2023届高考英语复习：读后续写：A warm scarf 课件

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① I was a prud mther f three children, my last little ne being delivered in the middle f this pandemic. She was brn in August and her name is Aida. ② Shrtly after having Aida, my mther-in-law shwed me smething she learned frm her friend’s mther in an art class she attended weekly. She had shwed me hw t knit a scarf. She shwed me stitches and gave me her half dne prject. ③I spent a lt f time breastfeeding my sweet little girl, s I had sme extra time t d smething with my hands thrughut the day. I enjyed making the scarf s I purchased tns f yarn since it was winter. I wanted t make scarves fr my three children as Christmas gifts. ④ There was a new family that mved in dwn the street. The nly daughter f the family was Jane, a shy girl, aged 14, the same age f my ldest sn David. It seemed that she came frm a financially disadvantaged family, fr she always wre ld clthes. Wrse still, in such cld days, she had n mre clthes t wear and trembled with cld.
⑤ Due t the pandemic, sciety was thrwn int crisis mde. Schls were clsed, fd supplies and deliveries were suspended and children were stuck at hme. In such discuraging times, hwever, they became gd cmpanins, talking and playing at hme r arund the huses. ⑥ It was dreadfully cld this winter. Every time David came back frm utside, with red face, he always cried, “Mum, it’s freezing utside!” then he came ver t see whether I finished the scarf. I culd tell hw impatient he was t wear my scarf sner! I had t speed the prject t satisfy his expectatin. But David cmfrted me saying he culd wait a few days. What a kind and cnsiderate by he was! Then my great prject finally was accmplished n the mrning ahead f Christmas. Para 1: I wrapped the scarf arund David’s neck._____________ Para 2: Later that day David came back saying Jane als deserved a scarf._______
I: a mther f 3 children;David: my ldest sn;Jane: a neighbr girl frm a pr family.
I decided t make scarves fr my children as Christmas gifts.
At hme; arund the huse.
During the winter f the pandemic; befre Christmas.
Read fr the basic infrmatin
① I was a prud mther f three children, my last little ne being delivered in the middle f this pandemic. She was brn in August and her name is Aida. ② Shrtly after having Aida, my mther-in-law shwed me smething she learned frm her friend’s mther in an art class she attended weekly. She had shwed me hw t knit a scarf. She shwed me stitches and gave me her half dne prject. ③ I spent a lt f time breastfeeding my sweet little girl, s I had sme extra time t d smething with my hands thrughut the day. I enjyed making the scarf s I purchased tns f yarn since it was winter. I wanted t make scarves fr my three children as Christmas gifts.
Read fr the plt
I had the thught t make scarves fr children
④ There was a new family that mved in dwn the street. The nly daughter f the family was Jane, a shy girl, aged 14, the same age f my ldest sn David. It seemed that she came frm a financially disadvantaged family, fr she always wre ld clthes. Wrse still, in such cld days, she had n mre clthes t wear and trembled with cld. ⑤ Due t the pandemic, sciety was thrwn int crisis mde. Schls were clsed, fd supplies and deliveries were suspended and children were stuck at hme. In such discuraging times, hwever, they became gd cmpanins, talking and playing at hme r arund the huses.
JaneA pr neighbr girl with n clthes fr the winter
David & Janebecame gd cmpanins fr play
⑥ It was dreadfully cld this winter. Every time David came back frm utside, with red face, he always cried, “Mum, it’s freezing utside!” then he came ver t see whether I finished the scarf. I culd tell hw impatient he was t wear my scarf sner! I had t speed the prject t satisfy his expectatin. But David cmfrted me saying he culd wait a few days. What a kind and cnsiderate by he was! Then my great prject finally was accmplished n the mrning ahead f Christmas.
David eager t have the scarf sner
David kind and cnsiderate
Ifinished the scarf fr David
The plt f the passage
beginning-- 愿望
develpment – 动力
made scarves fr my children
made it as expected
my sn’s eagerness fr the scarf
I wrapped the scarf arund David’s neck._________
Later that day David came back saying Jane alsdeserved a scarf. _______
During the pandemic in winter, I stayed at hme _______________ fr my sn David, wh liked playing with Jane, a pr neighbr girl withut much clthes t wear. The scarf _______________finished befre Christmas.
The main idea f the given part
making the scarf
was finanlly finished
Para 1: I wrapped the scarf arund David’s neck.
Plt 1: Hw did David react ? Plt 2: Hw did I react ? Plt 3 : What did he d after that?
Para 2: Later, David came back saying Jane deserved a scarf.
Plt 4: Why did say that ? Hw did I respnd? Plt 5: What did he d after that? Plt 6: Hw did I think twards my sn’s act?
