03 良师益友中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

03 良师益友

2024年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

素材储备与相关话题写作指导

看到关于良师益友的话题，首先要确立哪些人属于这一范围: 叔叔/舅舅/伯伯(uncle)、阿姨/姑姑(aunt)、表/堂兄弟/姐妹(cousin)、老师(teacher)、同学(classmate)、朋友(friend)。亲朋好友的选择范围比较广，但要写出特色，一定是给作者 留下深刻印象的人。如果写亲戚，多以写亲情为主;如果写师长，多以写恩情为主;如果写同学、朋友，多以写友情为主。无论是写哪-一种， 都围绕着和作者之间发生的故事展开。其实这个话题和家人的话题很相似。在文章中可以叙述事例，来增加文章的真情实感。

实践案例

题目

My favorite             

审题

看题目是半命题作文，可写内容很多、可以写人也可以写物，重点在 favorite上，这里我们以写人为例:My favorite teacher/friend就要写出人物和我之间发生的事，用事例结合议论，说明为什么是favorite.

my favorite teacher / friend应该是夹叙夹议的文章，文章可以分三段。第-段:点明主题，即谁是my favorite teacher/ friend。第二段:通过生动的语言写出这个老师或者朋友对我的特别之处，可以写2: -3个方面，个 方 面详细写(可以举例)， 其他方面略写。如果是描写人物品质，多用一般现在时，如果是记叙曾经发生的事情，用一般过去时。第三段:总结段，抒发感情，可以表达对人物的喜爱、感谢、怀念等情感。

核心语汇

get along very well相处得很好      

teach in an unusual way用一种不寻常的方式教书

. be knowledgeable知识渊博的

be strict with对...严格

be good at teaching擅长教书

. show great interest in...表现出强烈的兴趣

an experienced teacher一位经验丰富的老师

show great love to.对....表现出强烈的爱

make great progress取得很大进步

spend the happy time with与....一起度过愉快的时光

.with one's help由于某人的帮助

in one's spare time在某人空闲时

improve rapidly快速提高

.try one's best to do sth.尽某人最大力量做某事

.a strong desire for knowledge强烈的求知欲

treat every student fairly公平对待每位学生

参考句型

1.. ... is my best friend, who grows up with me.和我一起长.....是我最好的朋友。e.g. Tom is my best friend, who grows up with me.

和我一起长大的汤姆是我最好的朋友。

2.最高级+名词+ (that) + I+ have ever + seen / known / had / heard/read... 是我看到过的了解的/听说过的/读过的最........

e.g. She is the most hardworking classmate that I have ever seen.

她是我见过的最用功的同学。

3.There is no denying that ...不可否认.....

e.g. There is no denying that he is the most knowledgeable person I have ever heard.不可否认，他是我所听说过的最有学识的人。

Of the many teachers I had in primary school, ... is the one I will never forget.在我小学的许多老师里面，...是我永远不会忘记的。

e.g. Of the many teachers I had in primary school, Miss Fang is the one I will never forget.

在我小学的许多老师里面，方老师是我永远不会忘记的。

■.. used discipline to make sure that we learned .. well. ..用练习确保我们把....学好。

e.g. Miss Fang used discipline to make sure that we learned our math well.

方老师用练习确保我们把数学学好。

■He is a man with .. and always friendly to us.他是一...的人， 总是对我们很友好。e.g. He is a man with a good sense of humor and always friendly to us.

他是一个很幽默的人，总是对我们很友好。

One of the most important reasons that I like her is ... 我喜欢她的重要原因之一是.....

e.g. One of the most important reasons that I like her is that she is very sincere.我喜欢她的重要原因之是她非常 真诚。

■A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难见真情。

范文一

My favorite teacher

My favorite teacher is my English teacher Jane. Although I haven't seen her for several years, I have never forgotten her①charming

image.

②I was so deeply impressed by her devotion to teaching. Her lessons were always well prepared and clearly delivered, so I could benefit a lot from her class. Her lively way of teaching attracted me.

Through her sense of humor, every class became a relaxing one.She made learning more enjoyable and more entertaining. Besides,she is very kind to us.③Whenever I encountered difficulties, she encouraged me and cheered me up with her tender look.

④She is a respectable teacher as well as a warm-hearted friend who I will keep in my mind forever.

