2024版高考英语一轮总复习第三部分写作分类指导专题三写作提升第五节细节与逻辑课件

这是一份2024版高考英语一轮总复习第三部分写作分类指导专题三写作提升第五节细节与逻辑课件，共38页。

在英语书面表达中，增加细节内容描写是必不可少的。在信息提纲类写作中，考生一定不能只是简单地翻译或者仅仅完成题目所要求的指定内容；在看图作文中更不能只是轻描淡写地描述图片内容，否则很有可能造成内容不充实丰富、词数要求不达标或者结构不连贯等问题。适当增加细节内容，能够达到习作流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果。增加细节内容的具体方法如下：
★增加时间、地点等细节我已经带来了你让我归还的这两本书。I have taken with me the tw bks yu asked me t return.→I have taken with me the tw bks yu asked me t return t the City Library.(增加地点)
[跟踪练习1]根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子1.________(这一次), scientists will prfit frm the data, and we’re creating a platfrm in which t engage as many peple as pssible in what’s happening ________________(在北冰洋). 【答案】This time; in the Arctic Ocean
2.The Chinese Silk Rad, ________________________　　　(起源于今天的西安) and finally finishes at the east cast f the Mediterranean, is well-knwn t the wrld. 【答案】which starts frm tday’s Xi’an3.________________　　(一到机场),I meet a friend I haven’t seen fr lng. 【答案】On arriving at the airprt
4.I was attracted by the beauty f the city ________　　　(一……就……) I arrived here at 6 ’clck in the mrning by plane. 【答案】the mment/immediately/as sn as/directly
★增加原因、结果、条件、让步、手段、目的等内容(1)我会读点书。I’ll d sme reading.→I’ll d sme reading fr fun, and fr knwledge as well.(补充原因)
(2)我会参加一些社交活动。I’ll take part in sme scial activities.→If pssible, I’ll take part in sme scial activities.(条件状语)→If pssible, I’ll take part in sme scial activities s that/in rder that I can knw mre abut the sciety.(结果状语)
(3)特雷西来电话：咖啡屋(Bltn Cffee)见面取消。Tracy called, saying that she culdn’t meet yu at Bltn Cffee.→Tracy called, saying that she culdn’t meet yu at Bltn Cffee as she has smething imprtant t deal with.(原因状语)(4)我也帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。I als helped children in the neighburhd with their English lessns.→I als helped children in the neighburhd with their English lessns. T my jy, they made rapid prgress and their parents thught highly f me.(增添结果)
[跟踪练习2]根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子1.Tmb Sweeping Day, ________________________　(传统的中国节日之一), usually falls arund April 5 every year t hnr the dead and satisfy their ancestrs. 【答案】ne f the traditinal Chinese festivals
2.________________________　　　(伴随着全球气候变得越来越暖), ur earth is faced with great threat. 【答案】With the glbal climate becming warmer and warmer3.________________　　(坐落在东北部), Beijing is well knwn fr its cultural relics which have been there fr a lng histry. 【答案】Situated in nrtheast
4.During this perid, peple will g t clean the graves and pay respect t their ancestrs, ________________　　(带上食物和水果). 【答案】carrying fd and fruit5.________________________　(作为一名高中生), it’s everyne’s duty t d smething t save ur hme. 【答案】Being a senir schl student
★列举具体的实例进行补充说明(1)我要花一些时间和父母亲在一起。I’ll spend sme time staying with my parents.→I’ll spend sme time staying with my parents, chatting with them and ding sme husewrk.(2)我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。I like t seek a pen pal wh is interested in travelling just like me.→I like t seek a pen pal wh is interested in travelling just like me. If pssible, we can travel tgether r share travelling.
