2023届高考英语二轮复习读后续写之对话高分技巧课件

这是一份2023届高考英语二轮复习读后续写之对话高分技巧课件，共30页。PPT课件主要包含了对话描写注意要点，标点符号和大小写，对话描写四个技巧，timidly，softly等内容，欢迎下载使用。

英文原版借鉴 -----Little Wmen Chapter 1
Chapter 1 Playing pilgrams
“CHRISTMAS wn't be Christmas withut any presents,”grumbled J, lying n the rug.“It's s dreadful t be pr!”sighed Meg, lking dwn at her ld dress.“I dn't think it's fair fr sme girls t have plenty f pretty things, and ther girls nthing at all,”added little Amy, with an injured sniff.“We've gt Father and Mther and each ther,”said Beth cntentedly frm her crner.
The fur yung faces n which the firelight shne bright-ened at the cheerful wrds, but darkened again as J said sadly,“We haven't gt Father, and shall nt have him fr a lng time.”She didn't say“perhaps never,”but each silently added it, thinking f Father far away, where the fighting was.
Nbdy spke fr a minute;then Meg said in an altered tne,“Yu knw the reasn Mther prpsed nt having any presents this Christmas was because it is ging t be a hard winter fr everyne;and she thinks we ught nt t spend mney fr pleasure, when ur men are suffering s in the army. We can't d much, but we can make ur little sacrifices, and ught t d it gladly. But I am afraid I dn't.”And Meg shk her head, as she thught regretfully f all the pretty things she wanted.
“But I dn't think the little we shuld spend wuld d any gd. We've each gt a dllar, and the army wuldn't be much helped by ur giving that.I agree nt t expect anything frm Mther r yu, but I d want t buy Undine and Sintram fr myself.I've wanted it s lng,”said J, wh was a bkwrm.“I planned t spend mine in new music,”said Beth, with a little sigh, which n ne heard but the hearth brush and kettle hlder.
美国作家兼写作导师 Glria Kemptn的一番话道出了对话的重要性:“对话不仅为页面留白，创造视觉上的吸引力，还令故事中的人物生动鲜活，创造情感上的吸引力。故事背景若通过对话场景展示，我们会兴趣大增。对话透露了人物的动机，展现了与其表面活动截然相反的目标。充满张力的人物对话能使读者了解人物的内心世界，并为故事发展制造悬念。对话场景经展开便可加快故事的节奏。对话使读者对故事背景产生身临其境之感。”
1）对话描写必须为推动故事情节服务，是情节发展的一个环节，每段出现一两句即可；2）对话描写必须反映人物的心理与情感，刻画人物的性格；3）对话描写不宜过长，侧重口语化词汇，避开生僻词汇；4）对话描写要尽可能结合动作描写，明确对谁说，具有画面感；5）对话描写中要学会使用几个感叹词，表示说话人的喜、怒、哀、乐等情绪。
标点符号和大小写
准确标点，使人物对话“完整”
1. 对话标签在前She said,“I wuld like t g with yu, but I haven’t finished my hmewrk.”2. 对话标签在后“I wuld like t g with yu, but I haven’t finished my hmewrk，”she said.3. 对话标签在句子中间“I wuld like t g with yu,”she said, “but I haven’t finished my hmewrk.”（引用内容放在sb.said前面时，引号内不能用句号结尾，只能用逗号，除感叹号和问号外。）"Mr. Craven? "Mary asked in astnishment."Well, I d like birds! "Mary grinned.
注意：对话标签在后或者在句子中间时（第2,3种情况），如果主语是名词，则可以倒装。而代词不可以倒装，said she是错误的。“I wuld like t g with yu, but I haven’t finished my hmewrk,”said Emily（或者Emily said.）“I wuld like t g with yu,”said Emily/ Emily said, “but I haven’t finished my hmewrk.”
对话模式举例1. "," he said, ding ... --say后接分词作状语 1) "I didn't knw what I was ding," she said, laughing at the memry.2) "I'll get us sme cffee," she said, heading fr the kitchen.3) "That's nice," Alex said quietly, fcusing n his plate.4) "Very clever," said the teacher, ndding his head as if pleased.5) "Uncle, frgive me, I did that... unintentinally," he said, pinting t the brken glass.6) "We dn't d any harm," said the by, evidently frightened by my wrds.
2. "...," he said, as/when/befre/as if... --say后接时间状语从句1) "Watch ut!" she shuted, as the car started t mve.2) "What a beauty!" said the nurse as she came t the dr. 3. "," he said, and (then he) 后接and, 先后动作或构成并列句1) "Gd mrning, children!" said the minister, and he kindly shk hands with bth.2) "Yes, I think s," he said reluctantly, and left the study.3) "Cme here," said the little man, and tk her t ne f the crners f the building.
4. "," he said, “...”--say后接要说的另一句话1) "She is a very admirable and excellent yung wman," said Lily, "and yu must g and help her."2) "Since yu lve him s well," said the king, "I will tell yu smething. 5. "," said the man, wh... --用定语从句补充说明说话的人1) "I dn't knw," said Zeb, wh was still cnfused.2) "T yur health!" said Mr.White, wh als emptied his glass, and wiped his muth with his handkerchief.
6. "," he said +方式副词(-ly)或短语, --作状语修饰say1）"Of curse," Nacy replied with a smile.2）"I'm srry," she said with a sigh.3）"But they dn't understand ur talk at all," said the dancer with a puzzled smile.4）"Natasha, yu lve me?" she said in a sft trustful whisper.5）"Cme t yur Papa at nce, please!" said she with a strange lk.
