高考英语写作专题 语言学习

这是一份高考英语写作专题 语言学习，共5页。学案主要包含了参考范文等内容，欢迎下载使用。
求助信
(2020·全国Ⅲ卷)假定你是李华，你和同学根据英语课文改编了一个短剧。给外教Miss Evans写封邮件，请她帮忙指导。邮件内容包括：
1. 剧情简介；
2. 指导内容；
3. 商定时间地点。
注意：1. 词数100左右；
2. 结束语已为你写好。
Dear Miss Evans,




We are lking frward t yur reply.
Yurs，
Li Hua
【范文】
Dear Miss Evans,
Hw is everything ging? ①I am writing in sincerity t ask yu a favur regarding a play we adapted accrding t the textbk.
We'd like t cmbine yur culture with urs by adapting the classic nvel The Steambat fr a shrt English play. The play is set n a big strm after midnight. On the raft dwn the river navigatin, we see a steambat that is ging t sink. We saved a scared by. Hwever, the adaptin is quite a challenge. ②Having written the English script, we dn't want anything inapprpriate t spil the play. S wuld yu please spare sme time t review the draft script attached t this email and make necessary changes? If it is cnvenient, may I pay yu a visit at yur ffice next Tuesday t give yu mre details?
Given yur busy schedule, I'd appreciate it if yu culd ffer t give sme prfessinal advice.
We are lking frward t yur reply.
Yurs，
Li Hua
点评：
1. 词汇美：文章运用了很多高级词汇，如in sincerity, ask sb. a favur, regarding, cmbine ... with ..., be set n, scared, quite a challenge, inapprpriate, spil, attached t, make necessary changes, pay sb. a visit, appreciate等。
2. 句式美：①句中we adapted accrding t the textbk为定语从句，修饰名词a play。
②句Having written the English script是动词­ing形式短语作时间状语，相当于After writing the English script。
(2021·福建南安一中模拟)假定你是李华，学校将于下周五举行英语演讲比赛，主题为“Ding Things Right r Ding Right Things”， 请你代表学生会给外教老师Jack发一封邮件，请他来做评委。内容包括：
1. 比赛相关细节；
2. 给参赛者点评；
3. 对英语学习提些建议。
注意：1. 词数80左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。







【参考范文】
Dear Jack，
I am Li Hua. On behalf f the Student Unin f the Schl, I am writing t invite yu t be the judge f the English Speech Cntest t be held next Friday in ur schl.
The cntest will begin at 2：00 p．m. and last abut tw hurs, during which 15 well­prepared cntestants will deliver their speeches n the tpic “Ding Things Right r Ding Right Things”. With yur attendance and precius cmments, it is bund t be a success. It culdn't be better if yu culd ffer us sme valuable advice n learning English at the end f the activity.
Yur attendance is greatly expected. Please cnfirm yur presence at yur earliest cnvenience.
Yurs，
Li Hua
Ⅱ. 读后续写
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
After filling ut fifty applicatins, ging thrugh fur interviews, and winning ne ffer, I tk what I culd get — a teaching jb at what I cnsidered a distant wild area: western New Jersey.
My characteristic ptimism was alive nly when I reminded myself that I wuld be ding what I had wanted t d since I was furteen — teaching English.
Schl started, I was teaching English. I wrked hard, taking time ff nly t eat and sleep. And then there was my sixth­grade class — seventeen bys and five girls wh were nly six years yunger than me. I had a prblem lng befre I knew it. I was struggling in my wrk as a yung idealistic teacher. I wanted t make literature cme alive and t prmte a lve fr the written wrd. The students wanted t thrw spitballs and whisper dirty wrds in the back f the rm.
In cllege I had been taught that a successful educatr shuld ignre bad behaviur. S I did, cnfident that, as the textbk had said, the bad behaviur wuld disappear as I gave my students psitive attentin. It sunds reasnable, but the text evidently ignred the fact that humans, particularly teenagers, rarely seem reasnable. By the time my bss, wh was als my taskmaster knwn t be the strictest, mst demanding, mst quick t fire inexperienced teachers, came int the classrm t bserve me, the students exhibited very little gd behaviur t praise.[悬念1]
My bss sat in the back f the rm. The bys in the class were making animal nises, hitting each ther while the girls filed their nails r read magazines. I just pretended it all wasn't happening, and went n lecturing and tried t ask sme inspiring questins. My bss, sitting in the back f the rm, seemed t be grwing bigger and bigger. After twenty minutes he left, silently.[悬念2] Visins f unemplyment marched befre my eyes. I felt mildly victrius that I gt thrugh the rest f class withut crying, but at my next free perid I had t face him.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
After class, I walked t his ffice, tk a deep breath, and pened the dr.



