yu wh ... 此处强调句用得恰如其分，尽显儿子的惭愧之情，也显露儿子回报父爱的决心。
③If I attain ld age(条件状语从句)，shwering yur selfless affectin ... (非谓语动词短语)，s that I culd affrd ... (目的状语从句)等高级句式和结构的应用为文章的增分点。