细节描写，令人物对话显“丰满”标题
以《典范英语10秘密花园》为例，通过对话描写的技巧分析和佳句赏析，来探讨和学习 人物对话描写的写作技能，更深层次地把握人物对话描写的准确传神。 (1)Marsha chewed her lip. "Dn't tell nbdy I tld yu that, will yu? I'll be in such truble if yu d. "(P11) (2) Clin glared at her. "Yu didn’t cme t see me!"(P50) (3)"I shan't! "Mary said, stung as if she had been accused f smething. (4)"I’ve met Dickn! He brught me things fr the gardn,” she gasped, hurling herself int their chair at her dining table. (P30) (5))"I dn't like the mrs, "Mary said remembering the bleak, black wilderness they had crssed the day befre. (P11)
“chewed her lip”，用具体动作代替nervus
具体动作代替 angry
as if 虚拟语气，描绘出了说话人当时恼羞成怒的样子。
(4)(5)中都运用了现在分词(-ing)作状语表示伴随或原因，描写说话人说话时的伴随动作。
Ways t express “say” mre vividly
Tip 1 Use different verbs
Tip 2 Use verbs + adv
Tip 3 Use verbs + prep phrase
Tip 4 Use verbs + 伴随状语（adj, ding, dne）
说道________ 回答道________ 问道_________ 补充说_______ 解释道________ 叹气地说_______ 承认道_______ 同意地说_______ 大笑地说_______ 尖叫道_________ 大声地吼道________________ 通知________ 承诺________ 宣布__________ 安慰________ 道歉________ 陈述_______低/耳语________ 低语/嘟囔_______ 辩论______抱怨道________ 争论 _______ 说服________
shut/ yell/ rar
scream/exclaim
1) _______________激动地说 2) said ________ 轻柔地说 3)_____________ 冷静地说 4)replied________________________ 不冷不热地说5) answered ________胆怯地说 6) ________________ 冷冷地回答
said excitedly
replied cldly
said calmly
half cldly, half kindly
1) said Mr. Wilsn _____________________________ 一脸严肃地2) he said______________________ 用一种坚定地语调 3) He said __________ 他慌慌张张地说4) she said______________________ 用一种坚定地表情 5) Jenny laughed________________ 兴奋地笑了起来 6) said the stranger_________________ 冷笑着说7) She asked ____________________ 用一种梦幻般地语调说
in a dream-like vice
in a flurry
with a serius lk n his face
in a determined/firm vice
with a determined lk
with excitement
with a cld smile
Tip 3 Use verbs + prep phrases
1) said Newland, __________________ 心里暗自高兴 2) she begged him,______________________ 眼睛充满恐惧3) she said, _________________________ 眼睛在跳跃着/闪闪4) she murmured, ______________________ 又沮丧又担忧
upset and cncerned
her eyes dancing/shining
her eyes filled with fear
secretly delighted
⑴ As he passed the milk n t her, mum said that she had smething fr him t.⑵ As he passed the milk n t her, mum said “Wait, I have smething fr yu t.”
④ ---“Here yu are.” (He passed the milk n t her.) ⑤---“Wait, I have smething fr yu t .”
“Surprise fr yu,dear!”
2. 对话描写过多，不够精简。
3.追求花哨，过度使用对话标签“That is fantastic news,” he said happily.此句中完全没有必要加上一个happily来表达说的方式，因为句中的fantastic一词足以说明说话人了表情，过度强调 会让读者的注意力集中在“说话的方式”而不是“说话的内容”。建议改为：“That is fantastic news！” he said/screamed/exclaimed. 一个感叹号和一个fantastic已经足以让读者想象当时的情景。适当的“艺术留白”也是需要的，这样会留给读者想象的空间。
还有一种避免过度的dialgue tags的方法是运用“动作描写”，尤其是表情上动作来取而代之。如：Her eyes reflected the candlelight as she smiled at her sn. “Everyne is unique. Just fllw yur heart and be yurself!”当她对儿子微笑时，她的眼睛反射着烛光。 “每个人都是独一无二的。 只要跟随你的心，做你自己！”
4. 对话对象十分明确，仍使用对话标签“I tld yu already,” I said, glaring.评析：此句貌似豪华，其实对话中的主语“I”已经清晰地说明了说话者，完全没有必要用对话标签“I said” 来说说话对象。纠正方法：加上一点动作描写就可以避免这种错误，并且提升语言的生动性。I glared at him. “I tld yu already.”
以读促写情景赏析: Jane 和Rchester的经典对白"I tell yu I must g!" Jane retrted, rused t smething like passin(被热情之类的东西唤醒/激起be rused t sth.), "D yu think, because I am pr, bscure(默默无闻), plain(长相平庸), and little, I am suless and heartless?” Rchester was speechless, eyebrws frwned. “Yu think wrng! I have as much sul as yu, and full as much heart!" respnded Jane, with her eyes fcused n Rchester, expecting the reply. 仿写：阿甘正传的经典片段“Hell. My name’s Frrest. Frrest Gump,” Gump ventured, rused t smething like interest. The wman ndded with n reply, eyes fcused n her bk. “D yu want a chclate?” asked Gump, with a bx f chclates in his hand and cntinued,”My mama always said life was like a bx f chclates. Yu never knw what yu’re ging t eat,” mumbled Gump, expecting the reply.