公开课 How to polish a sentence课件PPT

这是一份公开课 How to polish a sentence课件PPT，共19页。
Writing skill--Hw t plish a sentence?
Sad departure
The develpment f the stry
Cmmn Expressin fr a Happy Md
exciteddelightedenthusiastic ecstatic:feeling r shwing great enthusiasm enraptured:filled with great pleasure r jy
sptntenticebserve
Pppy was happy t see the puppy.
Pppy was enraptured t spt the puppy.
1.Sptted and ultimately saved by the peple in the helicpter, she felt unbearably desperate and hpeless, Jane knelt dwn, tear streaming dwn her face.（妻子迷失丛林）3.A big wave came and crashed nt her, almst swallwing her.（虎鲨救人）4.Maria began t lk arund the cttage thinking hw t accmplish her missin successfully. (火烧茅屋传信号)5.Gerge and I std there dumbfunded watching him finishing the whle jb, gratitude and admiratin rushing in my heart. （丛林修轮胎）6.The audience std up, clapping fr their her’s cmeback. （滑冰）7.David and I lked at Dad, hping he culd stp her crazy sat n the grass, hked /spellbund by the splendid nature. （健忘又可爱的老妈）
nn-finite verbs(非谓语)
Tip1:nn-finite verbs (ding/dne..)
一个主语发出两个以上动作
Fascinated by the adrable puppy, Pppy stared at him feverishly, buncing arund with energy n the sft pads. 
1.Pppy was fascinated by the adrable puppy. 2.She stared at him feverishly. 3.Then she bunced arund with energy n the sft pads. 
1.他聚精会神地听着，咬着嘴唇，眼睛盯着地板。2.Jane觉得非常冷，精疲力竭，完全不知道该如何应对这种可怕的情况。
He listened with clse attentin, biting his lips and staring at the flr.
Feeling cld and extremely exhausted, Jane was quite at a lss as t hw t cpe with the terrible situatin.
He came in, his face (being) red with cld.
Smene pened the cupbard, and a cup fell ut.Smene pening the cupbard, a cup fell ut.
1. With her face lighting up and arms waving desperately, she rse and shuted2.Magically, with happy memries f  their hneymn crwding in, she regained the curage t cpe with  the terrible situatin. 3.With tears welling up in eyes, the cuple hugged tightly, prmising nt t lse their temper and d the silly thing regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.（妻子迷失丛林）5.Lking at their eyes with exhaustin but great cncern , she culd hld her tears n mre!(流浪后回家) time appraching, Maria gt mre and mre anxius. (火烧茅屋传信号)7.“Maybe this is yur chance t win.”Laurie frze there, with her hands sweating and her heart beating fast. （滑冰）8.Jenny walked t the frnt, with her legs trembling and her heart beating nearly ut f her chest. （魔法手表）
Tip2: with复合结构(with +n.+ adj./adv/介词短语/ding/dne/t d)
Pppy sptted the puppy. She was enraptured. Her eyes became mellw and affectinate.
Sptting the puppy, Pppy was enraptured, with her eyes becming mellw and affectinate.
1.ding/dne (非谓语)
2.with +n.+ adj./advding/dne/t d
1.Sptting the puppy, Pppy was enraptured, with her eyes becming mellw and by the adrable puppy, Pppy stared at him feverishly, buncing arund with energy n the sft pads. 3.Pppy, wh frantically wagged her little tail, was staring at the puppy jyfully.
2.ding/dne (非谓语)
1.with +n.+ adj./advding/dne/t d
Plish yur sentences
1. When Pppy saw the little dg, she wagged her tail furiusly and barked with jy.2. Pppy tk a little dg went straight t him quickly. Pppy's fluffy paws arund the by's bdy.3. The lvely puppy wriggled, his eyes slwly pened. She stared at the puppy wriggled arund her.4. When Pppy ran ut, Pppy pulled the bags, the little dg fllwed her.5. He walked in frnt f Pppy, he strked her head and tuched the fluffy paws.6. Pppy used her sharp nse t sniff the puppy, wagging hertail slwly, and reach ut her fluffy paw tuch with puppy.
7. Pppy sniffed the puppy with her sharp nse. Her tail wagged quickly.8. Parents' eyes were sparkling with jy. They watched the dgs ran all rund the huse.9. Pppy was interested f the new friend. Pppy walk twards the puppy slwly. She reached ut her paws.10. Lked at this, dad hugged mther, and smiled, said the Pppy became happy eventually.11. She wagged furiusly, barked at her parents. The puppy surrunded Pppy, barking with Pppy ran twards him, the by hugged her tightly.
Plish yur sentences
13. Pppy ran in a dash, the by hug his bdy with smiling “I miss yu very much”.14. The little dg stared at its wner, barking with jy, and wagged her tail quickly at the same time.15. Mm and dad saw this scene, a smile was n their face.16. Tears were arund the by's eyes, he hugged his parents suddenly, in lw vice “Thank ”17. When parents lked at them run after in the living rm and played very happy, parents hugged each ther excitedly.18. The puppy seemed t wake up just at that mment and pened his eyes slwly.
Then he hid n the side f the bx with his eyes filled with hrrr.Seeing Pppy and the puppy happily ran after each ther, parents finally smiled in relief.Having been tld that hw sad Pppy was after his leaving, he deeply learnt Pppy's lve and attachment t him.Lking at this cmfrtable scene, the by's parents wre a relieved smile, with tears in their eyes.Pppy reached ut her fluffy paws t strke the puppy's head, wagging her tail faster.Mm and dad lked at the happy Pppy, wearing a smile n their face with tears in eyes.Seeing this satisfying scene, parents smiled with tears rlling dwn frm their cheeks.She put her paws int his head, sniffing his fur with a sharp nse.Then Pppy bark at her wners, reaching ut her fluffy paws t strke the little dg's head.
Appreciatin
怎样去润色句子？ 从句子构成和描述人、事、物特征的角度
令父母开心的是这只大眼睛小狗的到来成功地为这个一直闷闷不乐的Pppy 带来了欢乐。
主语 + 谓语 + 宾语
The arrival f the puppy
happiness t Pppy.
The arrival f the puppy with big eyes
happiness t Pppy wh had been unhappy fr a lng time.
successfully brught
T the parents’ delight, the arrival f the puppy with big eyes successfully brught happiness t Pppy wh had been unhappy fr a lng time.
T the parents’ delight,
The dg sat n the flr.
The cute dg with tw big eyes sat n the flr.
The cute dg with tw big eyes sat quietly n the flr, wagging his tail vilently.
The cute dg with tw big eyes sat quietly n the flr, wagging his tail vilently as if asking fr yur frgiveness
Describe the picture
every time yu were mad at him.
(1) 外表评价的细节(2) 动作发展的细节(3) 心理情绪的细节(4) 时空环境的细节(5) 因果逻辑的细节
whathw/what elsehwwhen/wherewhy