[跟踪练习3]根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子1.The Internet is playing a mre and mre imprtant part in ur daily life. ________________　　　　(我们不仅仅能阅读国内外的新闻), but als get infrmatin, send emails and attend nline schls. 【答案】We can nt nly read news frm hme and abrad2.Laura is a standard American style. ________________________　(她说一口完美的美式英语), and that’s why I am crazy abut her. 【答案】She speaks perfect American English
3.Hwever, it seems peple are unaware f the negative effects f mbile phnes n cmmunicatin. 【答案】Fr example, many peple begin t pay less attentin t face-t-face cmmunicatin(比如，很多人越来越不重视面对面的交流), every cin has tw sides, s des the Internet.  (比如，沉溺于互联网也许会影响我们的学习和工作).【答案】Fr example, being lst in the Internet may affect ur study and wrk
★增添神态、动作、心理描写以及背景渲染等细节(1)我有时去村子西边的小河游泳。I went swimming in the river f the west f the village nw and then. →I went swimming in the river f the west f the village nw and then. The water in the river is very clear.(背景渲染)→Weather permitting, I went swimming in the river f the west f the village nw and then.(相关背景)
(2)我看到了一些不良行为。I fund sme bad behavir.→I fund sme bad behavir. Sme peple scribbled n the wall; sme played sccer n the lawn and sme peple threw rubbish everywhere.(相关行为描述)(3)晚饭后，这位男士走向了卧室。After supper, the man went t his bedrm.→After a rich meal, the fat man slwly made his way t his bedrm.(神态、动作描写)
[跟踪练习4]根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子1.________________________　　　(考虑到这项活动很有意义), we intend t design a unifrm suited t ur wn class. 【答案】Cnsidering the activity is f great value/is meaningful2.I’ll try my best t make yur uncle happy here. ________________________　(我热切地期盼着他来我们城市参观). 【答案】I am eagerly lking frward t his visit t ur city
3.Many teenagers dn’t pay any attentin t their health, especially during the hliday. ________________________(他们花费太多的时间在看电视上), playing games and chatting n the Internet all night. 【答案】They spend t much time watching TV4.Lking back t my stay in Britain, ________________(我感到非常高兴和满意). 【答案】I felt very happy and satisfied5.In the summer vacatin, ________________　　　　(我渴望得到一份兼职工作). 【答案】I am lnging t get/have a part-time jb
★结尾适当发挥，写出个人感受、评价、希望愿景、倡议等(1)Althugh I was very tired this summer hliday, I felt very happy fr what I did.(个人感受)(2)I think such activities are necessary and meaningful.(评价)(3)In a wrd, if she wuld like t learn Chinese, I hpe she will d it well.(愿景)(4)As a student, it’s ur duty t prtect ur schl envirnment and make it clean.(倡议)
[跟踪练习5]根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子1. (作为一个专业的篮球运动员), his perfrmance in this seasn is nt satisfactry.【答案】As a prfessinal basketball player2.I think Beijing ________________________________　(非常值得再次参观). 【答案】is well wrth a secnd visit
3.In my view, ________________________(不管互联网多么吸引人), it shuldn’t separate us frm ur lved nes. 【答案】n matter hw attractive the Internet is4.________________________　　　(通过这个实验我们得出一个结论):the temperature desn’t change when ice is melting int water. 【答案】We drew a cnclusin thrugh the experiment
5.Let’s develp gd habits f saving energy in ur daily life and ________________　　　(尽力为我们的环境做出更多贡献). 【答案】try t make mre cntributins t ur envirnment6.Therefre, we shuld spend time with ur families, ________________________________　(享受我们在一起的时光). 【答案】enjying the time when we are tgether
★妙用衔接、过渡 一篇好的文章读起来是抑扬顿挫、圆润通畅、朗朗上口的。即使词汇再美、句式再高级，若缺乏有效的衔接与过渡，充其量也只能是一盘零乱的珍珠，虽光彩夺目却不堪受用。有效地使用过渡成分将亮点语句串“珠”成篇，是成就满分作文的最后一道“工序”。利用好“起”“承”“转”“合”四方法，会让文章读起来自然流畅，彰显考生深厚的写作功底，折服阅卷老师挑剔的目光并为之“倾倒”而给高分。
(1)表示时间顺序的过渡性词语
at the beginning/end f, in the end, afterwards, since then, meanwhile, immediately, after that, frm then n, all f a sudden, at present, after a while, at the same time, in the past …
At the beginning f the term, I had truble in learning physics.In the end, I made great prgress with practice and persistence.