注：① charming迷人的

② be deeply impressed by对---印象深刻

③ 让步状语从句

④ 定语从句; as well as也

点评:段首即点明了主题favorite,随后在第二段中顺理成章地用了一般过去时， 来讲述这位老师受小作者喜爱的地方。第二段中用besides表明作者写了老师的两个方面: her way of teaching和her kindness,在两方面中又侧重于第一点， 有详有略。最后-段点题升华: I will keep her in my mind forever.

范文二

My favorite friend

As an old slang goes,“①Good coffee is a pleasure, good friends are treasures." There must be one who will always be in the first place in my heart, and her name is Annie.

②I met Annie when we first started our middle school journey.As she is a classmate and the sport partner of mine,③she not only helps me a lot with my study but also plays an important role in my life. Both of us are quite communicative, outgoing and sensitive.And we have a few mutual hobbies such as piano, opera and drama.Just like the things all common friends would like to do, we often share secrets and strange ideas with each other. We encourage each other and are always there for each other. I really like her and I will remember all the days we’ve walked through.

注：①谚语

②时间状语从句

③ not only .. but also不仅....而且..

点评:小作者开头用“好咖啡是乐趣，好朋友是财富”这句话来突出朋友的重要性，引人人胜。接着她写了在她心目中第一位的朋友Annie:她们有相同的性格，相同的兴趣爱好，她们彼此鼓励，彼此支持。全文语言地道流畅，一气呵成。

相关话题范文解析

一

My Good Friend

My good friend is Lisa. She comes from Canada. We are both studying in Dongfang Middle School.

She is tall and lovely with blond hair. She is a funny girl, who often tells jokes to make you laugh. She does well in English,so I often ask her questions about English. Lisa is good at dancing, too. She won many prizes in the dancing competition. We share many interesting things with each other.

This is my good friend. I am very lucky to have such a friend.

参考译文

我的好朋友

我的好朋友叫丽萨。她来自加拿大。我们俩都在东方中学上学。

她很高，很可爱，还有一头金色的头发。她是一一个很有趣的女孩，经常说笑话来逗别人笑。她英语学得很好，所以我经常问她关于英语的问题。丽萨也很擅长跳舞。她在跳舞比赛中赢过很多奖。我们互相分享很多有趣的事情。

这就是我的好朋友。我非常幸运能交到这样一一个朋友。

亮点词汇

lovely  可爱的

blond /blond/ adj.金色的

funny 有趣的;搞笑的

tell jokes 讲笑话

question .问题

competition  比赛

出彩句型

She does well in...她擅长......

I ask her questions about....我问她关于...的问题。

She won many prizes in.... competition. 她...比赛中赢过很多奖。

We share.. with each other.我们互相分享......

I am very lucky to....我非常幸运....

高分点评

本文采用“总一分-总”的结构，首段先总述了Lisa的情况，第二段详细描述Lisa的各方面特点，最后再总结，详略得当，条理清晰。作者对短语的运用非常娴熟，如"tell jokes" "won many prizes"等，都恰如其分地表达出了人物的特点，人物形象生动。

二

My Favorite Teacher

Miss Ye is my favorite teacher, who is now 25 years old. She is from Guangdong Province. She is a beautiful lady, and she often has a smile on her face.

She does a great job in teaching. She can skillfully get the students involved in listening to her and doing exercises. Those topics that she introduces in the class can always catch the eye of students. Therefore, lots of students love to take her classes. Not only does she do well in classes, but also she is good at music. Between the classes, she sometimes plays a small piece of music, which is very helpful for us to relax our minds.

Isn't she wonderful? We all like her very much.

参考译文

我最喜欢的老师

叶老师是我最喜欢的老师，她现在25岁。她来自广东省。他是一位漂亮的女士，她的脸上经常挂着笑容。

她教书教得很好。她能巧妙地让学生专心听讲，认真做练习。她在课堂上介绍的那些话题总是能吸引学生的注意。因此，很多学生都喜欢上她的课。她不仅课上得好，也很擅长音乐。在课间的时候，她有时会弹一小段音乐，这对放松我们的头脑很有帮助。

她是不是很棒?我们都非常喜欢她。

亮点词汇

skilfully 巧妙地;精巧地

involved .参与其中的:涉及的

topic 主题;话题

introduce 介绍

catch the eye of ..吸..的注意

wonderful .精彩的;奇妙的

出彩句型

She has... on her face.她的脸上有....