Predict the plt
Predict the plt
Plt 1: His reactin. (his feelings; his actin; his wrds;)Plt 2: My respnse. Plt 3 : He went ut t find Jane t play. (his actin)
Plt 1: explained his reasn ; my respnse. Plt 2: went ut t give away his scarf t Jane.Plt 3: My feelings----theme (kindness and lve)
David, a kind byJane, David’s gd cmpanin , a pr girl I, the mther, made a scarf fr David fr the winterDavid, sent the scarf t Jane
Kindness and lve between friends
Plt 1: his reactin t the scarf
普通版：He was happy .
升级版1. 现在分词作状语，独立主格; 描写他的脸；比喻手法描写他的眼睛低头看着我刚刚完成的围巾，他乐不可支,他的脸照亮了整个房间，黑色的眼睛像钻石一般闪烁。Lking dwn at the scarf I had just finished , he was verjyed, his face lighting up the whle rm and dark eyes twinkling like diamnds.
Organize language based n the plt
升级版2. 形容词短语做状语；细化动作；不能抑制住他的高兴和激动，他一下子扑到我的怀里，喃喃道：妈妈，辛苦了。
Unable t cntain his jy and excitement， he threw himself int my arms, murmuring, “Thank yu, dear mum.”
Hw t shw ne’s happiness
※用“笑”来体现高兴：----各种“笑”1.a pleasant/cheerful smile 愉快的微笑2.a pleased smile 满意的微笑3. a sweet smile甜蜜的微笑4. an inncent smile天真的微笑5.burst int laughter/burst ut laughing突然大笑起来6.smile brightly笑得灿烂7.laughed happily快乐地笑8.rar with laughter疯狂大笑9.grin frm ear t ear 咧着嘴笑
※用描写高兴的短语来呈现：1.be vercme/verwhelmed/cnsumed with/by happiness/delight/jy/excitement喜出望外2.a mixture f excitement and happiness既兴奋又开心3.be jyful abut/at/ver对……很高兴4.in high/cheerful spirits情绪高涨5.be delighted at对……很高兴6.with a light heart 心情放松7.brighten sb’s heart 使某人心情愉快
※用描写高兴的句型来呈现：1.Tears f happiness flwed dwn.流下幸福的泪水。2.Tears f jy and relief welled up as they finally held each ther tightly. 3. Her heart leaped with jy. 她高兴得心怦怦直跳。4. His eyes twinkled with pleasure. 他的眼睛因高兴而闪烁。5.His dark eyes danced with pride, lve and excitement.他黑色的眼睛闪动着骄傲、爱和兴奋。 6.She grinned at me, her eyes sparkling. 她对我露齿一笑,眼里闪烁着光芒。 7. Her face lit up/brightened/glwed when I gave her the present. 8. She felt within herself a sense f jy and happiness surging thrugh her.她内心深处洋溢着喜悦和幸福。 9.Knwing the result f the test, she was vercme with excitement. 10.Knwing the result f the test, she felt a surge f excitement. 11. I was pleased beynd descriptin我高兴得无法形容。
句型：※用笑来体现：1.She wre a bright/shining/brad smile n her face.带着灿烂的微笑2.The smile n her face shne like a diamnd. 她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。3.A simile f understanding flashed acrss his face. 他脸上闪过一丝理解的微笑。4.Laughter lingered arund (萦绕 ) the rm. 笑声在房间里回荡。5.She grinned at me, her eyes sparkling.她对我咧嘴一笑,眼里闪烁着光芒。 6.He rared with laughter and his eyes glistened with excitement. 他哈哈大笑，眼睛里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。7.S delighted he was that a smile uncnsciusly spread ver his face. 他高兴得脸上不知不觉地露出了笑容。8.A bright smile appeared n/spread acrss/crssed his face.他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容。9.Her smile lit up the whle rm. 她的微笑照亮了整个房间。10.Smiles are dancing in his eyes./Her eyes danced with jy and happiness. 微笑在他的眼睛里跳舞。/ 她的眼睛里充满了喜悦和幸福。
Plt 2 my reactin
基础版：I said, “ With this scarf, yu needn’t wrry abut the cld weather.”
升级版：细化动作；非谓语状语我慈爱地抚摸着他的头，拍了拍他的背，说，“好孩子，有了这条围巾，你不用再担心这糟糕的天气了。”
Strking his head affectinately and patting his back, I answered, “ With this scarf, yu needn’t wrry abut the freezing cld weather.”
Plt 3 He went ut t find Jane fr play
基础版：Then he went ut t find Jane fr play.