(2)表示递进关系的过渡性词语
what’s mre/mrever, in additin t, furthermre, besides, t make things wrse, the mst imprtant f all, wrst f all, especially, in particular, apart frm…
Besides, I have a sense f respnsibility and rich experience in being a vlunteer. Mrever, I learned Chinese painting fr mre than ten years in my childhd; therefre, I d knw a lt abut this great art frm.
(3)表示并列或转折关系的过渡性词语
hwever, while, despite, therwise, n the cntrary, in spite f, after all, nevertheless, as well as, neither…nr, nt nly…but als, either…r, nt…but…
Despite having lived in China fr a lng time,they dn’t knw hw t make tea.
(4)表示条件或让步关系的过渡性词语
as (s) lng as, n cnditin that, unless, in case(f), even if/thugh, as/thugh/althugh
It wuld be safer t take mre mney with yu in case f emergency.He agreed t speak t reprters n cnditin that he was nt identified.
(5)表示因果关系的过渡性词语
because (f), nw that, thanks t, due t, as a result/cnsequence(f), since, therefre/thus
They are hping fr a return t nrmality nw that the war is ver.As a cnsequence f his hard wrk, he was eventually admitted t Nanjing University.
(6)表示列举事实或观点过渡的词语
such as, fr example/instance, take…fr example, that is t say, as fllws, in ther wrds, n the ne hand…n the ther hand, fr ne thing…fr anther, persnally, in my pinin/view, as far as I’m cncerned, as fr me…
As fr me, it was an hnr t have such a clse friend like yu.In Pride and Prejudice, sme f the main things that Jane Austen wants t teach peple are as fllws.
(7)表示总结的过渡性词语
in shrt, in brief, in a wrd, t sum up, all in all, n the whle, in general/generally speaking, in cnclusin…
T sum up, I wish yu culd live up t the expectatins f ur schl.In brief, d as the Chinese d when in China.
[跟踪练习6]一、根据所给出的汉语提示完成句子1.总之，成功非常重要，失败也很重要，因为它是成功之母。________________　　, success is imprtant, and s is failure, because it’s the mther f success. 【答案】In a wrd/T sum up/All in all
2.一方面，我能通过做这样的事赚些钱来帮助父母；另一方面，我能从中获得一些经验，这会对我将来的生活有益。________________　　, I can earn mney by ding it t help my parents. ________________　　, I can gain sme experience frm it, which will d gd t my future life. 【答案】On the ne hand; On the ther hand
3.结果，孩子们变得太依赖父母，以至于他们没有独立的思想和创造性的想法。________________　　, children becme s reliant n their parents that they have n independent thught r creative ideas. 【答案】As a cnsequence/result
4.他要么是不能来，要么就是不想来。________　　　 he culdn’t cme 　　　he did nt want t. 【答案】Either; r
5.根据一项调查，现在总数已减少到不足1000。________________ a research, the ttal number is reduced t less than 1,000 nw. 【答案】Accrding t
二、选用适当的过渡性词语补全短文
t begin with, last but nt least, mrever, as far as I’m cncerned
Dear Jim,I am glad that yu are interested in Chinese culture and eager t explre mre.
1.________　　　, the Ancient Petry is yur best chice. 2.________　　　, by learning Chinese ancient pems, yu can have an extensive knwledge f histry and culture in ancient China. 3.________　　　, yu can feel the charm f the language by reading pems, which helps t imprve yur Chinese. T fllw the curse well, yu’d better read and recite as many pems as pssible. 4.________　　　　, it is a gd idea t search fr related backgrund knwledge s that yu will fully understand the cnceptin f petry.