Inspired by his advice, I walked twards the classrm, determined t make a change.



一、理清文章大意
关键：Wh: I
Where: a schl in western New Jersey
When: after class
What: teaching in a schl
Hw: afraid f being fired
大意：本文讲述了作者去了偏远的地区教英语，校长听课时学生表现不好，作者担心被解雇。
二、挖掘文中悬念点
悬念1 思考：作者所在学校的校长是最严格、要求最高、解雇无经验教师最快的人，学生又几乎没有表现出值得表扬的良好行为，那么校长会怎样对待作者呢？
悬念2思考：校长才听了二十分钟的课就离开了，这是不是暗示他对作者的课不满意呢，作者是不是一定会被解雇？
三、分析段落开头语
段首句1思考：
①作者上课时学生表现不好，校长会不会解雇他呢？所以作者会有什么样的心理活动？
②校长会给作者什么样的忠告？
段首句2思考：
①作者下定了决心要改变自己，那么他再次上课时会怎样对待学生？会说些什么？
②作者之前上课无视学生，现在又会如何做？学生会有什么样的变化？
通过以上思路，预设续写情节如下：
Paragraph 1：校长听课提前离开，作者担心会被解雇→进入办公室很紧张→校长给出忠告→作者下定决心
Paragraph 2：作者决心改变自己→上课不再无视学生而是尊重他们、鼓励他们→学生发生变化→作者感悟
After class, I walked t his ffice, tk a deep breath, and pened the dr. My bss was sitting in his chair with a hardened face, gazing at me lng and hard. Anxius and ashamed, I said nthing, wndering if he wuld fire me right away. He handed me an envelpe, which definitely added mre anxiety t me. Hwever, my eyes went wide pen when I pened it. It was nt an unemplyment letter but a letter with several suggestins abut my teaching, ne f which was highlighted in red: An educatr shuld respect students' feelings. Almst immediately, a warm glw f emtin rse inside me. As I went ut f the ffice, I made up my mind t change my attitude.
Inspired by his advice, I walked twards the classrm, determined t make a change. As the bell rang, I std n the platfrm, eyes wandering acrss the classrm. The students seemed t expect anther bring and dull English lessn. I cleared my thrat and annunced, “Bys and girls, let's begin with yur vice abut my literature lessn.” Suddenly, a cmplete silence fell ver. Each lifted his r her head and cast me a puzzled lk. Flashing a smile, I encuraged, “Anything yu'd like t say！” At this, the students gt stirred up. The class sn amazingly came t life thanks t their brilliant vices, which brught me t what my strictest bss enlightened me: respecting the students instead f ignring them will make a difference.
1. 使用恰当的修饰词让描写更加生动。
①with a hardened face, gazing at me lng and hard这个方式状语设置了悬念，无疑增加了作者的恐惧之情。
②Anxius and ashamed巧妙地描绘出作者的心理活动。关联词语Hwever表转折，笔锋一转，为叙述与下一段相吻合的内容做好铺垫。
③in red这个方式状语凸显出冒号后面内容的重要性。
2. 词汇与语法结构丰富、准确。
①mre anxiety表明了作者紧张不安的程度。②共用了三个非限制性定语从句，这彰显出了考生扎实的语言功底。
③eyes wandering acrss the classrm为独立主格结构，这是一个增分点。
④结尾处的make a difference与段首相呼应。