升级版：精准形象动词描写David 出去;比喻
然后，他像只可爱的小鹿一样蹦蹦跳跳地出去了，脖子上的围巾在空中飞舞着。
Then, he went bunding / buncing ut like a happy deer，with his scarf arund his neck flying in the air.
strll 闲逛 mince 碎步走  tddle 婴儿学步  tipte 蹑手蹑脚  shuffle 拖着脚走  march 列队走  stride 大步走  strut 趾高气扬地走  stalk 昂首阔步  sneak 鬼鬼祟祟地走  dart /dash/ rush 冲
sidle 侧身走  limp 瘸着走  stumble 跌跌撞撞地走  stagger 蹒跚  trudge 吃力地走  pld 沉重缓慢地走  wade 涉水 wander 漫步 saunter 闲逛 fly/ zm / tear 疾驰
二、常用短语sneak ut f the huse偷偷溜出give a jump in the air 跳到空中（表示开心）Jump t ne’s feet 跳起来（表示震惊）make a running step back 跑着后退dash back 冲回Pace restlessly 不安地走动 aimlessly 无目的地pp dwn a hle 跳入一个洞start t ne’s feet 站起来
Plt 4 explained his reasn & my respnse
基础版：He said that Jane didn’t have a scarf t wear and was very cld when they played. At his wrds, I said I culd make ne fr her but maybe needed a lng time.
升级版；精准动词；定语从句；非谓语做状语；固定句型 看到没有围巾的Jane 和他玩时冻的哆嗦，他希望我可以给她缝制条围巾。听到这一番话，我回答好的又补充说完工可能得需要一段时间。
Seeing Jane ,wh didn’t have a scarf , was trembling/shaking/ quivering/ shivering/ shuddering with cld when playing with him, he hped I culd als make a scarf fr her. Hearing his request, I respnded k adding that It wuld be a lng time befre I culd finish anther ne.
swallw 吞下whisper 低语mumble 小声咕哝 mutter 生气地说grwl生气地说exclaim/shut/scream 大声叫 murmur 咕哝 utter 发出（声音）
Say /tell/ infrmAnswer/ reply/ respnd/react CmfrtExplainDeclare/annunce stammer/ stutter口吃 hwl / rar 怒吼mck 嘲笑scld 责骂 snap 厉声说
Plt 5 went ut t give away his scarf
基础版：At my wrds, he asked if he culd give his scarf t her. I said k and then he went ut happily.
升级版：细化动作；非谓语；befre; 精准动词，比喻听到我的话，他低下了头，陷入了沉思，然后抬起头问他是否可以把他的围巾给Jane. 在得到我的允许后，他跳起来高兴地亲了我一下然后像风一般冲出去了。
At my wrds, he lwered / hung/ bent / drped his head , lst in thught, befre raising his eyes and asked if he culd give his scarf t Jane. After getting my permissin, he jumped /leaped t his feet kissing me n the cheek and then darted /dashed /zmed / tre ut like wind.
Plt 6 my feelings—theme (kindness and lve)
I breathed a sigh f relief blessed t have such a kind and cnsiderate by as my sn. Witnessing all this, I was relieved t knw that we culd survive the pandemic with lve and kindness. Seeing my sn disappear, I was fully aware a warm scarf can help us survive hwever cld weather and lve and kindness can get us thrugh whatever severe pandemic.
Pssible versin
I wrapped the scarf arund David's neck. David's face lit up with jy. Strking the scarf sftly, David excitedly kisssed me in the neck, beaming at me”Thank yu, Mum. This is the best gift I have ever received.” Befre I culd say anything, he dashed ut t jin Jane with a spring in his step. I felt relieved and cntent as a mther, seeing David play happily utside, with the scarf shelting him t brave the bne-chilling wind. Wearing a smile n his face, I cntinued my chres that mrning. Later that day David came back saying Jane als deserved a scarf. Obviusly, David nticed Jane culd hardly bear the freezing weather with wrn-ut clthes. “Can I give this t Jane as a Christmas gift?” David ventured in a lw vice. Smilingly, I ndded. Seeing David rush int Jane's huse with the scarf in his hand, I felt a burst f pride. I was happy that bth f them received the best gift fr Christmas. Fr Jane---a scarf t keep warm and fr David---a taste f happiness f giving.
点评：1.此习作书写虽不是太美观但认真规范；2. 情节合理丰富：第一段囊括两个情节：儿子的反应和出去玩耍；第二段解释原因并请求我给Jane织围巾.3. 语言准确地道，使用了丰富的短语句式，细致入微地刻画了儿子的高兴，善良，及我的自豪。4. 美中不足的是最后主题的升华略显单薄，只是简单写了我的自豪，未点出善良的意义和作用。
点评：优点1 此习作书写流畅洒脱；2. 情节合理逻辑性强3. 主题把握到位：点出了善良在这个寒冷的冬天的作用。3.语言特别好：使用了with的复合结构，夸张，及精准动词bunce描写儿子的高兴；此学生非常有短语及句型意识，语言功底不错。唯一的语言瑕疵：第三行：I wn’t afraid the cld weather…中afraid 一词使用不当。
点评：1.从情节上来看，此习作第一段只写了儿子对于围巾的反应，而未涉及他出去玩耍的情节，所以和下文不够衔接。2. 主题的升华还是不错的，因为有爱，所以我们不会再感到寒冷。3.从语言来看，虽然大部分句子从语法结构来说正确，但基本上用的是些简单句，复杂句式，恰当动词都没派上用场，所以需要从语言润色上下大工夫。