She does a great job n...她....面做得很好。

She can get.. involved n...她能.....中去。

Those topics that she introduces in the class..那些她在课堂上介绍的话题.....

Not only... but also...不仅.....而且.....

... is very helpful for... to do.... ......很有帮助。

高分点评

本文的细节描写是一大闪光点，例如对老师善于教书这一特点的描写， 作者深入课的特点，将一个精彩的课堂完全展现出来，对细节的把非常准确细致。其次，文章词汇运用丰富多彩，如副词skillfully" 的使用，非常贴切自然。

三

即将毕业，请以“My favorite teacher”为题，写一篇英语短文，短文包括以下内容：

1. 老师的外貌、性格、所教科目等；

2. 以事例描述喜爱的原因；

3. 表达对这位老师的感激和祝福。

要求：

1. 要点齐全，并适当发挥；

2. 文中不得出现真实 姓名与校名；

3. 卷面整洁，书写美观，课适当加2-3分；

4. 词数：80词左右，开头部分已给出，不计入总词数。

My favorite teacher

It’s time to graduate from junior high school. I’d like to write something about my favorite teacher. ________

________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

【参考范文】

My favorite teacher

It’s time to graduate from junior high school. I’d like to write something about my favorite teacher. Of all the teachers, I like my English teacher best. She is a lovely and outgoing girl who loves singing and reading. She is of medium height and has long straight hair.

When I was in Grade Seven, I was so shy that I was afraid to take part in the English competition. She encouraged me not to give up any chance to show myself to others. Thanks to her, I changed my attitude and won the first prize.

I will never forget the wonderful time we were together. Best wishes to her!

【名师点评】

这篇短文使用了大量的固定句式和短语，为文章增色不少，如graduate from，of all the teachers，of medium height，so that，be afraid to do，take part in，give up，encourage sb. to do，at the weekends，thanks to sb.，the first prize等。而并列结构She is of medium height and has long straight hair./ I changed my attitude and won the first prize.和She is a lovely and outgoing girl who loves singing and reading./ When I was in Grade Seven, I was so shy that I was afraid to take part in the English competition./ I will never forget the wonderful time we were together.等复杂从句结构的运用，丰富了短文内容，使表达多样化，是本文的亮点。在学习中注意总结牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章表达更有逻辑性，也更富有条理。

满分作文必背 

一

She and I

When I first met my roommate, I didn't expect her to become one of my best friends.She looked rather timid because she didn't talk much. People thought one of her parents was a foreigner for she had big and pretty eyes. She was slightly fat and she was very good-looking.

However, as soon as I get to know her, she becomes a completely different person. It turns out that she is very talkative, and she likes to laugh, just like me. She is a huge soccer fan, and she even named herself after one of her favorite soccer players, Andrea. Playing tricks on me is probably one of her favorite things to do, but I enjoy spending time with her because she always gets my jokes and she is always there to support me. She is the best roommate I could possibly ask for.

二

My good friend

Everybody has friends. Friends play an important role in our life. They can help us,inspire us and comfort us. The person that left me the deepest impression is a girl called Elizabeth.

Elizabeth is not my classmate in school. We first met in a speech class. We always discuss about our speeches together during recess and talk about many things. By taking with her.I knew that she was born in America.We always speak English to each other.I improved my spoken English through talking with her.

We also helped each other through learning Once we entered a speech competition together. We helped each other during the competition and we got good marks 1 won the second place and she won the third place.

This is my good friend - Elizabeth She always helps me and encourages me She never gets angry and is very humorous I will never forget her.

三

I never forget him /her

The person I’ll never forget is my English teacher Mr. Peterson. He is of medium height and has a thick beard He touches it whenever he is thinking.

It is for his knowledge that I admire him most. His eyes often shine with wisdom when he talks to me. He is a life mentor who gives me guidance and helps me grow both academically and personally. He often tells us that it's no use memorizing new words without understanding. My English has greatly improved with his help Unfortunately. He is leaving the school and moving to HongKong next year. but lm sure I will pay him a visit some time in the near future. I will remember him forever.