2022广州高三一模试题英语试题读后续写分析

广州市2022届高三第一次综合测试（一模）英语试题

读后续写分析

一、原文题目回顾

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

When my little brother Tom was four, Mom said something like "I'd give anything to have a few more hours in the day." And Tom said, “Why don't we buy a bigger clock?" If time worked that way, I could have used an extra-big clock last week!

Our teacher had asked us to make an art project showing how plants eat, “I can't believe we only have two nights to finish it," Noah said with a sigh.“I have no idea how I'll get mine done.

I didn't say anything. Not because I was nervous--- I wasn't nervous at all. 1 love art projects! In fact, I was so relaxed that I didn't work on the project at all on Monday night. I planned to start the minute I got home from baseball practice on Tuesday. But there was just one thing.

I forgot baseball would run later than usual because it was the day of Baseball Buddies, which happens every month, and it's a chance for us older students to practise baseball with the adorable younger kids. The second I got home, I threw the entire craft box (手工盒) onto the kitchen table, took out my“How Plants Fat" paper, and started to work. But just then, the telephone rang.

It was my friend Ollie, who said his grandmother Abuela had just made cookies and wanted to know if I'd come help decorate them. I love decorating cookies, and I love, love, love Abucla's world-famous Thanksgiving cookies that only happen once a year!

I had no choice. I had to go. Ollie and I put all the star cookies with red jam filling in one group, and all the snowflakes with white cream-cheese filling in another. It was 7 o'clock when I finally got home. I planned to work on my project right after we ate. But then another interruption hit me.

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Just as I was about to start, Dad said, “Joanna, it's your turn to do the dishes."              

Looking at the big“下”on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days.    

二、段落题意分析

首段基本上会奠定整篇文章的基调和主题，这篇文章也是。开头妈妈以调侃的口吻表示想要更多的时间，而弟弟天真地让妈妈再添置一个闹钟来增加时间。可见，整篇文章基调是轻松的，是略带幽默的，这里不适合使用太大的词汇。而下面一句话，至关重要：If time worked that way, I could have used an extra-big clock last week!（如果时间真是那样运行的，我上周肯定使用一个超级大的闹钟！）

那这里的言外之意是什么呢？显而易见，就是“我”上周的时间不够用，造成了一些“惨痛的代价”。当然，“代价”是什么，需要我们继续研读，在后文去开掘信息。

第二段交代了文章的核心事件----“创作关于植物光合作用的作品”，这里所反映的点在于，记录这样子的一个过程，需要一定的时间，是临时创作和现场编制所来不及的。因此，这里也为“我”时间不够埋下了一些伏笔。然后再结合第一段，可以清晰猜出“我”的结局—因为时间不够，没有完成任务或者任务完成的很差。

     第三段交代了我对老师布置的这个作业的一些态度，“喜欢但不紧张”，这种不紧张的拖延态度，再次为“我”时间不够用再次埋下了伏笔。后面的“我”忘了棒球训练改了时间，更是加强了“我”时间不够用这条线。至此，“我”时间不够导致的完不成任务的原因已经找到了：1. 做事太磨蹭；2. 时间规划不明晰。

第四第五第六段的核心事件就是“我”因为去朋友家参与点缀饼干，再次耽误了作业。这里我想要大家去注意的两个句子：“I had no choice. I had to go”。这个句子体现“我”容易妥协，不分事情轻重。那这样子的态度，是否“梅开二度”呢？我觉得是会的，那么哪里会用得到这个句子呢？让我们看看需要我们写的部分的第一段。

三、续写情节分析

1.第一段的开头

Just as I was about to start, Dad said, “ Joanna, it’s your turn to do the dishes.”

       这里对应的就是我在上面的那个部分牵扯到的“I had no choice. I had to go”，确实“我”的这种性格，再次出现了延续。

所以这里我会写：What Dad uttered was a hammer blow to me, heaving me into deeper anxiety. However, that was one of our family rules, so I had no choice but to do the dishes reluctantly.

2.第一段的结尾

      根据前面的分析可得，因为“我”拖沓的性格，这个作业基本上是黄了。那这里我们要去刻画的就是在完成洗碗以后，我匆匆忙忙敷衍完作业，并在第二天交了上去。（衔接第二段开头的“我”得了个“F”）

   例：Without much time left, I finished the assignment in a hurry. The next day, I handed in it at full stretch.

3.第二段的开头

      Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days.

     那这里就和我们前面所分析的内容相关咯。就是“我”为什么会觉得时间不够用：1. 态度不紧不慢；2. 时间安排不得当。那这里我们就可以稍微地帮“我”小小总结一下这几天的问题。

      比如：My life seemed in a mess these days, arising from my loose attitude and chaotic schedule.

4.第二段结尾

       这个位置的句子一般是主题句，用以升华主旨。经过前文分析，这篇文章主旨很明确，就是合理安排利用自己的时间，不要浪费时间。

   例：After this experience, I eventually comprehended the importance of time, and began to arrange for my schedule with caution. With confidence, I was firmly convinced that I could get a satisfying score in the next assignment.

四、文章情节布局

第一段：爸爸喊我洗碗→我不得不从→然后我很拖沓地洗碗，洗完的时候发现时间所剩无几→别无他法，我只能硬着头皮磨蹭完作业→我惴惴不安地交了作业

第二段：我得到了一个F→我开始反思自己→（可以适当增加一点设计，比如和老师解释自己的所作所为，和老师道歉，保证下次更好地完成作业/或者和爸妈讨论这次的失败）→从这次教训中，我得到了升华（学会合理安排时间和提高效率）

五、下水文与词句

Just as I was about to start, Dad said, “Joanna. it's your turn to do the dishes.”What Dad uttered was a hammer blow to me, heaving me into deeper anxiety. However, that was one of our family rules, so I had no choice but to do the dishes reluctantly. The clinking of dishes were disquieting sounds from hell to me, reminding me that the clock was ticking second by second. After I threw the last dish into the cabinet, I dashed to my bedroom, only to find that the hour hand had moved past ten. Without much time left, I finished the assignment in a hurry. The next day, I handed in it nervously.

Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days. My life seemed in a mess these days, arising from my loose attitude and chaotic schedule. My energy was segmented and occupied by some trivial matters which had nothing to do with my project. I just shoot myself in the foot. Out of guilt, I explained to my teacher and promised this would never happen again, After this experience, I eventually comprehended the importance of time, and began to arrange for my schedule with caution. With confidence, I was firmly convinced that I could get a satisfying score in the next assignment.

词句赏析：

1.a hammer blow 沉重打击；重锤一击

2.heave v 投掷

3.The clinking of dishes were disquieting sounds from hell to me, reminding me that the clock was ticking second by second.碗碟的丁当声对我来说好似地狱里发出的令人不安的声音，提醒着我时钟在一秒一秒地滴答作响。

4. arise from 由……引起

5.segment v分割

6.trivial matters 芝麻小事

7. I just shoot myself in the foot. 我只是搬起石头砸自己的脚。