上海虹口区2022-2020年中考英语二模试题-作文

上海虹口区2022-2020年中考英语二模试题-作文

一、话题作文

1．（2022·上海虹口·统考二模）Write at least 60 words on the topic “Small tricks to improve happiness” (以“提升幸福感的小妙招”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)

3月20日是国际幸福日。快乐、自信、充实、自豪，当你拥有这些感受，你就是一个幸福的人。生活中的一些小妙招可以让我们获得幸福感，请你结合自己或他人的经历和感受描述至少两个提升幸福感的小妙招，并说明一下理由。

(注意: 1.短文中不得出现任何真实的人名、校名及其它相关信息。2.照抄阅读语篇不得分。)

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2．（2021·上海虹口·统考二模）Write at least 60 words on the topic “I’d like to get close to...” （以“我想要走近……” 为题写一篇不少于 60 个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）

人的一生会遇见很多美好的事物，人、物、景等各种美好的存在都会吸引我们走进。请写写你想走近什么？怎么走近？说说你的理由。

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3．（2020·上海虹口·统考二模）Write a passage of at least 60 words about the topic “Kindness Everywhere”.（以“善意无处不在”为题，写一篇不少于

60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。）

提示：阅读D篇提到三种善意：interpersonal kindness, environmental kindness, personal kindness.

请你从中选择比较有感触的一种，结合具体事例，谈谈你的想法。

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参考答案：

1．例文：

The feeling of happiness is very important. We are no longer satisfied with only enough food and clothes. Instead, we need happiness. Now I will share some tips to increase our sense of happiness.

The first is friendship. Friends can share our feelings and help to make us happy when we are sad. They can provide us with help when we are in need. They can also keep us company when we are lonely. The second is being thankful. Sometimes we can’t get what we want and we will be unhappy. But if we focus on what we already have, and be thankful to everything around us, I believe our life will be a lot happier.

Try to make some friends and be thankful to everything. I am sure we will be much happier.

【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇话题作文，以“Small tricks to improve happiness”为题参照所给提示中要点信息进行分析。写作时需选定至少两个提升幸福感的小妙招，并陈述理由。

2.写作指导：本文以第一人称为主，时态为一般现在时；写作时注意分段叙述，第一段开门见山，引入话题；第二段介绍小妙招及原因；第三段总结全文；保证文章条理清晰，语句通顺。

2．例文：

I’d like to get close to Pingyi. I’d like to introduce a nice place to you. I live in а wonderful place in Pingyi. It is a wonderful housing estate with a lot of flowers and trees.

East of the community is a wide road along the river. The river is clear and transparent. It was our favorite place when we were kids. There are many people walking and playing along the river every day. You can see six blocks in the middle. There is а swimming pool in front of Block 2. In summer, children love to swim in it. A big playground lies on the right of Block 4. You can often see many men, women, boys and girls take exercise there. There is a small kindergarten behind Block 3. It is convenient and comfortable for me to live there.

As for me, Pingyi is very beautiful. No matter where I am, I always think of the food and people of my hometown. I’ve been almost everywhere and I can feel the warmth of my hometown. The people and things here all attract me to have a deeper understanding of it.

What а wonderful place it is! I love my housing estate very much.

【详解】1.题干解读：本文是一篇话题作文。主要围绕“I’d like to get close to...”来进行写作，写作时可以围绕我们一生遇见的人、物、景等各种美好的事物来进行阐述。

2.写作指导：本文应该用第一称来叙述故事内容；时态采用一般现在时描述场景；描述故事时，场景应描写细致；表达要准确，没有语法错误等。

3．例文：

Kindness Everywhere

 If the world is a cup, kindness is like coffee, which makes the world meaningful.

I think "rose presented, smell remained" is the best description to show our kindness. Yesterday，I went to the bookstore to buy some books by bus. When the bus stopped at a bus stop. There came an old woman with a bag in her hand. I stood up, walked up to her. I carried the bag for her and led her to my seat. She sat down and said to me, “Good boy! Thank you so much”. I felt so happy. Helping others is the traditional for our Chinese, we should carry it out any time when someone is in need.

Kindness can make the world more beautiful and more lovable. If everyone tries a little kindness，our world will be full of love.

【详解】1.题干解读：本篇话题作文要求阅读D篇提到三种善意：interpersonal kindness, environmental kindness, personal kindness，以“善意无处不在”为题，从中选择比较有感触的一种，结合具体事例，谈谈自己的想法；书写时要求文句通顺，内容完整。

2.例文点评：本例文结构严谨，以自己在公交车上帮助老人的亲身经历阐述了善意的意义，文章陈述的中心突出，层次之间有机联系，能正确地把握话题范围。

3.高分亮点：本篇运用的短语walk up to；feel so happy；help others；carry out；in need；be full of 等。

高分句型：条件状语从句、定语从句 If the world is a cup, kindness is like coffee, which makes the world meaningful；宾语从句I think "rose presented, smell remained" is the best description to show our kindness；时间状语从句we should carry it out any time when someone is in need.

【点睛】本篇是话题作文，书写前要认真阅读题干，了解题干的要求，把握话题内容——结合具体事例，谈谈自己对善意的想法，书写适当使用连词和复合句，使文句之间能有机结合，表达清晰。